新高考英語(yǔ)概要寫(xiě)作示例與寫(xiě)作訓(xùn)練 (七)

概要寫(xiě)作示例與寫(xiě)作訓(xùn)練7

【寫(xiě)作示例】

【原文呈現(xiàn)】

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。

Deardaughter,

AswedroveofffromColumbia,Iwantedtowritealettertoyoutotellyouallthatisonmy

mind.

Youhavebeenanexcellenteldersister.Eventhoughyoutwohadyourshareoffights,the

lastfewyearsyouhavebecomebestfriends.Yoursisterlovesyousomuch,andshelovestomake

youlaugh.Shelooksuptoyou,andseesyouasherrolemodel.

Collegewillbethemostimportantyearsinyourlife.Itisincollegethatyouwilltruly

discoverwhatlearningisabout.Iencourageyoutobeinquisitive,butIalsowanttotellyou:

“Educationiswhatyouhaveleftafterallthatistaughtisforgotten.'*WhatImeanbythatisthe

abilitytoanalyzeanewproblem.Thatisreallywhatlearningincollegeisabout-thiswillbethe

periodwhereyougofromteacher-taughttomaster-inspired,afterwhichyoumustbecome

self-learner.Sodotakeeachsubjectseriously,andevenifwhatyoulearnisn'tcriticalforyourlife,

theskillsoflearningwillbesomethingyoucherishforever.

Doyourbestinclasses,butdon'tletpressuregettoyou.YourmotherandIhaveno

expectationsforyourgrades.Ifyougraduateandlearnsomethinginyourfouryears,wewould

feelhappy.YourColumbiadegreewilltakeyoufar,evenifyoudon'tgraduatewithhonors.So

pleasedon'tgiveyourselfpressure.Duringyourlastfewmonthsinhighschool,youwereso

happybecausetherewaslittlepressureandcollegeapplicationsarefinished.Butinthepastfew

weeks,wesawyouarebeginningtowony(didyouknowyoubiteyournailswhenyouare

nervous?).Pleasedon*tbeworried.Theonlymetricyoushoulduseisthatyoutried.Gradesare

justsillylettersthatgivethevainpeoplesomethingtobrag,andthelazypeoplesomethingtofear.

Youaretoogoodtobeeither.

Love,

Dad(&Mom)

【思維路徑】

［核心內(nèi)容］

本文是李開(kāi)復(fù)寫(xiě)給即將上大學(xué)的女兒的信中的節(jié)選部分，全文共分四段。第一段主要講

寫(xiě)信的背景和目的。第二段描寫(xiě)了她是個(gè)很好的姐姐及她與妹妹的關(guān)系。第三段是李開(kāi)復(fù)給

女兒關(guān)于大學(xué)的第一條建議，即他認(rèn)為大學(xué)學(xué)習(xí)的真正意義是從被動(dòng)學(xué)習(xí)轉(zhuǎn)向自主學(xué)習(xí)的階

段，會(huì)使個(gè)人轉(zhuǎn)變成一個(gè)很好的自學(xué)者。第四段是他給女兒的第二條建議，他以女兒兩個(gè)不

同階段的表現(xiàn)來(lái)建議女兒不要給自己太大的壓力，不用太在意成績(jī)，而是應(yīng)該側(cè)重與個(gè)人的

努力程度。

［寫(xiě)作思路I

(1)理清文章脈絡(luò)、概括段落大意。理清文章脈絡(luò)、概括段落大意是寫(xiě)摘要的基礎(chǔ)，同

學(xué)們可以通過(guò)找主題句、分析段落的邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)梳理文章的脈絡(luò)，概括大意。該文第一段內(nèi)

容簡(jiǎn)單，主要介紹了地點(diǎn)及寫(xiě)信原因，因此沒(méi)有明顯的主題句；第二段是介紹人物關(guān)系，主

題句為第一句話(huà)，"Youhavebeenanexcellenteldersister”。第三段的第一句話(huà)強(qiáng)調(diào)了大學(xué)的

重要性，但是主題句需要自己稍微總結(jié)一下，應(yīng)為whatlearningincollegeisaboutistheability

loanalyzeanewproblem,第四段的主題句則比較明顯，為該段第一句話(huà)，"Doyourbestin

classes,butdon'tletpressuregettoyou.”

