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1、讀后續(xù)寫一、考綱解讀提供一段 350 詞以內(nèi)的語言材料， 要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、 所給段落開頭語和所標示關(guān)鍵詞進行續(xù) 寫( 150 詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。二、原題分析 原文材料 350 詞以內(nèi)，所續(xù)寫文章 150 詞左右 。 原文多是情節(jié)豐富的 記敘文 ，偶有少量的議論文。 原文給出 10 處左右的標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，所續(xù)寫短文應使用 5 個以上 。 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段開頭語已經(jīng)給出。 續(xù)寫部分分為兩大類別：1) 半開放性質(zhì)。必須依據(jù)文章的 語境邏輯 推理續(xù)寫。2)完全開放性質(zhì)?？梢砸罁?jù)文章的思路，自己發(fā)揮。三、注意事項 詞數(shù)要求。與所給短

2、文及段落開頭語的銜接程度。內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所標出關(guān)鍵詞語的應用。應用語言結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準確性。上下文的連貫性。四、評分原則本題總分為 25 分，按 5 個檔次給分。 評分時，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定 或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。 詞數(shù)少于 130 的，從總分中減去 2 分。 評分時，應主要從以下四個方面考慮：(1) 與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；(2) 內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所標出關(guān)鍵詞語的應用情況；(3) 應用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；(4) 上下文的連貫性。 拼寫與標點符號是語言準確性的一個重要方面，評分時，應視其對交際的影響程度予

3、以考慮。 如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分數(shù)降低一個檔次。續(xù)寫導練（一）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。When I was eleven years old, I had a big accident. I get scared even now when I think about that time. I went skating near my house. There were many people, and I saw some of them falling on the ice.It was my first time to go ice skati

4、ng, so I was nervous. I was wondering how to skate.I went with a friend who was very skillful . He spent some time teaching me how to skate,but I didn t lmuch. He left me and skated all around. As soon as he left, I fell down. I envied the other people because they could skate well.I was bored becau

5、se I kept falling so I took off my skates and just walked around on the ice in my shoes. It was cold and my hands were frozen.Suddenly, I stepped on something that was not hard. What was it? It was a weak place in the ice. When I stepped there, I sank under the ice. I thought that I was going to die

6、, but I did my best to grab something to get out from under the ice. I tried to grab the edge of the ice, but it was very difficult for an eleven-year-old.It seemed like a very long time, like a year. Then, fortunately, someone helped me. He grabbed my arms and pulled me up. So, I lived and I m stil

7、l alive today.I thanked him. At that time, my friend came back. I was annoyed at him because he was supposed to take care of me, but he didn t. He was embarrassed. When I took a taxi home, the taxi driver was surprised and asked what had happened. I didn t want to say anything because I was tired sa

8、cnadr ed. Even now, whenever I thinkabout that time, I feel uncomfortable. I donkatti nwga angt atoin g eov sen now.注意：1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為 150 左右；2. 應使用 5 個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。續(xù)寫提示：本文講述了作者 11 歲去滑冰的一段經(jīng)歷，由于自己的滑冰技能不如別人嫻熟，因而獨自一人嘗試練 習總會跌跌撞撞，從而對滑冰這件事留下了不好的印象。由續(xù)寫第一段的

9、提示語“很久以后我才又一次去滑冰”可知，這一次去滑冰，作者會抱著不一樣的態(tài) 度的。那么首先得明確一點，對于這次滑冰，一定要有一個妥當?shù)睦碛?，不然我自己是不會去的。顯然， 作者已不在是當時那個自己，他以前就不是特別擅長滑冰，因此他此次不會像當時那樣獨自一人去練習， 而是極有可能同別人一起去的。與上一次的經(jīng)歷相比，這一次不會進展得特別順利，但是起碼有所進步， 畢竟一次學好很難。那么，寫作時宜注意練習滑冰以及有人陪同指導滑冰的細節(jié)問題。同時，在作者的心 理活動方面，也是有一個與過去滑冰時的心情的變化的，那得是一個起伏的過程，此處對作者心情的描述 可以客觀中性些，對滑冰的恐懼情緒的描述則相對減弱些。由

