讀后續(xù)寫歷險(xiǎn)故事類+兩姐妹火車道脫險(xiǎn) 高考英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)品德故事——兩姐妹火車道脫險(xiǎn)1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Itwasafinesummermorning,perfecttobeoutdoors.Twosistershadbeenoutmushroompicking,andwereontheirwayhomewithheavybasketsfullofmushrooms.Theysangsongsontheway,andplayedwitheachother.Soontheyreachedapointwheretheyhadtocrossarailwaytrack.Theydidnotthinktwiceaboutcrossingitsincetherewasnotraincoming,andtheycouldnothearanywhistle.Theyslowlyclimbedthesteeprailwayembankment,takingcarenottodropthebaskets.TheywereverynearthetrackandthelittlesisterMarywasabouttocrossitfirstwhenatrainwhistledinthedistance.Hearingthetraincoming,Rosetheeldersisterquicklyrandown.Shethoughtthattheyoungonewasfollowingher.Butassheturnedback,shewasshockedtoseeherlittlesisterstilluptherecrossingthetrack.“Comebackhere!Runbackfast!”sheshouted.4續(xù)寫原文Maryseemednottohearthewhistlenorhersister’scryasshewasconcentratingonsteppingoverthetrackwithherlittlefeet,andholdingontothebasket.Thenshetrippedandfellonthetrack,scatteringhermushroomsaround.Theenginedriverpanickedonseeingagirlbetweenthetrackswhowasonherhandsandkneesandheblewthehornwithallhisstrength.PoorMary,whowasfrightenedbythecomingdanger,frozeanddidn’tknowwhattodo.WhenRosesawthescene,shescreamedatthetopofhervoiceforMary’sattention.Marynoticedthathersisterwasnotaroundandcriedforhelp.Withthetraindrawingnear,theenginedrivergrewextremelyanxious.Ashardashecould,hekeptblowingthewhistleandstartedreducingspeed.Yetitwasnotpossibleforhimtostoptheheavytrainwithinsuchashortdistance.5段首句Para1：Rosewouldn’twatchthetragedyhappenbeforehereyes.Para2：Thetrainrolledoverandfinallystopped.6Part2題目分析7點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)8續(xù)寫思路分析本文以人物為線索展開，講述了兩姐妹出去采蘑菇，帶著沉重的蘑菇籃子回家，在穿過鐵軌的時(shí)候小妹妹Mary在鐵軌上摔倒了，姐姐Rose在危急時(shí)刻沖過去護(hù)住妹妹，最后火車停了下來，兩人死里逃生。9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1:Rosewouldn’twatchthetragedyhappenbeforehereyes.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Rose不愿看到悲劇發(fā)生在她眼前?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Rose是如何幫助妹妹的。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2:Thetrainrolledoverandfinallystopped.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“火車翻倒了，終于停了下來?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫火車停下，兩姐妹獲救。11續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索Rose沖上鐵軌——Rose護(hù)住妹妹——火車停下——獲救12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類①靠近：approach/getclose②撿起：collect/pickup③回家：walkbackhome/getbackhome情緒類①快樂：joy/happiness②害怕：frightened/scared13續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1]Sherusheduptheembankmentstaircase,repeatingatthetopofhervoice“Stayoffthetracks!”(運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ))[高分句型2]Neverwerethetwosoulssohappilyunitedatthatmoment.(運(yùn)用了全部倒裝)14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)Rosewouldn’twatchthetragedyhappenbeforehereyes.Sherusheduptheembankmentstaircase,repeatingatthetopofhervoice“Stayoffthetracks!”Mary,atthesightofRose’scomingtoherrescue,burstintotearsofjoy.Thoughreducingspeedashardasitcould,thetrainwasstillapproachingfast.Seeingtherewaslittletimetodraghersisteroutofdanger,RosejumpedoverwithoutasecondthoughtandcoveredMary’sbodyunderhers.16范文呈現(xiàn)Thetrainrolledoverandfinallystopped.Frightenedandworried,theenginedriverquickenedhispacetoseewhathappenedtothelittlegirl.Tohisgreatrelief,thesistersliedbetweentherailssafeandsound.Whatanarrowescape!Hehelpedthemsitupandcomfortedthem.Thetwosistershuggedandkissedeachother,tearsofjoyflowingdowntheircheeks.Neverwerethetwosoulssohappilyunitedatthatmoment.Theythencollectedalltheremainingmushroomsand,handinhandmoretightlythanbefore,walkedbackhome.17范文譯文羅斯不會(huì)眼睜睜地看著悲劇發(fā)生。她沖上路堤樓梯，聲嘶力竭地重復(fù)著“別靠近鐵軌！”瑪麗一看到羅斯來救她，就喜極而泣。盡管盡可能地減速，火車還是很快地駛來。羅斯看到幾乎沒有時(shí)間把妹妹從危險(xiǎn)中拖出來，便不假思索地跳了過去，把瑪麗的身體蓋在身下。18范文譯文火車翻了個(gè)身，終于停了下來。發(fā)動(dòng)機(jī)司機(jī)既害怕又擔(dān)心，加快了速度，想看看小女孩發(fā)生了什么事。讓他松了一口氣的是，姐妹倆