Dyfuqc雅思教父劉洪波：兒童類雅思作文高分范文及點評

生活需要游戲，但不能游戲人生；生活需要歌舞，但不需醉生夢死；生活需要藝術(shù)，但不能投機(jī)取巧；生活需要勇氣，但不能魯莽蠻干；生活需要重復(fù)，但不能重蹈覆轍。-----無名兒童類雅思作文高分范文及點評——摘自劉洪波2010新作《最簡化雅思寫作》Somepeoplebelievethattimespentontelevision,videoandcomputergamescanbebeneficialtochildren.Othersbelievethishasnegativeeffectsonachild.Discussbothviewsandgiveyourownopinion.InrecentyearsparentshavehadtomaketoughdecisionsabouthowmuchtimetheirkidsshouldspendwatchingTVandplayingcomputerorvideogames.Somehavearguedthattheyarenotonlyawasteoftime,butpotentiallyharmful.Others,however,claimthatkidsshouldbekidsanddeservesomeentertainment.Personally,Ifeelthatthebestapproachismoderation.Ontheonehand,toomuchTVandgamingcanhaveanegativeinfluence.Physically,hoursinfrontofamonitorareharmfulontheeyes.Andmentallyifkidsspendtoomuchtimelivinginavirtualworld,theymaylosetheabilitytomakefriendsandsocializeinanormalway.Moreover,seeingtoomuchviolenceandquestionablecontentcouldinfluenceyoungpeople’sbehavior,astheyareimpressionable.Ontheotherhand,allchildrenneedtohavefunandplay.Ifstudentsonlystudy,theywillsurelysufferfrommentalandemotionalpressureandstress.Also,notallcontentonTVoronlineisunhealthy;therearelotsofeducationalshowsandcontentthatispositive.Speakingfrompersonalexperience,Ithinktherightapproachistohaveahealthybalance.Inthisregard,parentshavearesponsibilitytosetboundariesandmakesurethatthecontenttheirkidsareviewingisappropriate.Aswell,TVandvideogamesarenottheonlywaystohavefun,soparentsshouldencouragetheirkidstointeractandplaywithotherkidsinpersontoo.Intheend,weshouldfollowourcommonsense.ParentsshouldbefirmbutfairwithlettingtheirkidsplayonlineorinfrontofaTVscreen.Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,andTVandvideogamesarenodifferent.(289words)

劉洪波點評：寫作線索：觀點中立，適度即可。第二段ontheonehand，講負(fù)面；第三段ontheotherhand，講正面；最后講家長要重視和起作用。經(jīng)典的中立型文章?？蓪W(xué)習(xí)的點很多：首先，首段最后一句中Thebestapproachismoderation.（最好的辦法是適度）moderation一詞可以理解為中文的“（把握）火候”，是中立文章的點睛大詞，不可不學(xué)。其次，第二段中分別用physically和mentally拓展了寫作思路；最后，文章末句提升至哲學(xué)高度：Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,TVandvideogamesarenodifferent.（大多數(shù)事情適度都是好的，電視和視頻游戲也不例外）是啊，適度飲酒對身體好；打打小麻將，買買彩票還怡情呢。但最難把握的就是這個moderation“度”??！先學(xué)習(xí)下面的詞匯和短語，然后再重讀范文，體會它們在文中的運(yùn)用點睛詞匯deserve[]vt.應(yīng)受，值得moderation[]n.適度socialize[]社會交往virtual[]adj.虛擬的questionable[]adj.有問題的interact[]vi.互相作用，互相影響firm[]adj.嚴(yán)格的必備短語makedecision作出決定spendsometime(in)doingsth./spendsometimeonsth.花時間在（做）某事上haveanegativeinfluence有不良影響beharmfulto/onsth.對……有傷害makefriends交朋友sufferfrom遭受inthisregard在這點上havearesponsibilitytodosth.有責(zé)任去做某事setboundaries限制inperson親自三分鐘熟讀或背誦本文最實用的三個句子Andmentallyifkidsspendtoomuchtimelivinginavirtualworld,theymaylosetheabilitytomakefriendsandsocializeinanormalway.Aswell,TVandvideogamesarenottheonlywaystohavefun,sopare