作文 04 廣東卷 - 三年(2019-2021)中考英語(yǔ)滿分作文解析

作文04廣東卷2021年（廣東深圳卷）真題在線深圳是一座科技之城、創(chuàng)新之城，為培養(yǎng)學(xué)生對(duì)科技的興趣，你的學(xué)校上周舉辦了科技節(jié)。假定你是你校英語(yǔ)報(bào)的小記者，請(qǐng)你編寫(xiě)一篇新聞報(bào)道，介紹這次活動(dòng)。要點(diǎn)：1.活動(dòng)目的2.活動(dòng)項(xiàng)目：模型制作比賽3.活動(dòng)亮點(diǎn)：學(xué)生發(fā)明的服務(wù)于校園的機(jī)器人：外表、功能4.學(xué)生感受提示詞：1.科技節(jié)sciencefestival2.實(shí)驗(yàn)experimentShenzheniswell-knownasacityoftechnologyandinnovation.Lastweek,______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________考題解析【詳解】1.題干解讀：該題目屬于新聞報(bào)道的寫(xiě)作，在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示的內(nèi)容，介紹科技節(jié)的目的，活動(dòng)項(xiàng)目以及活動(dòng)亮點(diǎn)和學(xué)生們的感受。2.寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：本文應(yīng)該用第三人稱來(lái)介紹內(nèi)容；時(shí)態(tài)采用一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主；在介紹內(nèi)容時(shí)，力求語(yǔ)句通順，內(nèi)容完整，保證條理清晰，行文連貫。滿分范文Shenzheniswell-knownasacityoftechnologyandinnovation.Lastweek,ourschoolheldasciencefestival,whichaimstodevelopstudents’interestinscienceandtechnologyandbroadentheirhorizons.Atthefestival,somestudentstookanactivepartinthemodel-makingcompetition.Manyoftheirrobots,whichwerethehighlightofthefestival,drewpeople’sattention.Theserobotswereintheshapeoflovelyanimals,suchasrabbits,monkeysanddogs.Theyweredoingsomesimpletaskslikesweepingthefloorandthrowingawayrubbish.Besides,someotherstudentscarriedoutscienceexperiments.Thestudentswhowerepresentatthefestivalwereallsurprisedattheexhibitsandgavethemabigaroundofapplause.Ourschoolhopesthatmoreandmorestudentscanlearnscienceandtechnologybettertoserveourcountry.2021年（廣東卷）真題在線校園廣播節(jié)目是同學(xué)們獲取校園資訊的途徑之一，假設(shè)你是李明你所在學(xué)校的英語(yǔ)廣播節(jié)目，擬開(kāi)設(shè)聽(tīng)眾來(lái)信專欄，請(qǐng)你給該專欄投稿內(nèi)容包括：（1）你喜歡該節(jié)目的哪一位主持人，請(qǐng)就其工作談兩點(diǎn)原因；（2）你對(duì)英語(yǔ)節(jié)目的兩點(diǎn)建議；（3）你對(duì)節(jié)目的祝愿。參考詞匯：host男主持，hostess女主持作文要求：（1）不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱和考生的真實(shí)姓名。（2）語(yǔ)句連貫，字?jǐn)?shù)80個(gè)左右，作文的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)也不必抄寫(xiě)在答題卡上.Deareditors,I’mabigfanoftheEnglishprogramsofourschoolradiostations.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,LiMing考題解析【詳解】1.題干解讀：本文是一篇材料作文。向?qū)W校英語(yǔ)廣播節(jié)目投稿，描述自己對(duì)于這個(gè)節(jié)目的相關(guān)建議。2.寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：本文主要采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。分為三段式；第一段介紹自己最喜歡的主持人；第二段提出自己對(duì)于這個(gè)節(jié)目的建議；最后一段表達(dá)自己對(duì)這個(gè)節(jié)目的祝愿。寫(xiě)作時(shí)保持主謂一致性，邏輯性要強(qiáng)，無(wú)語(yǔ)法和標(biāo)點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤。滿分范文Deareditors,I’mabigfanoftheEnglishprogramsofourschoolradiostations.IlikethehostnamedJackbest.HisEnglishpronunciationisverygood,andhisadviceabouthowtolearnEnglishwellishelpfultome.IwanttotalkaboutmysuggestionsabouttheEnglishprogram.First,IhopeyoucanrecommendsomeEnglishnewspaperssothatwecanpracticeourreadingskills.Next,Ihopethisprogramcanbeheldtwiceaweek.Intheend,Ihopethisprogramwillbecomemoreandmorepopular.Yours,LiMing2020年（深圳卷）真題在線深圳市正在爭(zhēng)創(chuàng)全國(guó)文明城市、假定你是鵬城中學(xué)學(xué)生會(huì)主席，希望同學(xué)們?yōu)?創(chuàng)文'做出自己的貢獻(xiàn)。請(qǐng)你按照所提示的要點(diǎn)，代表學(xué)生會(huì)寫(xiě)一篇倡議書(shū)。環(huán)境保護(hù)①垃圾分類；②綠色出行公益慈善①志愿服務(wù)；②……人際交往①誠(chéng)信友善；②……要求：1、詞數(shù)80左右(開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))；2、要點(diǎn)齊全，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；3、條理清晰，語(yǔ)句通順，意義連貫，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范；4、文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和校名。