讀后續(xù)寫之“助人類”主題（講義）-高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)（新教材新高考）

A第06講助人類（講義）

目錄

目標(biāo)1助人類續(xù)寫概述和寫作步驟

目標(biāo)2困難處境來鋪墊

目標(biāo)3消極情緒來烘托

目標(biāo)4助人過程來描寫

目標(biāo)5感激、感動來升華

目標(biāo)6最新模擬

目標(biāo)7真題感悟

讀后續(xù)寫中常常會遇到自己幫助別人或者自己受到他人幫助的故事情節(jié)，我們就把這類文章歸為“脫

險型”。在近年高考真題中，如2022年新高考I卷鼓勵David越野跑；2020年新高考I卷幫助他人渡過難

關(guān)等。

【寫作步驟】

1.Thewaterwasdeepandrunningfastfromabigrainstormthenightbefore.

暴雨，水又深又急。

2.Athickburningsmellfilledtheair.

空氣里彌漫著濃厚灼熱的味道。

3.Itriedtoclimboutofthehole,butwhenIgotakneeontheice,itbrokelikewindowglass.

我試圖從洞里爬出來，但當(dāng)我的膝蓋跪在冰上時，它就像窗戶玻璃一樣斷裂了。

4.Asflamesshotathisfeet,hebrokethewindow'sglasswithhisbarehand.Bloodflowedfrombetweenhis

fingersandheignoredthepain.

當(dāng)火焰射向他的腳邊時，他徒手打破了窗戶的玻璃。血從他的手指間流出，他沒有理會疼痛。

5.Thedoorwaywassealedbyfire.Theglassofthewindowwasbroken,somesmokeranoutofthe

window,andtherewaslesssmokeinthehouse.

門口被火封住了。窗戶的玻璃被打碎了，窗外有一些煙，房子里的煙也少了。

6.Catherinesaidtoherfollowerswithsincerity,"I'llcontinuetodistributethecardsandbagstothe

homelessonthestreetandatlocalshelter.^^

凱瑟琳真誠地對她的追隨者們說：“我將繼續(xù)把這些卡片和包分發(fā)給街上和當(dāng)?shù)厥杖菟臒o家可歸者。”

二消極情緒來烘托

感到一陣……/一種……情緒襲來

情緒名詞+floodedoversb;sweptoversb

awaveof...;afeelingof;asenseof...;aflushof...

情緒名詞：joy/shame/guilt/excitement/pride/anger/rage/panic/terror/sorrow/embarrassment

/dispointment/sadness/sorrow/grief/fear...

因……顫抖

ilS+tremble/shake/shiver/quiver...withfear/panic/rage/anger/excitement/horror/fright...

進一步細(xì)節(jié)描寫（通常是肢體五官等細(xì)節(jié)來展現(xiàn)）

1.Tearsrolleddownmyeyes/cheeks.

淚水模糊了雙眼/留下臉頰。

2.Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifeltpowerlessasifwewerebrokentinyboatsatthemercyofstrongwaves.

看著遠(yuǎn)處的海岸，我感到無力（無力的），就好像我們是被強浪摧毀的小船。

3.Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,whichmademequiverwithan

uncontrollableterror/horror/fright.

疲憊而冰冷，我們可能死在這里的想法在我的腦海中閃現(xiàn)，這使我因一種無法控制的恐懼/恐懼/恐懼而顫抖。

4.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywholebody.

看著浩瀚的大海，我感到一種恐懼感掠過我的全身。

三助人過程來描寫

l.Asthecoatbecamecompletelywet,itdraggedmedown.Iwastiredofthestruggleandrestedwithmyarms

stretchedoutontheice.

當(dāng)外套完全濕了，它把我拖了下來。我厭倦了掙扎，伸出雙臂在冰上休息。

2.Astheydrovetothelibrary,Sebastiannervouslyapproachedtheroofersandofferedthewater.

當(dāng)他們開車去圖書館時，塞巴斯蒂安緊張地走近屋頂工人，給了水。

3.Withoutamoment9shesitation,Cheemijumpedthroughthewindow.Carlwassleepingsoundly.Picking

himup,Cheemiputhimonherbackandtiedhimtightlytoherselfwithabedsheet.

切米毫不猶豫地跳過了窗戶。卡爾睡得很香。切米把他抱起來，把他放在背上，用床單把他緊緊地綁在自

己身上。

4.Slowlyshescaledtheladderandpeepedthroughthewindow.Carefullysheundidthebedsheetand

handedit,withthechild,toapoliceman.

她慢慢地爬上梯子，從窗戶里偷看。她小心翼翼地解開床單，把它和孩子一起交給了一個警察。

5.“Weneedtothinkoutaway!”Imuttered,scratchingmyhead.

