高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作之讀后續(xù)寫專項(xiàng)訓(xùn)練

讀文章列主旨。讀后簡要概括大意O

讀文章列要素

[whenwherewhowhatwhyhow)0

讀文章定人物性格，狀態(tài)特征，推測隨著時(shí)間推移事件的變化，事態(tài)發(fā)展

可能的語言動(dòng)作，心理感受?！菊脜R】

讀透給出的段落首句，仔細(xì)分析可能的人物的動(dòng)作，語言，情緒表情反應(yīng)等

要素，確定續(xù)寫情節(jié)發(fā)展的節(jié)奏，合理安排段落內(nèi)容。

讀出事件發(fā)展線索，最終的價(jià)值觀和情感取向也就是要表達(dá)的方向，確定事

情往何方向發(fā)展以及怎樣的主題結(jié)尾。

好想法源自于下筆記一記【讀+摘】

寫人物語言動(dòng)作心理感受【主要人物會(huì)怎么說，怎么做，怎么想】

寫過程與結(jié)局【謹(jǐn)記過程和結(jié)局過渡要合理自然符合邏輯】

【動(dòng)作狀態(tài)類標(biāo)記】【情緒心理感受標(biāo)記】【主要人物標(biāo)記】

讀后續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練一

[A]WhenGloriaEstefanstartedprimaryschool,shecouldnotread,

writenorspeakEnglish.Shefeltlost,unhappyandpletelyfrightened.

However,someonechangedherlife-herEnglishteacher,MrsCollins.

HerfamilyhadleftCubain1959whenshewasonlyayearoldinthehope

offindingabetterlifeinAmerica.InitiallytheymovedtoMiamiwherethe

familysettledinasetofapartmentswithotherCubanwomenandchildren

whohadimmigrated.

Thewomenwerecloseknitandsupportive.Whileshefeltsafe,shewas

alsoisolated.TheyallspokeSpanish,andsherarelyheardEnglish.Onher

veryfirstdayinschool,whichshewaslookingforwardto,shewaspletely

shocked.Shecamehomeandtoldhermotherthatshehadlearntherfirst

Englishword"stupid".Itwasthenicknameaboyhadgivenher.

Ineverywaypossible,shewassetapartfromherclassmates.Shewas

theonlypanicandnonwhitestudent.Shealsofounditdifficulttograspthe

Englishlanguageasitwashersecondlanguage.Theculture,herschool

friendsandthefoodtheyateweredifferentfromhers.Assuch,shewasset

apartfromherclassmates.

Onepersonmadethatyearbearableforher,MrsCollins.Shewasyoung

andAfricanAmerican,sosheunderstoodhowGloriafeltasshewasthe

onlynonwhitestudentinclass.MrsCollinsneverdoubtedthatGloriacould

catchupwiththeotherstudentsintime.

Still,theteasingcontinued.Theboywhocalledherstupidwouldnotstop

laughingatherforheraccent.Hewasagoodstudentandtheproudholder

oftheclass'sreadingaward.Itwasanhonourgivenperiodicallytoastudent,

basedonexcellenceinschoolwork,participationandhomework.Gloria

wantedthatlongwaitedaward.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:

MrsCollinsencouragedhertopeteforthereadingaward.

Paragraph2:

Theawardceremonywasingup.

寫作步驟：

【讀出主旨大意】

本文講述了GloriaEstefan第一次出現(xiàn)在學(xué)校的時(shí)候，她既不會(huì)讀也不會(huì)

寫英語。因此在上學(xué)的時(shí)候總是被學(xué)校的同學(xué)們所嘲笑。而就在此時(shí)，

一名老師MrsCollins對(duì)她鼓勵(lì)照顧有加的故事。

【讀出要素細(xì)節(jié)】

人物及性格：

動(dòng)作和狀態(tài)：

情緒及表情：

【讀首句，構(gòu)思段落】

@MrsCollinsencouragedhertopeteforthereadingaward.

