2017年11月浙江省高考英語讀后續(xù)寫試題分析及范例點(diǎn)評(píng)

1、精選優(yōu)質(zhì)文檔-傾情為你奉上2017年11月浙江省高考英語讀后續(xù)寫試題分析及范例點(diǎn)評(píng) 2017年11月浙江省高考英語科目寫作第二節(jié)依然是讀后續(xù)寫，要求考生閱讀一篇短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)續(xù)寫，使短文與續(xù)寫部分合成一個(gè)完整的故事。自2016年10月實(shí)行新高考以來，三次英語考試寫作第二節(jié)均為讀后續(xù)寫，之所以如此，其中一個(gè)原因可能是，相比于其他類型考題而言，讀后續(xù)寫對(duì)測試學(xué)生的實(shí)際寫作水平具有較高的有效性。這一點(diǎn)，從本次考試的試題與答題情況也可看出。 一、題型分析 與上兩次考試一樣，本次讀后續(xù)寫題依然是結(jié)合了對(duì)考生輸入（input）與輸出（output）兩種語言能力的考查（關(guān)于這兩者能力的考查和讀后續(xù)寫文體

2、特征等，請(qǐng)參見筆者發(fā)表于本刊2017年第3期的浙江省高考英語讀后續(xù)寫試題分析及范例點(diǎn)評(píng)一文）。但是，雖然同屬記敘文，本次考試所給短文的故事線索與邏輯復(fù)雜程度明顯高于上兩次，主要表現(xiàn)為次要信息較多，對(duì)考生把握情節(jié)主線有較強(qiáng)的干擾（具體見本文“試題要點(diǎn)分析”和“答題建議”）。從這一點(diǎn)來看，本次考試對(duì)考生的輸入考查要求遠(yuǎn)高于上兩次。另外，從所給段落開頭語來看，第二段的開放性很強(qiáng)，考生可以有多種情節(jié)接續(xù)的可能，甚至可以有體裁的轉(zhuǎn)換。結(jié)合這兩點(diǎn)，可以說，本次讀后續(xù)寫交際任務(wù)是否能很好地完成，基本上取決于對(duì)所給短文閱讀理解任務(wù)完成的情況。這給我們的啟示是，讀后續(xù)寫教學(xué)要見成效，閱讀教學(xué)上所花的功夫絕對(duì)不能

3、少。 二、題目要求 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。 A Vacation with My Mother I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements， all because of my motherloving， sweet， and yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her. My two

4、sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota， and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached， David， my eight-year-old brother， and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who

5、knew if wed ever see them again？ Finally， the moment of our departure arrived， and we loaded suitcases， books， games， camping equipment， and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after wed returned home to get the purse and travelers checks Mom had for

6、gotten. David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept： “You stand outside the door and play lookout （放哨） while I go， and Ill stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind： “Honey， where are the

7、 kids？” “What？！ Oh， Gosh I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city， but we werent about to take any chances. On the fourth or fifth night， we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time， Mom suddenly got a great

8、 idea： Why didnt we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there？ David and I became nervous. To our great relief， Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections （反?. If a strange family showed up on her front doorsteps， Mom would have been d

9、elighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town. 注意： 1.所?m寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好； 4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 三、試題要點(diǎn)分析 四、答題建議 文體 以記敘文體為主。尤其是續(xù)寫的第一段，因所給短文第四段母親的野營提議沒有通過，續(xù)寫第一段又提出帳篷，應(yīng)圍繞帳篷接續(xù)故事，避免輕易議論。但是，本次考試與

