滬江英語四六級作文

1、一、四、六級作文高分要領(lǐng)（評卷標準、樣卷分析、最新動態(tài)） 評分原則1 CET是檢查考生是否達到大學(xué)英語教學(xué)大綱規(guī)定的四、六級教學(xué)要求，對作文的評判應(yīng)以此要求為準則。2 CET作文題采用總體評分(Global Scoring)方法，閱卷人員就總的印象給出獎勵分(Reward scores), 而不是按語言點的錯誤數(shù)目扣分。3 從內(nèi)容和語言兩個方面對作文進行綜合評判。內(nèi)容和語言是一個統(tǒng)一體。作文應(yīng)表達題目所規(guī)定的內(nèi)容，而內(nèi)容要通過語言來表達。要考慮作文是否切題，是否充分表達思想，也要考慮是否用英語清楚而合適地表達思想，也就是要考慮語言上的錯誤是否造成理解上的障礙。4 避免趨中傾向。該給高

2、分的給高分，包括滿分：該給低分給低分，包括零分，一名閱卷人員在所評閱的全部作文卷中不應(yīng)只給中間的幾種分數(shù)。評分標準：本題滿分為15分1、閱卷標準共分五等：2分、5分、8分、11分及14分。各有標準樣卷一至二份。2、閱卷人員根據(jù)閱卷標準，對照樣卷評分，若認為與某一分數(shù)（如8分）相似，即定為該分數(shù)（即8分）；若認為稍優(yōu)或稍劣于該分數(shù)則可加一分（即9分）或減一分（即7分）。不得加或減半分。3、評分標準2分條理不清，思路紊亂，語言支離破碎或大部分句子均有錯誤，且多數(shù)為嚴重錯誤5分基本切題。表達思想不清楚，連貫性差。有較多的嚴重語言錯誤。8分基本切題。有些地方表達思想不夠清楚，文字勉強連貫；語言錯誤相當(dāng)

3、多，其中有一些是嚴重錯誤。11分切題。表達思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量語言錯誤。14分切題。表達思想清楚，文字通順，連貫性較好，基本上無語言錯誤，僅有個別小錯。注：白卷，作文與題目毫不相關(guān)，或只有幾個孤立的詞而無法表達思想，則給0分。14 points 漂漂亮亮型 11 points 清清楚楚型8 points 馬馬虎虎型5 points 稀里糊涂型2 points 一塌糊涂型 作文的Range finder 窗體頂端              

4、                                         Teacher's Day 14 points 漂漂亮亮型 Teaching is the most

5、 glorious and respectable career. On Teachers Day, I'd like to express my innermost appreciation and gratefulness to all the teachers in the world!Teachers are the elevators of human souls. I still remember how my teachers pulled me through a critical moment. I did a bad job in the first prepara

6、tion test for the college entrance examination and I was considerably depressed. Then my teachers came to my rescue! Patiently, my English teacher analysed the paper word by word and encouraged me to carry on. My Chemistry teacher also gave me a precious gift. He told me not to be obsessed with the

7、test results and encouraged me to find fun in learning. Their help enabled me to survive the competition and will surely benefit me in the future.Perhaps I'll never have a chance to repay all that I have received from my teachers. But I'll try to be a useful person and become their pride.

8、60;窗體底端窗體頂端 11 points 清清楚楚型 Teacher's Day is coming. On this occasion, I want to deliver my genuine gratitude to all the teachers.I will never forget my class teacher's devotion and care to me. Before National Entrance Examinations, I was so nervous that I couldn't focus on the

9、 books. I wasn't confident about my ability. The idea of giving up even occurred to me. My teacher noticed my anxiety. Then she encouraged me and advised me a lot. She told me how she overcame the obstacles of life when she was faced up with important affairs. Her words touched me a lot. And I b

10、egan to face the exam with full courage and confidence. Luckily I achieved my exams successfully. I know its the result of my teacher's love and care.I will cherish the words of her through my life. I will try to face the difficulties in my life without hesitation. That's the best way to ret

11、urn her love.  窗體底端窗體頂端 8 points 馬馬虎虎型Today is teacher's day. I want to give best wishes to my teachers, who assist me to learn and who shape the world to me.I remember it was in 2001, I would have the chemistry olimpic competition for high school students. As the only one girl in my c

12、lass, I didn't have confidence to compete with my boy classmates. Mr. Wang who was my classmaster always encouraged me: “remember girls can do all things what boys can do.” Besides, he helped me with my studies. Even during the winter vacation we could do some interesting small experiments at Mr

