PEP小學(xué)英語(yǔ)五六年級(jí)各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)評(píng)

1、PEP 小學(xué)英語(yǔ)五年級(jí)上冊(cè)各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)評(píng) My English TeacherMiss Tang is my English teacher. Shes very pretty. She is tall and thin. She has two big eyes and a small mouth. Her hair is long. She likes cats very much. And she likes singing and dancing, too. Her English is very good. We often play games in English clas

2、ses. She is very kind to us. We all love her.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】這篇作文的題目是 “ 我的英語(yǔ)老師 ” ,是一篇介紹人物的作文。小作者開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山,直接點(diǎn) 題,首先介紹了英語(yǔ)老師的姓名,然后逐一介紹了她的外貌特征、喜好、英語(yǔ)水平、上課特 點(diǎn)以及師生情感等。小朋友們?cè)趯?xiě)作文時(shí), 要注意使用自己最熟悉的詞 組 , 以免寫(xiě)出一些錯(cuò)句子。 寫(xiě)作時(shí)要 注意意思連貫、語(yǔ)句通順、標(biāo)點(diǎn)正確、書(shū)寫(xiě)清晰、規(guī)范等。My Days of the weekIm a student and I am in Grade 5.I get up at six oclock every day.

3、 I have breakfast at half past six, and go to schoolat seven oclock. I have classes from Monday to Saturday. I have an English class on Friday and I have a PE class on Tuesday. I dont have to go to school on school, and I like to go swimming on that day.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】這篇作文的題目是 “ 我的一周 ” ,小作者沒(méi)有說(shuō)一些空話(huà),而是從自己的親身經(jīng)歷

4、寫(xiě)起, 敘述了自己一周七天的所作所為,并特別強(qiáng)調(diào)了星期天的喜好,寫(xiě)得自然、流暢。小朋友們寫(xiě)作文時(shí)要注意人稱(chēng)及謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的變化,要依據(jù)提示,結(jié)合自己的實(shí)際,寫(xiě)自 己身邊熟悉的事情。My Favourite FoodDo you know what this is? Guess! Its colour is yellow. Its long and thin. It looks like a small boat and crescent. Oh, it is a banana. Do you know what that is? Guess again! Its colour is orange.

5、 Its round. It looks like a small ball and a small lantern. Oh, it is an orange. I like then a lot. I like ice-creams. I like to chew gum. Chocolates and candies are yummy. I like them very much.How about you? Whats your favourite food?【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】My Favourite Food 是一篇很成功的文章, 小作者并不是簡(jiǎn)單地列舉出自己最喜歡的每一 種食物,而是有詳

6、有略地進(jìn)行介紹。整篇文章用詞準(zhǔn)確、語(yǔ)言流暢、沒(méi)有語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。另外, 文章中出現(xiàn)了一些生詞,可見(jiàn)小作者是用心查字典了。I can help do houseworkI am a girl. My name is Li Ling. Im in Class Three, Grade Five. Im helpful at home. I can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep the floor. After meals, I can help my mother do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash the

7、 clothes. What about you? Are you helpful, too?【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】本篇作文的題目是 “ 我可以幫助做家務(wù) ” ,作者主要敘述自己在家?guī)椭龅氖虑?介紹自 己的名字,所在年級(jí)及在家能做的家務(wù),很詳細(xì),到位。小朋友們?cè)趯?xiě)作時(shí),應(yīng)盡量寫(xiě)一些親自經(jīng)歷的事情,這樣會(huì)避免在作文時(shí)顯得太空,因 為只有自己經(jīng)常做的事情印象才會(huì)特別深刻。寫(xiě)作時(shí)還要注意大小寫(xiě)和時(shí)態(tài)。In The KitchenThis is the kitchen of my family. Its big and nice. Look! My mother is cooking in it. This