10、上兩次考試有一明顯區(qū)別，就是續(xù)寫第二段所給開頭語既可視作總起性語言，也可視作總結(jié)性語言，如果視作總結(jié)性語言，則故事已經(jīng)結(jié)束，考生接下去甚至可用整段抒發(fā)感情或發(fā)表議論，如此，則續(xù)寫部分的文體可以是記敘文和說明文（議論文）各占一半。這樣的做法，在前兩次考試中顯得不夠合理，但在這一次考試中是非常自然的。這一點(diǎn)也提醒我們，寫作的教學(xué)不能盲目教條，一切應(yīng)該視具體情況靈活處理。 結(jié)構(gòu) 分兩段，共150詞左右，兩段詞數(shù)最好能基本平衡，一般應(yīng)避免一段過多一段過少的情況。 內(nèi)容 結(jié)合續(xù)寫部分所給段落開頭語來看，真正的故事發(fā)展從第四段開始，前三段只不過都是為了說明母親的健忘。續(xù)寫的部分，應(yīng)著重講述圍繞母親健忘所發(fā)

11、生的趣事。同時(shí)，由于原文多次提到母親“l(fā)oving”“sweet”“nice”的性格特征，在續(xù)寫中最好能將這些性格與健忘結(jié)合起來。另外，如前所述，續(xù)寫的第二段開放性較大，考生可敘事，可說明，可議論，甚至還可以寫一點(diǎn)本次旅程以外的內(nèi)容，對(duì)于考查學(xué)生的輸出能力是很有利的。本篇故事有一定的思想性，考生在續(xù)寫部分如將故事做恰當(dāng)?shù)奶釤捄蜕A，應(yīng)該得到鼓勵(lì)。需要特別指出的是，所給短文（含標(biāo)題）中提到了“vacation”“an interesting childhood”“surprises and amusements”“strange”等，這些內(nèi)容一方面給續(xù)寫提供了一些可用的線索，但另一方面卻容易干擾

12、考生對(duì)故事主線的把握，考生在閱讀所給短文和續(xù)寫的過程中可以不加特別關(guān)注。同理，原文中一些描述和說明，如“. unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if wed ever see them again？”“You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go， and Ill stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.”“I had terrible pictures in my mind： Hone

13、y， where are the kids？ What？！ Oh， Gosh . I thought they were being awfully quiet.”等，對(duì)部分考生的理解可能具有較大難度，但其實(shí)這些語句除了說明母親的健忘外，對(duì)故事主線的發(fā)展并沒有制約與貢獻(xiàn)，考生在續(xù)寫時(shí)也可不加特別關(guān)注。 語言 時(shí)態(tài)上，所給短文敘述發(fā)生在過去的一件事情，采用過去時(shí)。續(xù)寫時(shí)，記敘文體部分沿用過去時(shí)，抒情或議論部分則要視情況區(qū)別對(duì)待：如是針對(duì)當(dāng)時(shí)（過去）情況，則用過去時(shí)；如是針對(duì)普遍情況，則用現(xiàn)在時(shí)。短文語言總體較為平實(shí)，沒有過于特別的句式，也沒有大詞生僻詞，但描寫生動(dòng)，還有一些幽默的表達(dá)法（如“My

14、 two sets of grandparents”“We bravely drove off again . ”以及加油站里的對(duì)話等）。續(xù)寫時(shí)最好能延續(xù)這種風(fēng)格。當(dāng)然，所給短文的幽默不太容易察知和模擬，但平實(shí)的風(fēng)格應(yīng)該在續(xù)寫中得到體現(xiàn)，在此基礎(chǔ)上，用詞和句式可以有變化，描寫可以盡量生動(dòng)，但不應(yīng)盲目追求所謂的“高大上”，應(yīng)以意義的恰當(dāng)傳達(dá)為準(zhǔn)則，使用干凈、明白、有表現(xiàn)力的語言。描寫中可恰當(dāng)使用一些對(duì)話，但須注意不應(yīng)過多，尤其是不應(yīng)有過多過于簡單的對(duì)話，否則無法在有限的空間里展示語言運(yùn)用能力。記敘文體部分應(yīng)注重細(xì)節(jié)，多使用描繪性、描述性的語言，不要過多使用說明性的語言。抒情或議論部分可恰當(dāng)使用說