13、. Wang's home. What he made us known are not only some difficult questions but also the core for science, the love for science and the courage to think and to ask questions. In berief, Mr. Wang made us enjoy scince rather than work just to win the game.Today I am studying in university. I'll

14、 always remember what Mr. Wang taughter us, I will work hard on my studies and remind myself to work for the benefit of humans. 窗體底端窗體頂端5 points 稀里糊涂型 Today is Teacher's Day. Happy Teacher's Day, my teachers.In the evening, all of my classmates and I make a party for our teachers. In th

15、e party, each of us give prerents to teachers and hope them feeling happy and heathy. Then, teachers and us play together. All of us feel very happy. I also remember when I was in my midschool, my English teacher help me to study English. At that time, my English is very very poor. Although I s

16、tudied it day and night, it seemed worthier and worthier. Then my English teacher told me that the way I studying is worry. He told me the right way and help me friendly everyday. With his help, my English became better and better. Teachers are also friends for us. I think I must study hard to repay

17、 my teacher. 窗體底端窗體頂端2 points 一塌糊涂型Teacher's Day. Happy Day. I hope teachers feel luck. I believe it is time we elevated the teache to the space where it belongs, thereby setting an example to the people to the teacher's attitude. Remember, when I was a young boy, I am a outrageous boy,

18、 In the classroom, I have been observed to throw something across the court without conside such a move might have angry someone in their seat. Therefor, my teacher Mr. Li always smailed to me. She offen talk to me. You like athletic,like jodan. I feel happy. She tall me when class is over, don'

19、t do it in class. We can play together when our class is over. Not so just, I sometimes throw something at someone, yet. But, I can remmber my theacher's words. Don't do it!Is there enough helps to help secure me futute? I certainly thisnk so. Thanks, Teacher.Theacher, you may soon see and p

20、ossibly feel difference in your reaction I am going to a teache to help some students like me. Actually, I will become student's good freinds.   窗體底端窗體頂端2、考生在寫作中常見困境及應(yīng)對策略一、滔滔不絕“意識流” 二，無話可說真難受三，真情流露沒必要四，英語表達憋得慌五、處于被動要包裝六，字數(shù)不夠時間緊 窗體底端窗體頂端3、四、六考試考場作文典型錯誤剖析縱觀近年來的閱卷情況，學(xué)生的作文主要有以下幾個方面的問題

21、：第一、英語語法結(jié)構(gòu)知識欠缺，語句問題嚴重。第二、積極詞匯量太小，且對已學(xué)詞匯記憶不清，用詞貧乏。      第三、表達思想不清楚，漢化現(xiàn)象嚴重。窗體底端窗體頂端案例1：（中文直接漢化，影響意思的表達）1. Teacher's Day Happy! 2. That's in junior, My first love had been false. （用詞不當(dāng)）It made （用詞貧乏） me a low emotion so that my study bring down （漢化）quickly. Until t

22、hat day, my headmaster talked with me many many things. （漢化）She told me: The false is the mother of success. What can I do for the society in the future and how to meet the love and so forth. （漢化導(dǎo)致意思表達混亂） 窗體底端窗體頂端案例2 （常見的連續(xù)漢化問題，逗號一路貫穿）3. Last month, I was ill, had to live I hospital, my mother

23、worried my class was delaied, because there was an exam in resently.  4. Now I had grown up, a senior student, after 3 years I will leave university for communication and society, I hope I will become a teacher like my teacher, take my love to every student, live on their spirit. 窗體底端窗體頂端案

24、例 3（漢化中式諺語或名言，令人啼笑皆非） 5. “one day as teacher, my parents all life.” 6. candles are burnt out while your tears are dried.7. The teacher likes the cow, eat grass, squeeze the milk.8. Teachers like the people who watered the flowers in the park. They teach us, need no back. 窗體底端窗體頂端案例 4 （思想膚淺

25、，表達混亂）9. No teacher, no today's me.10 .You said me, you are not a easy to die person.11.Teachers like wax.12. The teacher like my mother.13. You are day to night to work for us with many much study. 窗體底端案例 5 （用詞不當(dāng)，貽笑大方）14. If you have questions, you can come to the restroom to ask me. My En

26、glish teacher often take me to restroom to talk.休息室居然寫成了洗手間！ 15. He touch my body softly.  I want your body health.   I want you.             touched me day and night.Touch詞義的混淆，造成令人捧腹的笑話！Want 錯誤的表達成“祝愿”窗體頂端16. Let's

27、 marry our teachers. All teachers marry together.是marry or merry, 讓人費解！ 17. The teacher studied him carefully in the classroom and took the afternoon to study him instead of eating anything.Study 一詞不知何意？  窗體底端窗體頂端案例 6 詞匯詞性混淆，造成結(jié)構(gòu)錯誤17. I instead of all of classes to congratulation to you ha