(2)確定表達(dá)要點(diǎn)、靈活準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)。因本文是一封信，所以要把本文的題材類(lèi)型首先表

達(dá)出來(lái)。其次，每段的段落大意都是我們要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)，這可以確保不漏點(diǎn)。在確定表達(dá)要

點(diǎn)后要思考如何準(zhǔn)確靈活表達(dá)，這是難點(diǎn)。因?yàn)樵u(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)要求完全使用自己的語(yǔ)言。靈活表

達(dá)的重要技巧是對(duì)原來(lái)的語(yǔ)言進(jìn)行同義替換(paraphrase),同時(shí)要對(duì)相關(guān)內(nèi)容進(jìn)行整合。第一

第二段內(nèi)容不多，可適當(dāng)表達(dá)出要點(diǎn)即可。本文重點(diǎn)在于第三第四段。每段都可歸納一個(gè)要

點(diǎn)。第三段要點(diǎn)為強(qiáng)調(diào)大學(xué)學(xué)習(xí)的主動(dòng)性，要側(cè)重能力的培養(yǎng)，故在概括的時(shí)候可用到該段

的部分關(guān)鍵字，如“ability",“self-learner",“skillsoflearning”。第四段要點(diǎn)為不要給自己太大壓

力，要輕松的學(xué)習(xí)，不要太在乎成績(jī)。同樣也利用巧妙使用關(guān)鍵字的方法來(lái)進(jìn)行概括。句子

不能與原文一樣，但是我們可以用含有關(guān)鍵字的其他句子來(lái)表達(dá)。而這段的關(guān)鍵字則

為"pressure","try","happy”等。

［參考范文1

Thisisaletterafatherwrotetothedaughterwhowillentercollegesoon（要點(diǎn)1）,Intheletter,

fatherpraiseddaughterasanexcellentsister（要點(diǎn)2）.Besides,heemphasizedtheimportanceof

collegeandencouragethedaughtertocultivatetheabilityofself-learning（要點(diǎn)3）.What,smore,

hepersuadedthedaughternottoputtoomuchpressureonherself（要點(diǎn)4）,instead,happinessis

muchmoreimportantthanthegrade.（66words）

［范文解析1

范文中主要包含四個(gè)要點(diǎn)，分別為每個(gè)段落的要點(diǎn)。要點(diǎn)1中介紹了題材和兩位主人公。

因要點(diǎn)2與要點(diǎn)3,4關(guān)聯(lián)不大，所以把它與要點(diǎn)1用intheletter連接在一起,使文章看上去

更連貫一些。因要點(diǎn)3開(kāi)始是另外一方面的內(nèi)容，故可理解為轉(zhuǎn)向另一個(gè)話(huà)題，用besides

來(lái)進(jìn)行過(guò)渡，并且要點(diǎn)3中有兩個(gè)小點(diǎn)，這兩個(gè)小點(diǎn)就可以用and簡(jiǎn)單連接一下，清晰明了。

要點(diǎn)4與要點(diǎn)3是并列關(guān)系，故用whafsmore來(lái)承接第二條建議。范文中最后一句話(huà)也是

要點(diǎn)4的一部分，與前一句話(huà)是轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，故用instead來(lái)導(dǎo)出。綜上，范文包含了所有要

點(diǎn)，意思全面但又不累贅，措辭簡(jiǎn)單易懂，結(jié)構(gòu)上也比較清晰。

［提煉歸納］

1.語(yǔ)義轉(zhuǎn)換

語(yǔ)義轉(zhuǎn)換是新題型概要寫(xiě)作中很重要的一項(xiàng)基本技能，因?yàn)樵u(píng)價(jià)標(biāo)準(zhǔn)對(duì)“使用自己的

