海淀二模英語作文講評復習進程

1、海淀二模英語作文講評 主要考查考生根據(jù)寫作任務的要求主要考查考生根據(jù)寫作任務的要求進行英語書面表達的能力進行英語書面表達的能力 1. 根據(jù)不同文體，使用恰當?shù)恼Z言形式根據(jù)不同文體，使用恰當?shù)恼Z言形式完成書面交際任務；完成書面交際任務； 2. 運用恰當?shù)木涫?、詞匯和語法，敘述、運用恰當?shù)木涫?、詞匯和語法，敘述、描述、表達觀點和態(tài)度；描述、表達觀點和態(tài)度； 3. 做到文章扣題、內(nèi)容充實、結(jié)構(gòu)完整、做到文章扣題、內(nèi)容充實、結(jié)構(gòu)完整、邏輯性強、語義連貫。邏輯性強、語義連貫。情景作文評分標準情景作文評分標準第一檔 優(yōu)秀（18 20分）：完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務。 覆蓋了所有內(nèi)容要點覆蓋了所有內(nèi)容要點；

2、運用了多樣的句式多樣的句式和豐富的詞匯豐富的詞匯； 語法或用詞方面有個別錯誤，但為盡可能表達豐富的內(nèi)容所致；體現(xiàn)了較強的語言運用能力； 有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，所寫內(nèi)容連貫內(nèi)容連貫、結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。 完全達到了預期的寫作目的。 應考慮內(nèi)容要點的完整性、上下文的連貫、應考慮內(nèi)容要點的完整性、上下文的連貫、詞匯詞匯和句式的多樣性及語言的準確性和句式的多樣性及語言的準確性。情景作文情景作文 假設(shè)近日你在網(wǎng)上參加了一場假設(shè)近日你在網(wǎng)上參加了一場關(guān)于高考英語是否應該一年關(guān)于高考英語是否應該一年多考的討論多考的討論，人們對此見解不一。請根據(jù)下表提示，用英，人們對此見解不一。請根據(jù)下表提示，用英語寫

3、一篇稿件，語寫一篇稿件，簡述兩種觀點并表明你的態(tài)度。簡述兩種觀點并表明你的態(tài)度。 注意：注意：1.稿件的開頭已為你寫好。稿件的開頭已為你寫好。 2.詞數(shù)不少于詞數(shù)不少于60。支支 持持擔擔 憂憂迎合高考改革的需要迎合高考改革的需要增加師生負擔增加師生負擔學生能獲得更多機會學生能獲得更多機會浪費人力、財力及其他社浪費人力、財力及其他社會資源會資源減輕家長和學生的壓力減輕家長和學生的壓力話題：話題：Whether more MET opportunities should be provided each year.文體：文體：論說：觀點對比類論說：觀點對比類 （簡述兩種觀點并表明自己的觀點）（簡

4、述兩種觀點并表明自己的觀點）時態(tài)：時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時為主一般現(xiàn)在時為主 人稱人稱：第三人稱（簡述兩種觀點）第三人稱（簡述兩種觀點） 第一人稱（個人觀點）第一人稱（個人觀點）審文字審文字要點和細節(jié)要點和細節(jié)段落一：問題和現(xiàn)象（已給出）段落一：問題和現(xiàn)象（已給出）段落二：段落二： 有一些人持支持態(tài)度有一些人持支持態(tài)度（主題句）（主題句）： 1）迎合高考改革的需要）迎合高考改革的需要 2）學生能獲得更多機會）學生能獲得更多機會 3）減輕家長和學生的壓力。）減輕家長和學生的壓力。段落三：段落三： 有一些人持擔憂的態(tài)度有一些人持擔憂的態(tài)度（主題句）（主題句）： 1）增加師生負擔）增加師生負擔 2）浪費人力

5、、財力及其他社會資源）浪費人力、財力及其他社會資源段落四：我的觀點是段落四：我的觀點是-（主旨句）。原因一二。總結(jié)。（主旨句）。原因一二?？偨Y(jié)。問題：問題：1. 書寫不規(guī)范書寫不規(guī)范, 涂改不標準，卷面亂，難辨認涂改不標準，卷面亂，難辨認2. 整體時態(tài)錯誤；過去時與現(xiàn)在時混用整體時態(tài)錯誤；過去時與現(xiàn)在時混用3. 不按英語句子結(jié)構(gòu)組建句子。不按英語句子結(jié)構(gòu)組建句子。4. 簡單翻譯，句式簡單，羅列。沒有連接詞，沒簡單翻譯，句式簡單，羅列。沒有連接詞，沒 有適當?shù)奶砑?，缺乏邏輯性，語言質(zhì)量低。有適當?shù)奶砑?，缺乏邏輯性，語言質(zhì)量低。5.文章結(jié)構(gòu)安排不合理，兩種觀點沒有分段寫，文章結(jié)構(gòu)安排不合理，兩種觀

