2023學年完整公開課版讀后續(xù)寫readingforwriting

ReadingforWritingJennifer2018.12.26Ashortstoryisakindoffictionaboutimaginedeventsandcharacters.EverygreatshortstoryisaperfectcombinationoftheFIVEkeyelements.1.character2.setting(background)3.conflict(trouble)4.plot(development)5.themecharacteranalyst角色分析師settinginvestigator背景調查員conflictfinder沖突發(fā)現(xiàn)者plotwizard劇情魔術師themediscoverer主題探索者READRoleWhattodoAcharacteranalystanalyzethecharacters’moodBsettinginvestigatorinvestigatethebackgroundCconflictfinderfindtheconflictDthemediscovererdiscoverthecentralthemesABCDplotwizarddesignapossibledevelopmentofthestoryABCDsettinginvestigatorWhoarethemajorcharactersinthisshortstory?Whatistheirrelationship?Howdidthecharacterfeelatthebeginningofthestory?Whendidthestoryhappen?conflictfinderWhatistheconflict(trouble)attheverybeginningofthestory?characteranalystPara.1settinginvestigatorWho?What?How?When?conflictfinderconflict?characteranalystDellaandJim.Theyareamarriedcouple.Desperate/Frustrated.AtChristmaswhenpeopleexchangegiftsasacustom.Theylivedinextremepoverty.Howdidthewritervividlyshowthesefeelings?Para.1…,hercheeksburnedwiththesilentscoldofmeanness.Therewasclearlynothingtodobutsobontheshabbycouchandhowl….…atagraycatwalkingalongagrayfenceinagrayyard.Howdidthewritervividlyshowthesefeelings?Findsomesentenceswithvividdescriptionsthatshowherdesperationandfrustration.123…Imageryvividuseoflanguagetoforma(n)image/pictureplotwizardHereyeswereshiningbrilliantly,butherfacehadlostitscolorwithintwentyseconds.ItsuddenlyoccurredtoherthatshecouldsellthehairtobuyanexpensivegiftforJim.conflictfinderShewassorrowfulbecauseshewouldbuythegiftattheexpenseofherbelovedhair.herlovefor_____herlovefor______hairJimPara.2-6Para.2Hereyeswereshiningbrilliantly,butherfacehadlostitscolorwithintwentyseconds.ItsuddenlyoccurredtoherthatshecouldsellthehairtobuyanexpensivegiftforJim.conflictfinderherloveforJimplotwizardShewassorrowfulbecauseshewouldbuythegiftattheexpenseofherbelovedhair.plotwizardImageryvividuseoflanguagetoforma(n)image/pictureStaringintothemirror,shefoundherhair______________________,____________________________.Shestoodstillwhileafewtears_____________________________onthewornredcarpet.Withbrilliantsparkleinhereyes,she_____________________

outofthedooranddownthestairstothestreet.Para.3shininglikeabrownwaterfallreachedbelowherkneessplashed/dripped/streameddownfluttered/rushed/dashedbodylanguageexpressionssurpriseeyeswideopen;eyebrowsraisedhigh;mouthintheshapeofan“O”;jawdroppinglipscurvingintoasmile;facelightingup;danceforjoy;grinfromeartoearhappinessbeingmovedred-rimmedeyes;hug/embracesb.tightly;tearssplashing/wellingImagery讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)(plot)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。注意：所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Howtochoosetheunderlinedkeywordsandphrasesinyourwriting?Howtomakefulluseofthegivensentencesandtheplot?Howtomakethestorycoherentandlogical?若詞數(shù)少于130，從總分中扣去2分。WRITETheunderlinedkeywordsandphrasescouchunhappilyChristmasDayagifthairgoldwatchstaringintoeyeschainheldWhen?Where?Who?What?Why?How?Tip1:These10wordsandphrasestellussomethingaboutthecharacterandevents.Youcanthinkwhatstorycanbedevelopedfromthesewordsandphrases.InfertheendingParagraph1:ThedooropenedandJimsteppedin.Paragraph2:InsideJim’spackagewerethecombs.Tip2:Focusonthebeginningofthetwogivenparagraphs.Tip3:Usethekeywordsespeciallynounsinthegivensentencestoinfermoreinformation.Paragraph1:

ThedooropenedandJimsteppedin.WhathappenedafterJimsteppedin?--whatdidhesee?say?do?Howdidhefeel?Paragraph2:InsideJim’spackagewerethecombs.HowdidDellafeelaftershesawthecombs?Tip4:Writealogicalandreasonableending.Thekeywordscanguideustoimaginereasonably.Whatistheturningpointofthestory?WhatdidIlearnfromtheirstory?plotwizardconflictthemeWhatmightJim’sreactionbe?Hewassurprised.(shocked/stunned/dumbfounded)Hewasfrustrated.(dismayed)DellaJimConnectionJimtookoutapackage.plotwizardInteractionImageryDelladelightedlypresentedthegifttoJimandtoldthetruth.

Jimwasdeeplymovedandhuggedherinhisarms.Para.1Para.2themediscovererLoveSacrificeWealth123Itisloveandsacrificethatmakepeopletrulywealthy.Use“interaction”todesignyourplot;Use“imagery”tomakeyourlanguagemorevivid.yourwritingissupposedto

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bewellconnectedtothegivenpassageandthegivenbeginningsofthetwoparagraphs;2.bewellorganizedwithatleast5ofthe10underlinedwordsorphrases;3.haveusedadvancedwordsandexpressionscorrectly;4.haveusedlinkingwordseffectivelytomakethewritingcoherent.Sample1Apossibleversionforreference

ThedooropenedandJimsteppedin.StaringatDella'seyes

shiningwithanticipation,Jimwidenedhiseyesatthesightofhernewhaircutandsqueezedoutafaintsmiletomaskhisinnerdismay.//Delladancedtowardshimatabriskpaceandspreadoutherpalmwiththeshinychaininside,sayinggently"MerryChristmas,honey!".//RealizingDellaboughtthegiftattheexpenseofherbelovedhair,Jimwasreducedtotearswithred-rimmedeyesandembracedhertightlyinhisarms.//Whilemildlystrokinghershorthair,hemurmuredinachokedvoice,“I’vealsogotagiftforyou!”ashereachedforapackageandunwrappedit.

InsideJim’spackagewerethecombs.theoriginalversionThedooropenedandJimsteppedinandclosedit.Helookedthinandveryserious.Poorfellow,hewasonlytwenty-two--andtobeburdenedwithafamily!Heneededanewovercoatandhewaswithoutgloves.

Jimstoppedinsidethedoor,asimmovableasasetteratthescentofquail(鵪鶉).HiseyeswerefixeduponDella,andtherewasanexpressioninthemthatshecouldnotread,an