15、明性、總結(jié)性的語言。要恰當(dāng)使用語句連接成分，但需要注意的是，能夠完成語句連接任務(wù)的并不只有連接詞和連接性副詞及詞組，還包括其他許多手段，如代詞（代名詞、代動(dòng)詞）、某些修辭手法（如重復(fù)、平行結(jié)構(gòu)等），甚至句式變換等。續(xù)寫語句的文氣應(yīng)與開頭語相接，所續(xù)寫語句相互之間的文氣也應(yīng)相接，使文章自然流暢，符合語言邏輯。本次考試所給短文由于人物與事件關(guān)系相對(duì)比較簡單，兩句開頭語對(duì)接續(xù)語句主位的要求并不十分嚴(yán)格，考生在這一方面基本都能很好地完成任務(wù)。 形式 應(yīng)緊接每段開頭語續(xù)寫，使開頭語與續(xù)寫部分形成一個(gè)完整的段落。如果是在開頭語行下方開始續(xù)寫，實(shí)際上就是另外一段了，不符合試題“續(xù)寫部分分為兩段”的說明（亦即

16、要求）。書寫應(yīng)規(guī)范工整。不要忘記給所用的關(guān)鍵詞語畫上底線。10個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞語不必全部用到，但至少要用到5個(gè)。 五、習(xí)作點(diǎn)評(píng) 學(xué)生習(xí)作1 The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Thinking of this tent， Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement， with eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm， we all agreed. When the

17、 door of our car opened， Mom stormed out instantly and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked to pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back， Dad and Mom had already lain on the grass comfortably in front of the tent， talking merrily with a local boy at our age， who alw

18、ays cast a glimpse at this tent curiously. Soon we learnt that the boy in rags even didnt have a home to live. Of course， Mom “forgot” to take this tent with us again. We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. And we also had a nice time living with my grandparents

19、during that vacation. But what impressed me most was that tent， which was forgotten deliberately by Mom. Though she did love going camping， she presented that poor boy with this tent out of sympathy. It was Mom that made my childhood colorful. And it was also she that showed me the true meaning of g

20、iving. 點(diǎn)評(píng)1 這篇習(xí)作描寫細(xì)致，文氣較為通暢，語言面貌總體相當(dāng)不錯(cuò)，較好地完成了交際任務(wù)。習(xí)作故事情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)合理，與短文融洽度高，人物行為描寫細(xì)膩（如爸爸媽媽躺在草地上的情景），同時(shí)穿插心理描繪（如男孩不停看帳篷的眼神），動(dòng)靜結(jié)合，第二段的說明解釋與故事結(jié)合緊密，非常合理。習(xí)作語言富于變化，如語言結(jié)構(gòu)上復(fù)雜句與簡單句、長句與短句錯(cuò)雜使用，尤其是兩段結(jié)尾的短句，使文章顯得有力。文章將“forgot”一詞放在引號(hào)中，說明媽媽此次的健忘乃是出于其“l(fā)oving”與“sweet”的美好品格，使續(xù)寫的故事出乎意料之外，又在情理之中，而且提升了故事的主題思想，還給續(xù)寫第二段的情感抒發(fā)做了鋪墊。此外，

21、習(xí)作有較好的修辭意識(shí)，尤其是結(jié)尾兩句用了平行結(jié)構(gòu)，用兩個(gè)分裂句強(qiáng)調(diào)了母親的優(yōu)良品質(zhì)，很好地使文章思想得到了升華，是習(xí)作的閃光之處。習(xí)作在描寫過程中恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂昧艘恍┚哂休^強(qiáng)表現(xiàn)力的細(xì)節(jié)描述性語言，如“Mom stormed out”“talking merrily”“always cast a glimpse at this tent curiously”等，使故事非常生動(dòng)。當(dāng)然，習(xí)作中存在的問題也是明顯的。首先，習(xí)作在語法知識(shí)應(yīng)用上尚顯幼稚，如“eyes”前缺失限定詞“her”，“didnt have a home to live”后缺失介詞“in”等。其次，詞匯方面，習(xí)作對(duì)一些詞的詞義把握不

