new英語(yǔ)寫作常見病句與分析

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英語(yǔ)寫作常見病句與分析熟悉與掌握CET-4作文評(píng)分原則CET-41、總體評(píng)分原則421）152）14118523）如8分即8即9分（754）14118526一）不一致（Disagreements）例如：Whenonehavemoney,hecandowhathewantto.7剖析：onehavehas;同理,wantwants。改為：Onceonehasmonkey,hecandowhathewants(todo).8（二、修飾語(yǔ)錯(cuò)位（MisplacedModifiers）IbelieveIcandoitwellandIwillbetterknowtheworldoutsidethecampus.剖析：better9（三）句子不完整（SentenceFragments）Therearemanywaystoknowthesociety.ForexamplebyTV,radio,newspaperandsoon.10ForexamplebyTV,radio,newspaperandsoon.”不是一改為：Therearemanywaystoknowthesociety,forexample,byTV,radio,newspaper.11（四）懸垂修飾語(yǔ)（DanglingModifiers）Attheageoften,mygrandfatherdied.剖析：這句中“attheageoftenmygrandfather改為：WhenIwasten,mygrandfatherdied.12又如：Todowellincollege,goodgradesareessential.todowellincollege”的邏輯主語(yǔ)不清楚。改為：Todowellincollege,astudentneedsgoodgrades.13（五）詞性誤用（MisuseofPartsofSpeech）Nonecannegativetheimportanceofmoney.剖析：negative改為：Nonecandenytheimportanceofmoney.14（六）指代不清（AmbiguousReferenceofPronouns）試看下面這一句：Marywasfriendlytomysisterbecauseshewantedhertobeherbridesmaid.瑪麗和我姐姐很要好，因?yàn)樗鏊陌槟铩？筛臑椋篗arywasfriendlytomysisterbecauseshewantedmysistertobeherbridesmaid.15又如：Wecanalsoknowthesocietybyservingityourself.weyourself改為：Wecanalsoknowsocietybyservingitourselves.16（七）不間斷句子（Run-onSentences）run-onsentences？請(qǐng)看下面的例句：Therearemanywayswegettoknowtheoutsideworld.hrearemanyay.”以及“Wegettoknowtheoutsideorl改為：Therearemanywaysforustolearnabouttheoutsideworld.或：Therearemanywaysthroughwhichwecanbecomeacquaintedwiththeoutsideworld.17（八）措詞毛?。═roublesinDiction）Diction習(xí)慣。他們往往隨心所欲，拿來(lái)就用。所以作文中用詞不當(dāng)?shù)腻e(cuò)誤比比皆是。如：Theincreasinguseofchemicalobstaclesinagriculturealsomakespollution.theincreasinguse（”應(yīng)改為“buveuse（。改為：Theabusiveuseofchemicalsubstancesinagriculturealsocauses/leadstopollution.18（九）累贅（Redundancy）Inspiteofthefactthatheislazy,Ilikehim.剖析：本句的“thefactthatheislazyInspiteofhislaziness,Ilikehim.19又如：Forthepeoplewhoarediligentandkind,moneyisjustthethingtobeusedtobuythethingtheyneed.改為：Diligent,caringpeopleusemoneyonlytobuywhattheyneed.20（十）不連貫（Incoherence）Thefreshwater,itisthemostimportantthingsoftheearth.剖析：ThefreshwateritItthings改為：Freshwateristhemostimportantthingintheworld.21（十一）中式英語(yǔ)Sometimespeoplesetofffirecrackerstocelebratetheredandwhitehappyevents.22peopleofffirecrackerstocelebrateweddingorhonorthedeadinhisfuneral.231） Inthemovie,RobertRedfordwasaspy.Hegoestohisofficewherehefoundeverybodydead.Otherspieswantedtokillhim,sohetakesrefugewithJulieChristie.Atherhouse,hehadwaitedfortheheattodiedown,buttheycomeafterhimanyway.2） Everybodylooksforsatisfactioninhislife.Theywanttobehappy.Butifheseeksonlypleasureintheshortrun,personwillsoonrunoutofpleasureandlifewillcatchuptohim.Theyneedtopursuethedeeperpleasureofsatisfactioninworkandinrelationships.243） Nowmorethanever,parentsneedtobeintouchwiththeirchildren’sactivitiesbecausemodernlifehasthetendencytocausecleavagesinthefamily.Youneedtoarrangefamilylikeitsothatfamilymemberswilldothingstogetherandknowoneanother.Youneedtogiveupisolatedpleasuresofyourownandrealizethatparentshaveasetofobligationstosponsortogethernessandthereforesponsorknowledge.25詞語(yǔ)的變化 