8、is a microwave and that is a stove. There is a big table here. There are many things on it. What are these? They look yummy! Oh, theyre strawberries. And what are those? They are grapes.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】這篇作文的題目是 “ 在廚房 ” 里,作者根據(jù)自己家的廚房情況。介紹廚房里有微波爐和電 爐,有一張大桌子和桌子上的物品等,以及媽媽在做飯,非常真實(shí)。小朋友們,可以從觀察自己身邊的事、物寫(xiě)起,利用所學(xué)的句子,描述身邊熟

9、悉的東西 來(lái)訓(xùn)練習(xí)作。My VillageMy village is very beautiful. There are many houses in the village. Near the village, there is a forest. A small river is in front of the village. The water in it is very clean. We cansee some fish in the river. Near the river, you can see a mountain. Some flowers and grass are

10、on the mountain. I like my village. Welcome to my village!【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】本文以 “ 我的村莊 ” 為題描述了自己家鄉(xiāng)的風(fēng)景。 介紹了村莊的房屋、 森林、 河流及大山, 使人看了這篇作文后確實(shí)感覺(jué)到 “ 我的村莊 ” 的美麗。 小朋友們?cè)趯?xiě)作時(shí), 可仔細(xì)想一下自己 的村莊或所在城市的特點(diǎn),盡量使用本單元學(xué)過(guò)的單詞或短語(yǔ)進(jìn)行敘述。PEP 小學(xué)英語(yǔ)五年級(jí)下冊(cè)各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)評(píng) My weekendThere are two days on the weekend, Saturday and Sunday. On Saturday, I oft

11、en go to my dancing class in the morning and do my homework in the afternoon, and I often help my mother do some cleaning. On Sunday, I always visit my grandparents in the morning and do some reading in the afternoon. After dinner,I often watch TV with my parents. At that time, we can talk with each

12、 other and say something happily. We often have a good time.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作是按照時(shí)間順序記敘周末的活動(dòng), 記敘了周六和周日的上午和下午分別做了 哪些活動(dòng)及對(duì)活動(dòng)的感受。 即:周六上午:舞蹈課 下午:做作業(yè)和幫媽媽做清潔 周日上 午:看望祖父母 下午:閱讀 晚上:看電視,與父母交流 感受:高興和愉快。我們還可 以選取周六和周日中的幾個(gè)比較主要的活動(dòng)來(lái)寫(xiě), 先說(shuō)明什么時(shí)間在什么地方由什么人做了 什么事, 有什么感受。 再按照活動(dòng)順序把活動(dòng)內(nèi)容寫(xiě)清楚, 最后抒發(fā)一下對(duì)這次活動(dòng)或這個(gè) 周末的感想。時(shí)態(tài):這篇短文我們可以用三種時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)

13、寫(xiě) : a.一般過(guò)去時(shí)(主要描述你上個(gè)周末是怎樣度過(guò) 的 ;b. 一般現(xiàn)在時(shí) (主要描述你經(jīng)常怎樣度過(guò)周末 ;c. 一般將來(lái)時(shí) (主要描述你要怎樣過(guò)周 末。這里我們來(lái)表述平時(shí)是如何過(guò)周末的,所以采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來(lái)寫(xiě)。注意:活動(dòng)的相關(guān)表達(dá)方法可采用舊知識(shí), eg. (例 起床 get up, 和新知識(shí), eg. Climb mountains去爬山中的 un 很容易錯(cuò)寫(xiě)成 nu 。還要注意不要出現(xiàn)病句, eg. “I often watch TV with my parents.” 不要寫(xiě)成 “I often with my parents watch TV .” 詞量上控制在 50 80 之間。

14、My SeasonsWe have four seasons in a year. I can do many interesting things in each season. In spring, the weather is cool andwind, I can fly kites when its wind. And I can go hiking with my family when its sunny and cool. I like hiking. Summer is hot in the north of China, but its not long time. I o

15、ften go swimming. It can make me healthy and strong. I can also wear my beautiful dresses. Fall is a season with harvest. And I can eat delicious fruits in this season. I can watch the leaves fall. Winter comes, its often snowy in winter in my hometown. When it snows, everything is white. We can pla