語(yǔ)言進(jìn)行觀點(diǎn)的獨(dú)立表達(dá)”有較高的要求。本范文中我們將“becomeaself-learner”改寫(xiě)成“the

abilityofself-learning”,意思一樣，但卻從不同角度著手，避免了重復(fù)運(yùn)用原文句子的情況。

再例如范文中第四段中心句"don'tletpressuregettoyou”,該句已完全表達(dá)了第四段的重要內(nèi)

容，如何用另外的句子表達(dá)相同的意思是此類(lèi)作文題的難點(diǎn)之一，我們可以通過(guò)改變主語(yǔ)的

方式來(lái)進(jìn)行轉(zhuǎn)換，如"persuadedthedaughternottoputtoomuchpressureonherself'?

2.巧用句型

巧用句型不僅是原有作文題型中要求的一項(xiàng)提分技能，更是新題型概要寫(xiě)作中的一項(xiàng)增

分且實(shí)用的技能。將字?jǐn)?shù)較多的原文縮寫(xiě)成60字左右的概要，一個(gè)重要的技巧就是學(xué)會(huì)運(yùn)

用各種學(xué)過(guò)的句型，尤其是從句的使用。從句能將原來(lái)的兩個(gè)句子的意思表達(dá)在一個(gè)句子內(nèi)，

意思不變但是字?jǐn)?shù)明顯減少。如范文中的第一句"Thisisaletterafatherwrotetothedaughter

whowillentercollegesoon”，該句為定語(yǔ)從句，整個(gè)句子表達(dá)了兩個(gè)意思，一為這是父親寫(xiě)

給女兒的信，二為這個(gè)女兒將要上大學(xué)了。多使用不同句型的句子不僅能減少字?jǐn)?shù)的使用，

而且能使整個(gè)文章更加精致和有內(nèi)容。

【寫(xiě)作演練】

1.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。

Whydosomepeoplelivetobeolderthanothers?Youknowthestandardexplanations:

keepingamoderatediet,engaginginregularexercise,etc.Butwhateffectdoesyourpersonality

haveonyourlongevity?Dosomekindsofpersonalitiesleadtolongerlives?Anewstudyinthe

JournaloftheAmericanGeriatricsSocietylookedatthisquestionbyexaminingthepersonality

characteristicsof246childrenofpeoplewhohadlivedtobeatleast100.

Thestudyshowsthatthoselivingthelongestaremoreoutgoing,moreactiveandless

neurotic（神經(jīng)質(zhì)的）thanotherpeople.Long-livingwomenarealsomorelikelytobesympathetic

andcooperativethanwomenwithanormallifespan.Thesefindingsareinagreementwithwhat

youwouldexpectfromtheevolutionarytheory:thosewholiketomakefriendsandhelpothers

cangatherenoughresourcestomakeitthroughtoughtimes.

Interestingly,however,othercharacteristicsthatyoumightconsideradvantageoushadno

impactonwhetherstudyparticipantswerelikelytolivelonger.Thosewhoweremore

self-disciplined,forinstance,werenomorelikelytolivetobeveryold.Also,beingopentonew

ideashadnorelationshiptolonglife,whichmightexplainallthosebad-temperedoldpeoplewho

arefixedintheirways.

Whetheryoucansuccessfullychangeyourpersonalityasanadultisthesubjectofa

longstandingpsychologicaldebate.Butthenewpapersuggeststhatifyouwantlonglife,you

shouldstrivetobeasoutgoingaspossible.

Unfortunately,anotherrecentstudyshowsthatyourmother'spersonalitymayalsohelp

determineyourlongevity.Thatstudylookedatnearly28,000Norwegianmothersandfoundthat

thosemomswhoweremoreanxious,depressedandangryweremorelikelytofeedtheirkids

unhealthydiets.Patternsofchildhoodeatingcanbehardtobreakwhenwe'readults,whichmay

meanthatkidsofdepressedmomsendupdyingyounger.

Personalityisn'tdestiny,andeveryoneknowsthatindividualscanlearntochange.Butboth

studiesshowthatlonglifeisn'tjustamatterofyourphysicalhealthbutofyourmentalhealth.