6、點沒有分段寫，個人觀點篇幅過長或缺乏個人觀點。個人觀點篇幅過長或缺乏個人觀點。6. 表達不準確表達不準確問題：問題：1.影響文章主旨的單詞拼寫錯誤（嚴重）影響文章主旨的單詞拼寫錯誤（嚴重） testtext reformevolution/revolution vainvein resourcesource2.時態(tài)錯誤（表達觀點認識用一般現(xiàn)在時）時態(tài)錯誤（表達觀點認識用一般現(xiàn)在時） 三單的動詞形式，三單的動詞形式，3.語言表達錯誤多語言表達錯誤多 cater for/to the need offit meet the need of4.用詞不考慮詞性用詞不考慮詞性 get rid of ne

7、rvous- opposite adj oppose （v.）5.文章結(jié)構(gòu)不清，正反方意見放在同一段落。文章結(jié)構(gòu)不清，正反方意見放在同一段落。6.名詞的數(shù)名詞的數(shù) more chances/more opportunities much more pressure many more resources7. because引導的從句（只有從句沒有主句）引導的從句（只有從句沒有主句）典型錯誤舉例典型錯誤舉例 雙謂語：雙謂語：There are people support (正確應該用：正確應該用：supporting) that 詞匯選擇：改革：不能用詞匯選擇：改革：不能用revolution

8、，應該用，應該用reform a waste of money, people (labor人力人力) and other social resources. 搭配：搭配：provide students (with) more opportunities Match (meet) the needs of (for) MET reform feel stressful (stressed) 連接詞：連接詞：on the one hand, on the other hand 詞性錯誤：詞性錯誤：It can relief (relieve) stress. They (are) agains

9、t the idea. 迎合高考改革的需要：迎合高考改革的需要：cater to/for the needs for MET reform meet the requirements/demands for MET reform 學生能獲得更多的機會：學生能獲得更多的機會：Students can gain/get/obtain more chances Students can be provided with/be offered more opportunities 減輕家長和學生的壓力：減輕家長和學生的壓力：reduce/relieve the stress/pressure of b

10、oth parents and students 增加負擔：增加負擔：lay/place/impose a burden on sb. 浪費人力、財力及其他社會資源浪費人力、財力及其他社會資源waste (v.) money, labor/work force and other social resourcesa waste (n.) of money, labor and other social resources正確表達正確表達標準范文標準范文 Recently I have joined in a discussion on the Internet about whether mo

11、re MET opportunities should be provided each year. Of course, different people have different opinions on the issue. Some are in favor of this idea, while others express their worries about it.（與首句銜接）（與首句銜接） Those who are for this idea think that more test opportunities each year meets the need for

12、MET reform. It allows students to have more chances and also helps reduce the stress of both parents and students. Those who feel worried believe that more test opportunities each year will add too much of a burden to both students and teachers. Besides, it will be a waste of money, labor and other

13、social resources. As far as I am concerned, the more chances the better. More test opportunities each year will improve the fairness of MET.優(yōu)秀范文優(yōu)秀范文 抄寫抄寫 Recently I have joined in a discussion on the Internet about whether more MET opportunities should be provided each year. Different people have di

14、fferent opinions about the suggestion.(與與首句銜接首句銜接)Some people are supportive of the idea that MET should be held more than once in a year. （本段主題句）（本段主題句）They claim that such kind of action meets the demand for the MET reform. And despite that more opportunities of MET will surely provide students wi

15、th more chances, they may also help reduce the heavy stress of parents and students. Considering these benefits, they hold an optimistic attitude towards the change. （本段（本段總結(jié)）總結(jié)）On the contrary, there are people expressing their reasonable worries about the issue.（本段主題句）（本段主題句） They doubt the idea t

16、hat more chances will reduce stress and they believe, however, the increasing times of exams will actually become a heavier burden. Whats more, since to organize an exam of such a grand scale will definitely require lots of labor, money and other social resources, they dont regard it as a good idea

