2025屆高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫+雨中登山

讀后續(xù)寫——雨中爬山賞美景Edundidnotwanttogoonahike.Sheespeciallydidnotwanttogoonalonghikeinthemountainsthatledtoatinycabin(小木屋)withnoelectricityandnorunningwater.Shewantedtostayhomereadingabookinsteadwhilewrappedinawarmblanket.“Ready?”Momaskedcheerfullyafterbreakfast.Edunlookedoutthewindowandonlysawrain,lotsofit.“Weshouldgoanotherday,”Edunsuggested.“Maybeahundredyearsfromnow.”Sheworriedshewouldgettiredonthehike.Sheworriedaboutgettingboredatthedarkcabin.Momsaiditwastimetostopworryingandgetintothecar.Edun’sbrother,Will,waswaitinginthegarage,whoworeacameraaroundhisneck.WillwasfouryearsolderthanEdunandhadclimbedmanymoremountains.He’dstartedhikingwhenhewastwoandlovedit.Becauseitwasraining,Edunhadtowearherrainpants,herrainhat,herrainjacket,andherwaterproofboots.Herjackethadaroughmaterialontheinside.Shedidn’tlikehowitfeltagainstherskin.Afterabouthalfanhour’sdrive,theyparkedatatrailhead(登山口).Therainhadstoppedbutthegroundwasstilldrippingwet.“We’llbetherebyafternoon!”Mompromised.Theafternoonsoundedfaraway.Willidentifiedabirdsittingonanearbybranch-“Foxsparrow!”-thenheraceddownthetrailandwassoonoutofsight.Edunrestedunderapinetree.“Youcan’tforcemetowalk,”Edunsaid.“You‘reright,”saidhermomsmilingly,standingunderthetree,too,“Butyouwillneverknowwhatmaylieaheadandamazeus.”三招審題第一招：前文分析抓要點第二招：線索分析看導(dǎo)圖Theyarrivedatcabinandwatchedthestarshappily.通過閱讀所給文章可知，艾頓剛開始因小屋條件艱苦，不想和家人一起登山，而且看到外面的大雨，艾頓擔(dān)心旅行會讓人疲憊厭煩，但在媽媽勸說下，終究還是上車開啟登山之旅。一家人到達(dá)登山口,雨已停下，艾頓興致依然不高。登山途中,雖然艾頓的哥哥威爾看到樹上的小動物非常興奮，可艾頓卻在休息后不想再繼續(xù)前進(jìn)，媽媽安慰說前面會有驚奇的事情等待他們。情節(jié)發(fā)展線Edundidnotwanttogoonahike.情感變化線worriedPersuadedbyhermother,Edunreachedthetrailhead.reluctantEdunrestedunderapinetreeandrefusedtogoon.Momtriedtostimulatehercuriosity.hopefulEdunsawbeautifulscenerythecabinonthewaytothecabin.surprisedgrateful作者在前文最后一段結(jié)束時交代媽媽安慰艾頓說前面會有驚奇的事情等待他們。續(xù)寫段落第一段首句意為(艾頓認(rèn)為媽媽是對的，跟著媽媽繼續(xù)沿著小路前進(jìn)。)結(jié)合續(xù)寫第二段的開頭語可知，第一段可描寫艾頓在路上所看到的驚奇事物，并且不知不覺間，一家人已經(jīng)完成了大部分攀登。根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段開頭語(二十分鐘后，他們看到了小屋。)可知，第二段可描寫一家人到達(dá)木屋后看到的美麗夜景，以及到達(dá)木屋后，一家人將會做哪些事情，大家可合理展開續(xù)寫，比如看到夜空都是閃亮的星星，拍照留念等等。第三招：首句伏筆定思路四步成文角度詞匯情感描寫feelabitdown,miserable,marvelat,toone'sexcitement,wildwithjoy,bedelightedby,beentrancedat動植物等山景insect,abundantwildlife,clearstreams,quietforests,amostimpressivescene,infullbloom,giveoutasweetsmell,risefromthelake夜空景象lightenthenight,bringforthstars,dottedwith,glitteringstars,stareupatthestarrysky,thestillnessofnightair,thebrightbluesky,inthecurtainofnights登山goon,raceupthehill,walkon,strollpast,getslippery,hikeinthemountains,climbover,hikethrough第一步：詞匯準(zhǔn)備四步成文第二步：句式準(zhǔn)備1.