Accordingtoarecentsurvey,moreandmorepeopleexpressastrongdesiretoAccordingtoarecentsurvey,agrowingnumberofpeopleexpressastrongdesireto26Thesedays,peopleingrowingnumbersarebeginningtocomplainthatworkismorestressfulandlessleisurelythaninpast.Manyexpertspointthat,alongwiththedevelopmentofmodernsociety,itisaninevitableresultandthereisnowaytoavoidit.27Todayanincreasingnumberofpeoplehaverealizedthatlaweducationisofgreatimportance.Inordertokeeplawandorder,everyoneofusissupposedtogetalaweducation.28Populationproblemsisbiggerandbigger,wehavenoroomtoliveinearth(病句).Oneoftheproblemsistheovergrowthofpopulationorpopulationexplosion，theremayevenbenostandingspaceonearth.Thepopulationisincreasingatarunningspeedandisthreateningtheexistenceofhumanbeing.29Environmentalpollutioncausesmanystrangediseasesandpeoplesufferfromit.Deteriorationofnaturalenvironmentleadstomanydeadlyorunidentifieddiseasesandbringsactualharmtopeople’shealth.30Cuttingforestskillmanyanimals,andpeopleletsomanyplantsdisappear.病句ExcessiveDeforestation）endangersmanyanimalsandgreatthirstforwaterandotherresourcesleadstotheextinctionofmanyspeciesandplantforms.31Economicdevelopmentbringusgood,butitalsobringusbadeffectontheearth.病句Whilewecannotdowithouteconomicdevelopmentthesedays,wecannotignorethefactthatithasanadverse(orunfavorable)effectontheplanet.32AsIsaidabove,everybodymustmoveonandshoulddoeverythingtoprotectenvironment.Everyindividualshouldmakejointeffortstokeepthebalanceofecosystem.33Asthedevelopmentofeconomy,theenvironmentisbecomesfocusedonbymoreandmorepeople.Asconj.1.Iwascominginashewasgoingout.2.盡管,即使,雖然Intelligentasyouare,Isuspectyouwillfail.3.4.Asyouweren'tthereIleftamessage.5.6.34語(yǔ)義豐富的句式3536句型：Althoughpeople’sliveshavebeendramaticallychangedoverlastdecades,itmustbeadmittedthat,shortageoffundsisstilltheoneofthebiggestquestionsthatstudentsnowadayshavetofacebecausethattuitionfeesandpricesofbooksaresoaringbythe近幾十年，盡管人們的生活有了驚人的改變，但必須承認(rèn)，由于學(xué)費(fèi)和書費(fèi)日益飛漲，資金短缺仍然是學(xué)生們面臨的最大問題之一。3738Itiscommonlythoughtthatoursocietyhaddramaticallychangedbymodernscienceandtechnology,andhumanhadmadeextraordinaryprogressinknowledgeandtechnologyovertherecentdecades.39 Environmentalexpertspointoutthatincreasingpollutionnotonlycausesseriousproblemssuchasglobalwarming,butalsocouldthreatentoendhumanlifeonourplanet.40Inviewofsuchserioussituation,environmentaltoolsoftransportationlikebicyclearemoreimportantthananytimebefore.考慮到這些嚴(yán)重的狀況，我們比以往任何時(shí)候更需要像自行車這樣的環(huán)保型交通工具。