10、續(xù)寫第二段的提示語可知，作者以后抽不出時間滑冰了，那么這一段應試著寫一寫作者為什么抽不出時間去滑冰的原因了，毋庸置疑，這勢必與作者工作或家庭上的繁瑣事情有關(guān)。換句話說，作者隨著年 齡的增長，找工作、結(jié)婚、撫養(yǎng)孩子等都有可能成為作者忙碌的理由。除此以外，隨著時間的流逝，作者 對滑冰的經(jīng)歷必然是有感悟的，那么就需要增加一些作者對過去或者未來的想法。最后，可嘗試與前面的 內(nèi)容有所呼應。One possible version : 示例一Paragraph 1:It was long before I went skating once again,accompanied by one of my f

11、riends. This time I was carefuland cautious, and my friend took special care of me. I was so fortunate this time that I managed not to fall down. Gradually I learned to skate well and became skillful. I felt very confident and no longer scared.Paragraph 2:However, ever since then I haven fot und any

12、 time to go skating, not because I do not like skating, but because I am too busy working. I ve learned a lot from these two skating experiences. We all have moments ofdesperation. But if we can face them bravely, that s when we find out how strong we really are. Whatever you do,you must have the pa

13、tience to do it as well as the skill. Remember: never get too much pride because of victory or lose heart in case of failure. 示例二（此示例為圖書高中英語寫作亮點揭秘主編所寫，較之示例一，更值得參考和學習）Paragraph 1:It was long long before I went skating once again, and that was when we graduated from the university. Our monitor advised

14、 us all to go skating, and I decided to follow his advice although I still felt a little scared. Soon wet bsek alitkee w oethll.e rs, who couldwere active on the ice. One of my roommates was very skillful and she patiently explained to me how to start. Step by step, I was able to stand up on the ice

15、 myself and headed out a little, not so steadily and I fell down many times. I was grateful to her for I managed to skate that day, though I couldnI had a nice time that day!Paragraph 2:However, ever since then I haven fot und any time to go skating, because immediately I dived into the applying for

16、 the suitable jobs. And then, fortunately, I met my honey and got married. As was expected, one baby came into the world and was now smiling to me every day. As for the skating, maybe I could be on the ice again when my baby is grown up and asks me one hundred times!續(xù)寫導練（二） 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完

17、整的故事。Mr Brown lived in a house less than two miles away from his office. He was therefore able to drive home every day for lunch. Every time he drove in the middle of the day, he found cars were parked in the road outside his house, and there was no room for his own car. He had to drive two blocks f

18、arther before he could find a place to park. Then he had to walk home. This made him very angry.He had put up a board which read “No Parking ! ” in the garden facing the road, but nobody seemed to pay attention to it. People only obeyed a police notice, but not a private one. There were no parked ca

19、rs where there was a blue board with white letters on it: Police Notice No Parking !Mrs Brown suggested that he should steal a police notice. But he dared not, being afraid of going to prison. She then suggested that he make one just like a police notice. He said he was not a policeman and couldn t

20、use the word “police ”. He decided that he must find a way out and started thinking hard. For several days, the smell of paint filled the house. One night he showed his life a new notice board. It was painted in white letters on a blue board: Polite Notice No Parking !“ Oh, ”Mrs Brown said, bu“t you

21、 told me you weren t going to use the word police . That s exactly like a police notice. ”“Is it?” he asked. “Look again. ”She began to laugh, “You are really rather clever. ” 注意：1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為 150 左右；2. 應使用 5 個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。續(xù)寫提示：本文講述布朗先生巧妙模仿警察通告的趣味

22、故事。 polite 和 police 只有一個字母之差，卻引出了一個 趣味故事。第一段續(xù)寫，布朗夫人為什么稱丈夫如此聰明？回答這個問題其實就是寫出本文的內(nèi)涵。第二 段續(xù)寫是一種真實的假設，表面看來警察可能會生氣或懲罰他們。但是，警察在知道真相后，結(jié)果又會是 怎樣呢？One possible version :Paragraph 1:Why did Mrs Brown say her husband was really rather clever? Because sje found that he had written a notice which looked exactly like