“我們需要想個辦法！”我抓著頭，嘟嚷著。

6.Nervousandanxious,JohnstruggledtocalmherselfdownandcarriedoutfirstaidtoSmith.

盡管緊張而焦慮，約翰努力讓自己鎮(zhèn)靜下來，對史密斯進行了急救。

7.Surroundedbyfireandsmoke,herecognizedthedirectionofthecryandrushedtowardsit.Hefeltthe

child,quicklypickedherup,andranoutasfastashecould.

在火和煙霧的包圍下，他認(rèn)出了哭聲的方向，就朝它沖去。他感覺到了那孩子，迅速地把她抱起來，盡

快地跑了出去。

四感激、感動來升華

1.Ensuingtheirsafety,Ifeltasurgeoftriumph.

當(dāng)他們安全下來后，我感到一陣勝利。

2.Ultimately,wewereback,safeandsound.

最終，我們又回來了，安然無恙。

3.Hearingthenews,Icouldn*thelprestrainingmyexcitement.

聽到這個消息，我忍不住抑制住了自己的興奮。

4.Whentheyleft,thedogturnedandgaveawinkgoodbye,seeminglysayingthatPaulwastobethanked.

當(dāng)他們離開時，狗轉(zhuǎn)過身，眨眼道別，似乎在說要感謝保羅。

5.Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandIsighedingreatrelief,grinningmerrilyateachother.

聽到這個好消息，湯姆和我如釋重負(fù)地嘆了口氣，愉快地咧著嘴笑。

6.（2023年浙江卷1月真題）Ifeltasurgeofreliefandaweatthesightofthissoundandgratefulcreature,

andIknewthatIwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedasIclimbedintomycaranddroveaway.

看到這個聲音和感激的生物，我感到一陣欣慰和敬畏，我知道我將永遠(yuǎn)珍惜我們爬上車開車離開時分享的

回憶。

7."IfIhadnotbeengivenfirstaid,Iwouldhavedead.^^SimmonssaidtoNorwoodgratefully.Simmonsshowed

hergratitudetoNorwood,saying“Itwasyouwhocametomyaidandsavedmy

如果我沒有得到急救，我就會死了。西蒙斯感激地對諾伍德說。西蒙斯對諾伍德表示了感謝，她說：“是

你來幫助我，救了我一命?！?/p>

8.Rosesgiven,fragranceinhand.

贈人玫瑰，手留余香。

9.Smallkindnesscanbring/contributeto/giverisetoabigdifference.

小小的善意可以產(chǎn)生大大的影響。

lO.Inaflash,withtearswellingupinmyeyes,Iwastouchedbeyondwords.Ifeltsowarmasiftherewerenine

sunsinmychest.

一瞬間，我眼里涌起了淚水，我被言語感動了。我感到很溫暖，好像胸口有九個太陽。

11.（2020年山東卷真題）Needlesstosay,theyweredeeplymoved,especiallyBernardwhofinallyfoundaway

tomakemoneyforhisfamily.

不用說，他們非常感動，尤其是伯納德，他終于找到了為家人賺錢的方法。

12.TheythankedSebastianandhisdadagainandwavedthemgoodbyeastheydroveaway.

他們再次感謝了塞巴斯蒂安和他的父親，并在他們開車離開時揮手告別。

13.SomovedandoverjoyedwasIthatIwantedtogiveherabighug,toexpressmydeepestgratitud

e,butinaCOVIDworld,allIcoulddowassay,"Oh,mygoodness!Thankyousomuch!^^

我非常感動，欣喜若狂，我想給她一個大大的擁抱，以表達我最深切的感激之情，但在一個冠狀病毒病的

世界里，我所能做的就是說：“哦，我的天哪！非常感謝！”

14.1silentlythankedSisterEstherinmyheart.Whatagreatteacherandagoodfriend!Whatshe

didbroughthappinesstoourdarkdays!

我在心里默默地感謝以絲特修女。多么偉大的老師和好朋友！她所做的一切給我們黑暗的日子帶來了幸福！

【最新模擬】

（2023.河北?校聯(lián)考模擬預(yù)測）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整

的短文。

AsanundergraduateinauniversityinPhiladelphia,Pennsylvania,CatherinehadvolunteeredattheHope

RescueMissioninherhometownwithhermotherwhoservedastheshelter'sdevelopmentdirector.Afterworking

withthehomelessandreceivingcardsfromhermominthemail,Catherinedecidedtobeginherproject."You've

GotMail".Shehadahugeheartforthoseinneed.

Forthepeoplethatshewashelping,shesawthehomelessnessfirsthandanditwasabattle.Shethoughtno

onewantedtochoosetobehomeless,andshealwaysdonatedthebasicneeds,includingthetoiletries,the

shampoosandtoothbrushes.