41Thisisamatteroflifeanddeath--amatternocountrycanaffordtoignore.這是一個(gè)關(guān)系到生死的問題，任何國(guó)家都不能忽視。Weshouldsparenoefforttobeautifyourenvironment.我們應(yīng)該不遺余力地美化我們的環(huán)境。42Thereisnodenyingthefactthatairpollutionisanextremelyseriousproblem:thecityauthoritiesshouldtakestrongmeasurestodealwithit.無(wú)可否認(rèn)，空氣污染是一個(gè)極其嚴(yán)重的問題：城市當(dāng)局應(yīng)該采取有力措施來(lái)解決它。Anygovernment,whichisblindtothispoint,maypayaheavyprice.43引起關(guān)注的表達(dá)：Theproblemofinternationaltourismhascausedwidepublicconcernovertherecentyears.Thisphenomenonhascausedmajorconcerninmanyplacesofworld.44造成影響的表達(dá)Inaddition,inordertoattracttourists,alotofartificialfacilitieshavebeenbuilt,whichhavecertainunfavorableeffectsontheenvironment.另外，為了吸引旅游者，大量人工設(shè)施被修建，這對(duì)環(huán)境是不利的。Butwhatthesepeoplefailtoseeisthatinternationaltourismmaybringaboutadisastrousimpactonourenvironmentandlocalhistory.但是這些人忽視了國(guó)際旅游可能會(huì)給當(dāng)?shù)丨h(huán)境和歷史造成的災(zāi)難性的影響。45 Althoughruralemigrantscontributegreatlytotheeconomicgrowthofthecities,theymayinevitablybringaboutnegativeimpacts.46強(qiáng)調(diào)：Thereisnodenyingthequalitiesofourlivinghavegonefrombadtoworse.無(wú)可否認(rèn)，我們的生活品質(zhì)已經(jīng)每況愈下。Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthattreesareindispensabletous.47Thereasonwhywehavetogrowtreesisthattheycansupplyfreshforus.我們必須種樹的原因是它們能供應(yīng)我們新鮮的空氣。Itistimetheauthoritiestookproperstepstosolvethetrafficproblems.48 Mysuggestionstodealwiththeproblemareasfollows.Tobeginwith,itisurgenttocreatenaturereserves.Secondly,certainrarewildanimalsthataregoingtobeextinctshouldbecollected,fedandreproducedartificially.Finally,thosewhohunterthemmustbepunishedseverely.我對(duì)解決這個(gè)問題的建議如下：首先，迫在眉睫的是建立自然保護(hù)區(qū)。其次，有些49“Therebe”結(jié)構(gòu)50“Therebe”結(jié)構(gòu)

CET4考生不易寫好的結(jié)構(gòu)考生病句：Therearemanypeopleliketogotothemovies.Therearedifferentkindsofvegetablescanbeboughtonthemarketbypeople.51正確表達(dá)：Therearemanypeoplewholiketogotothemovies.Therearedifferentkindsofvegetablesthatpeoplecanbuyonthemarket.be這一最常用的句式。在這種結(jié)構(gòu)中，therebe52Therewasnoschoolinthevillageatthattime.(=therewasnotaschool…)no，也可用notanotany。notaanynoThereisnotamomenttobelost.Therearemanypeoplerushingintothecitieseveryyear.e.Thereisnouseholdingbackthewheelofhistory.therebe之后又用了一個(gè)動(dòng)詞作謂53考生病句：TheclimateinBeijingiscolderthanothercities.54正確表達(dá)：TheclimateinBeijingiscolderthanthatofothercities.慣的影響。寫作成績(jī)。55同級(jí)比較a.In1998weproducedasmanycarsaswedidinthepreviousfiveyears.b.Wehaveaccomplishedasmuchinthepastthreeyearsaswouldhavetakentenyearsinthepast.比較級(jí)a.Childrennowenjoybettermedicaltreatmentthanbefore.b.Wecanlivelongerwithoutfoodthanwecan(live)withoutwater.56最高級(jí)a.ThisisthemostinterestingbookI’veeverread.b.OfallhisnovelsIlikethisonebest.57themore…themore…結(jié)構(gòu)a.Theharderyouwork,thegreaterprogressyouwillmake.b.Themoreamanknows,themorehediscovershisignorance.58選擇比較a.Ipreferstayingathometogoingout.b.Theyprefertoworkratherthan(to)sitidly.c.Hepreferstoworkalone.對(duì)比a.Motionisabsolutewhilestagnationisrelative.b.Heistiredout,whereassheisfullofvigor.59603．表達(dá)原因的結(jié)構(gòu)考生病句：