23、 a police notice. He made a blue board with white letters on it, but it was not a real police notice. Being afraid of going to prison, Mr Brown certainly dared not use the word“police ”, but heused “polite notice ” instead of “police notice ”. He was quite clever, wasnt he?Paragraph 2:If the police

24、discovered that the Browns were using a police notice, they would feel angry and punish them. It was a crime because he offended the police, passing himself off as a policeman. But Mr Brown remained very calm. He would ask the policeman to look at the board carefully. The policeman would burst out l

25、aughing whern they realized what had happened.續(xù)寫導練（三）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。My mother used to ask me what the most important part of the body is. Through the years I would take a guess at what I thought was the correct answer. When I was younger, I thought sound was very important to us as hu

26、mans, so I said, “My ears, Mommy. ”She said, “No. Many pe oaprle deaf. But they are doing well in their life. You keep thinking about it and I will ask you again soon.”Several years passed before she asked me again. Since making my first attempt, I had contemplated （深思） the correct answer. So this t

27、ime I told her, “ Mommy, sight is very important to everybody, so it must be our eyes.She looked at me and told me,“l(fā)eYaornui nagre f ast, but the answer is not correct because there are manypeople who are blind. ”O(jiān)ver the years my mother asked me a couple more times and always her answer was: “No,b

28、 ut you are getting smarter every year, my child.”Then last year, my grandpa died. Everybody was hurt. Everybody was crying. My Mom looked at me when it was our turn to say our final goodbye to g randpa. She asked me,o“u Dknoo yw the most important body part yet,my dear? ”I was surprised when she as

29、ked me this on this occasion. I always thought this was a game between her and me. She saw the confusion on my face and told me,“This question is very H imowp oyrotaun at.nswer it showswhether you have learned about life. For every body part you gave me in the past, I have told you were wrong and I

30、have given you a reason why. But today is the day you will know the answer. ”I look puzzled.“All your previous answers-ears, eyes, hands, heart. They are all very important to yourself. But this time I need you to think of something that is important to others. ” 注意：1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為 150 左右；2. 應使用 5個以上短

31、文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。續(xù)寫提示：母子之間的猜謎游戲，看似簡單，實則意味深長。什么是最重要的身體部位，孩子每次都是從自己的 角度進行猜測，但是母親想引導他打開心房，關(guān)愛身邊的人。從兩處續(xù)寫的提示語可知，母親的答案是 “shoulder”，所以在續(xù)寫的第一段可揭示答案，并給出理由；而在第二段可以描述母親聽到孩子的回答 之后所做出的回應，使文章主題統(tǒng)一，含義雋永。One possible version :Paragraph 1:“My dear, the most important body

32、part ,” she said, “is your shoulder.”“Is it because it holds up your head? ” I asked. “No, it is because it can hold the head of a friend or loved one when they cry, ” she replied, “Everybodyneeds a shoulder to cry on sometime in life, my dear. I only hope that you have enough love and friends that

33、you will always have a shoulder to cry on when you need it. ” I saw her eyes well up with tears.Paragraph 2:“Mom, I understand. And you can cry on my shoulder too.” And silently, my mother put her head on myshoulder and started to cry. It was not heavy at all, and the wetness didn t make me uncomfor

34、table either. In fact when her warm tears damped my shoulder, I felt the pain in her heart, and I knew how hurt and lonely and vulnerable she was at that moment. I felt important. I felt like a man. I was there when someone I loved dearly needed me most.續(xù)寫導練（四） 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。An 80-ye

35、ar-old man was sitting on the sofa in his house along with his 45-year-old highly educated son. Suddenly a crow （烏鴉） perched（棲息） on their window.The father asked his son, Wh“at is this? ”The son replied, It is a“ crow. ”After a few minutes, the father asked his son for the second time, “ What is thi