Inhermind,individualsfacinghomelessnesscertainlysufferedphysically,butformany,theemotional

sufferingwasevenmorepainful.Feelingaloneandhopelesscutdeeperthanfeelinghungryandcold.Therefore,

shehelditthat,akindgesture,suchasherprojectaboutencouragementcards,couldbethatlightinsomeone'sday

tokeepthemstrivingandhopingforabettertomorrow.

Oneday,shesharedherideawithhermother,t4Iwasthinkingofaboxfilledwithholidaycards.Iwanttodo

somethingtomakethehomelesswithemptyheartssmile,lettingthemknowmanypeoplestillcareaboutthem.^^

Hermother,smiledandsaid,"Justdoitandspreadyourlove!”

ThenCatherinelaunchedaholidaycarddriveforthehomelessafterbeinginspiredbyvolunteeringatthe

shelter.Shecollected2,000cards,surpassingheroriginalgoalof500injustafewweeks.

Catherine'scompassionforothersdidn'tstopatjustfeelingsympathyforthemintheirhardships.Shealso

followedhermother'sadvicetolookforwaystohelpthembeatthosehardshipsthroughherkindness.

SoCatherineaskedheronlinefriendsforholiday-themedcards,andsoon,herinboxwasfloodedwithpeople

offeringtohelp.Amazingly,thepeoplesheknew,thepeopleshehadn'tspokentosinceprimaryschool,andthe

peopleshehadneverspokentobefore,sentthecardstoher.Thensheaskedforcardsfromanyone.Shewasnot

turningdownany.Shethoughtitwasreallygreattoacceptthem.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Inhonorofthe"You'veGotMail"initiative,Catherineandhermotherhostedacardmakingparty.

Catherinehopedherprojectwouldremindotherstomakeadifferenceinsomeone'slife.

【答案】

Inhonorofthe"You'veGotMail“initiative,Catherineandhenmotherhostedacardmakingparty.Intheparty,

shemetagroupofhergoodfriendswhoofferedheralargenumberofcards.Shealsoranintoacompany's

manager,whodonatedmanybagsandaccessoriestoher.Besides,amongtheparticipantsweresomefamousmedia

thatsanghighpraisefbrCatherine'skinddeeds,callingontheworldtofollowsuit.Theymadethecardstogether.

Catherinesaidtoherfollowerswithsincerity,6<rilcontinuetodistributethecardsandbagstothehomelessonthe

streetandatlocalshelters.^^

Catherinehopedherprojectwouldremindotherstomakeadifferenceinsomeone'slifb.Sheappealedtothe

worldtocareforthepoor,andmeanwhileurgedthepoortospeakupforthemselves.Uptillnow,shehas

conductedinterviewswithsomeofthemandputtogetheravideotobeonairinsociety.Shelistenedtotheirstories,

learningabouttheirhealthconditions,theirfamiliesandtheirdreams.Inherhumbleopinion,simplybecauseyou

onlypassthemonthestreet,youknownothingaboutthem.Sothebiggestthingisjusttolistenbecauseeverybody

hasastory,fromwhichyoucanfindouthowtohelp.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開。主人公凱瑟琳在大學(xué)時做志愿者幫助了很多無家可歸的人，所以在她畢

業(yè)后，她開展了自己的“你有一封郵件”的項目，給無家可歸的人寄送鼓勵賀卡。在項目進行的過程中，也有

無數(shù)人不斷向凱瑟琳寄卡片。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“為了紀(jì)念“你收到了郵件”倡議，凱瑟琳和她的母親舉辦了一個賀卡制作派對。”可知，

第一段可描寫凱瑟琳在派對上和參與派對的人之間的互動。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“凱瑟琳希望她的項目能提醒其他人去改變別人的生活?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼憚P瑟琳為

無家可歸的人進行發(fā)聲，呼吁大家關(guān)心窮人、幫助窮人。

2.續(xù)寫線索：凱瑟琳做大學(xué)志愿者——決定開展鼓勵卡項目——凱瑟琳收集鼓勵卡——開展制作賀卡派對

——呼吁社會關(guān)心窮人

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①主辦：host/hold

②提供：offer/supply/give

③高度贊揚：singhighpraise/speakhighlyof

④呼吁：callon/appealto/urge

情感類

①友善的：kind/sweet/friendly

②真誠：sincerity/honesty/earnesty/goodfaith

③謙虛的：humble/modest

【點睛】【高分句型1】Intheparty,shemetagroupofhergoodfriendswhoofferedheralargenumberofcards.

