書面表達(dá)分析

1、書面表達(dá)分析書面表達(dá)分析廣州市作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：廣州市作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：A檔檔(15-13.5分分) 內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)全部涵蓋，表達(dá)清楚，并有一定的發(fā)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)全部涵蓋，表達(dá)清楚，并有一定的發(fā) 揮揮;語言知識(shí)運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，行文連語言知識(shí)運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，行文連貫，得體性好。貫，得體性好。B檔檔(13-9.5分分) 內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)基本涵蓋，語言知識(shí)運(yùn)用基本準(zhǔn)確，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)基本涵蓋，語言知識(shí)運(yùn)用基本準(zhǔn)確， 有少量錯(cuò)誤，但表達(dá)基本清楚，文章組織結(jié)構(gòu)有少量錯(cuò)誤，但表達(dá)基本清楚，文章組織結(jié)構(gòu) 條理性、連貫性、得體性一般。條理性、連貫性、得體性一般。C檔檔(9-7分分) 超過超過1/3的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)表達(dá)欠缺，語言知識(shí)運(yùn)

2、用錯(cuò)的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)表達(dá)欠缺，語言知識(shí)運(yùn)用錯(cuò) 誤較多，但尚能表達(dá)基本意思；文章組織、連誤較多，但尚能表達(dá)基本意思；文章組織、連貫性欠缺。貫性欠缺。D檔檔(6-3分分) 超過超過1/2至至1/3的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)表達(dá)欠缺，語言知識(shí)的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)表達(dá)欠缺，語言知識(shí) 運(yùn)用能力差，文章結(jié)構(gòu)、連貫性差，表達(dá)不清運(yùn)用能力差，文章結(jié)構(gòu)、連貫性差，表達(dá)不清E檔檔(2-0分分) 白卷、直言片語，或文不對(duì)題、不知所云，談不白卷、直言片語，或文不對(duì)題、不知所云，談不上內(nèi)容及表達(dá)的合理性。上內(nèi)容及表達(dá)的合理性。評(píng)卷老師喜歡的文章評(píng)卷老師喜歡的文章評(píng)卷老師不喜歡的文章評(píng)卷老師不喜歡的文章字體工整，卷面干凈字體工整，卷面干凈涂涂抹抹，斑斑

3、點(diǎn)點(diǎn)涂涂抹抹，斑斑點(diǎn)點(diǎn)緊扣主題，調(diào)理清晰緊扣主題，調(diào)理清晰層次不清，段落不分層次不清，段落不分語言地道，過渡自然語言地道，過渡自然語句不通，雜亂無章語句不通，雜亂無章長度適中，一氣呵成長度適中，一氣呵成書寫潦草，卷面不潔書寫潦草，卷面不潔 為了使同學(xué)們與人交往時(shí)舉止更加文雅，你校學(xué)生為了使同學(xué)們與人交往時(shí)舉止更加文雅，你校學(xué)生會(huì)正在舉辦以會(huì)正在舉辦以 how to behave well ? 為主題的英文征為主題的英文征文比賽，請(qǐng)你用英語寫一篇文比賽，請(qǐng)你用英語寫一篇80詞左右的短文。詞左右的短文。 短文要點(diǎn)如下：短文要點(diǎn)如下： 1. 學(xué)生應(yīng)該守時(shí)，守信，不撒謊，不說臟話；學(xué)生應(yīng)該守時(shí)，守信，

4、不撒謊，不說臟話； 2. 禮貌待人，熱心助人。禮貌待人，熱心助人。 3. 遵守交通規(guī)則，不在公共場所喧嘩，不亂扔垃圾。遵守交通規(guī)則，不在公共場所喧嘩，不亂扔垃圾。 4. 請(qǐng)你就此話題再補(bǔ)充一至兩點(diǎn)個(gè)人看法。請(qǐng)你就此話題再補(bǔ)充一至兩點(diǎn)個(gè)人看法。 參考詞匯：參考詞匯：dirty words臟話臟話 keep promises守信守信 be polite to對(duì)對(duì)-有禮貌有禮貌 be ready to do樂意做某事樂意做某事 obey traffic rules遵守交通規(guī)則遵守交通規(guī)則 短文開頭已給出：短文開頭已給出： Behaving well is the secret of getting

