新教材2024高考英語(yǔ)二輪專題復(fù)習(xí)專題六讀后續(xù)寫-“四步”寫作流程寫作技法教師用書

專題六讀后續(xù)寫——“四步”寫作流程寫作技法讀后續(xù)寫建立在“以讀促寫”的基礎(chǔ)上，它不是傳統(tǒng)的閱讀或?qū)懽?，而是將讀與寫緊密結(jié)合。在續(xù)寫過程中，通過閱讀把握故事情節(jié)、人物特點(diǎn)和語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)，理清故事發(fā)展脈絡(luò)和關(guān)鍵信息，預(yù)測(cè)故事的發(fā)展方向，提煉語(yǔ)篇主題。續(xù)寫內(nèi)容需要?jiǎng)?chuàng)作，故事角度要新穎，人物性格、情節(jié)要保持一致；故事情節(jié)不能違背生活現(xiàn)實(shí)。語(yǔ)言輸入與語(yǔ)言輸出同時(shí)進(jìn)行，這對(duì)考生的閱讀理解能力和閱讀表達(dá)能力提出了更高的要求?！窘?年新高考卷考查情況一覽表】深研命題·把握考情——以問題為導(dǎo)向探析備考策略命題篇——悟評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，明努力方向各檔次的給分范圍和要求檔次描述第五檔(21－25分)情節(jié)設(shè)置合理，內(nèi)容豐富完整，富有邏輯性，與原文情境融洽度高；使用了豐富多樣的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)(few)，但完全不影響理解；有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的銜接手段。第四檔(16－20分)情節(jié)設(shè)置比較合理，內(nèi)容比較豐富完整，比較有邏輯性，與原文情境融洽度較高；使用了比較豐富的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，錯(cuò)誤較少(afew)，但不影響理解；比較有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的銜接手段。第三檔(11－15分)情節(jié)設(shè)置基本合理，內(nèi)容比較完整，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文話題相關(guān)；使用了簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有一些錯(cuò)誤和不恰當(dāng)之處(some)，但基本不影響理解；基本有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的銜接手段。第二檔(6－10分)情節(jié)設(shè)置不夠合理，內(nèi)容不夠完整，邏輯存在較大問題，與原文情境有一定程度的脫節(jié)；所用的詞匯有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤較多(many)，影響理解；未能有效地使用語(yǔ)句間的銜接手段。第一檔(1－5分)情節(jié)設(shè)置完全不合理，內(nèi)容不完整，毫無邏輯，或有部分內(nèi)容抄自原文，與原文情境基本脫節(jié)；所使用的詞匯有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)混亂(all)，嚴(yán)重影響理解；幾乎沒有使用語(yǔ)句間的銜接手段。零分未作答；所寫內(nèi)容太少或無法看清以至于無法評(píng)判；所寫內(nèi)容全部抄自原文或與題目要求完全不相關(guān)。細(xì)說讀后續(xù)寫評(píng)分細(xì)則1．本題總分為25分，按五個(gè)檔次進(jìn)行評(píng)分。2．評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)先根據(jù)作答的整體情況確定其所屬的檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來綜合衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。3．評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從內(nèi)容、詞匯與語(yǔ)法、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三個(gè)方面考慮，具體為：(1)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量、完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度；(2)所使用詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性；(3)語(yǔ)句間的銜接和全文的連貫性。4．評(píng)分時(shí)還應(yīng)注意：(1)詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分；(2)書寫較差以至于影響交際的，酌情扣分；(3)單詞拼寫和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是寫作規(guī)范的重要方面，評(píng)分時(shí)應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮，英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。閱卷人析考生失分原因1．續(xù)寫內(nèi)容偏離原文主旨或人物混亂；2．續(xù)寫情節(jié)與原文、段首句無法達(dá)成銜接、連貫；3．語(yǔ)言基本功欠缺，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)錯(cuò)誤，句式雜糅，時(shí)態(tài)混用；4．表達(dá)內(nèi)容——詞匯、詞塊及句型的使用不夠豐富，缺乏可讀性；5．語(yǔ)言表達(dá)以中式英語(yǔ)為主，不夠地道；6．書寫不規(guī)范，卷面難以識(shí)別?？忌仨毐苊鈨蓚€(gè)雷區(qū)1．情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)要符合生活實(shí)際和文章邏輯，避免太過離奇。2．?dāng)⑹隽η缶?、生?dòng)、連貫，對(duì)話不要太多，書面化的長(zhǎng)句不宜太多。策略篇——循“四步”寫作流程，滿分續(xù)寫不是夢(mèng)第一步熟知續(xù)寫流程，下筆胸有成竹第二步理清原文雙線，明晰續(xù)寫線索第三步確定續(xù)寫框架，構(gòu)思續(xù)寫情節(jié)第四步升華詞句表達(dá)，成就華美篇章要想讀后續(xù)寫得高分，除了要認(rèn)真審題，設(shè)計(jì)合理的情節(jié)，還要注意語(yǔ)言表達(dá)，如高人一籌的高頻詞匯，運(yùn)用靈活多變的句式，恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用比喻、擬人和夸張修辭手法使語(yǔ)言變得鮮活、生動(dòng)，增強(qiáng)續(xù)寫的表現(xiàn)力，文章一定會(huì)錦上添花，吸引閱卷老師的眼球。