讀后續(xù)寫：Purple Tomatoes-高考英語二輪復習寫作專項

讀后續(xù)寫：PurpleTomatoes讀后續(xù)寫一滿分25分閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的150詞左右的短文。Manyyearsago,asacollegestudent.Ihadapart-timejobatanicecreamshop.Whenawomanwasnearbytheshop.Inoticedthatshehadaboxofwhatappealedtobepurpletomatoes.ItwasthenthatmyfamilywassopoorthatIcouldnotaffordtobuythosetomatoes.Ijustlookedatthemasiftheyhadcomemystomach.Asamatteroffact,Ihadneveieatenanythingonthewholeday.ThatwaswhenIfelttheitchcomingon.AsIhandedheranicecream.Isaid."Thosetomatoeslookdelicious!Whatkindarethey?'、ShestartedatmeandgiiimedsobigthatIthoughtshewasabouttostartlangliing.butinsteadshereplied.“Here,havesome!''WithinsecondsIhadahandfiilofpurpletomatoes."Oh.no,youdon'tneedtogivemeany!''Isaid.Thosetomatoeslookedexpensive."Hare,havemore/'sheinsisted,andnowIhadsixoftlierichest,prettiesttomatoesIhadeverseen.Iweaklytriedtoprotest:"Really,youdidn'thavetogivemeany,butIappreciateyou.”Thewomansmiledagainandsaid.’1hopeyoueiyoythemforfiee.Andtoansweryourquestion,it'sauniquekindoftomatoestliatmyMomusedtoplant.Sotlieyaren'tliketheonesyougetiiithegrocerystore.Itookthosetomatoesgratefiillyandsaidtliaiikyou,andshespedoff.Sliewaslikeanadultversionoftlietoothfairy:Isoldhericecreamandshegavemetomatoes.Abouttwoweekslater,mybossattheicecreamstoresentmeatextmessage."Iwantedtoletyouknowtliatyoiugardenerdroppedoffaboxofvegetablesforyou.''Baffled.Ireplied.’Nygardener?''Thatniglit,mybossshowedmethebox.Itwasfiilloftomatoes,cucmnbersandgreenbeans.Thetomatofairywasback!Iwasbothhappyandconfiised.Paragraph1:Wliywasthiswomanbeingsogenerous?Paragraph2:However,Ineversawheragain.范文Whywasthiswomanbeingsogenerous?Istratchedmyhead,feelingconfusedabouthergenerousbehaviorand(eagerin^toknowthereason.Puzzledand^indoubtabl^Iaskedmybossifthewomanleftanyherinformation,butwhatIgainedwasonlyaletterwithwords“Tothefellinguptomyheart.Iice-creamgirl“jinthedaythatfollows,Igazedattheshopdoorwithexpectationnowandthen,Ropingthewomantocomeintomysighd.fellinguptomyheart.IHowever,Ineversawheragain.Asurgeofdisappointmenterpreciouskindnessandvaluablegenerosityerpreciouskindnessandvaluablegenerosityerpreciouskindnessandvaluablegenerositycomfirmedthatshemustgosomewhereasafairy.|handalways^eldsaerpreciouskindnessandvaluablegenerosityandalways^eldsaandalways^eldsaplantedaseedofloveinmydeepheartandalwaysaffectedme.Tospreadthisspecialseed,Ibecameapersonwhoiswillingtoextendahelpfulhandtothepeopleinneednafewdecades%youwillfindawomenwithaboxofpurpletomatoesinandalways^eldsanafewdecades%youwillfindawomenwithaboxofpurpletomatoesinnafewdecades%youwillfindawomenwithaboxofpurpletomatoesingratitudeheart}.Maybe,iihand,sharingthemwithotherswitharadiantsmile.nafewdecades%youwillfindawomenwithaboxofpurpletomatoesin【批改與點評】段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內容“為什么這個女人如此慷慨？”可知，第一段可描寫作者對女人的幫助感到不解，想要弄明白原因。②由第二段首句內容“然而，我再也沒有見過她”可知，第二段可描寫作者尋人不得，但理解了女人的行為并決定把她的善良傳送下去。續(xù)寫線索：感到困惑一一尋找線索一一尋人不得一一理解善意一一傳播善良續(xù)寫的主題還是很常見的“善良”與“愛的傳遞”，情節(jié)發(fā)展容易把握，不容易寫偏；主要是需要運用多種寫作技巧，來展現(xiàn)考生的文字駕馭能力、語言運用能力和情感表達能力。語言修正：1一拼寫錯誤：scratchone'shead撓撓頭，表示疑惑不解。2--詞性誤用：eager是形容詞。3一詞義理解和詞性變形錯誤：應該是doubtful.4-left拼寫與her意義上的錯誤：應該是leftanypersonalinformation.5--語言的地道表達：應該是inthefollowingdays.6一語法錯誤：應該是hopethat從句。7一語法錯誤，應該是謂語，而不是非謂語：改成welled.8--意義與語法錯誤：應該是Iwasconvincedthat+后面句子用musthavedone表示對過去的肯定猜測：一定已經(jīng)去其他地方了。9--單詞、單配錯誤：應該是holdsagratefulattitude.10一單復數(shù)錯誤：應該是awoman.此句可以修改得再精煉些：findsbsharingsthwithothers.【參考范文】[possibleversion]Whywasthiswomanbeingsogenerous?Wejustmetoncebutshegavemesomuch,whichpuzzledmealot.Ineededtofindoutthereasonbehindit.Nextmorning,Iwenttomybossandtriedtodigoutsomecluesthatwouldhelpmefindthiswoman,butfailed."ShelefttheboxwithanoteinitandspedoffbeforeIcouldsayaword"，mybossexplained.Itriedsomeotherwaystofindher.However^Ineversawheragain.Tcouldonlyassumethatthewomanwhohelpedmeisafairyintheworld.Thereasonwhyshelentmeahandisbecauseofherpurekindnessandgenerosity.Now,Ihavemyowngardenandmyowntomatoes,andherrandomactofkindnessinspiresmetosharemygardenharvestswithanyonewhowillhaveit,justlikeher.【詞匯激活】行為類①發(fā)現(xiàn)、找出：digout/findout②匆忙離開：speedoff/hurryoff③假定：assume/suppose情緒類①使困惑：puzzle/confuse/baffle②仁慈、善良：kindness/benevolence【點睛】[高分句型1]Wejustmetoncebutshegavemesomuch,whichpuzzledmealot.（運用了which引導非限制性