16、y with snow and make a snowman, skate and ski. And winter is my favourite season, because of the Spring Festival. I love seasons. I love the nature.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇短文是描述 “ 我的四季 ” ,在寫(xiě)法上,是根據(jù)春、夏、秋、冬四季的更替來(lái)寫(xiě)的, 先講明每個(gè)季節(jié)的特征, 之后再寫(xiě)在這個(gè)季節(jié)中的主要活動(dòng)或比較有代表性的活動(dòng)。 同時(shí)講 一些自己的真實(shí)感受, 最后闡述自己最喜歡的季節(jié)。 在實(shí)際的寫(xiě)作的時(shí)候我們還可以先寫(xiě)出 自己喜愛(ài)的季節(jié)及主要的活動(dòng)內(nèi)

17、容, 之后再去講其他幾個(gè)季節(jié), 還可以多講解一下地域的季 節(jié)特征和大自然中的其他景色, 如:秋天的田地里一片金黃, 農(nóng)民在收割等等, 這樣寫(xiě)出來(lái) 的四季更貼近實(shí)際。時(shí)態(tài):這篇習(xí)作講的是 “ 我的四季 ” , 是比較慣常的一些行為, 所以我們最好采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí) 和情態(tài)動(dòng)詞結(jié)合活動(dòng)的寫(xiě)法。即:在什么季節(jié),天氣如何,我們可以做什么。注意:在寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容上,不可以像以往的內(nèi)容那么簡(jiǎn)單,因?yàn)橛兴膫€(gè)季節(jié),所以要寫(xiě)明季節(jié), 季節(jié)天氣,季節(jié)性活動(dòng),活動(dòng)的人,活動(dòng)的感受等,要求句子順序要正確,在寫(xiě)作中還要注意關(guān)聯(lián)詞的使用, 如用了 “ 因?yàn)?” , 就不能用 “ 所以 ” , 二者不可以同時(shí)出現(xiàn)。 詞量要控制在 8

18、0個(gè)詞以?xún)?nèi)。My Birthday PartyEvery year, when its birthday, my parents hold a party for me. They invite my friend to come to my house to celebrate my birthday. I can get many beautiful gifts every year.In my party, we can do many things:1. Light the candles.2. Sing a “Happy Birthday” song.3. Make a wish.4

19、. Blow out the candles.5. Cut off the cake.6. Eat the cake.7. Open the presents.8. Sing and dance.9. Watch videos or play other games.10. Say goodbye with each other.Thats my birthday party, is it interesting?【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作是按活動(dòng)的順序來(lái)寫(xiě)的, 記敘了生日晚會(huì)的各項(xiàng)具體活動(dòng), 比較全面。 比較 以前幾個(gè)單元的寫(xiě)作寫(xiě)法,這個(gè)短文按活動(dòng)順序比較合適。時(shí)態(tài):這篇短文可以用三種時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)

20、寫(xiě):1、一般將來(lái)時(shí):主要說(shuō)明生日晚會(huì)份的各項(xiàng)計(jì)劃,都將如何進(jìn)行。2、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí):主要說(shuō)明習(xí)慣上如何度過(guò)每個(gè)生日。3、一般過(guò)去時(shí):主要說(shuō)明你的生日晚會(huì)是如何進(jìn)行的。句型:invite sb. to do sth. 邀請(qǐng)某人做某事注意:由于這篇短文很有局限性, 所表達(dá)的大體上都基本相同, 所以在書(shū)寫(xiě)的時(shí)候要注意結(jié) 合自己的實(shí)際活動(dòng)與真情實(shí)感去寫(xiě)。另外注意一些短語(yǔ)和單詞的書(shū)寫(xiě)不要發(fā)生錯(cuò)誤:eg.“ 吹蠟燭 ” 要寫(xiě)成 “blow out the candles” 而不能寫(xiě)成 “blow candles” 。My familyThere are five people in my family. Th

