2024屆高三英語作文復習寫作專項讀后續(xù)寫主題語境續(xù)寫：人與動物（狗狗篇）講義素材

Warm-up【閱讀&感知】

挑選了一篇跛腳男孩和天生殘疾狗狗互相救贖的故事，以完形填空練習方式呈

現，讓學生在做題過程中梳理情節(jié)、探究主旨，并積累描寫狗狗的有用表達。

PuppiesforSale

身有殘疾的小男孩看到了一只與他同病相憐的小狗，他決定以全價把它買下，雖然

老板愿意免費贈送。在小男孩看來，殘疾的人有著與正常人一樣的價值和尊嚴，不

能歧視他們。

Ashopownerplacedasignabovehisdoorthatsaid:"PuppiesForSale."like

thisalwaysattractyoungchildren,andtonosurprise,aboysawthesignand

theowner:"Howmucharethepuppies?"heasked.

Thestoreownerreplied,"Trom30to50.”

Thelittleboypulledoutsomefromhispocket."Ihave2.37,“hesaid."CanI

pleasethem?^^

Theshopownersawthenote,smilingandwhistling.Outofthekennel（狗窩）came

fiveballsoffur.Onepuppywasfallingbehind.Immediatelythelittleboy

thelame（跛的）puppyandsaid,"What'swrongwiththatlittledog?”

Theshopownerthattheveterinarian（獸醫(yī)）haddiscovereditdidn'thavea

hipsocket（膝蓋骨）.Itwouldlame.Thelittleboybecame.“Thatisthe

puppythatIwanttobuy.”

Theshopownersaid,"Ifyoureallywanthim,riljusthimtoyou.^^

Thelittleboygotquite,pointinghisfinger,andsaid;"Idon'twantyoutogive

himtome.Tilpayprice.,I'llgiveyou2.37now,and50centsamonth

untilIhavehim

Theshopownersaid,“Pleasedon'tbuythislittledog.Heisnevergoingtobeableto

andplaywithyouliketheotherpuppies."

Tohis,thelittleboyreachedandrolleduphistrouserslegstoshowa

badlytwisted（變形的），lameleftsupportedbyabigmetalbrace（支架）.He

lookedupattheshopownerandreplied,"Well,Idon'trunsowellmyselfand

thelittlepuppywillneedsomeonewho!”

1.A.AnimalsB.SignsC.PricesD.Deals

2.AmetB.beggedC.questionedD.approached

3.A.paperB.coinsC.changeD.check

4.A.seeB.takeC.raiseD.select

5.A.roundB.tinyC.shyD.warm

6.A.pitiedB.favoredC.foundD.noticed

7.A.orderedB.explainedC.regrettedD.declared

8.A.neverB.sometimesC.alwaysD.even

9.A.sadB.excitedC.calmD.worried

lO.A.giveB.tellC.bringD.show

ll.A.upsetB.happyC.disappointedD.hurtful

12.A.fullB.halfC.lessD.more

13.A.SurprisinglyB.NaturallyC.SlowlyD.Actually

14.A.paidforB.soldoutC.caredforD.healedup

15.A.moveB.surviveC.runD.sit

16.A.delightB.surpriseC.sorrowD.despair

17.A.downB.upC.outD.forward

18.A.armB.fingerC.legD.heart

19.A.angrilyB.secretlyC.softlyD.shockingly

2O.A.suffersB.paysC.passesD.understands

這個故事也被某校改編成了讀后續(xù)寫，原文和范文質量尚佳。

PuppiesForSale

Ashopownerplacedasignabovehisdoorthatsaid:"PuppiesForSale.”

Signslikethisalwayshaveawayofattractingyoungchildren,andtono

surprise,aboysawthesignandapproachedtheowner;

“Howmuchareyougoingtosellthepuppiesfor?"heasked.Thestoreowner

replied,“Anywherefrom$30to$50.“Thelittleboypulledoutsomechange

fromhispocket."Ihave$2.37,“hesaid."CanIpleaselookatthem?^^

Theshopownersmiledandwhistled.OutofthekennelcameLady,whoran

downtheaisleofhisshopfollowedbyfiveteeny,tinyballsoffur.Onepuppy

waslaggingconsiderablybehind.Immediatelythelittleboysingledoutthe

lagging,limpingpuppyandsaid,"What'swrongwiththatlittledog?”

