2023屆浙江省首考讀后續(xù)寫：蜂鳥報(bào)恩課件

—浙江英語(yǔ)高考

蜂鳥報(bào)恩ContinuationWriting

Iwasinvitedtoa

cookout(=barbecuen.野外燒烤宴會(huì))

onanoldfriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghouse(牛奶房)whichhadapparently(顯然)notbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperately(絕望地)tryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarely(幾乎不)abletomoveherwings.She

ceased(停止)

herstruggletheinstant(一...就...)

Ipickedherup. Withthebirdinmycuppedhand(窩起的/杯狀的手),Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffed(塞)

apieceof

cloth(布)

into

theholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurely(安全地)

behindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthe

sticky(黏的)

spider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still(但是),she

madenoattemptto(沒(méi)嘗試做...)

fly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootiredortoothirsty.

AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.

Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight(在視野之外).

Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting(離開(kāi)),myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,then

letout(發(fā)出)asqueakingcall(吱吱聲)andwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①嘗試畫出前文情節(jié)中“我”的路線圖在農(nóng)場(chǎng)外下車，經(jīng)過(guò)黑莓小徑，途徑農(nóng)場(chǎng)中的牛奶房，在農(nóng)場(chǎng)里cookout。②總結(jié)一下原文中出現(xiàn)的描寫蜂鳥的表達(dá)Shewascoveredinspider-webs.Hovering（懸停）,sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.③第二段“我”即將從哪離開(kāi)？2種可能，牛奶房或農(nóng)場(chǎng)。如果是牛奶房，那么第一段的時(shí)間就只是我停車到到達(dá)牛奶房；如果是農(nóng)場(chǎng)，那么第一段還要寫我后面去農(nóng)場(chǎng)干什么。建議是農(nóng)場(chǎng)，因?yàn)檫@樣情節(jié)會(huì)多一些。④第二段峰鳥出現(xiàn)怎樣才能意料之外，合理之中？借朋友之口說(shuō)蜂鳥這段時(shí)間一直在農(nóng)場(chǎng)附近盤旋，似乎渴望見(jiàn)到作者，只有這樣它第二段出現(xiàn)才不突兀。Iparkedoutsidethefarm.WhoWhereWhenWhat

I,hummingbird,myfriendbeforeandduringthecookoutamilkinghousewithbrokenwindow,myfriend’sfarm讀懂主要故事情節(jié)

確定故事走向

Isavedatrappedbirdinamilkinghouse.AsIwasdeparting,shecametomeasifsayinggoodbye.讀透人物性格

細(xì)化故事情節(jié)Para1:Isavedatrappedbird.kindPara2:Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.consideratecarefulPara6:Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedmetofixthewindow.kindhearted/warmhearted讀透人物性格

細(xì)化故事情節(jié)Para6:Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.cleverPara6:AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedtomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.grateful讀準(zhǔn)語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)

豐富故事表達(dá)1.thehummingbird--shepersonification2.“thebird,thistinycreature,ahummingbird”3.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention.無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)4.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)cupped杯型的，凹形的repetition

usedifferentnamestoavoidShewasbarelyabletomoveherwings.Shesat

lookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Hovering,sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Sheflewquicklyoutofsight.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Languagefeature:simplebutdescriptive.在這普天同慶的大日子里我有萬(wàn)千祝福而無(wú)從說(shuō)起只想很老土地向你說(shuō)四個(gè)字圣誕快樂(lè)！Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.讀清段首句

初步確定兩段情節(jié)

Plot1:WhatdidIdoonthefarm?Plot2:Ididn’tseethehummingbirdonthefarm.Plot1:Wemeteachother.Plot2:Wehadanotheramazingexperience.Theinstantthedesolatemilkinghousecameintomysight,memoriesofthetinyhummingbirdcamefloodingback.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.①在原來(lái)的地方停了車，我又踏上了黑莓小徑。_______________________（非謂語(yǔ)）atthesamepositionasbefore,I____________________ontheblackberry-linedpathagain.Havingpulledover/parked

wandered/stepped②那座荒涼的牛奶房一進(jìn)入我的視線，關(guān)于那只小蜂鳥的記憶就如潮水般涌了上來(lái)。_____________the__________milkinghouse____________________,memoriesofthetinyhummingbird____________________.

Theinstantdesolatecameintomysight

camefloodingback

Iobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.③我注意到破裂的窗戶已經(jīng)修補(bǔ)好了，正如承諾的那樣。I__________thatthe________window_________________________________________(正如承諾的那樣，as+過(guò)去分詞）.observedcracked

hadbeenmended/fixed

aspromised④我朋友接下來(lái)說(shuō)的話觸動(dòng)了我的心弦。這幾天，蜂鳥不時(shí)地在屋外盤旋，似乎在尋找我的蹤跡。Whatmyfriendsaidnext_________________________.Thehummingbird____________________outsidethehouse__________________thesedays,seemingtoseekforthe____________ofme.tuggedatmyheartstrings

hadbeenhovering

fromtimetotime

trace/trackIobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.⑤在野炊期間，上次見(jiàn)到這只可愛(ài)生物的場(chǎng)景不斷出現(xiàn)在我的腦海中，我期待著再次見(jiàn)到它。Duringthecookout,_______of_____________the_______________lasttime___________________________tome,with_________________________toseeitagain________________mymind.

scenesencounteringlovelycreaturekeptpresentingthemselvesanticipation/expectationsurgingthroughIobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①我的心激動(dòng)得怦怦直跳，她拍著翅膀，在我的臉上盤旋。Withmyheart____________________,she________itswings,__________closetomyface.

thumpingwiththrillflappedhovering②當(dāng)我們的目光相遇時(shí)，她發(fā)出了一聲尖銳的吱吱聲，在我面前歡快地叫著。Asour_________met,she________a________________________,_________________infrontofme.glancesletouthigh-pitchedsqueakchirp