22、清，如不清楚“glimpse”與“glance”，“l(fā)iving”與“staying”，“grass”與“l(fā)awn”的區(qū)別；一些詞的詞性與用法掌握不精，如用“had already lain”來表達(dá)“躺在；已經(jīng)躺下”的概念（應(yīng)為“had already lain down”或“were already lying”）；等等。但總體而言，這些問題對(duì)意義傳達(dá)影響不大。當(dāng)然，如能將這些問題修正，同時(shí)調(diào)整一些語句（如將“always cast a glimpse”改為“kept glancing”等），則將更加完善。本篇習(xí)作詞匯與語法結(jié)構(gòu)較為豐富，語句間連接成分有效，標(biāo)點(diǎn)準(zhǔn)確。習(xí)作產(chǎn)出188詞（不含開

23、頭語），應(yīng)用了5個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞語，寫出了較多內(nèi)容。根據(jù)本次考試考生的總體情況，本篇習(xí)作建議判為第五檔。 學(xué)生習(xí)作2 The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. The reason was that we couldnt find a hotel， meaning that our tent had to be used and Moms dream came true. Unexpectedly， David noticed that Mon disappeared after dinner. Even

24、tually， it was Dad that found Mom. This absent-minded and forgetful woman explained that she just wanted to seek some charming flowers but got lost finally. However， thanks to Mom， we found a new way with more beautiful views where she got lost. We drove through several states and saw lots of great

25、sights along the way. All of a sudden， as driving， Mom asked， “Where is our camping equipment？” In the end， we had to accept the fact that we ought to return to find it left by Mom. In that time， I thought this trip was in a mess because of Mom. But its obvious for me today that our trip should have

26、 been boring without this loving and sweet lady. There is no person even a wise lady that can match her， my loving， sweet， yet absent-minded and forgetful mom. 點(diǎn)評(píng)2 這篇習(xí)作產(chǎn)出159詞（不含開頭語），應(yīng)用了8個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞語，與短文融洽度較高，盡管續(xù)寫部分與段落開頭語的銜接不能稱之為緊密，但總體而言仍然是合理的。故事情節(jié)上，本篇習(xí)作與上篇一樣，有出乎意料卻合乎情理的設(shè)計(jì)，將目光放在母親的粗心所帶來的好結(jié)果上，做了翻案文章，既與所給短文緊密

27、銜接，也使第二段的情感抒發(fā)顯得自然。語言上，習(xí)作意義傳達(dá)基本清楚，對(duì)語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性、準(zhǔn)確性有較好的注意，文氣總體較為流暢。應(yīng)該說，這篇習(xí)作還是比較順利地完成了交際任務(wù)。尤其值得指出的是，習(xí)作不但注意到了詞匯的豐富性，而且能夠針對(duì)不同的意義與情感表達(dá)需要來變換詞匯（如說母親“absent-minded and forgetful”時(shí)用的是“woman”，說她“l(fā)oving and sweet”時(shí)用了“l(fā)ady”，最后把這兩類品質(zhì)結(jié)合，用了“mom”），這在考生習(xí)作中是不多見的。另外值得稱贊的是，本篇習(xí)作注意了使用不同語法形式來表達(dá)意義（如“its obvious for me today

28、”中現(xiàn)在時(shí)的使用和“our trip should have been boring”中情態(tài)助動(dòng)詞與完成體的結(jié)合等）。當(dāng)然，與上一篇習(xí)作相比，本篇問題稍稍突出一些，主要表現(xiàn)在以下幾個(gè)方面：一是對(duì)詞句意義與語篇意義的聯(lián)系注意不夠，如第一段的“The reason was .”和“meaning .”、第二段的“All of a sudden， as driving”等，讓讀者感覺不好理解；二是對(duì)語法結(jié)構(gòu)的意義把握不準(zhǔn)，導(dǎo)致意義發(fā)生偏差，如“it was Dad that found Mom”（或許是不恰當(dāng)追求“高大上”的結(jié)果）；三是低級(jí)語法錯(cuò)誤導(dǎo)致意義不清，如“There is no perso