Theshopownerexplainedthattheveterinarianhadexaminedthelittlepuppy

andhaddiscovereditdidn'thaveahipsocket.Itwouldalwayslimp.Itwould

alwaysbelame.Thelittleboybecameexcited."ThatistheverypuppythatI

wanttobuy.^^

Theshopownersaid,“No,youdon'twanttobuythatlittledog.Ifyoureally

wanthim,I'lljustgivehimtoyou."Thelittleboygotquiteupset.Helooked

straightintothestoreowner'seyes,pointinghisfinger,andsaid;"Idon't

wantyoutogivehimtome.”

注意：.1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置

作答。

Paragraghl:"I'IIpayfullprice,“headded,inafirmtone.

Paragragh2:Hearingtheowner'swords,thelittleboyreacheddownand

rolleduphislefttrouserleg.

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“I'llpayfullprice/1headded,inafirmtone.Blindtotheconfused

expressionsontheowner'sface,theboycontinuedhisspeech,“Thatlittle

dogiswortheverybitasmuchasalltheotherdogsandinfact,I'llgive

you$2.37now,and50centsamonthuntilIhavehimpaidfor."Theshop

ownercountered,nDoyoureallywanttobuythislittledog?Heisnever

goingtobeabletorun,jumporplaywithyouliketheotherpuppies.M

Hearingtheowner'swords,thelittleboyreacheddownandrolleduphis

lefttrouserleg.Abadlytwisted,crippledleftlegsupportedbyabigmetal

bracecameintosight.Theboylookedupattheshopownerandsoftly

replied,"Well,Idon'trunsowellmyself,andthelittlepuppywillneed

someonewhounderstands!11Tearssparklingineyes,theownerhanded

overthelamepuppytotheboy.Italwaysfeelssogreattohavesomeone

whounderstandsyouandcaresforyouheartandsoul.

Writing【練習&運用】

讀后續(xù)寫語篇一（2022湖北十一校聯考）閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)兩段首句

進行續(xù)寫,使之構成一個完整的故事。

故事大意：我為了更好的生活，聽從醫(yī)生建議，去狗狗收容所領養(yǎng)一只狗，一同

減肥，

AnydaythatIhadtogototheairportwastheworstdayofmylife,

andasatravelingappliancesalesman,Ihadtoflyquiteabit.Onthispartic

ulardayin2020,Iwasassignedtoamiddleseat.Backthen,Iwassofattha

tIcouldhardlyfitdowntheaislefacingforward,soIwasforcedtowalksi

dewayslikeacrab.Iweighedbetween340and360pounds;theexactfigured

ependedonwhetherItookmyweightbeforeorafteroneofmyenormousme

als.WhenIfinallysqueezedintomyseat,theseatbeltwasn'tlongenoughto

fitaroundmy52-inchwaist.Theyneverwere.

Atthatmoment,IknewinmyheartthatIneededtochange.Istartedlookingfor

signsthatmightleadmetowardabetterlife,andimmediatelyasignshowedup.I

turnedontheTVandhappenedtocatchaninterviewwithaformerworldchampion.

Hesaidhe'dbeenunderthecareofadoctorwhoputhimonawhole-food,

plant-baseddiet.Helostweightwithoutfeelinghungry,andhewashealthierand

strongerthanhe'dbeensincehistwenties.Ineverimaginedmysignwouldcome

fromhim,buttherehewas.

Ihadnoideawhata"whole-food,plant-baseddiet"was.Iwentonlineand

searchedforadoctorwhocouldhelpme.That9swhenIfoundPreeti,anexperienced

medicalspecialist.Ifelthopefulwhensheagreedtoseemethenextday.Thedoctor

recommendedalowcaloriedietandsomephysicalexercisesIcoulddoinmyhome.

ShealsosuggestedthattomaintaindisciplineIshouldgotoashelterandadoptadog.

“Exercise?”Iasked,"Adog?”Icouldn'tbelievewhatIheard.But,shesaid,"Adog

isagoodcompanion.Plus,youliveinanapartment,whichmeansthedoghastobe

walked.Soifyouwalkyourdogtwiceaday,thatwillbeyourexercise.I'msureit

canenhancethequalityofyourlifeandimproveyourhealth."

para.1Withdoubtsandhesitation,IdroveuptoadogshelternearwhereIlived.

para.2Icamebackhomewiththelargeblack-and-whitedogwithabigroundbody.