由第一段首句內(nèi)容“MrsCollins鼓勵(lì)她去競爭閱讀獎(jiǎng)?！笨芍?，第一段可

描寫在老師鼓勵(lì)下，GloriaEstefan在學(xué)習(xí)上尤其是英語方面，以及交朋

友方面取得了很大的進(jìn)步。

②Theawardceremonywasing.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“頒獎(jiǎng)典禮快到了?！?/p>

可知，第二段可描寫GloriaEstefan在比賽中的精彩表現(xiàn)，同時(shí)獲得了極

好的成績,使在場的男孩們吃驚，同時(shí)在之后的學(xué)習(xí)中GloriaEstefan取

得了更多的好成績。

【續(xù)寫線索】鼓勵(lì)一準(zhǔn)備一比賽一獲得優(yōu)異成績一驚訝眾人一表現(xiàn)突出

【要點(diǎn)詞匯梳理】

下定決心，積極準(zhǔn)備，不畏懼，不害怕，以比賽為目標(biāo)，證明自己也可

以做到，努力練習(xí)，說英語，減少母語的干擾影響，老師的指導(dǎo)幫助，

自己的努力，最終掌握閱讀技巧，評(píng)比中獲得優(yōu)異成績，難以置信，令

人驚訝，讓大家刮目相看，證明自己，獲獎(jiǎng)使得她進(jìn)一步獲得動(dòng)力和信

心，成績?cè)絹碓胶?/p>

行為類①掌握：haveagoodgraspofreading/haveagoodmandof

reading②參力口：participatein/takepartin

情緒類①鼓舞激勵(lì)獲得信心：cheeron/encouragepositively

②震驚的：shocked/astonished/amazed

范文：

MrsCollinsencouragedhertopeteforthereadingaward.Withthiskindteacher

cheeringheron,shegainedconfidenceandlanguageskills.Shemadesorapidprogress

thatbymidyear,shewaswellonherwaytospeakingEnglishfluentlyandhadagood

graspofreading.Besides,shedidwellinalltheothersubjects.Shecametoschool

earlyeveryday,participatedactivelyinclassactivitiesandfinishedhomeworkontime.

What'smore,shemademoreandmorefriendsinherclass.

Theawardceremonywasingup.Sheworkedashardasshecould.WhenMrs

CollinsannouncedGloriaasthewinnerinfrontofthewholeclass,itwasherproudest

moment.Sheimmediatelytookthereadingawardrightoutofthatboy'shotlittlehands.

Theboywasshockedandunwillinglyhandedittoher.Shefeltsohappyforherself,

owinghersuccesstoherteacher,MrsCollins.ThisservedasamotivationforGloria

whoworkedevenharderinschoolandearnedmore"A"grades.

【B篇】PrivatePropertyKeepOut!

Iabsolutelylovemylittlebrotherandsister,TexandIndibutsometimesI

feelextremelyannoyedwhentheydon'trespectmystuff.

Oneafternoon,IoverheardIndiandherfriendKatetalkingabouta

necklace."Ooh!Wheredidyougetthatcoolnecklace?"KateaskedIndi"

Ijustfoundit,"repliedIndi.

“Ilovetheflowerinthemiddleoftheheart!”saidKateadmiringly

“Yeah,“saidIndi."It'smynewfavoritethingintheworld!”

Itwasmynecklace!Unabletobottleupmyannoyance,!wentstraightoverto

them

“Excuseme,Indi,“Isaid."Wheredidyoufindthatnecklace?^^

“Rightthereonthefloor,“Indianswered,pointingtoaspotjustoutsidemy

bedroom

“Soyoufoundanecklacerightoutsidemybedroomanddidn'tthinkitmight

bemine?,,Istaredintohereyesandaskedinaloudervoice.

Indishrugged.

“Well,yourfavoritenewthinghappenstobemyfavoriteoldthing,andI'd

likeitbackPlease,please,pleasejustleavemystuffaloneonceandforall!”I

toldher.