17、to hold the event several times each year. （本段總結(jié)）（本段總結(jié)） In my opinion, I am in favor of the latter that there is no need to provide more MET opportunities each year. （個人觀點，主題句）（個人觀點，主題句）Besides the points shown above, I also believe that as long as we students have made efforts and done our best, on

18、e chance is totally enough to evaluate the achievement of our studies.（原因）（原因） In a word, it is more important to improve your English than to have more exams that will give you a good grade. （總結(jié)）（總結(jié)） 4班班 王一丹王一丹 16分分 觀點對比作文觀點對比作文贊成贊成： agree to/with; be for; support; be in favor of；approve of, 贊成者贊成者

19、：supporters/defenders/ boosters/proponents/ those who are for/agree with/approve of 反對反對： object to; disagree to/ with; be against；be opposed to sth；反對者反對者: opponents/objectors/ rejecter/those who are against/disagree with/disapprove of同一說法注意用不同方式表達。同一說法注意用不同方式表達。句型： 總起總起: （不同的人有著不同的觀點）（不同的人有著不同的觀點）

20、 Different people hold different opinions. Opinions are mainly divided into two groups. People have（take/adopt/assume）different attitudes towards sth People have different opinions on this problem. People take different views on this question/issue. Opinions on this point differ from person to perso

21、n. 表達不同觀點表達不同觀點: There are % of the people agreeing that/agreeing to sth. There are some people who agree/disagree that .% of the people are for/against sth. Half of the people are completely for sth. One third of the people are totally against sth. The majority of the people approve of the idea tha

22、t % of the people oppose/object to the idea that of them hold the opinion that . of them are in favor of the idea that People who are for/against the idea think Some people believe that. Others argue that 不同觀點之間的銜接不同觀點之間的銜接: However, of them hold a different view. / of them hold the opposite opinion

23、. People who are against it dont think so. However, each coin has two sides. Different from those., people think . On the other hand, people object that . Although more and more people come to believe, there are still others who insist that Some people argue thatOthers, in contrast, believe that On

24、the contrary, there are other people in favor of 60% of the students are for the idea, while 40% of the students think otherwise. 用于陳述個人觀點的套句用于陳述個人觀點的套句 In my opinion, we should attach more importance to. As far as I am concerned, I believe From my point of view/Personally, both sides are partly rig

25、ht in that As for my own idea about, I think My own point of view is that I support the statement that As for me, Im in favor of the opinion that 常用連接詞常用連接詞 遞進：遞進：firstly, first of all, in the first place, to begin/start with ,secondly , also, besides, in addition (to), moreover, furthermore, finall

26、yetc. for one thing,. for another thing 轉(zhuǎn)折：轉(zhuǎn)折：although, even though, however, on the other hand, therefore, in contrast ，on the contrary, nevertheless, while, despite, in spite of觀點作文模板觀點作文模板不同觀點列舉型（選擇型）不同觀點列舉型（選擇型） There is a widespread concern over the issue that (作文題目作文題目). But it is well known t

27、hat the opinion concerning this hot topic varies from person to person. A majority of people think that (觀點一觀點一). In their views, there are 2 factors contributing to this attitude as follows. In the first place, (原因一原因一). Furthermore, in the second place, (原因二原因二). So it goes without saying that (觀觀

28、點一點一) People, however, differ in their opinions on this matter. Some people hold the idea that (觀點二觀點二). In their point of view, For one thing, (原因一原因一). For another thing, (原因二原因二). Therefore, there is no doubt that(觀點二觀點二). As far as Im concerned, I firmly support the view that (觀點一或二觀點一或二). It is

29、 not only because _, but also because_. The more_, the more _. 利弊型的議論文利弊型的議論文 Nowadays, there is a widespread concern over (the issue that)(作文題目作文題目). In fact, there are both advantages and disadvantages in (題目議題目議題題). Generally speaking, it is widely believed there are several positive aspects as f

30、ollows. Firstly, (優(yōu)點一優(yōu)點一) And secondly, (優(yōu)點二優(yōu)點二). Just as a popular saying goes, “every coin has two sides.”(討論議題討論議題)is no exception, and in other word, it still has negative aspects. To begin with, (缺點一缺點一). In addition, (缺點二缺點二). To sum up, we should try to bring the advantages of (討論議題討論議題)into