表達(dá)原因的結(jié)構(gòu)a.Therealreasontoourfailureisnotfartoseek.b.Thereasonforthisisbecausesomepeoplewanttoearnplentyofmoneywithoutworkinghard.61正確表達(dá)：a.Therealreasonforourfailureisnotfartoseek.b.Thereasonforthisisthatsomepeoplewanttoearnplentyofmoneywithoutworkinghard.reasonforbecausethatTOEFL62as，because，since，seeingthat，consideringthat，nowthat，notthata.Nowthatwehaveseenthesegreatachievementswithourowneyes,wefeelmoreproudthaneverofourcountry.b.ProfessorLiuisstrictwithusbecausehewantsustomakerapidprogress.c.Sincewelivenearthesea,weenjoyahealthyclimate.d.Pollutionisstillaserousproblem,notthatwedon’thavetheabilitytosolveit,butthatsomepeoplehavenotrealizedtheconsequencesoftheproblem.63a.Thereasonforthischangesisquiteobvious.b.Diligenceistheskyfactorofsuccess.c.Idlenessistherootofallevils.d.Hewasashamedtomadethemistake.(=Hewasashamedthathehadmadethemistake.=Hewasashamedbecausehehadthemistake.)64是最常見的引導(dǎo)原因從句的連詞，語(yǔ)氣最強(qiáng)，表示直接的原因，若becausesoas65否定結(jié)構(gòu)664．否定結(jié)構(gòu)考生病句：a.Somepeoplethinkweneedn’ttoworryaboutfreshwater.b.Nowadaysmanypeopledon’tliketogotothemovies,too.67a.Somepeoplethinkweneedn’tworry(或don’tneedtoworry)aboutfreshwater.b.Nowadaysmanypeopledon’tliketogotothemovies,either.68剖析：a的錯(cuò)誤在于混淆了needneedto，needn’tweneedneedtoworry中的toworrydon’tneedbtoo和either在英語(yǔ)中too，also只能用于肯定句，而either只能用于否定句。be和havenotnot691)介詞：against，beyond，butexcept，without…thelast，usedto,reluctant,lack,…70不及物動(dòng)詞vi.

differ[英][?dif?]1.Nylonandsilkdiffer.Tastesdiffer.Thedefinitionofagreatjobdifferswildlyfromwomantowoman.2.持異議Thetwobrothersdifferedaboutpolitics.71a.Womenfailtogettheequalrightsinsomecountriesb.thisisbymomeansthebestwaytosolvetheproblemofenergycrisis.這不是解決能源危機(jī)的最好辦法。c.Weshouldprotecttreesfrombeingdestroyed.d.InoldChinawecouldnotmakeanailletalone(make)machines我們連一個(gè)釘子也造不了，更不用說(shuō)制造機(jī)器了。722)everyone，noteverything例如：a.Wecouldhardlyseeanyfreshvegetablesinwinteronmarketseveralyearsago.b.Theseyoungpeopleknowlittleabouthowtochoosegoodbookstoread.這73barely[]美]詞adv.1.Webarelyhadtimetocatchthetrain.我們幾乎來(lái)不及趕火車。Ihadbarelycomeinwhenthetelephonerang.我剛進(jìn)來(lái),電話就響了Theroomisbarelyfurnished.室內(nèi)幾乎沒有陳設(shè)。743)不含否定意義的否定結(jié)構(gòu)：cannotbut，can’thelp，nosoonerthan，not…until，innotime，noneotherthan，nothingbut，等等。例如：Wecan’tbutfacetherealityTheseoldbuildingswillbereplacedbymodernapartmentbuildingsinnotime.這些舊建筑將很快為現(xiàn)代化的公寓所代替。754)否定結(jié)構(gòu)的倒裝語(yǔ)序我們有時(shí)為了強(qiáng)調(diào)而把否定詞和詞組放在句首，這時(shí)句子結(jié)構(gòu)應(yīng)倒裝。例如