2.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。

Beingahighschoolstudentisprobablyoneofthehardestthingsintheworld.Fromthe

countlessclassestotheendlesshomework,yourschoolmayseemstressfulsomedays.So,it's

understandableifyoufeelunderpressuresometimes.

However,bymakingafewchanges,yourhighschoollifecouldbecomeeasier.First,as

starters,trytobuildabetterrelationshipwiththemostimportantpeopleinyourlife:yourparents.

“Tosucceed,teensneedlove,acceptanceandsupportfromtheirparents,“psychologistSara

VillanuevawroteonPsychologyTodaywebsite.Withthisinmind,trytoexplainyourdifficulties

toyourparents.Thatway,they511understandyoubetter.Todothis,simplytalktoyourparentsand

shareyourfeelingswiththemandtheymaybeabletohelpyou.Havingagoodrelationshipwith

yourteachersisimportanttoo.Ifyou'refindingacertainclasstoohard,talktoyourteachersand

askthemforhelp.It'steachers9jobtomakesuretheirstudentsunderstandwhattheyteach,so

they'llbemorethanhappytohelpyou.

Andthen,youalsoshouldstartbyhelpingyourselftobecomemoresuccessfulatanything

youdo.Tostartwith,setyourselfsomerealisticgoals,like'Tilimprovemymathgradebynext

semester,or"I'lljoinonemoreafter-schoolclub."Andratherthanjusttellyourselfthesegoals,

planthemoutcarefully-andsticktothem.Youcangetyourselfacalendar,andmarkeverypiece

ofschoolworkyouhaveonthere,forexample.Thatway,youcanseeexactlywhatyouneedtodo

andwhenyouneedtofinishitby.

Anotherthingtoremember,however,isthatrelaxationisjustasimportantasworkinghard.

“Itisgoodtotaketimetorelaxduringheavyperiodsofworktostayenergized（精力充沛的）and

focused,9,USstudentAnnaPohoryleswroteonuniversitywebsiteOdyssey.So,ifthingsgettoo

difficult,takingabreakmaybethebestsolutionofall.

3.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。

Eighty-fivepercentofthejobsthattoday'sstudentswilldoin2030don*texistyet,the

InstitutefortheFuturehaspredicted.Thatmightseemlikeahighnumbertoreachinonly10

years.Butthinkaboutthenon-mainstreamcareersthatdidnotexistjustahandfulofyearsago:

socialmediamanager,appdeveloperandcloudcomputingengineer,etc.Whatroleshouldcolleges

anduniversitiesplayinpreparingstudentsforaworkplacethatisconstantlychanging?

Educationalinstitutionsaretryingtoanswerthatquestion.*'Wehopetheywillnotonlybeprepared

forwhateverthejobmarketlookslikein10,20or50yearsbutbetheonesshapingit,“saidJenn

Stringer,professorattheUniversityofCalifomian,Berkeley.Herearesomeoftheapproaches

they'retaking.

Someexpertsarguethatthefour-yearlearningmodelneedstoberethoughtinabigway.

Theysayeducationcannolongerbeseenassomethingthatstopswhenapersongraduatesfrom

college.Ifstudentscouldtakeayearortwooffschool,getajob,andthenreturntoschoolafew

yearslater,theeducationsystemwouldoffertruelife-longlearningandbetteradapttochanging

technology.

Feweremployersarewillingtotrainpeopleonthejobthantheemployers50yearsago,

largelyaspartofanefforttocutcosts.Tofillthejobskillsgap,somecoursesareofferedasan

add-ontoastudent'smaindegree.Forexample,thecoursesmayincludedataanalysis,webdesign

anddigitalmarketing.Thegoalistoofferstudents,adegreeaside,someadvantageswhentheyseek

jobsorpromotionsinthefuture.

Otherinstitutionsaretryingtoimitatetheworkplacewithinthetraditionalclassroom.Several

collegeshavepartneredwithprivatecompanies,suchasthesoftwarecompanyAdobe,tointegrate

theirproductsintotheclassroom.Professorsatschoolswhopartnerwiththecompanyare

encouragedtousetheproductforassignments.Theideaisthatstudentslearnhowtocreatea

projectthatcanbeusedintherealworldandthe"softskills"suchasteamworkandcreativity.