策略一妙筆生花，在“詞”一舉在閱卷時(shí)，閱卷老師首要關(guān)注的是續(xù)寫的語(yǔ)言，因此續(xù)寫語(yǔ)言的高低與否直接決定著續(xù)寫的成功與否。首先要規(guī)避常見錯(cuò)誤，確保拿到及格分，再次要盡力提升寫作的語(yǔ)言，努力達(dá)到最高檔。5大升級(jí)路徑，詞匯亮人一眼升級(jí)路徑1：籠統(tǒng)詞→具體詞①Hejustduckedhisheadandlookedathisownshoes.→Hejustduckedhisheadandstaredathisownshoes.[2022·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷]②HearingthenewsthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest,Iwasveryhappy.→HearingthenewsthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest,aflashofjoysweptoverme.[2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷讀后續(xù)寫]升級(jí)路徑2：簡(jiǎn)單詞→高級(jí)詞①Excitedtolookaround,Ididn'tfindmysocialstudiesteacherinthecrowd.→Excitedtolookaround,Ididn'tspotmysocialstudiesteacherinthecrowd.[2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷讀后續(xù)寫]②ShesaidthatshehadbeentryingtofindsomeonereliabletowalkVelma,andthatshetrulythankedmyhelp．→ShesaidthatshehadbeenstrugglingtofindsomeonereliabletowalkVelma,andthatshetrulyappreciatedmyassistance．升級(jí)路徑3：?jiǎn)卧~→短語(yǔ)①WhenIwasinvitedtothestagetoreceivetheaward,Ithankedmyteacher.→WhenIwasinvitedtothestagetoreceivetheaward,Iexpressedmythanks/appreciationtomyteacher.[2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷讀后續(xù)寫]②Afteraday'swork,wewerealltired．→Afteraday'swork,wewereallwornout．升級(jí)路徑4：運(yùn)用有表現(xiàn)力的副詞恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂酶挥斜憩F(xiàn)力的副詞，能夠使文章更加豐富多姿，描寫也更為準(zhǔn)確，文章更有生機(jī)。使用這些副詞時(shí)，要注意把握這些詞匯的確切內(nèi)涵，并且符合故事發(fā)展的內(nèi)在邏輯。①WhenIpresentedtheawardcertificatetomyteacher,hiseyesglisteningwithtears,hereachedouthishandsandhuggedmetightly.[2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷讀后續(xù)寫]②Gradually,Max'sfaithstartedtogetshakenintheburningsunafterabouttwentyminutesofwalking.Mimibentoverandpattedhimgentlyontheshoulder.③Iwasquietly,joyfullyandpatientlywatchingasthesunpaintedabrand-newday.升級(jí)路徑5：運(yùn)用有表現(xiàn)力的介詞短語(yǔ)介詞with或in后加表示情緒、個(gè)性等的名詞，經(jīng)?？梢耘c相應(yīng)的副詞互換，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂么私Y(jié)構(gòu)可以增加表達(dá)的多樣性。①Onhearingthat,hereyeswidenedexcitedlyandhermouthopenedwidely.→Onhearingthat,hereyeswidenedwithexcitementandhermouthopenedwidely.②Iwatchedastheyatethefoodeagerly,theireyesshiningwithgratitude.→Iwatchedastheyatethefoodwitheagerness,theireyesshiningwithgratitude.策略二12個(gè)滿分公式，續(xù)寫高人一等第一組無“靈”主語(yǔ)句，寫“情”最細(xì)膩【公式1】(aburst/wave/sense/feelingof＋)表情緒的名詞＋特定動(dòng)詞(短語(yǔ))＋sb.表“某人感到……”或“一陣/一種……向某人襲來”Awaveof＋happiness/joy/delight開心anger怒火rage狂怒sadness/sorrow悲傷guilt內(nèi)疚，悔恨admiration欽佩，贊賞horror恐懼fear害怕terror驚恐fright驚嚇panic恐慌astonishment驚訝shock震驚surprise驚奇gratitude/appreciation感謝，感激seize突然控制，surround圍繞，takeholdof控制，washover涌上心頭，comeover影響，sweepover突然襲來＋sb.[佳句][仿寫]①Asenseofguiltseizedhimandhestoodthere,frozen.[2023·聊城市二模]一種負(fù)罪感攫住了他，他站在那里，呆住了。②Astrongwaveoffearsweepingoverhim,Ronnycouldn'tutterasingleword.一陣強(qiáng)烈的恐懼傳遍他的全身，Ronny一句話也說不出來。________________________________________________________________themomentIheardthegoodnewsthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest.[2023·新課標(biāo)讀后續(xù)寫]當(dāng)我聽到我在寫作比賽中獲得第一名的好消息時(shí)，我很開心?！竟?】主語(yǔ)(表示身體部位/“音、容、笑”的名詞)＋有靈動(dòng)詞(短語(yǔ))[佳句][仿寫]Atthesightofthefrighteningwolf,Ifeltsoscaredthatmythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak．看到那只可怕的狼，我嚇得喉嚨發(fā)緊，兩腿發(fā)軟。