ImusthavesoundedprettyangrybecauseIfoundIndi5seyesfilledwith

tears.Sheunwillinglytookoffthenecklaceandthrewitintomyhand

“Hereyougo,“shesniffled（抽鼻子）andwentoftothebackyardwithKate

Andthatwasthat.Idecidedtotrytochangemysourmoodbytakingoutthe

handicraft（工藝）boxfromthecupboardinthelivingroom.Ifoundcraftsticks

andseashellsforapictureframe（相框）,putonsomemusic,andgotdownto

working.

AsIcarefullygluedontheshells.IrememberedhowIndiandIhadfound

themtogetheratthebeach.Howcloseandhappywewereatthattime!Thafs

whenIdecidedtomaketheframeforInditoapologizeforoverreacting.Itwasa

taskrequiringtimeandpatience.Sobythetimewasfinished.Ifeltdefinitely

satisHedandevenpicturedIndi'ssmilingfacewhenIgavehertheframe.AsI

feltstarving,Iwenttothekitchentograbasnack,leavingthegluetodry

WhenIreturned,!foundTexbusilybuildingsomethingwiththecraft

sticks.

Latethatafternoon,Momknockedatmydoorandaskedmetogo

downstairsforafamilymeeting.

寫作步驟：

【讀出主旨大意】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了因?yàn)榈艿苊妹梦唇?jīng)允許動(dòng)作者的東西，作者

很生氣，造成一些不愉快。后來通過媽媽的說服，他們都意識(shí)到了自己言行

的不當(dāng)之處，并互相道歉，重歸于好的故事。

【讀出要素細(xì)節(jié)】

人物及性格：

動(dòng)作和狀態(tài)：

情緒及表情：

【讀首句，構(gòu)思段落】

續(xù)寫線索：

與TEX又一次發(fā)生矛盾

媽媽勸解一意識(shí)到錯(cuò)誤一請(qǐng)求原諒一相互道歉一化解矛盾一快樂一媽媽總

結(jié)

【要點(diǎn)詞匯梳理】

行為類

發(fā)脾氣請(qǐng)求原諒：begforforgiveness/askforforgiveness

道歉：apologize/saysorry

情緒類

①羞愧地：withshame

②快樂地：happily/pleasurably

WhenIreturned,!foundTexbusilybuildingsomethingwiththecraftsticks.

Aterriblefeelingsuddenlywelledupinmyheart.Irushedforward,onlytofind

Texhadalreadymanagedtoruinmywork.ttOh,no!,,Icried.4tWhathaveyoudone

withmyframe?Ittookmealongtimetomakeit.ItwasmeantforIndi.Nowall

myeffbrthasgonetowaste.Whydoesn'tanyonerespectmythings?”】shouted

desperatelyatTex,whogotabitconfusedandfrightened.Befbrehecouldsay

anything,!stormedupstairstomyroom,madeahugesignsaying""Keep

Ouf\andshutmydoorangrily.

Latethatafternoon,Momknockedatmydoorandaskedmetogo

downstairsforafamilymeeting.Obviously,TexandIndihadtoldMomwhat

hadhappened.Wesatdowntotalkthingsover.4'Everyonehastheirown

privacy,whichdeservestoberespectedbyothers,“Momsaidseriously."Texand

Indi,doyouthinkso?,,TexandIndirealizedtheirmisbehaviorandtheytookmy

hands,sincerelybeggingforforgiveness.Blushingwithshame,Ialsoapologized

forlosingmytempersoeasilyandpromisedtobegentlerandmore

understandingtothemfromthen

on.Theunpleasantatmospheredisappearedandwemadeuphappily.Private

propertyisimportantbutwhatismoreimportantisfamilylove.

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HowCountryMusicHelpedHerHeal

Brandy?Ididn'trecognizethenamethathadshownupinmyinbox,butI

openedtheemailanyway.4Tmreachingouttoyouonbehalfofmy

family,^Brandywrote.'Tmsorryittookussolongtorespondtoyourletter,but

thisyearsincemyfatherdiedhasbeendifficult.