他們繼續(xù)向前走。2.在濕漉漉的綠色樹林里，總能看到些什么東西。4.Will急切地給他們看自己拍的狐貍麻雀在樹枝上休息的照片。5.他們走過粗糙的灌木叢。3.很快，他們就追上來Will.They_______________________________________.__________________________________________tolookforinthewetgreenwoods.Soonthey_____________________Will.Willeagerly_____________________________hetookoftheFoxsparrowrestingonabranch.They___________________cratchybushes.walkedon.Therewasalwayssomethingcaughtupwithshowedthemthephotosstrolledpast6.他們爬過灰色的巖石。7.他們徒步走過矮樹。8.那天晚上，每個人都熬夜看星星。9.那么多星星聚集在那里，于是Edun提議：“我要給他們拍張照。”10.“咔嚓！”照相機(jī)記錄下了這一時刻。They____________________grayrocks.They____________________dwarftrees.Thatnight,everyboy_____________________toseethestars.Somanystars_________________________andEdunproposed,“Ineedtotakeapictureofthem.”“Click!”Thecamera_____________________________.climbedoverhikedthroughstayeduplateclusteredupthererecordedthemomentpara1學(xué)生重點在不想爬山，又冷又濕。媽媽鼓勵，最終克服困難，爬上山了。沒有描寫沿途風(fēng)景。para2學(xué)生寫成主題是走出舒適區(qū)，個人成長，更有甚者，去木屋買零食。學(xué)生出錯的地方Paragraph1ThinkingMomwasright,Edunfollowedherdownthetrail.Theypassedawaterfall,tinyyetclear.ThetricklingofwatermadeEdunfeelbetter.Toherdelight,astheywalkedon,therewasalwayssomethingamazingtocatchtheirattentioninthewetgreenwoods:animaltracks,wildflowersandlittlecreeks.Lookingaround,thebreath-takingsceneryalongthewaywasreallyafeastforeyes.SoontheycaughtupwithWill,whoeagerlyshowedthemthephotoshetookoftheFoxsparrowrestingonabranch.Unknowinglytheyhadalreadydonemostoftheclimb.Paragraph2Twentyminuteslater,theysawthecabin.EdunandWillstartedracingupthehill.Finally,theretheywereinthesmallbutcozycabin.Throughitswindow,Edunsawfarawaymeadowsandlakes,awholenewworldemergingbeforehereyes.Thatnight,everybodystayeduplatetoseethetwinklingstars,whichwerelikediamondinthedarksky.Eduntookoutthecameratofreezetheunforgettablemoment.SheapproachedMomandhuggedher,whispering,“Mom,thankyouforhavingmecome!Itissuchagreatpleasuretogetclosetonature.”Shortlyafter,somebeautifulsoundwentintoears.Curiously,Edunslowlyapproachedandfoundariver,whichwasasclearasamirror.Sheshoutedwithexcitement.Afterrestingforawhile,Eduncouldn'thelpgoingontoseewhatwerewaitingforthem.——郭雅婷Edunfoundsomanyinterestingthingsthatshehadneverseenbefore.——賈博涵Withthesenseofcuriosity,shedecidedtoseewhatmaylieahead.——姚鑫雨WillaskedEduntoappreciatehisworks.Shesawmanyanimalsandbeautifulviewsthatshehadn'tseeninthecar.——馬紫昕Shehadcometoappreciatethevalueofnatureandenjoythebeautyinourdailylife.Thisiswhathermotherwantedtoteachher.——趙晨宇SotiredandboredwasEdunthatshedidn'twanttowalk.Shesawvariousflowers,treesandanimalsonthewayandhercur