Afteraday'shardwork,therewerestillmanyplasticbagslyingonthebeach,________________herface.經(jīng)過一天的辛苦工作，海灘上仍然有許多塑料袋，她的臉上掠過失望的神情。第二組巧用狀語(yǔ)，寫“情”更具體【公式3】表“情感”的介詞短語(yǔ)，主＋謂提示：常用的表情緒的“toone's＋情感名詞或in/with＋情感名詞”，如withdelight/anger/terror“高興地/生氣地/驚恐地”等介詞短語(yǔ)置于句首，能使情感細(xì)節(jié)描寫更為具體。[佳句][仿寫]Atthesightofthepleasantsurprise,Racheljumpedwithjoyandscreamedwithexcitement．看到這個(gè)驚喜，雷切爾高興得跳了起來，興奮得尖叫起來。Whenhesteppedontothestageandbegantospeak,hefelttotallyathome,totallyatpeace.________________________________.當(dāng)他走上舞臺(tái)開始演講時(shí)，他感到完全輕松自在，心情平靜。令他震驚和驚奇的是，他竟然贏得了這場(chǎng)比賽。【公式4】主＋謂，withone'seyesfullof＋(tearsof＋)情感名詞提示：該結(jié)構(gòu)或withhiseyesfullofhappiness“雙眸滿是喜悅”等作伴隨狀語(yǔ)，可使動(dòng)作或?qū)υ捗鑼懜鷦?dòng)。[佳句][仿寫]Tothethunderouscheersandapplause,Davidcrossedthefinishlinewithtearsofprideandexcitementspillingoutofhiseyes.大衛(wèi)在雷鳴般的歡呼聲和掌聲中，兩眼含著驕傲和興奮的淚水沖過終點(diǎn)線。Hismotherlistenedattentivelytothechildren，________________________________________________________________．他媽媽認(rèn)真地聽著孩子們說話，雙眸滿是興奮和感激。第三組“某人想到”亮人一眼【公式5】Itsuddenlyhit/struck/occurredtosb.that從句，其中that從句是真正的主語(yǔ)。Anidea＋struck＋sb.that...Itgraduallydawnedonmethat...Allofasudden,Icametorealize/understandthat...[佳句][仿寫]Ithit/struck/occurredto/dawnedonthemthattheycouldmakebreakfastforMothertocelebrateMother'sDay.他們突然想到他們可以給媽媽做早餐慶祝母親節(jié)。____________________________________________________________________buthecouldstillhearthewholeconversation.我突然想到大衛(wèi)是個(gè)盲人，但他仍然能聽到整個(gè)談話。第四組用動(dòng)作鏈，營(yíng)造畫面感【公式6】主語(yǔ)＋動(dòng)作A，動(dòng)作Band動(dòng)作C/主語(yǔ)＋動(dòng)作A，動(dòng)作B，動(dòng)作Cand動(dòng)作D提示：該公式中連詞and連接三個(gè)或三個(gè)以上的動(dòng)作，構(gòu)成動(dòng)作鏈，動(dòng)詞的時(shí)態(tài)是一致的。[佳句][仿寫]Hecaughtmyeye,flashedmeatoothygrinandsaid,“Thatwaseasy.”[2022·新高考Ⅰ卷]他看了我一眼，露齒一笑說，“不難?！盜approachedDad,proudly________________________________________ittohim.我走近爸爸，驕傲地拿出我自己的錢遞給他?！竟?】連貫動(dòng)作：Sb.didA,didBanddidC[佳句][仿寫]Seeingnopeoplenoticeus,Iplacedthepresentdown,poundedhisdoorbellandrushedintothecar．看到?jīng)]有人注意我們，我放下禮物，按了他的門鈴，沖進(jìn)了車?yán)铩hewokeup,______________________________________________________________thedoor.她醒了，溜下床，躡手躡腳地走到門口。第五組適當(dāng)修飾，精準(zhǔn)化描寫動(dòng)作【公式8】形容詞(短語(yǔ)),主＋謂……/主＋謂……，形容詞(短語(yǔ))提示：形容詞(短語(yǔ))在句中作狀語(yǔ)，表人物做某個(gè)動(dòng)作的原因、結(jié)果或狀態(tài)，可放句首或句末，增強(qiáng)感染力，使描述更生動(dòng)形象。[佳句][仿寫]Ilookedaroundandfoundmyparents,awake,smilingatme.我環(huán)顧四周，發(fā)現(xiàn)我的父母已經(jīng)醒了，正朝我微笑。Attheawardpresentation,Iacceptedtheawardcertificate，________________________________________________________________________.在頒獎(jiǎng)典禮上，我接受了獲獎(jiǎng)證書，極度緊張和興奮。[2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷]【公式9】主語(yǔ)＋具體動(dòng)詞＋副詞/介詞結(jié)構(gòu)提示：常用的高頻副詞有：cheerfully,curiously,eagerly,excitedly，firmly,joyfully，impatiently等。如在體現(xiàn)動(dòng)作的迅速時(shí)，可添加以下修飾語(yǔ)：suddenly,immediately,withoutpausing,withoutdelay等。[佳句][仿寫]Helenspokeclearly,slowlyandloudly.(3個(gè)副詞連用)海倫講話的聲音清晰、緩慢而且洪亮。____________________________，heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.他禮貌而興奮地請(qǐng)梅瑞狄斯太太教他如何做爆米花?！竟?0】with＋名詞/代詞(＋介詞)＋主＋謂提示：該結(jié)構(gòu)常見的有：withone'shelp,with＋身體部位，如withherpalelips“用蒼白的嘴唇”，withatrembling/shakinghand“用顫抖的手”等。[佳句][仿寫]Withaflushofsadness,shecouldn'tholdbackhertearswellingupinhereyes.帶著一抹悲傷，她忍不住熱淚盈眶。______________，hetoldmethathewasproudofmywonderfulperformance.[2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷讀后續(xù)寫]他臉上洋溢著燦爛的笑容，告訴我他為我的精彩表現(xiàn)感到驕傲。