5、on well with others. 學(xué)生例文學(xué)生例文1 But how to behave well? Here are some advice. First of all, as a student, you should do everything on time, keep promise, not to tell lies and not to say dirty words. Its also import to be polite to others and helpful. But if you break traffic rules, speak loudly in st

6、reet, hospital or restaurant or throw rubbishes everywhere, you wont be a man who behave well. To behave well, the most important is to keep gentle everywhere, everytime.不會(huì)寫不會(huì)寫in public, 用舉例說明，聰明的方法！用舉例說明，聰明的方法！紅色字體下劃線字體使文章連貫，流暢，加分點(diǎn)！紅色字體下劃線字體使文章連貫，流暢，加分點(diǎn)！2.5分分要點(diǎn)是否齊全，有發(fā)揮的一至兩點(diǎn)嗎？要點(diǎn)是否齊全，有發(fā)揮的一至兩點(diǎn)嗎？ 有！有！

7、內(nèi)容內(nèi)容6分！分！再看看表達(dá)是否有錯(cuò)誤。再看看表達(dá)是否有錯(cuò)誤。不要象中文那樣一逗到底，英文是一個(gè)主謂就成一句。不要象中文那樣一逗到底，英文是一個(gè)主謂就成一句。rubbishBehaves無把握的句型不要用，尤其是定語從句！無把握的句型不要用，尤其是定語從句！分析此句，分析此句，and helpful是否位置放錯(cuò)或另開一句？是否位置放錯(cuò)或另開一句？內(nèi)容內(nèi)容6分，表達(dá)有分，表達(dá)有4處錯(cuò)，有一處較嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤，給處錯(cuò)，有一處較嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤，給4.5分，流暢性分，流暢性2.5分。共分。共13分。分。 As student should get to school on time and keep promis

8、e. So we should not tell a lie and speak dirty words. Certainly, we should be polite to others and be helpful to others . We also obey traffic rules. And we shouldnt speak loudly in the public and throw rubbish anywhere. I think that it is also important for us to respect the old. More importantly,

9、we should always with a smile on the face and make a good impression on others. In order to behaving well, try the following advice.學(xué)生例文學(xué)生例文2要點(diǎn)要點(diǎn) 內(nèi)容內(nèi)容 流暢流暢 嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤！有謂語嗎？嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤！有謂語嗎？Above以上的以上的624 To be a student, we do anything should on time, and we cant tell the lie. Yes! We should keep promise, we can

10、t say dirty words. Second, we should be polite to others, most important, is we should help the other people. Third, obey traffic rules, dont make noise and dont throw rubbis here and there are we should do.In my opinion, Dont eating in the class is most important for us.學(xué)生例文學(xué)生例文36 + 3 + 1.5 = 10.5學(xué)

11、生學(xué)生例例文文4 Students should keep promise, dont tell a lie and talk impolite. And we need be polite to other, also be ready to help others. It is important for us to obey traffic rules. Dont speak loudly and dont throw rubbish everywhere. Lets try our best to do this things well. 沒寫沒寫“不講臟話不講臟話”，沒有發(fā)揮，表達(dá)過

12、去簡單，次數(shù)不，沒有發(fā)揮，表達(dá)過去簡單，次數(shù)不夠。內(nèi)容得夠。內(nèi)容得4.5分分這是結(jié)束語，這是結(jié)束語， 不是觀點(diǎn)的發(fā)揮。不是觀點(diǎn)的發(fā)揮。4.5 + 3 + 1.5 = 9 學(xué)生例文學(xué)生例文5 Student should keep promise in the daily life. Dont tell a lie and talk impolite. And we need be polite to other. also be ready to help other. It is, important for us to obey traffic rules. Dont speak loud

13、ly and throw russish every where. 4+1+0.5 = 5.5范文范文 Behaving well is the secret of getting on well with others. As a student, I think its very important to do everything on time and keep promises. Never lie to others or say dirty words. We should be polite to others and ready to help people in need. Wed better not talk loudly in public. Dont throw litter or spit about.