托福高分作文,范文

Forthedevelopmentofacountry,itismoreimportanttospendmoneyoneducationofveryyoungchildrenthantospendonuniversities.Educationplaysanincreasingfundamentalroleinourdays.Wetiethefutureofourcountrytothelevelofeducationstandardandgovernmentisprojectingtoincreasethefundingforstudents.Butthereisasubstantialdivergenceofopinion.Somesaythatthesignificanceofeducatingouryoungchildrenoutweighsthatofelderstudentsandthegovernmentshouldelevatetheinvestmentontheformer.Inmyopinion,spendingmoreonuniversitiesisagreatdeal.First,throughtheinvestmentonuniversitywecanharvestaninstantresultontheimprovedemploymentrate.TheUSAissufferingtheaftermathofeconomycrisisin2008.Countlesscompaniesareshrinkingtheirsalaryandcuttingemployees;highlyeducatedgraduatesareanxiousforhuntinganordinaryjob.Thereforetherequestofnewjobopportunityisincreasingcorrespondingly.Tofilltheunemploymentrategap,governmentcaninvestmoremoneytoenhancetheeducationlevelintheuniversities,whoseteachingqualitieslinktotheemploymentratedirectly.Forexample,theuniversitycanmakeuseofthemoneyintotheextensionoflibraryandpurchaseofmorebooks,motivatingmorestudentstoengageintolibrarymarathons.Orinvestingthemoneyontherecruitmentofseniorprofessors,whocannotonlydelivermorepracticalknowledgetostudents,butalsousehis/herstrongpersonalnetworktorecommendsomeexcellentstudentstosomepositions.Second,numerousscientificresearchachievementscomefromuniversitieslabs.Doingexperimentsisnotsocost-efficientbutbringsmanyprogressionstoourlivesandoursociety,whichiscloselyrelatedtoeveryone.Solabsneedmorefunding.Forexample,enjoyingagoodreputationinthedomainofphysics,StanfordUniversityusesherlinearaccelerator,whichisthelargestintheworld,toaccomplishmanyresearches.Butstartingupthemachinesneedselectricitymuchenoughtolightupatownforawholeyear.Isthatworthy?Certainlyitis.Seeminglynotenvironmental-friendlyatfirstsight,theseresearchesinStanfordareexceedinglyimportant;withoutthem,thenuclearpowercannotgetitsproperandsafeuseongeneratingelectricity,whichprohibitsmanytreesfrombeingcutdownandcutsthepotentialcarbonemissionsinvisibly.Thereisnodoubtthatthegovernmentshouldpaythebill,providingsolidfundingforuniversitiestoexplorethescience.Admittedly,scientistsaremoremindfulofthepreliminaryeducationforyoungkids.Accordingtoresearch,5-10year-oldisthegoldentimetocultivatechildren'sintelligences.Kidsareunconsciouslyinfluencedbyenvironmentalelementssuchasthesophisticatedteachingfacility.Butweshouldtakeitwithagrainofsalt.Youngchildrenarepronetobedistractedinmulti-mediaclassroomsbecausetheirbrainsarenotmatureenoughtoresisttemptationsofonlinegames,whichcanbeplayedsecretlyontheclass.So,spendingtoomuchmoneyonyoungchildrenismerelyanexerciseinvain.Insum,althougheducationalfundingonyoungchildrencannotbeleftonthesidelines,onlytheuniversitiescanliveuptothegreatfundingandmakebestuseofit.Putmoremoneyonthelatterwhenfacinglimitedbudgets.預估分數(shù)：4.5論據(jù)展開的推理不錯，敘述也清晰，說服力強積累不錯，單詞量等都挺大的，但敘述的時候要注意細節(jié)用詞方面，有的地方不必那么正式。IndependentTaskLevel：Good4.527Weneedtohavedifferentsourcesofnewsandinformationtoknowwhichoneistherealoneorwhoistellingthetruth.Theabilityofindependentthinking,virtuallysymbolizesthe世叵_去掉］intelligence,istreasurednowadays.Lazymodernpeopletendtobemisledbysomesingle-sourcednews,becausethesameeventcanbereportedindifferentversionswhichmayeitheragitatepublicangerorreassuretheiranxiety.Therefore,limitedinformationwillencumberpeopletodigthetruth.Inmypoint,graspingvariessourcesofnewsarethecornerstonetoexploreandidentifythereality.Weareinthemaze,theseeminglyshortcuttothetruthmaybethedeliberatepitfall.Toburythetruthorcoverthecrime,thegovernmentwillcontrolthepublicopinionsandexertinfluencesonpeople.