第六組善用修辭，才更吸睛【公式11】比喻式[佳句][仿寫]Isimplystoodtheredumbfounded，andmyfeet,asifIwererootedontheground，couldn'tmoveabit.[2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷讀后續(xù)寫]我站在那里目瞪口呆，腳就像扎根在地上一樣，一動(dòng)也不能動(dòng)。Herfaceturnedpale，________________________________________________________.(比喻)她臉色蒼白，感覺如坐針氈?！竟?2】擬人[佳句][仿寫]Starsappearedinthesky,twinklingtheireyesattheminhappiness/delight/joy.(擬人)天上繁星點(diǎn)點(diǎn)，高興地向他們眨眼睛。Myhopeswerealldead,andmyfuturewasempty.Ilayonbed,while________________________________________________________________________.我的一切希望都破滅了，我的未來成了泡影。我躺在床上，黑暗慢慢將我籠罩了起來。四步解題示妙招考場(chǎng)應(yīng)對(duì)有技巧[典例][2023·新課標(biāo)Ⅰ卷]閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool，mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil，soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay，whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So，whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply：“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself，Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords，Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere'shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18，1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse'smouth.Notabrilliantidea，butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink，ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But，likeRevere'shorse，Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher，hereadit，laughedoutloud，andsaid，“Great.Now，writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain，andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit，thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn'twin，Iwouldn'tcare.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Afewweekslater，whenIalmostforgotthecontest，therecamethenews.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第一步熟知續(xù)寫流程，下筆胸有成竹第二步理清原文雙線，明晰續(xù)寫線索1．故事情節(jié)：當(dāng)老師邀請(qǐng)作者參加作文比賽時(shí)，作者不假思索拒絕→在老師的肯定和鼓勵(lì)下，作者決定嘗試→在寫作過程中有過懷疑，曾經(jīng)想放棄→在不斷的寫作之后，已經(jīng)看淡了輸贏，更多的是享受寫作的過程。2．故事雙線：明線→參加寫作比賽；暗線→只要我們勇于創(chuàng)新，并付諸持之以恒的努力就可以克服困難并從中獲得樂趣和成長(zhǎng)。第三步確定續(xù)寫框架，構(gòu)思續(xù)寫情節(jié)第四步潤(rùn)色，優(yōu)化銜接成文對(duì)羅列的要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行重新篩選和整合后，適當(dāng)拓展要點(diǎn)并運(yùn)用銜接手段，以使文本緊湊流暢。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.ThemomentIwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.Ifeltasenseofhappinessmixedwithsurprisefloodedintomymind.WhenIacceptedtheaward,myheartskippedabeat,mybreathcaughtinmythroat,andtearsfilledmyeyes.Iexpressedmygratitudetomysocialteacher.Atthatmoment,Icouldn'thelpthinkingofmyteacher.Iwenttotheteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Tomysurprise,myteacherwaswaitingforme.Holdingmyhands,heexpressedhiscongratulationstomeonwinningthewritingcontest.“Thankyou”，Ireplied,withamixtureofgratitudeandexcitement.Ireflectedonmyinitialdoubtandhesitation.Withoutmyteacher'srecognitionandguidance,writingwasstilldifficultandpainfulforme.Fortunately,itwasmyteacherwhotaughtmehowtoopenthedoortowritingandtastetheenjoymentofwriting.Ithastaughtmethatateachertakesahand,opensamind,andtouchesaheart.1．與原文情境融洽度不高。比如第一段可能只寫到同學(xué)的贊美或者老師對(duì)我的鼓勵(lì)，與原文的文章脈絡(luò)不吻合。2．與所給句子的銜接度不高。部分學(xué)生不考慮給出的句子和兩段落間的銜接，脫離所給的句子，另起開頭句。3．語(yǔ)言表達(dá)過程中，語(yǔ)法和詞匯使用存在較多的錯(cuò)誤，且很多基礎(chǔ)性錯(cuò)誤頻繁出現(xiàn)。比如he,she分不清楚；第三人稱單數(shù)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的失誤；定語(yǔ)從句that/who/when/where分不清楚等等。4．與原文內(nèi)容缺少呼應(yīng)。文本的續(xù)寫是基于原文基礎(chǔ)之上的，所以續(xù)寫過程中應(yīng)該有多個(gè)呼應(yīng)點(diǎn)，增強(qiáng)文章續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的連貫性。5．與原文情節(jié)走向脫節(jié)的結(jié)尾。續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的結(jié)尾需要與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展脈絡(luò)一致，即便是有反轉(zhuǎn)，也得合乎邏輯。6．書寫過于潦草，影響閱讀。