28、ppy Teacher's Day. 窗體底端窗體頂端      這里引述的例句與考生通篇作文的寫作水平是一致的，其中5、6分的例句具有典型性，代表了近乎中等水平考生的寫作水平。從這些例句中不難看出，中等水平的考生，事實上也包括中上等水平的考生，在寫作上存在的主要問題是表達思想不清楚。表達思想不清楚的主要原因是考生作文中嚴重漢化的英語，即中式英語，比如： "man can live happiness"， "Man is iron, and food is steel.", Women

29、are half side sky.。此外，語言錯誤的普遍性和嚴重性十分驚人，比如，主謂不一致，名詞單復(fù)數(shù)不分，動詞時態(tài)語態(tài)濫用，常用詞拼寫錯誤比比皆是。這些嚴重地影響了思想的表達。考試實踐表明，多數(shù)考生在寫作上的主要欠缺不是系統(tǒng)的寫作理論和方法，而是最基本的單句寫作能力。 文章無論長短，都是由句子組成的，句子是表達思想的最基本的單位。因此，句子是否能寫得正確、達意和清楚，將直接影響整篇文章的寫作質(zhì)量。 窗體底端窗體頂端4、四、六級作文突破：下筆有神作文法（詞匯句型段落篇章四位一體） 一、詞匯進階1、 作文對于詞匯的要求詞匯量詞匯選擇詞匯禁忌Use Form Meaning

30、 窗體底端窗體頂端2、 詞匯之打通關(guān)節(jié)法Transitional words and phrases 3、 詞匯之應(yīng)試包裝法詞性的正確使用 生僻不如熟悉詞義的確定把握 大詞不如小詞一般詞匯和具體詞匯。窗體底端Sample:1.Lookat  -Blink/gaze/discern/glance/glimpse/inspect/note/notice/observe/peer/stare/survey/watch  2. think-Conclude/consider/contemplate/deduce/gather/guess/infer/judge/reaso

31、n/reflect/speculate/suppose 窗體頂端二、句子寫作進階1.長句不如短句，從句不如分詞少犯語法錯誤，行文流暢。E.g.Yesterday we worked very late and we didt stop until the clock struck midnight in order that we could fulfill our task on time. Yesterday we stayed up late, working hard in order to fulfill the task on time. 窗體底端2.

32、 句子句式多樣化，注意時態(tài)語態(tài)常用議論文句式：窗體頂端三、段落進階：三句式段落展開技法一個段落由三類句子組成：1主題句（topic sentence）。一般位于段首，提出段落主題、確定段落發(fā)展方向及展開模式。2擴展句（supporting/developing sentences）。用以闡述、論證、支持、說明主題句的要點。3終結(jié)句（paragraph terminator 或concluding sentence）。提出結(jié)論、深化主題并與主題句呼應(yīng)。4-4-23-5-2 窗體底端窗體頂端Sample paragraph It is not difficult to make a ri

33、ght choice between buying a house in the low-rise area and buying one in the high-rise area(主題句). If we want to economize and get more personal area, we can choose the low-rise; but if we want to live more comfortably, we will choose the high-rise(擴展句). In short, the key lies in the alternative of e

34、conomy and comfort(終結(jié)句).  窗體底端窗體頂端例題：Topic: Private cars and city traffic  近年來中國城市出現(xiàn)的私家車熱.  私家車的優(yōu)缺點 你對我國城市私家車發(fā)展前景的看法。 窗體底端窗體頂端¨       1. Nowadays, more and more cars are being turned out for private use and pouring into the C

35、hinese citys traffic flow¨       2. Different people have different attitudes towards owning private cars¨       3. With all the disadvantages private cars may have, I think they will not stop increase in number. But some measures

36、 have to be taken to ensure their healthy development 窗體底端窗體頂端         這是一篇典型的提綱式考試短文寫作題。¨       第一段的主題句立意在more and more private cars 和pouring into the Chinese citys traffic flow, 明確了該段闡述的重點是私家車“多”和它對城市交通的影響，讀者一看主題句就能知道本

37、段接下去是什么內(nèi)容。¨       同樣，第二段的要點在different people 對私家車 的different attitudes; ¨       第三段要著重探討私家車健康發(fā)展的some measures。   窗體底端窗體頂端1、議論文的“三板斧”（對比分析、現(xiàn)象原因、利弊分析） 2、現(xiàn)象原因分析原因型作文是議論文寫作的常見題型之一。解題思路：窗體底端窗體頂端Topic: 1.問題/現(xiàn)象現(xiàn)狀 