［這里可以說takeadvantageof就不用這么累贅地說兩個短句門Sothesolesourceofnewsisnottrustworthy.Forexample,inNorthKorea,numerousdissidentsarebeingmuzzledbytheleader.KimJongEuncutstheconnectiontotheoutsideworldandinstillshisextremethoughttocitizens,makingthembelievethattheyarethe''happiestman,/［men］intheworld.Undersuchtotalitarianism,itisdifficultforpeopletoknowtheirreallife.ButtherearestillsomepeoplewhocansecretlysurftheInternet,knowingtheirlifeandthetruthoftheirnationfromCNNorBBC.Increasingnumberofcitizensareescaping［力口from］NorthKoreacurrently.Thatexemplifieshowdifferentsourcesofnewshelppeopletofindthetruth.朝鮮的例子舉得很不錯］Althoughdiversesourcesofnewsmayperplexpeople,theyarethecornerstoneforindepthtruthexploring,［力口連字符］One-sidednewsreportsmakeiteasyforNorthKoreantoknowthetruth.Onthecontrary,inthecountrieswithfreedomofspeech,itisgrosslytoughforpeopletoidentifythereality.Nonetheless,differentsourcesofnewsprovidedifferentperspectivestowardthesameevents.Bycomparisonofthenews,wecansurvivefromtheoverwhelminginformation.Forexample,Reuters,TimesandTheWallStreetjournals,theychosedifferentpoint［復數(shù)］toreporttheMh370accidents.Findingthecontradictionsandcommonpointsinthesereports,wecanensurethattheplanehasdeviateditsairlineandtheoilhadbeenconsumedup.Butwhethertheplaneexplodedordirectlysankintotheseaneedsfurtherinformation.［結合時事很好，而且也和前面一段有自然的銜接］Admittedly,itistime-consumingtocollecttheinformationandanalyzethem.Forexample,inordertofindthetruthofWWII,historiansjust［just去掉］havetosearchnotonlytheformalhistorybutalsocountlessunofficialhistory.Buttheprojectisworthconductingbecausethetruthisallthatwechaseforourlife.Conscientiouspeoplewanttoknowwhethertheircountrywasatfaultforthewar;manydeadpeopleurgedforafairjudgmentoftheirlife.Soweneedabundantinformationtofindthetruth.Insum,themorediversifiedsourcesofnewswegetthetruth,thecloserwearetothetruth,［結尾不宜過于簡潔］預估分數(shù)：4.5時事結合分析很不錯，例子選的很好。總體來說，展開是很好的了還是同樣的建議，不建議用特別正式的詞語，總體來說和諧就好結尾還要再想想，太過簡潔顯得突兀。Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement:Physicalexercisesaremuchmoreimportanttoelderlypeoplethanyoungpeople.Physicalexercisesareundoubtedlyofgreatimportanceforboththeelderlyandyoungpeoplesincetheycanprovidethepeoplewithoptimisticemotionsandhealthybodies.Basedonmyownexperienceandpersonality,comparedwiththeeffectsphysicalexerciseshaveontheelderly,Ithinkexercisesaremuchmorevitalforyoungpeople.Tobeginwith,undoubtedly,physicalexercisecanassistyoungpeopletokeepfit,whichistightlyrelevanttotheirperformanceonboththeirstudyandwork.YuQiuyu,oneofthemostinfluentialandgreatestwritersinChina,hasinsightfullycommentedthat,"Nothingismoreimportantthanagoodbody."Onlybyhavingahealthybodycanpeopleputalltheirattentiontotheworktheyaredoing/力口逗號］asoncetheygetsick,itisdifficultforthemtoconcentrateonthework.Icanthinkofnobetterillustrationthatpeoplewhoareillwillprobablyaskforleave.Eveniftheyareonduty,theirworkingresultsmightbelessthansatisfactory.Hence,inordertomakebetterachievementswithoutdelay,itisimportantforyoungpeopletodosomeexercisetoremainhealthy.Furtherlendingcredencetomypositionisthatforyoungpeople,themorephysicalexercisestheydo,thehigherworkingefficiencytheycanhave.Thatisbecausenotonlycanphysicalexercisesofferyoungpeoplehealthybodies,theycanalsoencourageyoungpeopletohaveagoodmood.First,duringtheprocessofexercising,theycanreleasealltheiremotionsandpressure,andsomehowgetatemporaryescapefromtheworkandstudy.Second,theycandoexercisesinthelocationssuchasbeaches,whicharefarfrom