高三英語二輪復習讀后續(xù)寫之彈鋼琴的媽媽講義

高三杭州英語二模讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。ASpecialRecitalWewereinourlate20swithachildwhenmyhusband,Ralph,finallygraduatedfromcollege."OK,nowIdeserveapiano,"Iblurtedoutwhenhesatdownforlunchjustbeforethegraduationceremony.Alookofsurprisecrossedhisface."Wecouldneveraffordapiano.Aftersomanyyearsofhardwork,wegotyouthroughschool.NowIdeserveapiano,"Irepeated.Severalmonthslater,Ralph,withhelp,movedtheuprightpianoweboughtfor$100intoourcottage'stinyarcheddiningroom.Itsmelledalittlemusty,buthadgreattone.Ralphstartedgraduateschool,leavingnomoneyforprivatepianolessons.ThefirstthingthatcametomymindwasSantaMonicaCityCollege-maybeitofferedpianolessons.Skimmingthecatalog,IdancedaroundtheroomwhenIfoundaclassatthesametimetheboyswereatpreschool.Practicing,however,wasnotsoeasy.Four-yearoldredheadedDennycrawledoutofbedintheeveningonaregularbasis.Thatwasmytimetopractice.He’dpadoutofthebedroominhissleeperandclimbuponthebenchwithme,Soonhebeganplinking(發(fā)出叮鈴聲)onthehighkeys.Itriedtoignorehim.Helistenedtotheechoesofthekeysandplinkedsomemore.DoingallIcoulddotokeepfocusedonmyownpracticing,Icontinuedtoignorehim.Thispracticepatternbecameaneveningroutine.Afterawhile,Ididn'tevenhearhimanymore.Ralphstudied.Dennyplinkedonthehighkeys,andIfocusedonmypiecefortheend-of-the-termrecital(獨奏會).

Thateveningcame.However,Ralphsaidhewasbusypreparingforthemidtermsandcouldn'twatchDenny.Pacingbackandforth,Ishookmyheadtryingtofigureoutwhattodo.Timewasrunningout.IbundledupDenny-withhissleeperonanddroveofftotherecitalwithhim.“We’llsitinthefrontrowDenny,”Iwhispered.”YouhavetobeveryquietandlistenwhenIamplaying.”Henodded,said“Uh-huh,”andwesatdown.Paragraph1:Dennyheldmyhand,butthenmyturncame.

Paragraph2:Asmallbodyclimbedontothepianobenchnexttome.

Step1

思考問題Para1：1.我是如何安撫Denny的？2.

我在舞臺上的心理以及表現(xiàn)？3.我是如何注意到Denny的？Para2：1.這時我的反應？2.這場獨特演奏的結(jié)果是什么？3.我的感悟？

Step2構思詞塊和句式，連詞成句(文章協(xié)同表達也很重要）Para1：1.當我上臺表演前，叮囑兒子安靜、乖一點：松手+蹲下+示意他+轉(zhuǎn)身走向舞臺Lettinggoof

hishand,I

croucheddown

besidehim,

strokinghisheadgently

andwhispering“It’sMom’sturntoplay.StayhereandI’llbebacksoon”.ThenI

mademywayfor

thestage.2.當我在臺上表演時：忐忑+激動+深呼吸+坐下開始演奏+給自己加油鼓勁(心理活動)+演奏很順利Restlessnessmingledwithexcitement,I

seatedmyself

onthebench,

murmuringtomyself“Youarejustgoingto

shine”,andstartedtoplay.Myfingers

danced

overblackandwhitekeys

asif

theyhadamindof

theirown.沉浸在演奏中，但是臺下觀眾突然有點騷動SoimmersedwasI

intheplayingthatI

gotcarriedaway---until

gaspsofsurprisedrewmebacktoreality.Para2：

1.Denny坐在我身邊，我的復雜情緒：從未演練過這樣的畫面+震驚+努力保持鎮(zhèn)定+把演出當成eveningroutine。NeverhadI

rehearsed

anythinglikethishappening.

Imissedseveralnotes,

completelythunderstruck.

Thoughnumbwithshock,Isoon

regainedmycomposure,takingthisasoureveningroutine.

2.我沉著地和Denny一起完成演出

投去讓人安心的笑容+繼續(xù)演奏(withDennyplinkingonthehighkeys)+結(jié)束演出+鞠躬+觀眾鼓掌CastingDennyareassuringsmile,Icontinuedmyperformance,

focusingonmyownpiece

withDennyplinkingonthehighkeys

asusual.Everyting

turnedoutsmooth.

Theinstant

wefinishedthelastnote,theaudience

eruptedintorapturousapplauseandwildcheers.

3.我的思考Flawedas

myrecitalwas,

itwas

thePerfectimperfection-Denny’sjoin

that

madetherecital

one-in-a-million.

Step3連句成篇，書寫優(yōu)美

Dennyheldmyhand,butthenmyturncame.

Lettinggoof

hishand,I

croucheddown

besidehim,

strokinghisheadgently

and

whispering“It’sMom’sturntoplay.StayhereandI’llbebacksoon”.ThenI

mademywayforthestage.Restlessnessmingledwithexcitement,I

seatedmyself

onthebench,

murmuringtomyself

“Youarejustgoingtoshine”,

andstartedtoplay.Myfingers

danced

overblackandwhitekeys

asif

theyhadamindoftheirown.

SoimmersedwasI

intheplayingthatI

gotcarriedaway---until

gaspsofsurprisedrewmebacktoreality.

Asmallbodyclimbedontothepianobenchnexttome.It'sDenny!NeverhadIrehearsedanything

likethishappening.Imissedseveralnotes,

completelythunderstruck.

Thoughnumbwithshock,Isoon

regainedmycomposure,takingthisasoureveningroutine.

CastingDennyareassuringsmile,

Icontinuedmyperformance,focusingonmypiece

withDennyplinkingonthehighkeysasusual.Everything

turnedoutsmooth.

Theinstant

wefinishedthelastnote,

theaudienceeruptedintorapturousapplauseandwildcheers.Flawedas

myrecitalwas,

itwas

thePerfectimperfection-Denny’sjoin

that

madetherecital

one-in-a-million.參考范文：Paragraph1:Dennyheldmyhand,butthenmyturncame.

KissingmylittleDenny,Istrodetothestageasawarriortofinishmyinbornmission.Itisthetimetoechothecallhoveringinmymind.Itismystage!Itismyday!However,theglancefromtheaudiencesuffocatedme,aftersomanyyears,couldImanagetoperformhere?Asthelightcastingashadowonme,Ibeganmyjourney.Stepbystep,thenervousnessfadedaway,tunesplinkedfrommyfingersfinallydrownedmyintheworldofmusic.Stealingovermyshoulder,Icouldseemylittleboydancingwiththemelody.Paragraph2:Asmallbodyclimbedontothepianobenchnexttome.

ItwasmyDenny!Whoseappearanceonlyintensifiedmyterrorandpanic.However,mylittleboy,eyeswide

open

withwonderandexcitement,

seemedunawareofthesurroundingsbut

beganpli