4.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。

Culturescanbedifferentfromeachotherinmanyaspects.Peoplecaneatdifferentfoodsand

liveindifferenttypesofhouses.Peopleprobablyspeakdifferentlanguagesandhavebeliefsand

customsverydifferentfromyours.However,theycanbesimilarinwaysofconnectingwitheach

other.Wesometimescallthesemeansofcommunicationuniversallanguages.

Somelegendsholdthat（據(jù)說(shuō)）thousandsofyearsagotherewasasinglelanguagespokenby

everyone.Itisfuntothinkaboutatimewheneveryonemayhavebeenabletocommunicateinthe

samelanguagethoughhistoricalevidencedoesnotsupportthis,ofcourse.

Today,therearethousandsoflanguagesspokenaroundtheworld.Yet,therearesomemeans

ofcommunicationthatgobeyondwordsandallowpeopleofwildlydifferentbackgroundsto

communicateandshareemotionsandfeelings.Forexample,somepeoplebelievemusicisa

universallanguage.Theremaybesomescientificsupportforthisidea,too.Expertshavelearned

thatacrossculturespeoplecanrecognizethreecommonemotionsinmusic:happiness,sadness

andfear.

Anotheruniversallanguagethatyoumightnothavethoughtofismath!Ifyouthinkaboutit

now,itjustmakessense.Thevalueof“pi"isroughly3.14159nomatterwhereyouare.Similarly,

wejudgethevalueofsomethingbythesamemathematicalcalculations,nomatterwhetheryou're

countingindollars,poundsorRMB.

5.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。

Intoday'sworldwherewehavevarioustranslationappsthatallowustotalktoalmost

anyone“inhisownlanguage”,whydowestillneedtomakeanefforttolearnaforeignlanguage

ourselves?Therearepracticalreasons,ofcourse.Forexample,thosewhoarebilingual（具備雙語(yǔ)

能力的）haveabetterchanceinthejobmarket.Andsciencehasprovedthatlearningtospeak

morethanonelanguagecantrainone'sbraintobestronger.

Butthere9smoretoitthanthat.USauthorRitaMaeBrownoncewrote:"Languageisthe

roadmapofaculture."Bytakingalookatthevocabularyandidiomsofalanguagesystem,we

getaglimpse（一瞥）atwhat'sheldimportantinacertainculture.TaketheSwedishword

“l(fā)agom"forexample.Itmeans'justtherightamount”,whichdoesn'thaveamatchingword

eitherinEnglishorinChinese.From"lagom”,wecanseehowmuchtheconceptsof

"moderation（適度）"and"balance”arevaluedinSwedishculture.Bylearningaforeign

language,youalsogainabetterunderstandingofyourownculture.IrishlanguageexpertBenny

Lewisexplainedthisideainhisblogwithaninterestingmetaphor:"Tryingtounderstandyour

ownculturemerelyfromwithinitisliketryingtounderstandwhatabusislikeifyou'veonly

everriddeninsideit.Ifyouwantthebiggerpicture,youneedtogetoffthatbusandexamineit

fromtheoutside."Andbyopeningoureyestodifferentcultures,we'reabletounderstandbetter

howpeoplegrowuptobedifferentfromoneanother.Wealsolearntobemoretolerantand

respectfultothediversityoftheworld.

AsTrinityUniversityprofessorLeonardoDeValoeswroteontheschoofswebsite:

"Foreignlanguagestudyissimplypartofaverybasicliberaleducation:to'educate9istolead

out,toleadoutofnarrownessandclarkness.^^

星案與嗝

1.【參考范文】

Tworecentstudieshaveresearchedtherelationshipbetweenpersonalitycharacteristicsand

longevity.Moreoutgoing,moreactiveandlessanxiouspeopleandsympatheticandcooperative

femaleslivelonger,forthesepersonalitiesmaybringthemmoresocialresources.However,

seeminglyadvantageouspersonalitieslikeself-disciplineandopen-mindednessdonotnecessarily

leadtolongevity.Surprisingly,amother'spersonalitymayaffectherchildren'slifespan.