Step1Readforcluesandfigureoutthetheme

l.WhydidIresolvetochange?

2.HowshouldIloseweightaccordingtothedoctor9srecommendation?

3.WouldIsucceedinchangingmyselfandleadingabetterlife?

4.Whatmessageisthestorylikelytoconveytothereader?

Step2Weavetheplots

para.1Withdoubtsandhesitation,IdroveuptoadogshelternearwhereIli

ved.

①WhatcameintomysightimmediatelyIgotinthere?

②WhichdogdidIchoosetoadoptandwhy?

para.2Icamebackhomewiththelargeblack-and-whitedogwithabiground

body.

①Whatwasthedoglike?Washeactive,energeticorhealthy?

②WhatdidIdoinanefforttochangetogetherwithmydog?

③Didweattainourgoal?

批改學生習作后發(fā)現對狗的動作描寫和神態(tài)描寫是主要難點，還有指代狗的代詞用it是否

合適等其它小問題，一一指出后，再挑選學生習作中精彩語句共同學習。

possibleversion:

Withdoubtsandhesitation,IdroveuptoadogshelternearwhereIlived.Upon

openingthedoor,Iwasamazedtoseevarioustypesofdogs.Hardlyhadthey

caughtsightofastrangerapproachingwhentheystartedbarking.Itwasdifficultto

decideonone.Atthatmoment,alargeblack-and-whitedogyawninginthecomer

caughtmyattention.Hisloundbodyimmediatelyremindedmeofmysizeandwhat

Preetisaid-Adogisagoodcompanion.Iknewhewastheoneforme.Icouldn't

resisthischarmanddecidedtoadopthim.

Icamebackhomewiththelargeblack-and-whitedogwithabigroundbody.Inamed

himDavid,whooftenlaymotionlessonthefloorandyawnedwitheyeshalf-closed.I

madeupmymindtochangebothofus.Shortlyafterward,Ifoundaball,dragged

Davidtotheparkandthrewitathim.Daviddashedforwardtocatchtheballstraight

away.Gradually,wefellintothehabitofwalkingtwiceaday,justasthedoctor

recommended,andDavidalwaysseemedtoknowwhenIneededalittleextra

encouragement.Hewouldnudgemewithhisnoseorlickmyhand,remindingme

thatIwasnotaloneinmyjourneytobetterhealth.Onemonthlater,itsuddenlyhit

methattherewasnoneedformetowalklikeacrabontheplane.Meanwhile,

Davidbecameleanandseemedmorecontentthaneverbefore.Wehadbecomea

team,workingtogethertoimproveourlives.

Writing【鞏固&遷移】

讀后續(xù)寫語篇二（2023常州卷）閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)兩段首句進行續(xù)寫,

使之構成一個完整的故事。

Intheheartofabitterwinter,snowblanketedtheland,tuningtheworldintoafrostywonderland.In

asmallvillagenestledamidsttheicylandscape,anunusualtaleunfolded,starringadognamedMax

andagroupofvillagers.

Max,aloyalandspiritedcompanion,belongedtoalovelygirlnamedEmma.Together,theybraved

theharshwinters,findingcomfortintheirunwavering（堅定的）bond.Onefatefulevening,asthe

icywindshowledoutside,asuddensnowstormstruckthevillage.Snowpiledhigh,makingthe

roadsdangerousandactofseeingnearlyimpossible.Thevillage'spowersupplywascutoff,leading

theworldintodarkness.

Inthemidstofthestorm,Emmafoundherselflostinthefreezingwilderness.Shehadgoneoutto

fetchfirewoodforherfamilywhileMaxwaskeptathome,butthesnowstormhaddisoriented（使...

失去方向）her,leavingherinseveredanger.Emma'sparents,consumedwithworry,desperately

searchedforher."Emma!Emma!”hermothercalledoutherdaughter'snamemadlybutgotno

response.Emmaveryprobablylostherconsciousnessonsuchacoldnight.

Moreandmorevillagersjoinedthesearch.Theycombedthroughthedarkwoods,theirbreath

formingmistyclouds.Thewindhowledmournfully（哀傷地），echoingeveryone'sworry.

Max,sensingtheurgencyandthebondbetweenhumans,sprangintoaction.Withhiskeensenseof

smellandgreatdetermination,hesetouttofindthelostgirl.Throughthebitingcoldandswirling

snow,MaxfollowedEmma'sscent（氣味），notfrightenedbythefreezingtemperatures.

