2024年1月九省聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫人和動物類+聰明的海豚+講義 高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

2024九省聯(lián)考續(xù)寫疑問解讀+文本構(gòu)思閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Paragraph1:

Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.Paragraph2:

Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear

(水下呼吸器)

andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn’tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedempty-handed.Paragraph3:

Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter

(過濾)

boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya’spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithacomb

(梳子or發(fā)夾；扎頭繩等)

inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.Paragraph4:

“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthecombandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What’sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.注意：（1）續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；（2）請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答?！癟hisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.文本分析一、九省聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫，故事情節(jié)設(shè)計明了，易于理解；——大意回顧全文概要：去年夏天，Hilda在海洋生物園擔(dān)任了一名海豚訓(xùn)練員的志愿者。她的工作是確保水池里沒有任何雜物，以便訓(xùn)練員能訓(xùn)練海豚撿取特定的物品。然而有一天在清潔后，一只名為Maya的海豚從水池里遞給Hilda一個糖果紙。當(dāng)訓(xùn)練員Katherine看到這一幕時，她責(zé)備Hilda粗心大意。盡管受挫但并未灰心，Hilda決定對Maya進行一些監(jiān)視。第二天早上，Hilda早早來到海洋生物園。她穿上水下呼吸器，跳進水池進行她通常的水下打掃。在水池里什么也沒發(fā)現(xiàn)，她爬出水面的時候，正好看到Katherine從另一邊跳進水池里。根據(jù)昨天發(fā)生的事情，Hilda知道她還在懷疑自己的工作失職。但當(dāng)Katherine浮出水面時，她并不驚訝地空手而歸。在進行水池清理時，Maya一直在歡快地游動，但現(xiàn)在海豚突然停下來，游到水池的后面，過濾箱所在的地方。它將鼻子伸到箱子后面，然后游走開了。Hilda感到疑惑，心想Maya在做什么？她重新跳入水中，游到箱子后面去看了一看，問題得到了解答。接著，Hilda沿著Maya的路線游過水池，并從水里出來時，看見Katherine正在脫水下呼吸器。當(dāng)Katherine轉(zhuǎn)身時，她吃驚得張大了嘴?，斞旁谒剡吷?，嘴里叼著一個頭飾，等待著它的獎勵。

Paragraph1:

Hilda,avolunteeratasealifepark,wasblamedbythetrainer,Katherine,afteradolphin,Maya,presentedherwithacandywrapper.HildadecidedtospyonMaya.關(guān)鍵詞:

Hilda,volunteer,sealifepark,blamed,trainer,dolphin,Maya,candywrapper,spy

Paragraph2:

Hilda,whoarrivedearlyatthepark,conductedherusualunderwatersweepinthetankandfoundnothing.SheobservedKatherine,possiblysuspicious(懷疑)ofher,asshejumpedinforherunderwatersearch.關(guān)鍵詞:

Hilda,Katherine,sweep,empty-handed

Paragraph3:

WhileobservingMaya,HildadiscoveredastashofitemsbehindthefilterboxandfoundMayaofferingacombtoKatherine.關(guān)鍵詞:

Maya,observation,hide,items,filterbox,discovered,comb

Paragraph4:

KatherinequestionedMayaaboutthecomb,throwingafishastreatandHildarevealedahandfulofwetitems,leavingKatherineconfused.關(guān)鍵詞:

Katherine,Maya,fish,comb,wetitems,confused.

二、續(xù)寫兩個段首句設(shè)置中心詞突出，secret和realize方向指引明確?！癟hisis

Maya’s

secret,”

Hilda

saidwithabigsmile.續(xù)寫推斷：揭秘——釋疑角色配戲：Maya或Hilda均可以做主角；Katherine為配角描寫本段。

NowKatherine

realized

whathadbeengoingon.續(xù)寫推斷：道歉——針對性訓(xùn)練——自然收尾角色配戲：Katherine為主角，先聲道歉，Hilda配角互動，圍繞第三方主角Maya展開針對性訓(xùn)練，撿拾游客物品獲得應(yīng)用獎勵。

三、續(xù)寫主題確定不是本文的重點。本次九省適應(yīng)性考試，是一個方向，避開了大家所熟知的大話題，續(xù)寫材料輕松活潑，趣味第一，文末的收尾活潑，開心，娛樂即可。所以，這里設(shè)置了三個不同的收尾：1.Maya更多技能和觀眾互動；2.Hilda受邀參與訓(xùn)練或受聘長期志愿者3.三者和諧畫面定格。

四、語言風(fēng)格，逢練必看，因為語言協(xié)同很重要。1.

Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.形容詞狀語2.Thenextmorning,Hilda

arrived

attheparkearly.She

puton

herscubagear(水下呼吸器)and

jumpedinto

thetankforherusual,underwatersweep.

多謂語3.

Finding

nothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.

非謂語+分詞作狀語4.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn’tsurprisedwhenshesurfaced

empty-handed.

形狀5.Duringthetanksweeps,Maya

hadbeenswimming

playfully,

but

nowthedolphinstoppedsuddenly

andswam

tothebackpartofthetank

where

thefilter(過濾)boxwaslocated.

長句可以出現(xiàn)6.

“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”

demanded

Katherine,

takingthecombandthrowingherafish.

獨白+套句+非謂語7.Katherineasked,

obviouslyconfused.

形容詞狀語8.

“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaid

withabigsmile.

說的表達方式+狀語表情感/情緒

五、原文中可以用做續(xù)寫的語料。1.Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(過濾)boxwaslocated.sweep:

sweepinto/through...

大模大樣地走進...2.

“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.watery:

sbbewaterywith...因為...眼淚汪汪地下水文(僅供參考)：語言和原文協(xié)同，簡潔，結(jié)尾自然“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.

Curioustoseemore,Katherine

decidedtofollowHilda

toinvestigatefurther.Thenextday,theyboth

puton

theirscubagear

andentered

thetank,

swimming

tothebackwhereMayahadbeenseenhidingitems.

As

theyreachedthefilterbox,theydiscoveredacollectionofvariousobjectsstashedbehindit.Mayahadbeenhidingnotonlythecombbutalsootheri