21、ey are my grandma, grandpa, dad, mom and I. Look! Grandma is watching TV. Grandpa is reading a book. Dad is writing an e-mail. Mom is cooking dinner. I am doing my homework. I love my family!【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作介紹了自己家的家庭成員, 以及此刻他們正在干什么, 表達(dá)了自己對(duì)家人的 感情。時(shí)態(tài):由于本單元主要講的是現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài),所以建議采用現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài)。句型:主語(yǔ) +be+動(dòng)詞的現(xiàn)在分詞。注意:本單元

22、的重點(diǎn)是現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài), 注意在寫(xiě)句子時(shí)要保持時(shí)態(tài)的完整性, 即系動(dòng)詞和動(dòng) 詞的 ing 缺一不可。In the parkIt is sunny today .My mother, my father and I are going to the park. We like the park very much. It is very big and beautiful .There are many trees and flowers in it. Manypeople like to go there. Look! An old man is sitting on the chair. He

23、 is reading a book carefully. Two boys are jumping on the ground. Their mothers are talking with each other. Two birds are flying in the sky. The ducks are swimming in the river. They are very happy. What is the cat doing? Oh, it is running after a mouse. Its a poor mouse.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作是用現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)描繪出公園里的

24、人和動(dòng)物們正在進(jìn)行的活動(dòng)還運(yùn)用了一般現(xiàn) 在時(shí)敘述了公園美麗的景色。時(shí)態(tài):這篇文章可以采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)兩種時(shí)態(tài), 由于本單元的語(yǔ)法項(xiàng)目是現(xiàn)在 進(jìn)行時(shí),因此,描述的重點(diǎn)要放在現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài)上。句型:一般現(xiàn)在時(shí):主語(yǔ) +謂語(yǔ) +其他現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí):(1 What +be (am,is ,are+主語(yǔ) +v.-ing+其他 ?(2主語(yǔ) +be(am,is ,are+ v.-ing+其他。A Field TripIt is a nice day. Our class will have a field trip today. The classmates are very excited.Look!

25、 Here we are. Therere a lot of activities to do. Amy is watching insects. Peter is collecting leaves. They want to write a report. Mandy is catching butterflies in the woods. Tim and Bob are playing chess. Some of the classmates are having a picnic. There is a lot of delicious food to eat. Oh, whos

26、that over there? Its Miss White. What is she doing? She is taking photos. We had a very good time. Ill never forget this field trip.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作是按照郊游時(shí)的畫(huà)面來(lái)描述的, 記敘了同學(xué)們分別在郊游中做了哪些活動(dòng)及 郊游的感受。時(shí)態(tài):這篇文章可以用一般過(guò)去時(shí)和現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)來(lái)寫(xiě)。由于本單元主要講的是現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí), 所以,這里我們采用現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)比較合適。句型:××. is/are doing sth. She /He is doing st

27、h. Theyre doing sth.注意:活動(dòng)的相關(guān)表述法采用新舊知識(shí)相結(jié)合去寫(xiě)。 注意時(shí)態(tài)的轉(zhuǎn)換、 描寫(xiě)感受時(shí)用一般現(xiàn) 在時(shí)。PEP 小學(xué)英語(yǔ)六年級(jí)上冊(cè)各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)評(píng) Li Ying S HobbyLi Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.Does sh

28、e like dancing? No, she doesnt. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】這一篇寫(xiě)愛(ài)好的文章 , 小作者的寫(xiě)作思路很值得我們學(xué)習(xí) , 他沒(méi)有具體寫(xiě)到劉瑩的某一種 愛(ài)好 , 而是從學(xué)習(xí)到課余的多種愛(ài)好入手 , 對(duì)劉瑩的各種愛(ài)好進(jìn)行了粗線(xiàn)條地勾畫(huà) . 從 “ 愛(ài)好 ” 這個(gè)角度來(lái)看劉瑩的話(huà),我們會(huì)覺(jué)得這個(gè)形象很