31、full play, and reduce the disadvantages to the minimum at the same time. In that case, we will definitely make a better use of the (討論議題討論議題). 1）分類：）分類： 今昔對比、 正反觀點對比、數(shù)據(jù)分析對比2）審題：）審題： 文體：文體：對比類記敘文/說明文/議論文 時態(tài)：時態(tài)：一般過去時；一般現(xiàn)在時；現(xiàn)在完成時 人稱：人稱：根據(jù)文字提示而定2、對比類、對比類結(jié)構(gòu)：結(jié)構(gòu)：三段式：今昔對比：今昔對比：主題句-描述過去情況-描述現(xiàn)在情況-總結(jié)句正反觀點對比：正反

32、觀點對比：提出問題-介紹兩種不同觀點-對兩種不同觀點的論據(jù)逐項進行對比-個人觀點及理由數(shù)據(jù)分析對比：數(shù)據(jù)分析對比：提出現(xiàn)象-數(shù)據(jù)對比-得出結(jié)論2、對比類、對比類3）表達技巧：）表達技巧：a) 采用何種對比方式？采用何種對比方式？ b)如何過渡？如何過渡？c)語言特點？語言特點？ 策略策略1 1：(1)(1)集中比較或?qū)Ρ龋姓f明一個對象的諸種特征）集中比較或?qū)Ρ龋姓f明一個對象的諸種特征）(2)(2)逐條比較或?qū)Ρ龋ㄒ粭l一條地說明兩者的異同）逐條比較或?qū)Ρ龋ㄒ粭l一條地說明兩者的異同）Compared withDifferent fromUnlike; besideson the other

33、 handjust on the oppositewhats more/worse In short/brief/conclusion策略策略2 2：突出主題句、支持方，層次分明，語言簡潔，：突出主題句、支持方，層次分明，語言簡潔，用詞準確用詞準確usedto,butnow inthepast,butnow once,butnow Wevehadafiercediscussionoverwhetherweshouldmakefriendsonline. Opinionsaredividedonthequestion. Opinionsonthispointdifferfrompersontop

34、erson. Everycoinhastwosides. 76%ofthestudentsagreetohaveatry,while/whereas24%disagreewiththeidea. Thesupportersthink.Whatsmore,.Moreover,. However,thoseagainsttheideaarguethatforthefollowingreasons.Firstly,Secondly,今昔對比今昔對比觀點對比觀點對比數(shù)據(jù)分析數(shù)據(jù)分析語言附件 必須有一段對圖片的描寫；必須有一段對圖片的描寫； 議論必須建立在描寫的基礎(chǔ)上；議論必須建立在描寫的基礎(chǔ)上； 只有

35、議論為第三檔，只有描述最高只有只有議論為第三檔，只有描述最高只有5分；分； 觀點能夠自圓其說，語言要跟上自己的邏輯；觀點能夠自圓其說，語言要跟上自己的邏輯； 只講一方面不注重全局，最高只講一方面不注重全局，最高8分；分； 雙立意，如果立意都可接受，最高雙立意，如果立意都可接受，最高9分。分。開放作文評分參考開放作文評分參考開放作文開放作文 請你根據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于請你根據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于50。 In your English class, you are asked to describe the following picture and explain to

36、 your classmates how you understand it.劃船：劃船：row the boat 槳：槳：paddles淺：淺：shallow （adj.）寫作思路寫作思路1、圖畫中的要素是什么？、圖畫中的要素是什么？2、要素之間有何關(guān)系？、要素之間有何關(guān)系？3、如何理解這幅圖？、如何理解這幅圖？ 4、從中得到什么觀點？、從中得到什么觀點？篇章結(jié)構(gòu)：篇章結(jié)構(gòu)：描圖描圖-解圖解圖-議圖議圖-圓圖圓圖多個物象的議論多個物象的議論 圖中出圖中出現(xiàn)多個物象現(xiàn)多個物象時，描圖和時，描圖和議論時注意議論時注意抓住漫畫所抓住漫畫所表達的表達的主要主要矛盾矛盾，要有，要有的放矢、中的放矢、中

37、心突出。心突出。分析圖中要素分析圖中要素The water is too shallow.The man is rowing the boat with difficulty.Its obvious the boat cannot move. 圖中主要元素：船，水，人圖中主要元素：船，水，人主要矛盾：水淺，人再費力可船卻劃不動主要矛盾：水淺，人再費力可船卻劃不動附件 三思而后行；三思而后行； 認清環(huán)境再采取措施；認清環(huán)境再采取措施； 做事要注意方法得當；做事要注意方法得當； 其他能夠自圓其說的具有積極向上其他能夠自圓其說的具有積極向上 意義的與圖中物象能夠合情合理聯(lián)意義的與圖中物象能夠合情合理