注意：（1）續(xù)寫詞數應為150個左右;⑵所給開頭兩段如下。

AsMaxsearchedthefrozenlandscape,heencounterednumerouschallenges.

Asthetwofiguresemergedfromthestorm,everyonewatchedinawe（敬圜.

（時間有限，主要框架已課堂討論過，僅讓同學們在課堂上完成了主要情節(jié)的銜接部分和主

旨寫作。）

完成續(xù)寫：

AsMaxnavigatedthefrozenlandscape,heencounterednumerouschallenges.The

snow..Finally,afterhoursof

searching,MaxdiscoveredEmmabeneathasnowcovered

tree.______________________________________________________________________________

_______Emma,_____________________________________________________________________

Asthetwofiguresemergedfromthestorm,allthevillagerswatchedinawe.Inaflash,the

girl'smotherrecognizedherdaughter,frightenedbutalive.Overwhelmed,the

mother,“ThankGod!Youareback!”

Max.Thevillagers,witnessingthis

reunion,letoutcollectivesighsofrelief.Theirfaceswereilluminatedbysmilesthat

.MaxhadnotonlysavedEmmabuthad

also.

這篇續(xù)寫的學生習作普遍比上一篇好太多，應是之前語料積累豐富的緣故。講評

課分享了學生習作中的亮點語句，同學們也很積極地贊嘆和學習。

possibleversion:

AsMaxnavigatedthefrozenlandscape,heencounterednumerouschallenges.The

snowweighedheavilyonhissmallbody,slowinghisprogress.Hispawsgrewnumb

withcold,andhisfurbecamecoveredwithice.Finally,afterhoursofsearching,Max

discoveredEmmabeneathasnowcoveredtree.Withaburstofexcitement,Max

barkedjoyfully,awakeningthegirlfromherunconsciousstate.Hegentlynudged

herwithhisnose.Emma,shiveringfromthecold,clungtoMax'swarmfurashe

carefullyguidedherbackhome.

Asthetwofiguresemergedfromthestorm,allthevillagerswatchedinawe.Ina

flash,thegirFsmotherrecognizedherdaughter,frightenedbutalive.Overwhelmed,

themothercollapsedtoherknees,handstremblingasshereachedouttoher,“Thank

God!Youareback!”Maxcircledaroundthereunitedmotheranddaughter,tail

waggingjoyfully.Thevillagers,witnessingthisheartwarmingreunion,letout

collectivesighsofrelief.Theirfaceswereilluminatedbysmilesthatmeltawaythe

cold.MaxhadnotonlysavedEmmabuthadalsoignitedasenseofunitywithinthe

community,makingthebitterwinteraseasonofhopeandgratitude.

和相關的續(xù)寫題還有許許多多，日后再分享~

下面送上狗狗描寫語料

Wordsandexpressions

1.apairoflargewateryeyes一雙水汪汪的大眼睛

2.twobigroundeyes兩只圓溜溜的大眼睛

3.anoselikeasmallblackgem一個黑寶石般的鼻子

4.wagthetail搖尾巴

5.smell/sniff嗅；bark吠；lick舔；scratch抓，撓；growl低吼

6.puttheearsup/pinbackthetears把耳朵豎起來

7.holdittightlywiththepaws用爪子緊緊抓住

8.raiseitswholebodyonitshindlegs用后腿支起全身

9.leaptoitsfeet跳起來

10.restthenoseinitspaws把鼻子擱在爪子里

ILSentences

1.Thedoghasgoldenfurwhichfeelsverycomfortable,liketouchingthesoftcotton.小狗有著金

黃色的毛，摸著十分舒服，像是摸著柔軟的棉花一樣。

2.Thedogclungtohisfeetandlookedathimwithbrighteyes.小狗緊貼著他的腳，用明亮的眼

睛看著他。

3.Uponhismaster?sarrival,thedogleapttohisfeet,snortedhappilyandboundedforward.主人一

到，這只狗就跳起來，高興地哼了一聲，向前跳躍著。

4.Dogstakemuchpleasureinrollingandrubbingtheirnecksandbackswiththeirpaws.狗彳艮喜歡

用爪子滾動和摩擦自己的脖子和后背。

5.Atthesightofastrangerapproachingthehouse,thedogwatchedhim,earsup,headslightly

cocked.看到一個陌生人向房子走來，那只狗豎起耳朵，微微抬起頭，注視