29、飽滿(mǎn)。小朋友們寫(xiě)這種 “ 敘事寫(xiě)人 ” 作文時(shí),可以從兩個(gè)角度下手:一是具體地描繪;二是和上 面小朋友一樣, 粗線(xiàn)條地勾畫(huà), 二者各有所長(zhǎng), 另處在行文中使用一些問(wèn)句, 使用一些轉(zhuǎn)述 的話(huà), 可以使作文更有靈氣, 避免了平鋪直敘的缺點(diǎn)。 比如上文的 “Does she like dancing? No, she doesnt.” 和 “she says her hobbies make her happy.” 就是十分不錯(cuò)的句子,使讀者眼前為之 一亮。Dont be against the traffic rulesI go to school from Monday to Friday .I

30、 go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I cant cross the road ,so I wait.If the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against th

31、e traffic rules.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】這篇作文的題目是 “ 不要違反交通規(guī)則 ” ,小作者沒(méi)有說(shuō)一些空話(huà),而是從自己的經(jīng)歷寫(xiě) 起,敘述自己以什么方式去上學(xué),在上學(xué)的路上是怎么做的,很形象。小朋友們?cè)谧魑臅r(shí)注意不要圖大,那樣很容易使文章顯得空洞,而要寫(xiě)自己身邊熟悉的 事情。要注意行文中字母的大小寫(xiě)、句子的標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等。I Love My FamilyHere is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.My father

32、 is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy? He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. Hes now in Beiji

33、ng. He goes there by plane.I love my family.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】一個(gè)平凡的題材,一篇生動(dòng)的作文。這樣的命題,我們可能面對(duì)幾次,甚至幾十次了。 但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧, 了了數(shù)言, 讓一個(gè)幸福的家庭躍然紙上, 很值得我們?nèi)ニ伎? 我們能做到嗎?小朋友的這篇作文除了語(yǔ)言?xún)?yōu)美之外,在結(jié)構(gòu)上也有閃光之處。先總說(shuō),將自己的家人 逐個(gè)介紹一遍, 后分說(shuō), 把家人的工作、 上班方式, 愛(ài)好一一細(xì)說(shuō)。 最后以一句話(huà)進(jìn)行概括, 起到點(diǎn)題的作用。我們?cè)趯?xiě)類(lèi)似的作文的時(shí)候是不是也可以借鑒呢?How to get to the science museumWe are goin

34、g to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum?The science museum is next to the Peoples Park. Its isnt far from our school. So we can go there on foot .Walk straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post

35、 office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the Peoples Park on the right . Walk straight, and youll see the science museum.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】這篇作文的題目是 “ 怎樣去科學(xué)博物館 ” 。怎樣才算是一篇好作文呢?通過(guò)你的敘述,能 讓別人很容易找到博物館, 這應(yīng)是最基本的要求。 小作者在文中告訴我們什么呢?首先他寫(xiě) 了去博物館的位置,最后濃墨重彩,指明從學(xué)校去博物館的具體路線(xiàn),這條路線(xiàn)夠清晰吧!小

36、朋友們?cè)趯?xiě)這類(lèi)作文的時(shí)候,總有些無(wú)從下手的感覺(jué),不知從何說(shuō)起。其實(shí)介紹路線(xiàn), 無(wú)非就是告訴他人某段路的起點(diǎn)和終點(diǎn),還有就是如何從起點(diǎn)走到終點(diǎn)。要給他人說(shuō)清楚, 你自己首先得清楚, 然后再通過(guò)自己的敘述, 將路線(xiàn)清清楚楚得呈現(xiàn)出來(lái)。 一定要注意行文 中一些關(guān)鍵的地方, 如在哪兒轉(zhuǎn)彎, 向哪兒轉(zhuǎn), 經(jīng)過(guò)哪些重要的交通標(biāo)志或顯眼的標(biāo)志建筑 等。這樣,你就能說(shuō)清,別人也能弄明白。Planting TreesIts spring. Its time to plant trees.I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happ

37、y. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First, we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later, my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast.We should