38、聯(lián) 系起來的立意。系起來的立意。 參考答案外還可以接受的立意參考答案外還可以接受的立意附件 分清自身優(yōu)劣勢；分清自身優(yōu)劣勢； 尋求他人幫助；尋求他人幫助； 遵守自然規(guī)律；遵守自然規(guī)律； 形式至關(guān)重要；形式至關(guān)重要； 其他不能自圓其說的沒有積極向上意義其他不能自圓其說的沒有積極向上意義的與圖中物象聯(lián)系牽強的立意。的與圖中物象聯(lián)系牽強的立意。 不可以接受的立意不可以接受的立意1、審題：審題： 看不懂圖，造成立意錯誤?？床欢畧D，造成立意錯誤。2、寫作技巧：寫作技巧： 描圖和議論脫節(jié)。描圖和議論脫節(jié)。 展開議論時，表述不清，邏輯混亂。展開議論時，表述不清，邏輯混亂。 議論空洞，缺乏內(nèi)容。議論空洞，缺乏

39、內(nèi)容。3、思維能力：思維能力：比較簡單，不夠活躍。比較簡單，不夠活躍。4、語言基本功：語言基本功：時態(tài)、單詞拼寫錯誤多時態(tài)、單詞拼寫錯誤多 問題：問題：良好的邏輯思維能力良好的邏輯思維能力+扎實的語言基本功扎實的語言基本功標準范文標準范文 In the picture, a man is rowing a boat with great difficulty. However, the water in the river is too shallow for the boat to move on. Obviously, it is difficult to move the boat no

40、 matter how hard he tries. The picture tries to convey the message that it is important to build a solid foundation if we want to succeed. We can learn this lesson in real life. Take study for example. If we dont have basic knowledge and essential ability, we may fail to achieve our goals even if we

41、 work hard. Just like the man in the picture, he cant move forward as expected because water is not deep enough for the boat. Therefore, a good foundation is the key to success. As can be seen from the picture, a man is trying really hard to move the paddles to make his boat go ahead. However, he ac

42、tually is stuck there since the river is too shallow for the boat to move on. I think the picture conveys the message that we should find proper ways according to the situations when faced with problems. The man in the picture doesnt consider the depth of the river thus he chooses a wrong way to mov

43、e the boat and end up making effort in vain. Similarly in our life, chances are that we fail to analyze the situation, when we want to achieve a goal fast, and finally we realize that we are wasting time and effort. In order to prevent such kind of mistake from happening, what we must do before taki

44、ng action is to think twice and figure out the most efficient way of doing it. Measure the depth, and perhaps the man will come up with other ideas to go across the river much faster and with less strength. In a word, the importance of the right way to deal with things should never be too much stres

45、sed. Not only does it help us to avoid wasting time and energy, it also lets us complete tasks or solve problems more efficiently. 王一丹王一丹 12分分 兩個物象的議論兩個物象的議論圖中出現(xiàn)兩個主要物象時，圖中出現(xiàn)兩個主要物象時，描圖和議論時注意兩者之間描圖和議論時注意兩者之間的的對比對比關(guān)系。這是最近幾年關(guān)系。這是最近幾年高考的熱點。高考的熱點。 2006年雕塑老者和少女；年雕塑老者和少女； 2007年大鳥和小鳥；年大鳥和小鳥； 2008年的鉛筆和圓規(guī)。年的鉛筆

46、和圓規(guī)。 兩個物象的議論兩個物象的議論圖中出現(xiàn)兩個主要物象時，未必一定是兩者的圖中出現(xiàn)兩個主要物象時，未必一定是兩者的對比。對比。 開放作文寫作指導開放作文寫作指導（一）看圖說話類（一）看圖說話類 1、現(xiàn)象型、現(xiàn)象型 2、抽象型、抽象型 3、主題型、主題型（二）提綱類（計劃、建議、可能（二）提綱類（計劃、建議、可能性等）性等）（三）續(xù)寫類（以故事為主）（三）續(xù)寫類（以故事為主）分分 類類得分點：得分點： 文章文章是否扣題是否扣題 結(jié)構(gòu)結(jié)構(gòu)是否完整是否完整 內(nèi)容內(nèi)容是否充實、健康是否充實、健康 思維思維是否活躍是否活躍 邏輯邏輯是否清晰是否清晰 語言語言是否規(guī)范是否規(guī)范 交際交際是否得體是否得體