29、n even a wise lady that can match her”；四是有少?S不應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)的拼寫方面的錯(cuò)誤，如“Mon”。但是，總體而言，習(xí)作中所出現(xiàn)的問題對(duì)意義傳達(dá)的影響并不突出，長短相較，應(yīng)該說本篇習(xí)作在本次浙江省高考英語中屬于較好的一篇，可考慮判為第四檔。 學(xué)生習(xí)作3 The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. It seemed that we wouldnt get any chance to use it. Just when we felt tough to deal wit

30、h it， a bagger came into our sight. Mom soon came up with an idea that we should give it to him. But the tent was really new and it costed us a lot. Despite Dad， David and Is objection， Mom determined her mind and gave it to the bagger， which means we couldnt do camping anymore. We drove through sev

31、eral states and saw lots of great sights along the way. The trip was wonderful and we really had a nice time in my grandparents house. Time flow so swiftly that we couldnt notice it. After we finished our trip and came back to our sweet house， Mom suddenly found something while checking the baggage.

32、 She whispered： “Where was the tent？” Thats my Mom， a really nice person but also a forgetful and absent-minded woman. ?c評(píng)3 這篇習(xí)作延續(xù)所給短文情節(jié)，圍繞帳篷和母親的健忘續(xù)寫，與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供的開頭語銜接非常緊密，故事設(shè)計(jì)符合邏輯，雖然總體上以說明性語言為主，但也有一定的描述性語言，而且有的還相當(dāng)生動(dòng)，如“She whispered： Where was the tent？”一句，使讀者有如聞其聲之感。但在語言運(yùn)用上，本篇習(xí)作問題較多。語法方面，有時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤（如

33、“which means”“Where was the tent？”）、動(dòng)詞屈折變化錯(cuò)誤（如“it costed”“Time flow”）、限定詞錯(cuò)誤（如“Dad， David and Is objection”“an idea that .”）、介詞錯(cuò)誤（如“in my grandparents house”）、代詞錯(cuò)誤（如“felt”與“tough”之間缺失“it”）等。詞匯方面，有些詞由于意義理解不準(zhǔn)確而誤用，如將“our sweet house”與“our sweet home”混淆；有的則是對(duì)詞匯的搭配和慣用法掌握不到位，如“determined her mind”；有的則可能是受漢

34、語思維的影響，“直譯”為英語后意義不清，如“found something”（應(yīng)為“found something missing”）；有的則是簡單的拼寫錯(cuò)誤，如“bagger”。有意思的是，本篇習(xí)作雖然有不少問題，但考生并沒有對(duì)語言做刻意的變化追求，總體上而言相當(dāng)自然，文氣較為通暢，以上這些錯(cuò)誤對(duì)意義的傳達(dá)并不產(chǎn)生大的影響，不至于過分損及交際任務(wù)的完成。本篇習(xí)作共產(chǎn)出139詞（不含開頭語），應(yīng)用了8個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞語，語句結(jié)構(gòu)與詞匯富于變化，連接手段有效，較好地滿足了任務(wù)的要求，是一篇合格的作文，建議判第三檔的高分。 學(xué)生習(xí)作4 The next day we remembered the bran

35、d-new tent we had brought with us. Until then， it hadnt shown any advantages yet. David and I felt deeply upset about the travel. It didnt seem like camping or travelling but worrying about Mom all the time. The decisions she made and the actions she did must be taken good care of. However， Mom was

36、lighted and was ready to continue the trip. She didnt say any words about the tent， even though Dad had mentioned it many times. Without any hesitation， we continued the trip. She drove happily， while David and I sat quietly behind. We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along

37、the way. It had been several times that my brother screamed out “What a fantastic scenery！” The trip became more interesting. I began to talk with Mom and Dad. I felt warmth through Moms excited voice. We smiled and laughed along the way. With the wonderful sights beside us， we all enjoyed the trip.