話題篇——聚焦8大熱考話題，成就25分佳作熱考話題一成長(zhǎng)篇個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類話題的讀后續(xù)寫是熱考話題之一，2021年浙江6月卷借敘述個(gè)人薪水話題，強(qiáng)調(diào)個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)和對(duì)勞動(dòng)的認(rèn)識(shí)。個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)最終的升華為：健康的生活方式，積極的生活態(tài)度，完善的自我等。第一步：成長(zhǎng)前的苦惱(負(fù)面情緒塑造)第二步：成長(zhǎng)的動(dòng)機(jī)＋過程中變化的心情(蛻變塑造)第三步：成長(zhǎng)后的收獲(喜悅＋感激＋升華)Ⅰ.主題場(chǎng)景詞匯growthn.成長(zhǎng)ambitionn.野心；雄心；抱負(fù)behaviorn.行為；舉止qualityn.品質(zhì)mannersn.禮貌gesturen.姿勢(shì)；手勢(shì)desiren.欲望；要求potentialn.潛力unnoticedadj.被忽視的punctualadj.準(zhǔn)時(shí)的；守時(shí)的politeadj.有禮貌的；有教養(yǎng)的persistentadj.堅(jiān)持的，不屈不撓的；持續(xù)不斷的competentadj.有能力的，能勝任的maturev.成熟arisev.發(fā)生；出現(xiàn)behavev.表現(xiàn)；表現(xiàn)得體declarev.宣布；聲明；聲稱cooperatev.合作；協(xié)作；配合quit(quit,quit)v.停止；戒掉；離開(工作職位、學(xué)校等)adjustv.調(diào)整以適應(yīng)undertakev.承擔(dān)；從事；負(fù)責(zé)Ⅱ.主題場(chǎng)景語(yǔ)塊fallbehind落后wornout筋疲力盡的；疲憊的makeupone'smind下定決心guardagainst防范，防止，提防notbebotheredtodosth.懶得做某事determinetodosth.決心做某事wrestlewith努力處理，全力解決formthehabitof...養(yǎng)成……的習(xí)慣followsuit照做befavoredby...受到……的青睞Ⅲ.基于主題場(chǎng)景的續(xù)寫遇到困難/消極情緒(發(fā)愁/無助/不公平/不情愿/失望等)1．Bittermemoriesofthemanager'sharshwordscamefloodingbacktoher.對(duì)經(jīng)理嚴(yán)厲言語(yǔ)的痛苦回憶涌上她的心頭。2．Feelinglonelyandhelpless,Icouldn'teatorsleep.Ihadbeenweepingandmissingmyfamily.我孤單無助，吃不下飯，睡不著覺。我一直在哭泣，想念我的家人。3．Unwillingtohandinallmyearnings,Iwasconsumedbyamixtureofsadnessanddisappointment.我不愿交出我所有的收入，我既悲傷又失望。成長(zhǎng)的動(dòng)機(jī)＋過程中變化的心情，消極→積極(矛盾沖突解決路線)1．IrealizedIcouldevenbewhateverIwantedtobe.ThistaughtmethatIcouldchangemyself.我意識(shí)到我可以成為我想成為的任何人。這讓我明白，我可以改變自己。2．Inspiredbyhimtoconquermyfear,Iwalkedconfidentlytowardstheclassroom,determinedtomakeachange.我被他鼓勵(lì)，克服了恐懼，我信心滿滿地走向教室，決心做出改變。3．Iwasfascinatedbythewholeprocessofacceptingachallenge,stickingtomygoalandthenachievingmygoalthroughmyownefforts.接受挑戰(zhàn)，堅(jiān)持目標(biāo)，然后通過自己的努力實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)的整個(gè)過程讓我著迷。續(xù)寫主旨升華1．ItwasthroughtheembarrassingexperiencethatIlearnednottoescapefrommydutyandtokeeparecordofmymoney,valuingeverycent.正是通過這種尷尬的經(jīng)歷，我學(xué)會(huì)了不逃避職責(zé)，并記賬，珍惜每一分錢。2．Thisprovedarewardingexperience,wherehenotonlyharvestedjoy,butalsoappreciatedthevalueofefforts.事實(shí)證明，這是一次有益的經(jīng)歷，他不僅收獲了快樂，還意識(shí)到了努力的價(jià)值。3．Whathappenedtodaymademerealizethatforgivenessisakindofvirtue.今天發(fā)生的事情讓我意識(shí)到寬恕是一種美德。4．Inthesameway,weneedstruggletogrowstrongandsurvive.Wemustgothroughsomesufferingsifwereallywishtospreadourwingsandfly.同樣地，我們需要奮斗來成長(zhǎng)和生存。如果我們真的想展翅飛翔，就必須經(jīng)歷磨難。5．Notonlydidthisexperienceimprovemyworkenthusiasm,butitalsoofferedmeachancetolearnthemeaningofhardwork.這段經(jīng)歷不僅提高了我的工作熱情，也讓我有機(jī)會(huì)了解到努力工作的意義?！襁@樣自主練評(píng)●閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。