38、 plant more trees. They make our world beautiful.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】小作者寫(xiě)了一次植樹(shù)的經(jīng)歷,但他并沒(méi)有單純拘泥于植樹(shù)的過(guò)程。既有過(guò)程,也有感覺(jué), 能使文章打動(dòng)讀者, 給人以啟發(fā)。 作文的最后一段就非常好, 兩句話(huà)勝似千言萬(wàn)語(yǔ)。 我們可 以學(xué)習(xí)一下這種寫(xiě)法。既描述過(guò)程,又適時(shí)提自己的看法或想法的寫(xiě)法,在作文中叫做 “ 夾敘夾議 ”, 描述過(guò)程為了 提出一種思想服務(wù), 提出看法或想法使原本平實(shí)的描述有了意義。 我們?cè)谝院蟮膶?xiě)作中也可 以試一試。Lets have a nice dayIts Sunday tomorrow .Im going to the

39、 bookstore with my friends tomorrow morning .We are going to look for some good books .We all like reading books .We are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef andvegetables .After lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake.May

40、be we are going to row a boat on the lake .Wow, that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】怎樣才稱(chēng)得上是 “ 美好的一天 ” ?有兩點(diǎn)不能忘記,一是安排得充實(shí),二是安排得有意義。 這兩點(diǎn)小作者無(wú)疑都想到了,上午去書(shū)店看書(shū)買(mǎi)書(shū),中午在飯店吃飯,下午去頤和園玩耍、 劃船,豐富多彩!文章以時(shí)間為線(xiàn)索,敘述清楚,文筆也很優(yōu)美。小朋友們?cè)趯?xiě)這種敘事的文章時(shí),要盡量給讀者交代好時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物和活動(dòng)等,使 文章有血有肉。 要看好是寫(xiě)過(guò)去發(fā)生的事情, 還是現(xiàn)在正在做的事情, 或計(jì)劃、 打算要做

41、的 事情, 以選擇適當(dāng)?shù)木湫汀?如果是寫(xiě)將來(lái)的事情, 那么就要注意在表述時(shí)多用 “be going to+動(dòng)詞原形 ” 這種句型。還有一點(diǎn)也很重要,那就是故事的線(xiàn)索要交代好,讓讀者在閱讀時(shí)對(duì) 整個(gè)過(guò)程一目了然。PEP 小學(xué)英語(yǔ)六年級(jí)下冊(cè)各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)評(píng) My friend and IIve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. Im 11. Hes older than me. Hes 150 cm tall. Im 148 cm. Hes taller and stronger

42、. Hes 43 kg and Im 41 kg. Hes heavier. Weve got round faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favourite colours are white and blue. We like summer best. We both like sports, too. On Saturdays, we play table tennis. On Sundays, we play basketball. Hes good at basketba

43、ll. But I do better at table tennis. We laugh and play together. How happy we are!【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇作文的題目是 “ 我的朋友和我 ” 。既然寫(xiě)作范圍是兩個(gè)人物,就要筆墨均勻,兩者 缺一不可。 不能只描寫(xiě)朋友, 也不能只敘述我。 這無(wú)形中增加了寫(xiě)作的難度。 解決這個(gè)難點(diǎn) 的關(guān)鍵是:找出兩個(gè)人幾方面的異同。可以通過(guò)常見(jiàn)的年齡、身高、體重、外貌、喜好等方 面列舉出每個(gè)人的具體實(shí)際情況, 再進(jìn)行比較, 通過(guò)比較突出每個(gè)人物的特點(diǎn)。 這樣就把人 物活靈活現(xiàn)的展現(xiàn)給讀者了。時(shí)態(tài):像此類(lèi)題目的作文,運(yùn)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)即可。句