38、 That day， I realized that my mom was actually the nicest person in the world. It was her that brought light to our lives. 點(diǎn)評(píng)4 這篇習(xí)作內(nèi)容上與所給短文關(guān)系密切，與所提供各段落開頭語也有很好的銜接，寫出了較多內(nèi)容，文氣基本連貫，但語言上存在較多錯(cuò)誤。語言上的問題，最為突出的是多數(shù)語句系由中文“直譯”而來卻又并不明白所用詞語的真正含義，如續(xù)寫部分的第一句“Until then， it hadnt shown any advantages yet”，須由英文硬譯回漢語才能明

39、白考生所想表達(dá)的意思（“直到那時(shí)，帳篷都還沒有派過用場”意思表達(dá)不清的主要原因應(yīng)該是“until”一詞的意義與用法沒有掌握）。其他如“It didnt seem like camping or travelling but worrying about Mom all the time”“The decisions she made and the actions she did must be taken good care of”“I felt warmth through Moms excited voice”都存在同樣的問題。除此以外，習(xí)作某些詞語（如“Without any hesi

40、tation”）的使用有“生拉硬拽”之嫌，導(dǎo)致語言邏輯不當(dāng)。當(dāng)然，其他習(xí)作中所存在的普通語言問題，也存在于本篇習(xí)作中，如詞匯誤用（如“l(fā)ighted”應(yīng)為“delighted”之誤）、語法錯(cuò)誤（如“What a fantastic scenery”）等，但總體而言，這一類問題較少。本篇習(xí)作產(chǎn)出166詞（不含開頭語），應(yīng)用了5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語，全文內(nèi)容基本連貫，故事設(shè)計(jì)雖然沒有出彩之處，也沒有思想上的升華，但也合情合理，語言上，意義傳達(dá)雖然受到一點(diǎn)影響，但基本完成了交際任務(wù)，可考慮判第三檔中段。 學(xué)生習(xí)作5 The next day we remembered the brand-new

41、tent we had brought with us. David like the tent very much. He like sleeping in the tent. We can sleep in the tent. And we can not found the place to sleep. But mom still said it is a trouble. she always wanted to find a vacancy to sleep. But I thinked. the tent is great. I could see stars and the m

42、oon when I sleep in the tent. And I can look around the nation. We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. I like the trip very much. I could see a funny mom and a funny dad They always didnt agree another. And I also saw many beatiful views. I like this views. Than

43、we visited our grand Parents. They were healthy. And they can play games with us. We lived at grand parents house some days. Then we baced our home. I lived the vacation with my mother. ?c評(píng)5 這篇習(xí)作與所給短文融洽度較高，與所提供各段落開頭語也有很好的銜接，寫出了較多內(nèi)容，文氣基本連貫。情節(jié)內(nèi)容方面，習(xí)作思想較為簡單，平鋪直敘，有點(diǎn)“流水賬”的感覺，但除了如“They always didnt agree

44、another”這樣個(gè)別有點(diǎn)感覺突兀的地方外，總體上應(yīng)該說還是合理的。語言上，本篇習(xí)作問題較多。首先，語句面貌顯得簡陋，除了兩三個(gè)句子外，所有語句都是簡單句。其次，語法錯(cuò)誤較多，如時(shí)、體、態(tài)方面的錯(cuò)誤（“l(fā)ike”“can”“can not found”“is”等），詞的屈折變化形式錯(cuò)誤（“thinked”），介詞錯(cuò)誤（“she always wanted to find a vacancy to sleep”）等。再次，詞匯錯(cuò)誤比較突出，如大小寫錯(cuò)誤（“mom”“grand Parents”“she always wanted”）、拼寫錯(cuò)誤（“Than”“baced”“grand Parents”）、詞義錯(cuò)誤（“l(fā)ived”“vacancy”）、記憶錯(cuò)誤（“nation”應(yīng)為“nature”之誤）、用法錯(cuò)誤（“agree another”）等。此外還有標(biāo)點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤（如“I could see a funny mom and a funny dad”后缺句號(hào)）。這些問題中有不少（如“l(fā)ook around the nation”“we baced our home”）導(dǎo)致了意義的傳達(dá)受到較為嚴(yán)重的影響。本篇習(xí)作共產(chǎn)出139詞（不含開頭語），使用了5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)出的