[2023·山東省臨沂市高三一模]Palmtreesseemedtospeedbythecarwindow.Eight-year-oldKatrinabegantogetnervous,thewayshealwaysdidinnewsurroundings.Shefeltathinshineofsweataboveherlipinspiteofthecar'scoolair.“Theaquariumwon'tbecrowded,Ibet,andpeoplearegonnanoticeme.Ihatewearingthisprosthesisleg(假肢)．”Shefelttearspinprickbehindhereyes.“Notbeingnormalistheworst.”EnteringtheClearwaterMarineAquarium,aroundacornerofatank,shenoticedananimalthatlookedunusual.“Isthatadolphinwithstump(假肢)insteadofatail？”sheaskedanaquariumstaff.Henodded.“Yes,that'sWinter.She'saveryspecialdolphin.”“Whathappenedtoher？”“ThisgirldolphinwasfoundoffthecoastofFlorida,caughtinacrabtrap.Theropesfromthetrapcutoffthebloodcirculationtohertail.Soshelosthertail，”Katrinacaughtherbreath.“She'sjustlikeme.She'sjustlikeme.”“Butshestruggledtosurvive.Nowshewearsaprosthetictailpartofthedaytohelpherswimlikeadolphin'ssupposedtoswim.”thestaffcontinued,“Everyday,Wintershowsusanythingispossibleifwebelieve.”Katrinafeltherheartstringwastouched.ShewavedatWinter.LookingatKatrina,Winterraisedherflipper(鰭),cametoherandliftedherhead.“She'sswimmingrightintomyarms，”Katrinasaidtearfully.Theymadeeyecontact.SheseemedtobespeakingtoKatrina:We'rethesame.Backhome,allKatrinatalkedaboutwasWinter.Fortwoweeks,shecriedandbeggedhermothertotakeherbacktoClearwater.Unfortunately,anotherblowhitKatrina.Shefellonthehardwoodfloorathomeandbrokeherotherleg.Katrinawasinconstantlegnervepain.Afterathoroughexamination,thedoctorexplainedbadnewsthatshewouldneedanothersurgeryonherleg.Yearsofalivinghellcamebacktoher.Shestartedfearingsurgeryagainandrefusedtotakeany.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Katrina'smomdecidedtotakeherbacktoClearwater.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________FinallycamethedaywhenKatrinawasinthehospitalagain.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________熱考話題二友情篇友情類話題的讀后續(xù)寫是熱考話題之一，是最貼近學(xué)生們生活的主題。因?yàn)槭煜?，所以考生，在寫作中能夠展開合理預(yù)測(cè)，進(jìn)行有效表達(dá)。第一步：出現(xiàn)危機(jī)或困難(故事沖突)＋憤怒，難過等情緒第二步：友情彌補(bǔ)(解釋、認(rèn)錯(cuò)、彌補(bǔ))＋開心/如釋重負(fù)第三步：友情升華(懂得珍惜)Ⅰ.主題場(chǎng)景詞匯impressionn.印象conflictn.沖突partnern.搭檔，合作者understandingn.諒解；理解campusn.校園；校區(qū)patiencen.容忍；耐心well-roundedadj.全面發(fā)展的curiousadj.好奇的；求知欲強(qiáng)的anxiousadj.焦慮不安的challengingadj.有挑戰(zhàn)性的confidentadj.自信的outstandingadj.杰出的forgivevt.(forgave,forgiven)原諒，寬恕easy-goingadj.隨和的gentleadj.溫和的modestadj.謙虛的promotevt.促進(jìn)；提升organisevt.組織，籌備；安排；組建acquirevt.獲得，得到debatevt.辯論praisevt.贊揚(yáng)approachvt.&n．接近；方法；途徑motivatevt.激發(fā)，激勵(lì)concentratevt.集中(注意力)；聚精會(huì)神trustv.相信；信任Ⅱ.主題場(chǎng)景語(yǔ)塊1.treat...as...把……視作……2．makethebestof充分利用3．pairwith...和……搭配成組4．makefriendswithsb.和某人交朋友5．beloyalto...對(duì)……忠誠(chéng)6.help(sb.)out幫助(某人)擺脫困境7．sharefeelingsandideaswith...與……分享感受和想法8．teamupwith...與……合作9．goinfor參加10．putoneselfinother'splace換位思考Ⅲ.基于主題場(chǎng)景的續(xù)寫困境、誤會(huì)或矛盾心理和彌補(bǔ)辦法1．IcouldonlyapologizeformyignoringhimandhopethatIcouldmakeitupbyhelpinghimwithhisstudies.我只能為我無視他而道歉，并希望我能通過幫助他學(xué)習(xí)來彌補(bǔ)。2．Iwasstandingrightnexttoher,butshejustignoredme.我就站在她身邊，可是她不理睬我。3．Seeinghimlyinghelplesslyinbed,Ifeltasenseofsympathyandmercywellingupinmyheart.我看著他無助地躺在床上，我感到既同情又憐憫。4．SuddenlyMarycameup,castingmeanangryanddisappointedlook.突然瑪麗走近，向我投來憤怒而失望的目光。友誼帶來的改變1．ShefeltlonelyandhopelessuntilIapproachedherwarmly.Fromthenonwetwooftenlearnedtogetherandsharedhappinessandsorrow.在我熱情地接近她之前，她感到孤獨(dú)和絕望。從此我們兩個(gè)經(jīng)常一起學(xué)習(xí)，分享快樂和悲傷。2．