參考詞匯：分類sortout志愿者volunteer貢獻(xiàn)contributionDearfriends,Asweknow,ShenzhenisworkinghardtowinthetitleofChina'sNationalCivilizedCity.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________.Allinall,Shenzhenisourhome.It'stimetotakeaction.TheStudentUnionJuly20,2020考題解析【詳解】1.題干解讀：該題目屬于倡議書(shū)寫(xiě)作。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)承接短文開(kāi)頭；第一段引出話題；第二段寫(xiě)倡議緣由；第三段具體介紹如何做；第四段進(jìn)行展望；第五段號(hào)召大家行動(dòng)起來(lái)。2.寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：本文應(yīng)該用第一人稱來(lái)進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作；時(shí)態(tài)采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)句通順，語(yǔ)意連貫，緊扣要點(diǎn)，注意句子之間的連接與過(guò)渡，要注意涵蓋所給提示。滿分范文Dearfriends,Asweknow,ShenzhenisworkinghardtowinthetitleofChina'sNationalCivilizedCity.(引出話題)It'swellknownthatShenzhenisstrivingforoneofthetencivilizedcitiesinChina,andnowitisagoodopportunityforustomakeourowncontributions.(倡議緣由)Firstly,morechangesinourdailylife,suchassortingouttherubbishandtravellinginagreenerway,canbemadetoprotectthecityenvironment.What'smore,tomakeShenzhenalovingcity,wearealsosupposedtohelpthoseinneedbydoingsomevoluntaryworkorraisingdonations.【高分句型一】Lastbutnotleast,getalongwithothersinanhonestandfriendlyway.We'dbetteravoidtalkingaboutothers'privacyifwewanttoshowourrespect.(具體介紹如何做)IstronglybelievethatwewillmakeShenzhenamorecivilizedandbeautifulcitywithourjointefforts.(展望)Allinall,Shenzhenisourhome.It'stimetotakeaction.【高分句型二】(號(hào)召)TheStudentUnionJuly20,20202020（廣州卷）真題在線今天的英語(yǔ)課上，班級(jí)進(jìn)行了題為“我送過(guò)的一份珍貴禮物，”的主題分享。請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，匯報(bào)你們四人小組的分享內(nèi)容，需包括以下要點(diǎn)。FromBobKateLilyYouToparentsgoodfriendforeignteacher（請(qǐng)補(bǔ)充）WhatsoupPhotoalbumPapercutting（請(qǐng)補(bǔ)充）Whythanksandlovefriendshipculture（請(qǐng)補(bǔ)充）注意：1.詞數(shù)：80詞左右（短文的開(kāi)頭己給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)）：2.不得透露學(xué)校、姓名等任何個(gè)人信息，否則不予評(píng)分。Intoday'sEnglishclass,wehadadiscussionon“AvaluablegiftIgave”.Hereiswhatwesharedinougroup.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________考題解析【詳解】題干解讀：這篇短文要求學(xué)生們根據(jù)題目中給出的圖表，匯報(bào)一下你這個(gè)小組中四個(gè)人送過(guò)的珍貴的禮物。寫(xiě)作前，應(yīng)仔細(xì)觀察圖表中的信息，瀏覽可知，短文中應(yīng)介紹清楚這個(gè)禮物是誰(shuí)送給誰(shuí)的，是什么以及為什么送這個(gè)禮物。圖表中給出的都是關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)，學(xué)生寫(xiě)作時(shí)，應(yīng)用完整的句子表達(dá)。并且對(duì)于最后一欄中自己送的禮物，學(xué)生需要發(fā)揮想象力，結(jié)合實(shí)際情況，進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充。短文應(yīng)以一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)為主來(lái)敘述。例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先文章內(nèi)容完整，包括了圖表中的所有信息，對(duì)最后一欄的內(nèi)容進(jìn)行了補(bǔ)充，并對(duì)細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行了拓展，使文章的內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)。短文有三段，第一段是題目中給出的開(kāi)頭；第二段中作者主要介紹了小組中其他三人送的禮物；最后一段介紹了自己送過(guò)的禮物。層次清晰，敘述有條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，文章以一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，符合表達(dá)需要，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，有變化，增強(qiáng)了文章的表現(xiàn)力。高分亮點(diǎn)：短語(yǔ)：inone’sopinion；inaddition；eachother。句型：過(guò)去分詞作后置定語(yǔ)；動(dòng)詞不定式作目的狀語(yǔ)；because引導(dǎo)原因狀語(yǔ)從句；現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)；which引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句；what引導(dǎo)主語(yǔ)從句；so…that引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句。