【解析】

本文為一篇說(shuō)明文的概要寫(xiě)作。文章講述了性格和壽命之間的關(guān)系，更外向、更活躍、

更不焦慮的人以及富有同情心和合作精神的女性壽命更長(zhǎng)，因?yàn)檫@些性格可能會(huì)給她們帶來(lái)

更多的社會(huì)資源。然而，表面上有利的性格，如自律和開(kāi)放的心態(tài)，并不一定會(huì)導(dǎo)致長(zhǎng)壽。

令人驚訝的是，母親的性格可能會(huì)影響孩子的壽命。注意詞數(shù)要求和使用自己的語(yǔ)言。

寫(xiě)之前，需要認(rèn)真仔細(xì)地讀幾遍原文材料，讓理解更深刻，抓住幾大要點(diǎn)去寫(xiě)題。本篇

概要寫(xiě)作，需從以下幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)著手；

要點(diǎn)1：該段最近有研究探討「人性格特征與壽命的關(guān)系，主題句為Anewstudyinthe

JournaloftheAmericanGeriatricsSocietylookedatthisquestionbyexaminingthepersonality

characteristicsof246childrenofpeoplewhohadlivedtobeatleast100.

要點(diǎn)2：該段主要講述更外向、更活躍、更不焦慮的人以及富有同情心和合作精神的女

性壽命更長(zhǎng)，因?yàn)檫@些性格可能會(huì)給她們帶來(lái)更多的社會(huì)資源。內(nèi)容可以從Long-living

womenarealsomorelikelytobesympatheticandcooperativethanwomenwithanormallife

span中提煉。

要點(diǎn)3：該段主要講述表面上有利的性格，如自律和開(kāi)放的心態(tài)，并不一定會(huì)導(dǎo)致長(zhǎng)壽，

內(nèi)容可以從Thosewhoweremoreself-disciplined,forinstance,werenomorelikelytolivetobe

veryold.及后面句子中提煉。

要點(diǎn)4：該段主要講述母親的性格可能會(huì)影響孩子的壽命，主題句為anotherrecentstudy

showsthatyourmother'spersonalitymayalsohelpdetermineyourlongevity.

【范文點(diǎn)評(píng)】

審題時(shí)要認(rèn)真分析每段要點(diǎn)，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)。答題時(shí)要注意準(zhǔn)確地使用了相應(yīng)的語(yǔ)法

結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯來(lái)改寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)句，并有效地使用了合適的銜接詞使上下文意思連貫，文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊

湊清晰。

2.【參考范文】

Asahighschoolstudent,youmayfeelstressedsometimes.（要點(diǎn)I）Togetridofpressure,

youcanfirstcommunicatewithyouparents,sharingfeelingswiththem.（要點(diǎn)2）Andyour

teachers'helpisalsoveryimportantespeciallywhenyouarestressedinstudy.（要點(diǎn)3）Besides,

youshouldtrytobecomeasuccessfulstudentbysettingsuitablegoalsandcarryingthemout.（要

點(diǎn)4）Atlast,trytorelaxwhennecessary.（要點(diǎn)5）（65words）

【解析】）

這是一篇概要寫(xiě)作。

寫(xiě)作步驟

1）細(xì)讀原文。首先要仔細(xì)閱讀短文，掌握文章主旨。文章主要說(shuō)明了作為一名高中生，

你有時(shí)會(huì)感到壓力。為了擺脫壓力，你可以首先與你的父母溝通，與他們分享感受。老師的

幫助也很重要，尤其是當(dāng)你在學(xué)習(xí)上有壓力的時(shí)候。此外，你應(yīng)該努力成為一個(gè)成功的學(xué)生，

設(shè)定合適的目標(biāo)，并實(shí)施他們。最后，在必要的時(shí)候盡量放松。

2）弄清結(jié)構(gòu)，歸納段意。概要寫(xiě)作是寫(xiě)全文概要，不是寫(xiě)某一部分的概要，或者就某些

問(wèn)題寫(xiě)出要點(diǎn)。因此一定要弄清文章結(jié)構(gòu)，歸納文章各段大意。

3）列出原文要點(diǎn)。分析原文的內(nèi)容和結(jié)構(gòu)，將內(nèi)容分項(xiàng)扼要表述并注意在結(jié)構(gòu)上的順序。