47、扣分點：？扣分點：？文體不對文體不對結(jié)構(gòu)不全結(jié)構(gòu)不全立意跑偏立意跑偏描議脫節(jié)描議脫節(jié) 要求：思維邏輯性與嚴謹性要求：思維邏輯性與嚴謹性（一）看圖說話類（一）看圖說話類1、審題、審題 文體：文體：議論文議論文 結(jié)構(gòu)：結(jié)構(gòu)：描圖描圖1/3文字，議圖文字，議圖2/3文字文字 時態(tài)：時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時、一般講來時等，一般現(xiàn)在時、一般講來時等，忌用忌用過去時過去時 人稱：人稱：描圖：第三人稱描圖：第三人稱 議圖：聯(lián)系實際最好用第一人稱議圖：聯(lián)系實際最好用第一人稱2、寫作指導、寫作指導1）關(guān)鍵詞？）關(guān)鍵詞？要素-細節(jié)-聯(lián)系 2）寫作步驟？）寫作步驟？例：2010年 海淀期中 開放作文（15分）請根據(jù)下面提示

48、，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于50。In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.寫作步驟細節(jié)細節(jié)2：“高桌子高桌子”代表什么？代表什么？仔細找要素：仔細找要素：大狗、小狗、香腸、高桌子大狗、小狗、香腸、高桌子認真審細節(jié)：認真審細節(jié)： 細節(jié)細節(jié)1：“大狗的背大狗的背”代表什么？代表什么？大狗的背大狗的背-父母或他人的關(guān)父母或他人的關(guān)心、支持、幫助、愛、肩

49、膀、心、支持、幫助、愛、肩膀、力量等力量等高桌子高桌子-面臨的困難、挑戰(zhàn)、面臨的困難、挑戰(zhàn)、麻煩、壓力等麻煩、壓力等 2010年年 海淀期中海淀期中分析要素與細節(jié)的聯(lián)系，揭示要素寓意角度：分析要素與細節(jié)的聯(lián)系，揭示要素寓意角度：香腸（香腸（sausage）:desires,ambitions,dreams,goals,achievements, concerns,success, hope 大狗（大狗（the big dog）:parents, adults, teachers, friends,those who help us to realize our dreams，people wh

50、o have great power or abilities 小狗（小狗（the little dog）:children, kids, those who need help from others 從小狗角度：從小狗角度： a、借他山之石、借他山之石 The picture reminds me of the importance of other peoples help. We should catch every opportunity to get help from others on the way of longing for success. b、學會感恩、學會感恩 To

51、 my understanding, the picture conveys the message of gratitude. From the picture, I gain the message that no matter how we have reached, never can we forget who bring us up and who make the person we are today.多角度選擇立意多角度選擇立意: 大狗、小狗、兩者大狗、小狗、兩者 從大狗的角度：從大狗的角度： 父母給我們力量 In my opinion, the picture intend

52、s to illustrate the idea that its our parents who pave the road for us to achieve a new height.從兩者的角度：從兩者的角度： 學會合作學會合作 What the picture wants to convey to us is that cooperation among people is vital to success. From this picture, we can learn that cooperation is what helps us to get a win-win situa

53、tion. Cooperation can bring benefits to everyone.多角度選擇立意多角度選擇立意: 大狗、小狗、兩者大狗、小狗、兩者 描圖（白描，要素間建立聯(lián)系，為議圖作好鋪墊）描圖（白描，要素間建立聯(lián)系，為議圖作好鋪墊）構(gòu)思立意句：構(gòu)思立意句： What the picture gets across/conveys to us is the message that 建立過渡句（揭示要素與立意間的聯(lián)系）建立過渡句（揭示要素與立意間的聯(lián)系） The sausage is to the little dog what dreams and goals are to

54、 us people. The mother dogs back represents parents love and support on the way we pursue our dreams.選擇論證方法：選擇論證方法： 自圓其說，自然扣圖，邏輯清晰，交際得體自圓其說，自然扣圖，邏輯清晰，交際得體 a.釋義法釋義法 b.正反論證法正反論證法 c.例證法例證法結(jié)尾升華立意：采用強調(diào)句、倒裝句、呼吁等形式結(jié)尾升華立意：采用強調(diào)句、倒裝句、呼吁等形式3）表達技巧？）表達技巧？ 描議一體要素：要素：2個杯子個杯子+杯中物杯中物+笑臉笑臉笑臉代表什么？笑臉代表什么？杯子代表什么？杯子代表什么？