（使用了who引導(dǎo)定語從句）

【高分句型2】Besides,amongtheparticipantsweresomefamousmediathatsanghighpraiseforCatherine'skind

deeds,callingontheworldtofollowsuit.（使用了that引導(dǎo)定語從句）

【高分句型3]Sothebiggestthingisjusttolistenbecauseeverybodyhasastory,fromwhichyoucanfindouthow

tohelp.（使用了fromwhich引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句）

【真題感悟】

1.（2023?全國?高考真題）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfiriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmand

walkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmy

attention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird（蜂鳥），desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredin

spider-webs（蛛網(wǎng)）andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.

Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswas

thelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.

WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthe

stickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeen

strugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?

AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.I

stopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.

Hovering（懸停），sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreature

lookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.

Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsI

wasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenter

ofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectly

intomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,

“Shemusthavecometosaygoodbye.^^

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

【答案】

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Asmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhen

Irescuedthehummingbirdfromthespider?sweb.Irushedbacktothedesertedhouse.Itwasagreatcomfortthat

theoriginalholeinthewindowwasnowheretobefound.Leavingthehouse,Icouldn'thelpwonderinghowitwas

gettingonnow.Haditmanagedtofinditswaybackhome,orwasitstillouttheresomewherestrugglingto

survive?

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.Aflashofmovementcaughtmyattention.I

turnedaroundtoseethesamehummingbirdhoveringintheair.Itseemedthatthebirdwaswaitingforme,its

beadyeyeslockedonmineasiftryingtoconveysomedeep,unspokengratitude.Ifeltasurgeofreliefandaweat

thesightofthissoundandgratefulcreature,andIknewthatIwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedasI

climbedintomycaranddroveaway.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者被邀請去一個農(nóng)場野餐，發(fā)現(xiàn)一個房子里有只蜂鳥被蜘蛛網(wǎng)

困住了，作者把蜂鳥救了，把蜂鳥帶出去的時候它遲遲不肯走，當(dāng)作者走到一條布滿黑莓的小路時，它開

始動了，但是卻不肯飛走，徘徊著，后來終于飛走了，當(dāng)作者準(zhǔn)備離開時，蜂鳥又飛到作者面前，好像是

在和作者告別。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“幾個星期后，我又去了農(nóng)場?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡呋氐睫r(nóng)場時所看到的和所想到

的。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我正要離開，這時蜂鳥出現(xiàn)了。”可知，第二段可描寫蜂鳥是如何對作者的以及作者的

感想。

2.續(xù)寫線索：想起救蜂鳥的時候一回到那個房子一想到那只蜂鳥一看見蜂鳥一蜂鳥的表現(xiàn)一作者

的感想

行為類

①思緒回至!J.......：thoughtsdriftbackto/thoughtsreturnto

②匆匆回到：rushbackto/hunybackto

③盯著：eyeslockedon/eyesstaringat

情緒類

①寬慰：feelasurgeofrelief/feelrelieved

②感激：grateful/thankful

【點睛】[高分句型1]AsmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthe

hummingbirdfromthespider'sweb.（由as引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句和when引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句）

[高分句型2]Itwasagreatcomfortthattheoriginalholeinthewindowwasnowheretobefound.（由that弓I導(dǎo)的

主語從句）

2.（2022?浙江?統(tǒng)考高考真題）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

Ineededtodosomethinginmycommunity（社區(qū)）inordertocompletethecommunityservicehoursrequired

tograduatefromhighschool.Someofmyfriendshadsigneduptospendtimeatasoupkitchen,soIdid,too.It

seemedlikeagoodthingtodo.

Ithoughtthatwewouldjustbepassingoutdinnerstothoseinneed,butIfoundoutwewouldbedoing

everythingfrompreparingtoservingthedinner.Webeganpreparingthefood,frommixingsaladdressingto

separatingfrozenmeat.Muchstillneededtobedonebeforedinnerwasserved,butalreadyoutsidethebuilding

manyhomelesspeopleweregathering.Itwasn'tuntilacoupleofhourslaterthatweopenedthedoorsandbegan

servingdinner.

Asthelineofpeoplecametowardme,Igotalittlescared.I'dcomefacetofacewiththehomeless:How

shouldIact?Howwouldtheytreatme?Wouldtheyhatemeforhavingmorethantheydid?Whilesomeofthe

peoplelookedveryfriendly,someofthemlookedsodangerous.Ididn'thavetoomuchtimetoworryaboutit.I

wasassigned（分酉己）toservethesaladwiththeladynexttome.ShesmiledatmeandsaidifIneededhelp,she'd

berightthere,whichIfoundquitecomforting.

Ihadneverseensomanypeoplewantingfood.Theywereofallagesandnationalities.Mostofthemwore

clothesthatweretomanddirty.Somelookedliketheyhadtallygivenuponlife,whileothersseemedtobemaking

thebestofthesituation,smilingandjoking.Somewerebetteroffthanothers,buttheyallneededagoodmealand

awarmplacetoeat.Itsaddenedmetothinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn'thaveaplacetocallhome

andtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchen.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

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