滿分范文Intoday’sEnglishclass.wehadadiscussionon“AvaluablegiftIgave”.Hereiswhatwesharedinourgroup.AvaluablegiftgivenbyBobwasabowlofsouptohisparents.Inhisopinion,heconsidereditasagoodgifttoexpresshisthanksandlovetothem.Kategaveaphotoalbumtooneofhergoodfriendsbecauseshewantedtocherisheverymomentwithher/him,hopingthattheirfriendshipcouldlastforever.Inaddition,LilysentherforeignteacherapieceofpapercuttingwhichcanfullyrepresentChineseculture.Forme,whatIgavetomygrandparentwasasmartphone.Wedon'tlivetogetherandmyparentsaresobusythatwecan'tmeeteachotheroften.However,wecanhavevideochatsbysmartphone.2020（廣東卷）真題在線為了鼓勵(lì)人們積極向他人傳遞關(guān)愛(ài)，某青少年英文網(wǎng)站“TheLinkofLove”（愛(ài)的鏈接）專欄開(kāi)展征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你給該專欄投稿。內(nèi)容包括：（1）你想向誰(shuí)表達(dá)你的關(guān)愛(ài)？為什么？（2）你打算做些什么來(lái)表達(dá)你的關(guān)愛(ài)？作文要求：（1）不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱和考生的真實(shí)姓名。（2）語(yǔ)句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右。作文的開(kāi)頭己經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)，也不必抄寫(xiě)在答題卡上。Wearegrowingupinloveandcarefrompeoplearound.Itisimportanttoloveandcareforothers._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________考題解析【詳解】1.題干解讀：本題為材料作文，要求根據(jù)題目所給要點(diǎn)提示表達(dá)對(duì)某個(gè)人或群體的愛(ài)。時(shí)態(tài)可用過(guò)去、現(xiàn)在、將來(lái)時(shí)，人稱用第一人稱。2.例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：例文分三段，第一段用于開(kāi)篇點(diǎn)題，引出“表達(dá)對(duì)某個(gè)人或群體的愛(ài)”這一文章主題，第二段則是敘述了母親對(duì)自己的愛(ài)，以及自己準(zhǔn)備如何在母親節(jié)這一天回報(bào)母親的愛(ài)。第三段以對(duì)母親的美好祝愿做文章結(jié)尾。例文思路清晰，層次分明，句與句之間銜接自然流暢，感情真摯，是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。3.高分亮點(diǎn)：短語(yǔ)：inorderto，buysth.forsb.，makesb.adj.，dothehousework，haveagoodrest，haveagoodtime。句型：（1）Iknowshelikessinginganddancing.（賓語(yǔ)從句）（2）Itwillmakeherveryhappy.（make作使役動(dòng)詞）（3）Third,Iwilldothehouseworkthatdayandletherhaveagoodrest.（and連接的并列句）滿分范文Wearegrowingupinloveandcarefrompeoplearound.Itisimportanttoloveandcareforothers.Ilovemymum.Shegavemelife,andtaughtmealot.NextSundaywillbeMother’sDay,inordertoshowmyloveformymum,Idecidetodosomethingforher.First,Iwillbookasingingroomformymother.Iknowshelikessinginganddancing.Second,Iwillbuyabeautifulgiftforher.Itwillmakeherveryhappy.Third,Iwilldothehouseworkthatdayandletherhaveagoodrest.Ireallyhopeshewillhaveagoodtimeonthatday!2019（深圳卷）真題在線假設(shè)你是李華，你的英國(guó)朋友Tony對(duì)"中國(guó)紅"一詞很感興趣，想了解"中國(guó)紅"在中國(guó)人日常生活中的體現(xiàn)，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格信息寫(xiě)一封回信幫助他了解．地位最受歡迎的顏色之一代表幸福，可以帶來(lái)好運(yùn)使用場(chǎng)所婚禮，春節(jié)等表達(dá)方式剪紙，中國(guó)結(jié)，紅包，燈籠提示詞：婚禮wedding，中國(guó)結(jié)ChineseKnot，紅包redpacket，代表standforDearTony，It'sgreattoreceiveyourletter．I'mwritingtotellyousomethingaboutChinesered．________________________ItrulyhopemyletterwillhelpyouunderstandbetteraboutChinesered．Yours，LiHua考題解析【詳解】1.題干解讀：本文屬于書(shū)信作文，向你的英國(guó)朋友介紹“中國(guó)紅”，包括地位、代表、使用場(chǎng)所以及表達(dá)方式。注意時(shí)態(tài)的準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用，靈活運(yùn)用所學(xué)的單詞、短語(yǔ)以及句型。切記不要遺漏要點(diǎn)。2.例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。3.高分亮點(diǎn)：?jiǎn)卧~短語(yǔ)：forinstance,bedecoratedwith,what’smore,befilledwith,aswell以及playasignificantrole等。亮點(diǎn)句型：webelievethatitcanbringusgoodluck中，that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句?！