2015學(xué)年高二上段考一作文評(píng)講

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有意向到你校來(lái)當(dāng)交流生，但是擔(dān)心在學(xué)校里難以獲取

交流生項(xiàng)目的說(shuō)明在校獲取資訊，于是向校方詢問(wèn)。假設(shè)你是，請(qǐng)你用英文向Tom致信資訊的方式。要點(diǎn)如下：通過(guò)每周接收;電視

;其他方式。注意：詞數(shù)100左右（信件的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；短文需包括所給要點(diǎn)，但不必逐句翻譯；可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使表意清晰、行文連貫；文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的

與學(xué)校名稱。A

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regard

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your

question

about

how

to

receivenews

at

school,

there

are

several

ways

to

do

that.

Tostart

with,

news

can

be

delivered

to

your

smart

phoneand

you

can

read

it

at

your

convenience,

but

pleasenote

that

phones

are

not

allowed

inside

the

teachingbuilding.In

addition,

news

is

shown

in

each

classroom

onMonday

evenings

for

students

to

watch.

There

is

newsat

home

and

abro

lus

school

news.

I

hope

you

willenjoy

the

standard

Chinese

read

in

thenews.For

those

who

prefer

reading

newsp

rs,

the

newscorner

at

the

library

is

the

best

place,

where

studentshave

access

to

China

Daily,

China

Morning

Post

as

wellas

some

p

rs

in

the

Chinese

language.1.審題與布局，但不1. 行文須切中“獲取

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stand

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news

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phone,deliver

news/

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rs,pick

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programs,listen

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。常見句型：本文的焦點(diǎn)是“本文是書信，”，可使用也可以使信的人稱，以突出互動(dòng)。News

is

delivered

to

your

phone,

the

moment

anything

important

happens

around

theworld.CCTV

News

is

broadcast

at

the

canteenduring

breakfast,

lunch

and

supper,

making

it

very

convenient

for

us

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know

what

is

happeningin

the

world.Students

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phones

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allowed

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school.4.改錯(cuò)We

have

a

big

library

with

plentyofnewsp rs,

it

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convenient

for

you

to

getinformation.There

is

still

many

other

ways

to

getinformation.

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as

reading

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have

a

big

library

with

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other

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getinformation,

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receive

the

news

from

the

Internet.Students

are

allowed

to

bring

mobile

phoneto

school.There

are

newsp rs

and

magazines

atschool

library.4.改錯(cuò)Youcan

receive

the

news

from

the

Internet.Students

are

allowed

to

bring

mobile

phonesto

school.There

are

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and

magazines

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school

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mobile

phone4.改錯(cuò)You

can

watch

news

on

TV

to

know

whathappen

in

the

world.I

suggest

you

to

read

magazines

from

ourschool

library.The

news

on

TV

are

veryfunny.Don’t

worried.4.改錯(cuò)Youcan

watch

news

on

TV

to

know

what

ishappening

in

the

world.I

suggest

reading

magazines

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our

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news

on

TV

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worried.動(dòng)詞主要有時(shí)態(tài)和搭配問(wèn)題。In

regard

to

your

questions

about the

ways

to

getnews

at

school,

I'm

delighted

to

l

you

that

youdon't

have

to

worry

about

this.

Students

here

areallowed

to

take

their

mobile

phones

to

school,

soyou

can

check

the

news

easily

using

your

ownmobile

phone. Besides,

students

can

enjoywatchin news

every

week,

so

it's

also

a

simpleway

for

you

to

get

to

know

the

latest

events.Furthermore,

the

big

library

in

our

school

canprovide

as

rich

information

as

you

want,

with

thelatest

newsp rs

arriving

every

morning.In

conclusion

it

is

not

hard

at

all

to

get

any

newsyou

want

to

know

at

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regard

to

your

questions

about the

waysto

getnews

at

school,

I'm

delighted

to

l

you

that

youdon't

have

to

worry

about

this.

Students

here

areallowed

to

take

their

mobile

phones

to

school,

soyou

can

check

the

news

easily

using

your

own

mobile

phone.

Besides,

students

can

enjoywatchin news

every

week,

so

it's

also

asimpleway

for

you

to

get

to

know

the

latest

events.Furthermore,

the

big

library

in

our

schoolcanprovide

as

rich

information

as

you

want,

with

the

latest

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rs

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every

morning.In

conclusion

it

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nothard

at

all

to

get

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at

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regard

to

your

questions

about the

approaches

ofreceiving

the

latest

news,

I

appreciate

your

great

concern

about

what

is

happening

around

us

but

there’s

no

need

to

worry

about

whether

it

is

realistic

to

keep

inthe

front

line

of

recent

affairs

in

our

school.

andforemost,

youcan

use

your

mobile

phone

to

get

thelatest

information.

With

the

development

of

networktechniques,

it’s

one

of

the

fastest

ways

to

learn

aboutthe

world.

Besides,there’s

riod

of

time

every

weekset

particularly

for

us

to

watch

TV

news.

What’s

more,daily

newsp rs

and

weekly

magazines

are

providedin

our

school

library

including

English

versions.

Soit’s

guaranteed

that

various

methods

are

available

here

to

receive

the

latest

news.5.優(yōu)秀作文5.優(yōu)秀作文本文突出特點(diǎn)：開篇很有氣場(chǎng)感，