55、杯中物代表什么？杯中物代表什么？2010年年 海淀期末考試開放作文海淀期末考試開放作文 As can be seen in the picture, the two cups are smiling, regardless of how much water they each have. One cup is almost full while the other is not. The picture indicates that people should always be optimistic, no matter what they have. Just as is shown,

56、the two cups with different amount of water are both happy. I think that they are both pleased to serve people with all they have. They may represent common people in our life. Whether rich or poor, we should be happy to do something for society. Thus we can learn that giving is the source of happin

57、ess. 描圖為議論鋪墊描圖為議論鋪墊議圖以描圖為基礎(chǔ)議圖以描圖為基礎(chǔ)1）描圖：）描圖： In the picture, we can see As the picture shows/tells/presents,2）過渡句：）過渡句： What the picture gets across/conveys to us is the message that Just as the picture shows, It is the same with; As is often the case, 3、常用的表達、常用的表達3）表達個人觀點：）表達個人觀點： As for me, As fa

58、r as I am concerned, I To me, Actually, I Personally, I From my perspective, To my mind/understanding In my opinion/view,3、常用的表達、常用的表達1）現(xiàn)象型）現(xiàn)象型特征：特征： 圖片多以人與物出現(xiàn)，直觀地反映出某種現(xiàn)象。圖片多以人與物出現(xiàn)，直觀地反映出某種現(xiàn)象。結(jié)構(gòu)：結(jié)構(gòu)： 1、描圖：、描圖：從人與物之間的矛盾入手，突出主題從人與物之間的矛盾入手，突出主題 2、議圖：、議圖：總分總結(jié)構(gòu)總分總結(jié)構(gòu) 過渡：過渡：點明現(xiàn)象，提出正面的觀點點明現(xiàn)象，提出正面的觀點 議論：議論：聯(lián)系

59、實際提出問題（普遍性）聯(lián)系實際提出問題（普遍性）-分析問題分析問題（危害性）（危害性）-解決問題（應對措施）解決問題（應對措施） 結(jié)尾：結(jié)尾：概括概括-總結(jié)總結(jié)-強調(diào)正面觀點，升華立意強調(diào)正面觀點，升華立意 2）抽象型）抽象型特征：特征：物與物結(jié)合或人與物結(jié)合物與物結(jié)合或人與物結(jié)合結(jié)構(gòu)：結(jié)構(gòu)： 1、描圖：、描圖：重點白描要素間的主要細節(jié)特征重點白描要素間的主要細節(jié)特征和矛盾沖突，為議圖做鋪墊和矛盾沖突，為議圖做鋪墊 2、議圖：、議圖：總分總結(jié)構(gòu)總分總結(jié)構(gòu) 過渡：過渡：承上啟下，直截了當點明立意（以正承上啟下，直截了當點明立意（以正面、積極立意為上）面、積極立意為上） 闡述：闡述：揭示要素與寓意

60、間的聯(lián)系；聯(lián)系實際揭示要素與寓意間的聯(lián)系；聯(lián)系實際并扣圖說明立意。并扣圖說明立意。 結(jié)尾：結(jié)尾：倡議呼吁升華立意倡議呼吁升華立意3）主題型）主題型特征：特征：物與物結(jié)合或人與物結(jié)合，圖片直觀物與物結(jié)合或人與物結(jié)合，圖片直觀傳遞積極的主題。傳遞積極的主題。結(jié)構(gòu)：結(jié)構(gòu)：1、描圖：、描圖：側(cè)重描寫物對人的影響或人對物側(cè)重描寫物對人的影響或人對物的態(tài)度兩個角度，為議圖做鋪墊的態(tài)度兩個角度，為議圖做鋪墊2、議圖：、議圖：包括解圖和圓圖兩個環(huán)節(jié)包括解圖和圓圖兩個環(huán)節(jié) 過渡：過渡：簡明扼要點名主題簡明扼要點名主題 闡述：闡述：解圖揭示人與物之間的相互影響與解圖揭示人與物之間的相互影響與作用，聯(lián)系實際闡明主題