36、s?The s”on said,“ Father, Ihave just now told you, i t s a cro! w”After a little while, the old father again asked hi s son for the third time, “ What is this? ”At this time some expression of irritation （惱怒） was felt in the son s tone when he said to his father with a rebuff（生硬回絕） . “It s a crow, a

37、 cr oAw l.ittle wh”ile later, the father again asked his son the fourth time, “What is this? ”This time, the son shouted at his father, “Why do you keep asking me the same question again and again, although I have told you so many times IT IS A CROW. Are you not able to understand this? ”A little la

38、ter the father went to his room and came back with an oldtattered （發(fā)皺的） diary, which he hadmaintained since his son was born.On opening a page, he asked his son to read that page.When the son read it, the following words were written in the diary:“ Today my little son aged three was stiting with me

39、on the sofa, when a crow was sitting on the window. My son asked me 23 times what it was, and I replied to him all 23 times that it was a crow. I hugged him lovingly each time he asked me the same question. I did not at all feel irritated but I rather felt affection for my innocent son.注意：1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞

40、數(shù)應為 150 左右；2. 應使用 5 個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 續(xù)寫提示：本篇為記敘文。一位八十歲的老人和他的成年兒子坐在沙發(fā)上。同一個問題老人才問了三遍，兒子就 已經(jīng)十分惱怒和沒耐心了；第四遍時，兒子已開始對他大吼了。傷心的父親拿出一本發(fā)皺的日記讓兒子讀 其中一頁的內(nèi)容：兒子小時候問了 23 遍同一個問題，父親仍然耐心解釋。由全文大意以及文章最后的結(jié)尾部分可知這里是父子不同態(tài)度的對比，上文敘述了父親讓兒子看自己 的日記，由續(xù)寫第一段 After reading the diary

41、可知，后面的內(nèi)容應是兒子看了日記后的感受，以及對一些 問題的思考。由續(xù)寫第二段出現(xiàn)的關(guān)鍵詞 feeling ashamed 可知，兒子對自己的行為感到愧疚，所以下文中兒子會對 自己的行為道歉，然后向父親保證以后好好對待父親。One possible version :Paragraph 1:After reading the diary, the son was filled with tears and began to reflect on the days when he used to sit together with his father. His father would pat

42、iently answer the same question all 23 times without feeling irritation while his father asked him the same question just four times! The son thought to himself: If I attain old age, how will my son look at me? Will he think of me as a burden? Will he shout at me because of my poor sight, poor heari

43、ng or poor understanding?Paragraph 2:Feeling ashamed, the son got down on his knees before his father. He made an apology to his father, begging his father to forgive him for his bad behavior. He said this aloud,“I promise to see you happy forever,Dad. It is you who have cared for me ever since I wa

44、s a little child, showering your selfless affection on me. You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university. I will serve you in the best day. ”續(xù)寫導練（五） 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。I was touched through experiences, memories, books, stories, animals, angels, and most of all

45、other people. People have moved me and molded（對影響重大） me with moments of love and examples of kindness.One time on the day before Christmas many years ago when I was a minimum wage mill （工廠） worker, I found myself with very little money and very little time to buy my small children a few simple toys.

46、 I knew that they would have to be cheap ones and I hoped my children would like them. I hated not having enough to give them more. I hated being poor. And I hated feeling bad at Christmas rather than happy.I pulled into a store parking lot and counted my money again. It wasn t much but maybe I coul

47、d get something small with it. As I was getting out of the car I noticed the Salvation Army （救世軍） bell ringer at the entrance. I felt bad again because I didn t feel I could spare anything to give him. I started walking towards the entrance when two cars pulled into empty parking spots in front of m

48、e. The first was a shiny, new Cadillac and I felt a twinge of jealousy when I saw it. “How nice, ” I thought, “Would it be to have enough money to buy a car like that. ” The second car, though, was an ancient sedan（轎車） more beat-up and rusty than the one I was driving.A man hopped （沖） out of the Cadillac and hurried into the store right past the bell ringer without a second glance. Out of the old sedan came a young mother with three small children in tow （緊隨著） . Her clothes looked as worn out as her car, yet she stopped in front of the