44、型:因?yàn)樯婕皟蓚€(gè)人的比較,不要忘記使用比較級(jí)句型:A+be+比較級(jí) +than+B。注意:在列舉兩個(gè)人的 “ 體貌、喜好 ” 等方面情況時(shí),應(yīng)一邊列舉,一邊比較。不要一味指出 不同,還要列舉相同之處。兩人能成為朋友,一定有共同語(yǔ)言和喜好,共性不容忽視。在表 達(dá)喜好時(shí),不同的句型應(yīng)交叉運(yùn)用,避免枯燥的重復(fù)。例 “Our favourite colours are” , “We like best” , “We both like,too” ,為突出不同時(shí)間做不同運(yùn)動(dòng),用 “On Saturdays” , “OnSundays” ,形成鮮明對(duì)比。常使用并列連詞 and 和轉(zhuǎn)折連詞 but ,使文章

45、讀起來(lái)更流暢。 結(jié)尾以 How happy we are!突出了兩人從友誼中得到的快樂(lè)!A Bad ColdIm not feeling well today. I think I have a bad cold. I have a headache. I have a fever. My nose hurts. My throat is sore. I have to take some medicine and stay in bed. My parents will take me to the hospital. What a bad cold!I hope I can be bett

46、er soon. And I want to go to school.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作是按照時(shí)間順序記敘了得病、 病的癥狀、 服藥及治療的全過(guò)程。 寫(xiě)出了小作 者希望快點(diǎn)康復(fù),好去上學(xué)的愿望。時(shí)態(tài):這篇文章可以采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來(lái)寫(xiě)。如果主語(yǔ)是第三人稱(chēng)單數(shù),動(dòng)詞別忘加 s 。 句型:要用 feel 加形容詞,和表示 “ 患某種疾病 “ 的用法 have+表示的疾病的單詞。注意:在表示疾病時(shí),可以使用 -ache,hurt 和 sore 。不要只用一個(gè)單詞,以避免枯燥。要寫(xiě) 出得病后的簡(jiǎn)單治療及心情,不能只寫(xiě)得病的情況。常見(jiàn)病句:My nose is hurt。因?yàn)?be 后 面要加形容

47、詞,而 hurt 是動(dòng)詞,因此應(yīng)使用 sore ;東西放在床上要用 on the bed。生病,是 臥床不起,應(yīng)該說(shuō) stay in bed。表示吃藥時(shí),通過(guò)用 take some medicine,不用 eat 。詞匯量要控制在 4060之間。Zooms WeekendZoom had a busy weekend. On Saturday morning, he washed his clothes and went to a park. He did his homework and went fishing on Saturday afternoon. On Sunday mornin

48、g, he cleaned his room and visited his grandparents. He played football and watch TV on Sunday afternoon. Zoom was too tired.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作是按時(shí)間順序記敘了 Zoom 的周末活動(dòng)。時(shí)態(tài):這篇文章可以用三種時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)寫(xiě), 由于本單元主要講的是一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài), 所以我們采用 一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)比較合適。句型:主語(yǔ) +動(dòng)詞過(guò)去式 +過(guò)去時(shí)間。注意:活動(dòng)的相關(guān)表達(dá)法采用新舊知識(shí)結(jié)合的方法,但要注意動(dòng)詞過(guò)去式的拼寫(xiě)。Toms HolidayTom went to Beijing

49、by plane on his holiday. Every day he had fun with his parents. They went to the Nature Park. Theysaw elephants. They went swimming. They ate lots of delicious food. They also took many beautiful pictures. They will come back home tomorrow. In a word, they enjoy their holiday.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評(píng)】寫(xiě)法:這篇習(xí)作是按照地點(diǎn)的順序記敘假期里的活動(dòng), 記敘了假期里去北京做了哪些活動(dòng)以 及對(duì)活動(dòng)的感受。時(shí)態(tài):這篇文章可采用兩種時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)寫(xiě)。 由于本單元主要講述的是一般過(guò)去時(shí)的用法, 所以這 里大部分我們采用一般過(guò)去時(shí)比較合適。句型:主語(yǔ) +動(dòng)詞過(guò)去式 +其他 主語(yǔ) +will+動(dòng)詞原形 +其他 注意:活動(dòng)的相關(guān)表達(dá)法可采用舊知識(shí)和新知識(shí)相結(jié)合去寫(xiě),