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2011遼寧？4/33Topic:HowtoLengthenYourComposition

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Whenitcomestotheissueof…,themajorityofpeopleseemtogetaccustomedtotheideathat…However,attitudestowards…varyfrompersontoperson.somepeoplefirmlybelievethat…,therearesomefactorscontributingtothisattitudeasfollows,inthefirstplace,…inthesecondplace,...Ontopofthat,…Asamatteroffact,itisnotoftenthecase.Othershaveapreferenceof…,thereareseveralremarkablereasons.Foronething…,foranother…Onmypart,...1.利用模板6/33方法——添加與所給信息相關(guān)前因后果及條件，目標(biāo)等內(nèi)容例一：這么更方便照料父母。拓展：因為父母越來越年邁。

原因

astheyaregettingolderandolder.

例二：因廣告過多，影片放映晚點。拓展：這造成觀眾不耐煩甚至惱火。后果

whichmadeaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.makingaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.ItwillbemuchmoreconvenienttolookafteryourparentsThereweretoomanyadvertisementsthattheydelayedthetimeofshowingthefilm,2、附加成份作解釋說明7/333.加諺語(Proverb)鍛煉對學(xué)生有好處Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise..Asthesayinggoes,“AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.”Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise.怎么添加諺語？方法——添加與所給信息相關(guān)前因后果及條件，目標(biāo)等內(nèi)容8/33慣用諺語(Proverb)Striketheironwhileitishot.

趁熱打鐵。Thinktwicebeforeyoudo.

三思而后行。Practicemakesperfect.

熟能生巧。Abirdinthehandisworththantwointhebush.

一鳥在手勝過雙鳥在林。DoastheRomansdo.

入鄉(xiāng)隨俗。

Doitnow.

機(jī)不可失，時不再來。Failureisthemotherofsuccess.

失敗是成功之母。Itisnousecryingoverspiltmilk.

覆水難收。Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.一天一個蘋果，醫(yī)生遠(yuǎn)離我。AllroadsleadtoRome.條條大路通羅馬。9/33青少年應(yīng)盡我們所能保護(hù)環(huán)境拯救地球Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.4.舉例說明Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,refusetousesingle-useproducts,plantmoretreesandsavewaterandenergy.10/33珍惜每一滴水Asmiddleschoolstudents,wealsohaveaparttoplay.Doremember:wearenotsavingwater,wearesavingourownlife.Witheveryonedoinghisbit,wecanmakeadifference.5.結(jié)尾提出倡議或號召11/33“短話長說”方法：1.利用模板

2.附加成份作解釋說明

3.加諺語4.舉例說明

5.結(jié)尾提出倡議或號召12/33寫作任務(wù):青少年肥胖13/33寫作任務(wù)

現(xiàn)在，青少年肥胖越來越嚴(yán)重，很讓父母擔(dān)心。請你依據(jù)以下提醒寫一篇文章參考詞匯：肥胖：obesity垃圾食品：junkfood要求：1.字?jǐn)?shù)150左右2.對全部關(guān)鍵點要適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。3.開頭已給出，不計入總數(shù)Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.___________________________

原因缺乏運(yùn)動飲食結(jié)構(gòu)不合理提議多參加體育鍛煉多吃健康食品，遠(yuǎn)離垃圾食品…14/33怎么寫15/33審題人稱時態(tài)體裁關(guān)鍵點寫作過程確定內(nèi)容寫什么怎么寫怎樣更加好怎樣連接通讀全文、檢驗、成文16/33審題體裁:記敘文普通現(xiàn)在時第三人稱原因2.飲食結(jié)構(gòu)不合理1.多參加體育鍛煉缺乏運(yùn)動提議2.多吃健康食品，遠(yuǎn)離垃圾食品3….時態(tài):人稱:關(guān)鍵點:17/33BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andbecausestudentshavesomuchhomeworktodo,theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.原因1.缺乏運(yùn)動

BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomework,getlessexercisetheyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.原因?18/33Manykidshaveanunbalanceddiet.Becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.原因2.飲食結(jié)構(gòu)不合理

Haveanunbalanceddiet原因?舉例?Manykidshaveanunbalanceddiet.19/33Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.提議1.多參加體育鍛煉

domoreexerciseteensshoulddomoreexercise.目標(biāo)？20/33Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruitsandvegetables,andlessfastfoodandjunkfood.

提議2.多吃健康食品，遠(yuǎn)離垃圾食品Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruitsandvegetables,andlessfastfoodandjunkfood.諺語？21/33提議3.制訂合理計劃，時間表makeapropertimescheduleLastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedule目標(biāo)？Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalanceourexerciseandstudies.22/33合成文章

Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.Whyareteensgettingfatterandfatter?Inmyopinion,therearetworemarkablereasonsforthisproblem.Firstly,becauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomeworktodo.Theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.Secondly,becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.

Foranother,Ontheotherhand,arousedForonething,Ontheonehand,23/33Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruits,vegetables,lessfastfoodandjunkfood.Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalancetheirexerciseandstudies.24/3325/3326/33Payattentiontoyourhandwriting!Cleanandclear!!27/33書面表示各檔次給分范圍和要求第五檔（21-25分）完全完成了試題要求任務(wù)。準(zhǔn)確、清楚地表示了短文內(nèi)容，關(guān)鍵點無遺漏應(yīng)用了較多語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯有少許錯誤，但為盡可能使用較復(fù)雜表示方式所致；具備較強(qiáng)語言應(yīng)用能力有效地使用了語句間連接成份，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊完全到達(dá)了預(yù)期寫作目標(biāo)。第四檔（16-20分）完成了試題要求任務(wù)。比較準(zhǔn)確、清楚地表示了短文內(nèi)容應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)要求語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯應(yīng)用基本準(zhǔn)確，少許錯誤主要是因為嘗試較復(fù)雜語言結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯所致應(yīng)用簡單語句間連接成份，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊到達(dá)了預(yù)期寫作目標(biāo)。28/33

Recentlythephenomenonofteenobesltyhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.Today,weconcludethereasonsofyoungers’obesltyandgivethemsomeadvisetowhohasthisproblem.ThefirstreasonIthinkisthatalargenumberofyoungerslackofsporting.Becauseofitistiredthatchildrenfinishthesports.Thentheyeatthreetimesaday,besides.EatingmorewhentheyfeelhungerThisproblemmustbesolved.First,theyshouldjointheactivatesoften.Therefore,whichcankeeptheirweigthblanence.Eatmuchhealthyfood,andleavefromthjunkfood.Ifchildrencandothesetwothings.Ithinkchildrenwillchangemorehealth.Inaword,ifchildrenwanttochangemorehealth,childrenmustlovethemselves.Nowcomeon!AnarticlefromastudentobesityToday,I’dliketoexplainthereasonsofyoungster’sobesityandgivesomeadvicetothosewhohavethisproblemThereasonwhytheyouthhasbecomefatterandfatteristhatalargenumberofthemlacksports,whichstudentsarealwaystiredof.Besides,theyofteneattoomuchwhentheyfeelhungryeveryday.Theproblemmustbesolved.First,theyshouldoftenjoininavarietyofactivities,whichcankeeptheirweightbalanced.Furthermore,eatmuchhealthyfoodandkeepawayfromthejunkfood.Onlywhentheyoungstersdothesethingscantheygethealthier.Inaword,ifchildrenwouldl