军c(diǎn)睛】首先認(rèn)真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn)；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá)，例如forinstance,bedecoratedwith,befilledwith,aswell以及playasignificantrole等；然后緊扣要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作，在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中，要注意句與句、段與段之間的過(guò)渡，必要時(shí)可適當(dāng)運(yùn)用表示轉(zhuǎn)折、因果、并列、比較等關(guān)系的連詞，使文章過(guò)渡平穩(wěn)，自然流暢，如what’smore；最后，要仔細(xì)檢查有無(wú)單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)誤用等，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。滿分范文DearTony，It'sgreattoreceiveyourletter．I'mwritingtotellyousomethingaboutChinesered．Chinesered，consideredasthesymboliccolorofChina，isextremelypopularwithChinesepeople．Itusuallyrepresentshappiness，andwebelievethatitcanbringusgoodluck．PeopleinourcountryattachsuchgreatimportancetoChineseredthattheyusemanyredobjectsinsomeimportantevents．Forinstance，inawedding，youcanseethatthebrideisinaredweddingdressandtheweddingroomisdecoratedwithred．What'smore，thehousesarealsofilledwithredpapercuts，lanternsandChineseKnotsduringtheSpringFestival．Childrenwillgetredpacketsforbestwishesaswell．Obviously，ChineseredplaysasignificantroleandenjoysthehighestpopularityinChina．ItrulyhopemyletterwillhelpyouunderstandbetteraboutChinesered．Yours，LiHua2019（廣東卷1）真題在線廣州某電臺(tái)英文頻道將開(kāi)設(shè)WelcometoGuangzhou欄目,目前面向全市中學(xué)生征集“微州”英文介紹。請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文,向欄目投稿。短文需包括下圖所有提示內(nèi)容。注意:1.詞數(shù):80詞左右(短文的開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已給出,不計(jì)入詞數(shù));2.不得透露學(xué)校、姓名等任何個(gè)人信息,否則不予評(píng)分。AnyonecomingtoGuangzhouissuretohaveagoodtime_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Guangzhouiswaitingforyou.考題解析【詳解】這篇作文要求我們用英語(yǔ)介紹廣州這座城市。題目中用圖示展示了短文中應(yīng)包括的內(nèi)容：廣州市的位置、歷史、特色、氣候特點(diǎn)以及廣州的一個(gè)好去處，并闡述理由。學(xué)生們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些提示進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，為時(shí)內(nèi)容豐富、充實(shí)，應(yīng)對(duì)每個(gè)話題進(jìn)行拓展，詳細(xì)地對(duì)廣州進(jìn)行介紹。短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，第一人稱和第三人稱為主來(lái)敘述。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意：首先短文中應(yīng)包括題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容，不要遺漏要點(diǎn)。各個(gè)內(nèi)容應(yīng)敘述清楚、內(nèi)容具體。同時(shí)注意文章結(jié)構(gòu)，要分清主次，合理安排各個(gè)寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容。其次應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)的不同，不要根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，可以簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主，穿插并列句、復(fù)合句以及其他復(fù)雜句式，提升作文檔次。同時(shí)注意語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了廣州這座城市。短文有以下幾個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)：首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含來(lái)了題目中要求的所有信息，沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn)。作者從五個(gè)方面對(duì)廣州進(jìn)行了介紹：第一段中介紹了廣州的位置、歷史、氣候和特色，簡(jiǎn)單的幾句話包含了大量的信息；第二段是主體段，主要給讀者推薦了一個(gè)好去處，并闡述了自己的理由；第三段和第四段是一個(gè)結(jié)尾，對(duì)自己的介紹進(jìn)行總結(jié)。文章層次清晰，敘述條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣，簡(jiǎn)單句與復(fù)合句結(jié)合，使文章富有節(jié)奏的變化。文章中使用了一些較好的短語(yǔ)和句型，如LocatedinthesouthofChina，Guangzhou，withahistoryofmorethantwothousandyears，playsasignificantroleinbotheconomyandcultureofChina、IstronglyrecommendCantonTowe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