38、0;         2.怎樣解決（解決方案或原因） P1: problem ( general ) 現(xiàn)象( specific) 舉例/列舉說明P2: introduction （起） cause 1detail 1cause 2 detail 2cause 3detail 3summary (合)P3: my viewconclusion (客觀委婉)  窗體底端窗體頂端3、應(yīng)用文體書信 投訴信感謝性邀請信基本要求：言簡意賅；開門見山；表達清晰。 窗體底端窗體頂端三、圖表題

39、Topic:  1.說明圖表 （數(shù)據(jù)和時間）         2. 引起變化的原因圖表作文通常模式：對圖表的描述，注意要抓住重要信息，不必面面俱到。對圖表的概括，指分析圖表中現(xiàn)象的原因或解決問題的辦法。對圖表所作的結(jié)論，可以是歸納或者是個人引申的觀點。 窗體底端老師講的話Amy(elfish瑤) 20:00:47閱卷經(jīng)驗Amy(elfish瑤) 20:00:50極品Amy(elfish瑤) 20:01:15逗號一路下去。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:01:20就會。Amy(elfish瑤) 2

40、0:01:24語法全錯。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:01:47Last month, I was ill, had to live I hospital, my mother worried my class was delaied, because there was an exam in resently.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:02:01迅速加句號。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:02:22笑死Amy(elfish瑤) 20:02:37run-on sentenceAmy(elfish瑤) 20:02:41要避免Amy(elfish瑤) 20:02:52“one day as

41、 teacher, my parents all life.”Amy(elfish瑤) 20:03:03笑死啦Amy(elfish瑤) 20:03:09candles are burnt out while your tears are dried.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:03:27The teacher likes the cow, eat grass, squeeze the milk.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:03:44擠壓Amy(elfish瑤) 20:04:12Teachers like the people who watered the flowers in the

42、 park. They teach us, need no back.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:04:24斷背！Amy(elfish瑤) 20:04:30O_O"Amy(elfish瑤) 20:04:5110 .You said me, you are not a easy to die person.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:05:03The teacher like my mother.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:05:21like不能亂用哦Amy(elfish瑤) 20:05:25be like.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:05:36錯例！Amy(elfis

43、h瑤) 20:06:15洗手間restroomAmy(elfish瑤) 20:06:37。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:07:12研究？Amy(elfish瑤) 20:07:29merry歡樂Amy(elfish瑤) 20:07:47不能忽視詞性Amy(elfish瑤) 20:07:53不能死記單詞Amy(elfish瑤) 20:09:15restroom你跟外國人說。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:09:18都會以為是廁所哦。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:09:44holdAmy(elfish瑤) 20:10:09maintainAmy(elfish瑤) 20:10:13觀點。Amy(e

44、lfish瑤) 20:10:48關(guān)節(jié)Amy(elfish瑤) 20:10:59轉(zhuǎn)折詞，轉(zhuǎn)折短語Amy(elfish瑤) 20:11:31形合意合Amy(elfish瑤) 20:11:58生僻Amy(elfish瑤) 20:12:24后面會做回顧視頻。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:12:31不要著急。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:12:34會給大家的Amy(elfish瑤) 20:12:52lookAmy(elfish瑤) 20:13:01太general了。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:13:101.Lookat -Blink/gaze/discern/glance/glimpse/in

45、spect/note/notice/observe/peer/stare/survey/watchAmy(elfish瑤) 20:13:202. think-Conclude/consider/contemplate/deduce/gather/guess/infer/judge/reason/reflect/speculate/supposeAmy(elfish瑤) 20:13:42近義詞表達Amy(elfish瑤) 20:13:52有水平。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:14:19長句不如短句，從句不如分詞Amy(elfish瑤) 20:14:47一旦用分詞。Amy(elfish瑤) 20

46、:14:57Yesterday we worked very late and we didt stop until the clock struck midnight in order that we could fulfill our task on time.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:15:34好陰險Amy(elfish瑤) 20:15:50Yesterday we stayed up late, working hard in order to fulfill the task on time.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:16:352. 句子句式多樣化，注意時態(tài)語態(tài)Amy(elfish瑤) 20:17:45主題句Amy(elfish瑤) 20:17:48拓展句Amy(elfish瑤) 20:18:11只是used to be.Amy(elfish瑤) 20:18:15現(xiàn)在不是了。Amy(elfish瑤) 20:18:44442Amy(elfish瑤) 20:18:524-4-23-5-2Amy(elfish瑤) 20:19:14不是老師