重慶縉云教育聯(lián)盟高考第一次診斷性檢測(cè)英語讀后續(xù)寫Thelittleboy講義

讀后續(xù)寫原題目：閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的短文。ALittleBoyAlittleboysellingmagazinesforschoolwalkeduptoahousethatpeoplerarelyvisited.Thehousewasveryoldandshabbyandtheownerhardlyevercameout.Whenhedideout,hewouldnotsayhellotohisneighborsorpassersbybutsimplyjustglaredatthem.Theboyknockedonthedoorandwaited,sweatingfromfearoftheoldman.Theboy’sparentstoldhimtostayawayfromthehouse,andalotofotherneighborhoodchildrenweretoldthesamethingfromtheirparents.Duskfoundtheboylingeringonandhesitatingwhattodo.Ashewasreadytowalkaway,thedoorslowlyopened.“Whatdoyouwant?”theoldmansaidimpatiently.Thelittleboywasveryafraidbuthehadaquota(定額)tomeetforschoolwithsellingthemagazines.Sohegotupthecourageandsaid,“Uh,Sir,Iamsellingthesemagazinesand,uh,Iwaswonderingifyouwouldliketobuyonefromme.”Theoldmanjuststaredattheboywithoutaword.Theboycouldseeinsidetheoldman’shouseandsawthathehaddogfigurines(小雕像)onthefireplacemantle.“Doyoucollectdogs?”Thelittleboyasked.“Yes,Ihavemanycollectionsinmyhouse.TheyaremyfamilyhereandtheyareallIhave.”Theboythenfeltsorryfortheman,asitseemedthathewasaverylonelysoul.“Well,Idohaveamagazinehereforcollectors.Itisperfectforyou.Ialsohaveoneaboutdogssinceyoulikedogssomuch.”Theoldmanwasreadytoclosethedoorontheboyandsaid,“No,boy.Idon’tneedanymagazinesofanykind,nowgoodbye.”Thelittleboywassadthathewasnotgoingtomakehisquotawiththesale.Hewasalsosadfortheoldmanbeingsoaloneinthehousethatheowned.Theboywenthomeandthenhadanidea.Hehadalittledogfigurinethathegotsomeyearsagofromanaunt.Thefigurinedidnotmeannearlyasmuchtohimsincehehadareallivedogandalargefamily.注意:1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Thelittleboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman’shouse.__________________________________________________________________Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.__________________________________________________________________文本分析：故事大意——獨(dú)居老人脫離社會(huì)，孤寂地生活著，不與人交往，孩子們都怕他。賣雜志的小男孩敲響了老人的房門。勤工儉學(xué)的小男孩為了完成銷售指標(biāo)，在耐心等到老人開門以后，鼓起勇氣，向令人生畏的老人安利他的雜志。最后卻被老人拒之門外。小男孩很沮喪，同時(shí)他又對(duì)獨(dú)居老人充滿同情?；氐郊抑?，他想起在老人門口看見屋內(nèi)壁爐臺(tái)上擺放著很多小狗雕像。老人一定非常喜歡狗，把它們當(dāng)成了自己的陪伴。他想到了一個(gè)主意。幾年前一位阿姨送了他一座小狗雕像。續(xù)寫情節(jié)發(fā)展：續(xù)寫第一段提示語設(shè)得非常好：Thelittleboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman'shouse.小男孩二次來到老人門口。出題老師去掉了原文中的withthefigurine(帶著小狗雕像)，旨在考查學(xué)生的思維品質(zhì)。亮點(diǎn)！小男孩要把小狗雕像作為禮物送給老人。敲門之前的緊張心理，老人看見小狗雕像的反應(yīng)，獲贈(zèng)禮物之后的感動(dòng)，這些都是必要的細(xì)節(jié)描寫。續(xù)寫第二段開頭提示語是Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.這是主題句，重點(diǎn)寫老人的變化。要求學(xué)生能夠具有一雙善于發(fā)現(xiàn)的眼睛，能夠結(jié)合所給材料的前兩段，通過對(duì)比，展示老人的變化，同時(shí)結(jié)尾要點(diǎn)出老人變化的原因。學(xué)生的問題：老人有沒有買小男孩的雜志？在寫作實(shí)踐中，發(fā)現(xiàn)不止一個(gè)學(xué)生，就像上面這位原創(chuàng)老師所給的范文一樣，試圖把這個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)交代清楚。其實(shí)，老人出于感動(dòng)購(gòu)買小男孩的雜志這個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)，完全可以忽略。別把小男孩對(duì)老人的同情看成是等價(jià)交換，別讓庸俗褻瀆了純潔美麗的童真。故事的主題小男孩善良的小舉動(dòng)（送給老人小狗雕像），改變了獨(dú)居老人的生活。這是老人發(fā)生改變的根本原因。獨(dú)居老人先和小男孩成為朋友，而后又受到其他孩子的喜歡?！臼纠縏helittleboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman’shouse.Thedogfigurinewitnessedthelittleboy’sendingupopeningthedooroncemore.Uponseeingtheboyforasecondtime,theoldmancouldn’tbringhisangerundercontrolanylonger.“Haven’tItoldyouIneednomagazinesatall?”hesnappedattheboy.“Yes,Sir.”saidthelittleboywithanuneasyexpressiononhisface.“ButIthinkyouwilllikethedogfigurine.”Thenhehandedittotheoldman.Takingthefigurinefromtheboy’shands,thelonelysoulwassoastonishedthatwordsfailedtoconveyhisemotions,tearswellingupinhiseyes.“Thankyousomuch!”hesaidtotheboytenderly.Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.Theneighborhoodalwaysfoundtheoldmanhangingoutandsmilingateveryone.Heshowedhispreciouscollectionstochildrenwhowerenowverywillingtoplaywithhim.Heusedtocollectfigurinesinmemoryofareallivedogwhichhadkepthimpanyforalongtimebeforeitdied.Butnow,hewasn’tdrownedinthesorrowsandlonelinessanymore.Hehadrealizedthetruespiritoflife.下水文：Theboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman’shouse.Thethoughtofbeingturnedawaylasttimesethislegstrembling.Hetookadeepbreathandfinallyfoundthenervetoknockonthedoor.Thistimetheoldmandidnotkeephimwaiting.Atthesightofthefigurineintheboy’shand,hisfacelitupandwhenhewashandedthegift,hewassimplystunned.Noonehadevergivenhimsuchagiftandshownhimsomuchkindness.Hehuggedthelittleboytightly,tearswellingupinhiseyes.Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.Hestartedingoutofthehouseandacknowledgingpeoplewithabigsmileorawaveofhishand.Hemadefriendswiththelittleboy,whoevenbroughthisdogtoseehimweekly.Graduallytheoldman