英語-江蘇省南京市2017屆高三公開課教學課件：調研測試書面表達

1、Writing AssessmentWriting Assessment By the end of the lesson, youll be able to 1. make a summary of a short passage；2. learn the steps of organizing your essay effectively；3. know how to assess your essay.What makes a good essay?Question for discussion Clean and clear handwriting All points include

2、d& to the pointGood beginning & endingWell organized paragraphsProper linking words No grammatical mistakesAppropriate wordsVaried sentence patterns A Good EssayStructure Opening Body Conclusion Topic sentenceSupporting sentencesConcluding sentenceSix steps to organize an essay Step 1 Read i

3、nstructions Step 2 Make an outline Step 3 List key points Step 4 Link words into cohesive(連貫) sentences Step 5 Organize sentences into paragraphs Step 6 Polish up your writingStep 1 Read instructions 30; 120; at least two points; no original sentences Theme: handle obstacles in life 3 paragraphs Ste

4、p 2 : Make an outlineP1 Summary P3 Ways to deal with personal obstacles The story tells of P2 General inspirations What inspires me I was deeply impressed byPersonally,From where I stand,Steps 3-6 Step 3 : Make a list of key points of each paragraph Step 4 : Combine each points into cohesive sentenc

5、es Step 5: Combine sentences into a well structured paragraph Step 6: Polish up your writingParagraph 1 : Make a summary Q: How to make a summary of a narrative(敘述) writing? Based on the basic elementsWho What (events)How (effects) Why (reasons)the elements involved Who What (event)How (ways/effects

6、)Ellick, a 7 year old girl;has no handswon a hand writing competitionmade her parents proud; made people amazedWhich one is better? 1.Overcoming her disability, Ellick won a handwriting competition for the disabled kids, without even using prosthetics. Her courage and determination are inspiring and

7、 impressive. 2.A seven-year-old girl was born without hand. But she had a great tendency to be independent since she was a baby. Finally she won a national award for handwriting for special-need students even without prosthetics. Paragraph 2 Paragraph 2 inspirationsinspirations(2 Points at least)(2

8、Points at least)3 steps to follow 1) Write down the key points by asking yourself the following questions: Q1 What inspires you most? (What) Q2 Why are you inspired? (Why) Q3 How do these aspects influence our life? (How) Q1 What? positive attitude optimism; courage; bravery determination; persevera

9、nce ; persistence constant effort; Q2 Why ? positive attitude; constant effortIn front of obstacles, too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life.Although the little girl is disabled, she is brave enough to face up to the biggest obstacle in her life. Q

10、3 How ? When we are in the dark, positive attitude _. Constant effort together with positive attitude will_.serves as the light we can use to find our correct path and secure a better destinationbring us success 2) Combine all the points into cohesive (連貫連貫) sentences by using linking phrases Just f

11、or reference: What touches me most is Anyas positive attitude as well as her constant effort facing obstacles. (1)_ (現實中現實中), too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life, (2)_the little girl, (3)_the fact that she is disabled, is brave enough to face u

12、p to the biggest obstacle in her life. (4)_her achievement shows us that when we are in the dark, positive attitude serves as the light to find our correct path and secure a better destination. (5)_, together with positive attitudes, constant efforts will bring us sure success. In realitywhiledespit

13、eAndMeanwhile 3) Polish up your writing Try to use some advanced words and varied sentence patterns: _(讓我觸動最深的是) is Anyas positive attitude as well as her constant effort _（當遭遇困難時）. In reality, too many people choose to _(退縮) because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life, while the litt

14、le girl, _（倒裝句：雖然她殘疾了）, is brave enough to _(直面) the biggest obstacle in her life. And she shows us that when we are in the dark, _(強調句式：正是積極的態(tài)度）serves as the light for us to find our correct path and secure a better destination. _（倒裝句：同樣重要的是） our constant effort towards our goal with the courage of

15、 never giving up, which will _(收獲) sure success. 讓我觸動最深的是What touches/inspires/enlightens me most is.What impresses / strikes me is 當遭遇困難時in front of obstacleswhen facing/ encountering faced with/ confronted with obstaclesmeeting with/ running up against 退縮 /放棄 shrink back; hold back; withdraw give

16、up; give in; surrender; 雖然她殘疾了(inverted sentence)Disabled as she is 直面困難face up to / facewith courage; face bravely ,正是積極的態(tài)度充當著指引我們正確道路的光(it isthat） , it is positive attitude that serves as the light for us to find our correct path. 同樣重要的是 (inverted sentence)Equally important is 收獲成功yield / help you

17、 reap/harvest success Possible version What touches me most is Anyas positive attitude as well as her constant effort when confronted with obstacles. In reality, too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life, while the little girl, disabled as she is, is

18、 brave enough to face up to the biggest obstacle in her life. And she shows us that when we are in the dark, it is positive attitude that serves as the light we can use to find our correct path and secure a better destination. Equally important is our constant effort towards our goal with the courag

19、e of never giving up, which will yield sure success. Time for polishing Group work:revise a students writing belowRevised version for referenceI was deeply impressed by the story. Just like Anaya, we may face various challenges and difficulties, but it is positive attitude that will help us get through them. From the story, I learn that the attitude as well as the spirit of hard working play an equally important role in our lives. Besides, perseverance is a key quality that we all need to possess, which will help us stick to the end and finally achieve