在此基礎(chǔ)上選出與文章主題密切相關(guān)的部分。

3.【參考范文】

Tohelpstudentsbettersuitandreshapetheever-shiftingworklandscape,collegesaretaking

variousmeasures.（要點(diǎn)1）Firstly,life-longandadaptivelearningmodelisexpectedtoreplacethe

present4-yearone.（要點(diǎn)2）Besides,additionaltrainingprogramsbeneficialtoacquiringpractical

jobskillsareprovidedforcollegestudents.（要點(diǎn)3）Moreover,somecollegescooperatewith

enterprisestomakeclassroomsmorelikeworkplacesandenhancestudents5allroundcapabilities.

（要點(diǎn)4）

【解析】

這是一篇概要寫(xiě)作。

第1步:根據(jù)文章內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。文章第一段用提問(wèn)的方式引出主題：

大學(xué)在幫助學(xué)生們適應(yīng)不斷變化的職場(chǎng)起到什么角色？所以本文的內(nèi)容概要是為了幫助學(xué)

生更好適應(yīng)職場(chǎng)，大學(xué)采取了各種各樣的措施。要點(diǎn)1要先寫(xiě)出文章目的。要點(diǎn)2第二段講

至!1第——點(diǎn)措施offerIruelife-longlearningandbelteradapttochangingtechnology.終身和適應(yīng)型

學(xué)習(xí)模式預(yù)計(jì)會(huì)替換現(xiàn)在4年教育。要點(diǎn)3在第三段somecoursesareofferedasanadd-ontoa

student'smaindegree.有益于獲得工作技能的格外的培訓(xùn)項(xiàng)目被提供給大學(xué)生。要點(diǎn)4.在最后

一段：大學(xué)和公司合作把課堂營(yíng)造成職場(chǎng)并加強(qiáng)學(xué)生全面能力。

第2步:根據(jù)寫(xiě)作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），如:beneficialto有益的；areprovidedfor被提

供Moreover[fnJI,somecollegescooperatewith合作；enhancestudents'allroundcapabilities

增強(qiáng)全面的技能.等。

第3步:根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。

第4步:連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書(shū)寫(xiě)一定要規(guī)范清晰，

保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

【范文點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本文內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。作者在范文中使用了較多高級(jí)表達(dá)方式,

如Tohelpstudentsbettersuitandreshapetheever-shiftingworklandscape,和Moreover,some

collegescooperatewithenterprisestomakeclassroomsmorelikeworkplacesandenhance

students'allroundcapabilities.中都出現(xiàn)非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的運(yùn)用，全文中沒(méi)有中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)的句式，顯

示了很高的駕馭英語(yǔ)的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色

添彩。

4.【參考范文1]

Althoughthereexistsomedifferencesinpeople'sdiets,housing,languages,beliefsand

customsglobally,peoplecanstillcommunicatewitheachotherinuniversallanguages.（要點(diǎn)1）

It'seveninterestingtothinkthatpeopleusedtospeakthesamelanguageintheancientworld.（要

點(diǎn)2）Musicisbelievedtobeauniversallanguagethatcanmakepeoplesharecommon

emotions.（要點(diǎn)3）Thesameisalsotrueformath,becausethevalueofsomethingremains

unchanged（fixed）whereveryouareandwhicheverwayyouarecalculating.（要點(diǎn)4）

【參考范文2】

Thoughculturesmaybedifferentindiets,housing,languagesandbeliefs,peoplecan

communicatewitheachotherthroughuniversallanguages.（要點(diǎn)1）Itissaidthatpeopleusedto

speakonlyonelanguagebuttherearenoconvincingfactsofit.（要點(diǎn)2）However,musicis

consideredauniversal