2024屆高考英語作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)：2024年九省聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫課件

2024九省聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫

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【含豐富續(xù)寫語料】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn'tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedempty-handed.Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(過濾)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya'spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithacomb(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthecombandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What'sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.

Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Para2: NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.

【詞匯、語塊積累】makesurethetankswerefreeofanyitems-確保水箱內(nèi)沒有任何物品presentHildawithacandywrapper-給希爾達(dá)一個糖果包裝紙blameHildaforhercarelessness-因?yàn)樗拇中呢?zé)備希爾達(dá)decidetodosomespyingonMaya-決定對瑪雅進(jìn)行一些偵查surfacedempty-handed-空手浮出水面swamtothebackpartofthetank-游到水箱的后部stuckhernosedownbehindthebox-把鼻子伸到箱子后面emergedfromthewater-從水中出現(xiàn)removingherscubagear-正在脫下她的水肺裝備withacombinhermouth-嘴里叼著一把梳子waitingforhertreat-等待她的獎勵handfulofitemsstillwet-一把仍然濕漉漉的物品故事人物Hilda:

一名在海洋公園與海豚訓(xùn)練師一起工作的志愿者。她聰明、觀察細(xì)致，能夠發(fā)現(xiàn)并解釋瑪雅的行為。Katherine:

海豚訓(xùn)練師，最初因?yàn)檎`解責(zé)備Hilda，后來意識到Hilda的洞察力和瑪雅的特殊行為。Maya:

一只聰明的海豚，喜歡收集物品，并將其藏在過濾箱后面。Beginning:Hilda作為志愿者在海洋公園工作，負(fù)責(zé)清理水箱。Build-up:Katherine錯誤地責(zé)備Hilda粗心，因?yàn)镸aya呈現(xiàn)了一個糖果包裝紙。Hilda決定觀察Maya，發(fā)現(xiàn)了海豚收集和隱藏物品的行為。Climax:Hilda揭示了Maya的秘密，向Katherine展示了海豚收集的物品。Resolution:Katherine意識到了Hilda的洞察力和Maya的特殊行為，兩人之間的誤解得到了解決。Denouement:故事以Katherine對Hilda的認(rèn)可和對Maya行為的新理解結(jié)束，突出了觀察、理解和團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的重要性。主題1：Katherine（海豚教練）與Hilda（志愿者）解除誤會，加深了彼此信任、尊重與友誼。

主題2：

海豚的聰明，關(guān)愛動物。寫作思路1：

直接告訴Katherine關(guān)于Maya的秘密參考范文1Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Inherhand,shedisplayedtheitemsshehadretrievedbehindthefilterbox.“She'sbeenkeepingthesefromthetank,notme.”Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.HildaexplainedhowshehadwatchedMayacleverlyhidetheitemsaway,turningthetankintoherownlittlecollectionspot.ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.參考范文1Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.“Ioweyouanapology,Hilda.You'veshowngreatinitiativeandcare,”shesaid,hertonefilledwithnewfoundrespect.Together,theywatchedMayaperformhertricks,understandingnowthatthedolphin'sbehaviorwasnotatrainingissuebutasignofherintelligenceandcuriosity.Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics.寫作思路2：

間接告訴Katherine關(guān)于Maya秘密

【帶著Katherine一起去filterbox，增強(qiáng)故事的畫面感，和情節(jié)豐富性】參考范文2Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.ShethengesturedforKatherinetofollowhertothebackofthetank.Together,theypeeredbehindthefilterbox,whereHildacarefullyreachedin.Herhandemergedholdingasmall,glitteringobject.Itwasacharmbracelet,shimmeringwithtinybeads.“Mayahasbeenhidingthingslikethishere,”Hildaexplained,hervoicefilledwithwonder.Katherine'seyesfollowedeverymovement,herinitialdisbeliefslowlyturningintofascinationassherealizedthedepthofMaya'splayfulantics.參考范文2Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.AlookofunderstandingcrossedherfaceasshewatchedMayaswimgracefullyaroundthetank.“Imisunderstoodthesituation,”Katherineadmitted,turningtoHildawithanapologeticsmile.“You'vedoneagreatjobuncoveringMaya'slittlehobby.”Theatmospherelightened,andthebondbetweentrainer,volunteer,anddolphingrewstronger.AstheywatchedMayaplayfullyinteractwithherhiddentreasures,asenseofunityandjoyfilledtheair,replacinganyearliertension.描述Hilda展示Maya收集的物品的場景1 HildacarefullylaidoutMaya'scollectiononthepoolside,aneclecticmixofshinypebbles,colorfulbeads,andevenasmalltoycar,eachitematestamenttothedolphin'scuriousnature.Hilda小心地將Maya收集的物品擺放在泳池邊，這些五花八門的物品包括閃亮的鵝卵石、彩色的珠子，甚至還有一輛小玩具車，每一件都證明了海豚的好奇本性。2 HildaspreadtheitemsMayahadgathered,fromseashellstobottlecaps,beforeKatherine,eachpiecenarratingasilentstoryofthedolphin'sunderwateradventures.Hilda將Maya收集的物品擺在凱瑟琳面前，從海貝到瓶蓋，每一件都默默訴說著海豚在水下的冒險故事。描述Katherine對這一發(fā)現(xiàn)的反應(yīng)1 Katherine'seyeswidenedinastonishmentassheexaminedthearrayofobjects,herinitialskepticismmeltingintoadmirationforHilda'skeenobservation.Katherine在審視這些物品時目瞪口呆，她最初的懷疑轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)閷ilda敏銳觀察能力的贊賞。2 AmixofsurpriseandcontemplationcrossedKatherine'sfaceassherealizedthedepthofMaya'sactions,herperspectiveonHilda'scapabilitiestransformingwithnewfoundrespect.當(dāng)Katherine意識到Maya行為的深度時，她的臉上露出驚訝和思考的表情，她對希爾達(dá)能力的看法隨著新發(fā)現(xiàn)的尊重而轉(zhuǎn)變。帶著Katherine一起去filterbox1 Withagestureofshareddiscovery,HildaledKatherinetothefilterbox,wheretheycarefullyunearthedahiddentroveoftrinkets,eachitemshiningwiththestoryofMaya'ssecretunderwatercollection."Hilda帶著發(fā)現(xiàn)的喜悅引領(lǐng)Katherine來到過濾箱旁，在那里他們小心翼翼地挖掘出一個隱藏的寶藏，每一件小飾品都閃耀著Maya秘密水下收藏的故事。2 Together,HildaandKatherinepe