Itwashercompanyandencouragementthatnotonlymademehappy,butalsoboostedmyconfidence.正是她的陪伴和鼓勵(lì)不僅讓我開心還增強(qiáng)了我的自信。續(xù)寫主旨升華1．Inoddedfirmly,knowingkindnessandfriendshipbloominbothofourhearts.我堅(jiān)定地點(diǎn)了點(diǎn)頭，知道善良和友誼之花在我們的心中盛開。2．Ifyoutakeyourfriendsforgranted,youmaynothavefriendsforverylong.如果你把朋友視為理所當(dāng)然，那你也許不會(huì)有長(zhǎng)久的友情。3．Nowthatweallliveunderoneroof,weshouldlearnhowtogetalongwellwitheachother.既然我們住在同一屋檐下，我們應(yīng)該學(xué)會(huì)如何彼此友好相處。4．Insteadofblamingeachother,weshouldcommunicatemoreandputourselvesinothers'shoes,whichcanhelpushaveabetterunderstandingofothers.不要彼此責(zé)備，我們應(yīng)該多交流，從對(duì)方角度考慮，這將有助于我們更好地理解他人。●這樣自主練評(píng)●閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。[2023·武漢市高中畢業(yè)生二月調(diào)研]Amandalivedinabigmoderncity.Duetothehigh-speeddevelopmentofeconomy,familiesfromdifferentbackgroundscameheretofindabetterlife.Amanda'sclassmateandfriend,Rama,wasfromoneofthosefamilies.Onedayafterschool,AmandaandRamawerechattingandRamamentionedhowmuchshemissedherfriendsandhometown.“Itishardtoleave，”Ramasighed,“butmyfamilyneededtobesomewherethatiseasiertomakealiving.HoldingRama'shands,AmandaencouragedhertosharemoreandsheknewRamalovedtosinganddancewithherfriendsbackinherhometown.AfterlearningaboutRama'sstory,AmandastartedtonoticemorestudentslikeRamainherschool.Forthefirsttimesherealizedthatthosestudentslookedsadintheireyes.Sometimesbecauseoftheirdifferentaccents,theycouldn'tcommunicatewellwithothers,whichmadethemalwayssitorstandsilentlyatthebackoftheclassroom.“Theyarehavingahardtime,weshouldshowthemkindnessandlove！”shetoldhermotheroneday.Amandaaskedhermotherwhatshecoulddotohelpmakethemfeelwelcome.Amanda'smothersuggested,“Whataboutusingart?Maybeitwillbeeasiertocommunicatethroughart.”Amandathoughtforawhileandnodded.LikeherfriendRama,Amandalovedallformsofart,likepainting,singing,dancing,andperforming,throughwhichshecouldtelldifferentstoriesaboutherfamily,andherlife.Thenextday,AmandawenttotheActivityCenterinherschoolandproposedherplanofanartshow.Theofficerthoughtitagreatidea.Inspiredandexcited,Amandasetaboutherplanwithseveralfriends.AttheActivityCentertheyfilledaroomwithpaper,paintandpencils.Theyevenmadeasmallstage!Everythingready,theyinvitedallthenewstudentsinherschoolandAmandaencouragedthemtosharesomethingspecialabouttheirhometowninanyartform.ToAmanda'ssurprise,nooneresponded.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Amazingly,Ramasteppedforwardtobreaktheice.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Everythingseemedtochangeafterthatartshow.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________熱考話題三助人篇助人為樂是一種樸實(shí)的中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)美德，也是讀后續(xù)寫的熱考話題之一，2020年新高考Ⅰ卷主題為賣爆米花幫助窮人的故事，傳遞了人間溫情。每個(gè)人都有遇到困難的時(shí)候，最需要的是別人給予的幫助。如果人人都獻(xiàn)出一點(diǎn)愛，將不再會(huì)看到別人得不到幫助時(shí)焦急的臉龐，我也會(huì)在別人困難時(shí)伸出援助之手。第一步：困難描寫(消極情緒＋困難處境)第二步：呈現(xiàn)助人過程(想到辦法＋動(dòng)作鏈)第三步：皆大歡喜結(jié)局(感激＋感動(dòng)＋升華)Ⅰ.主題場(chǎng)景詞匯Ⅱ.主題場(chǎng)景語(yǔ)塊Ⅲ.基于主題場(chǎng)景的續(xù)寫幫助描寫1．ItearfullysharedwhatIhadseenwiththemandaskedthemtodosomethingtogivethemahelpinghand．我含淚把我所看到的告訴了他們，并請(qǐng)求他們做一些事情來幫助他們。2．Mymindwasracing,tryingtothinkofasolutiontoassisther.我的大腦急速運(yùn)轉(zhuǎn)，試圖想出一個(gè)解決辦法幫助她。3．AsIsaidgood-byetohim,Ireachedintomypocketandofferedhima$20billforhishelp.當(dāng)我說道別時(shí)，我把手伸進(jìn)口袋，遞給他一張20美元的鈔票感謝他的幫助。感激和感動(dòng)描寫4．Inaflash,withtearswellingupinmyeyes,Iwastouchedbeyondwords.剎那間，我淚流滿面，感動(dòng)得說不出話來。5．Surprisedandmoved,shebowedlowtousandmurmured“Thankyou！”weepingtearsofgratitude.她又驚喜又感動(dòng)，向我們深深鞠躬低聲道謝，流下了感激的淚水。續(xù)寫主旨升華1．Sometimes,asmallactofkindnesscanbepowerfulenoughtomakeahugedifference．有時(shí)小小的善行會(huì)有很大影響。2．Justasthesayinggoes,“Rosesgiven,fragranceinhand.”正如諺語(yǔ)所說，“贈(zèng)人玫瑰，手有余香”。3．Asamatteroffact,asmallgestureofcarewillpossiblymeltpeople'sloneliness．事實(shí)上一個(gè)表達(dá)關(guān)愛的小舉動(dòng)也會(huì)融化人們內(nèi)心的孤單。4．Thiskindacthasalastinginfluenceonme.Ialwaysgiveothersahelpinghandifpossible.這種善意的行為對(duì)我產(chǎn)生了持久的影響。我總是盡可能地幫助別人。●這樣自主練評(píng)●閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。[2023·河北省部分高中聯(lián)考]AsanundergraduateinauniversityinPhiladelphia,Pennsylvania,CatherinehadvolunteeredattheHopeRescueMissioninherhometownwithhermotherwhoservedastheshelter'sdevelopmentdirector.Afterworkingwiththehomelessandreceivingcardsfromhermominthemail,Catherinedecidedtobeginherproject.“You'veGotMail”.Shehadahugeheartforthoseinneed.Forthepeoplethatshewashelping,shesawthehomelessnessfirsthandanditwasabattle.Shethoughtnoonewantedtochoosetobehomeless,andshealwaysdonatedthebasicneeds，includingthetoiletries,theshampoosandtoothbrushes.Inhermind,individualsfacinghomelessnesscertainlysufferedphysically,butformany,theemotionalsufferingwasevenmorepainful.Feelingaloneandhopelesscutdeeperthanfeelinghungryandcold.Therefore,shehelditthat,akindgesture,suchasherprojectaboutencouragementcards,couldbethatlightinsomeone'sdaytokeepthemstrivingandhopingforabettertomorrow.Oneday,shesharedherideawithhermother,“Iwasthinkingofaboxfilledwithholidaycards.Iwanttodosomethingtomakethehomelesswithemptyheartssmile,lettingthemknowmanypeoplestillcareaboutthem.”Hermother,smiledandsaid,“Justdoitandspreadyourlove！”ThenCatherinelaunchedaholidaycarddriveforthehomelessafterbeinginspiredbyvolunteeringattheshelter.Shecollected2，000cards,surpassingheroriginalgoalof500injustafewweeks.Catherine'scompassionforothersdidn'tstopatjustfeelingsympathyforthemintheirhardships.Shealsofollowedhermother'sadvicetolookforwaystohelpthembeatthosehardshipsthroughherkindness.SoCatherineaskedheronlinefriendsforholiday-themedcards,andsoon,herinboxwasfloodedwithpeopleofferingtohelp.Amazingly,thepeoplesheknew,thepeopleshehadn'tspokentosinceprimaryschool,andthepeopleshehadneverspokentobefore,sentthecardstoher.Thensheaskedforcardsfromanyone.Shewasnotturningdownany.Shethoughtitwasreallygreattoacceptthem.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Inhonorofthe“You'veGotMail”initiative,Catherineandhermotherhostedacardmakingparty.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Catherinehopedherprojectwouldremindotherstomakeadifferenceinsomeone'slife.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________熱考話題四趣事篇生活趣事類話題的讀后續(xù)寫是熱考話題之一，2021年浙江1月卷敘述萬(wàn)圣節(jié)南瓜卡頭的趣事，2017年浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫敘述和健忘可愛的媽媽去旅行過程中發(fā)生的趣事。第一步：矛盾塑造(尷尬＋緊張)第二步：進(jìn)退兩難的困境和糾結(jié)情緒第三步：快樂結(jié)局塑造(感激＋開心＋升華)Ⅰ.主題場(chǎng)景詞匯guiltn.犯罪；罪行rown.一列；一排sweatn.汗水painn.痛苦aspectn.方面；方向enthusiasmn.熱情qualificationn.資格acceptableadj.可接受的；受歡迎的noticeableadj.顯著的；值得注意的beneficialadj.有益的achingadj.疼痛的confusedadj.迷惑不解的energeticadj.精力充沛的shockingadj.令人震驚的assessv.評(píng)定entertainingadj.有趣的；娛樂的takev.拿，取earnv.賺，掙allocatev.分配；撥出；指定overcomev.克服expressv.表達(dá)Ⅱ.主題場(chǎng)景語(yǔ)塊doagoodd