IrealizedthenwhoBrandywas.Herfatherhadbeenmyanonymous（匿名

的）donor.Oneyearearlier,I'dinjuredmykneeandunderwentasurgerywhere

thenewtissuedidn'tefrommyownbodybutfromadonor.Afterthesurgerya

nursehandedmeabooklettitledAboutYourDonor.Shesaidmydonorwasdead

andanonymous.4'Butsomepeopleliketosendathankyoutothefamilythrough

thehospital,“sheexplained.

Itseemedlikeanimportantthingtodowithmytime.I'dplannedtospendmy

recoverytryingtoteachmyselftoplaycountrymusiconmyguitar,somethingI'd

beenmeaningtogetaroundtoforalongtime.Butcountrymusiccouldwait.

Writingalettertomydonor'sfamilytookpriority.Ichosemywords

carefully,lettingthemknowhowmuchIappreciatedthedonor'sgenerosityand

howverysorryIwasfortheirloss.

Iincludedmyemailaddressandsentthelettertothehospitaltobe

forwarded,butIdidn'texpectananswer.Especiallynotawholeyearlater.Soit

meantalottomethatthefamilyhadreachedoutwhentheywereready.

BrandyandIdecidedtokeepintouchonline.ThereIlearnedalittlemoreabout

herfather,Larry/'Whatacoincidence,,?IwrotetoBrandy."Myfather'snameis

Larrytoo."Shedescribedherdadasthelifeoftheparty,thekindofpersonwho

madeeveryone*sdaybrighter.4'Andhejustlovedcountrymusic,“shesaid/'It

washisfavoritethingintheworld.^^

注意：

L續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

“Ilovecountrymusictoo!,,Isaid.

Ipostedthatmusicvideoonlineandexplainedmyintentionofdoingso.

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短文。

Theabilityofyoungchildrentoremaincalmduringacrisisisoften

limited,butafiveyearoldgirlSavannahfromHancockCounty,Indiana

provedtobeanexception,whichcanbelifesaving.

Theincidentbeganwithanemergencycalltothelocal911dispatcher（調(diào)

度員），JasonBonham,Tohissurprise,thepersonontheotherendwasa

littlegirl.Despitetheiravityofthesituation,herbehaviorandtheclear

conversationleftasignificantimpressiononJasonandmillionswholater

heardthecall。

Savannahwasuplateseeingamoviewithherfather,Frank,andher

motherwasonabusinesstrip.Itwasduringthemovienightthatsheheard

disturbingsoundsfromthekitchen.Withtheirpetdogbarkingceaselessly,

Savannahwenttoinvestigate.

Inthekitchen,Savannahfoundherfatheronthefloor,clutching（捂著）

hischest.Shewasterrifiedbutrememberedherparents*adviceabout

emergencysituations.Herfatherwasunabletospeak,indicatinghewasin

criticalcondition.

Savannahtooktheinitiativetocontactemergencyservices,dialing911

fromthekitchenwallphone.Herparentshadtaughtherwhattodoinsuch

situations,whichnowprovedinvaluable.

Jason,the911operator,hadbeeninthisjobfor11yearsbutwasamazed

byS'scalmness.Despitethechallengingcircumstances,Jasonwasableto

gathercrucialinformationaboutSavannah'sfather*scondition.Savannah

conveyedherfather*ssymptomsofdifficultybreathingandchestpainsto

Jason,whichhelpedidentifytheemergencyasapossibleheartcondition.

JasonkeptSavannahontheline,distractingherwithlightconversation,

whilemakingsureshewaskeepinganeyeonherdad.Jasonasked

Savannahtounlockthefrontdoorfortheconvenienceofparamedics*（急救

醫(yī)士）entering.SavannahkeptmunicatingwithJasonuntiltheparamedics

arrived.Sheperformedadmirably,notonlyupdatingJasonabouther

father'sconditionbutalsotakingpracticalmeasures,likeunlockingthe

frontdoorfortheparamedics.

BeforeacDanyinqherfathertohospital,Savannahcalledhermother.And

herfatherwasimmediatelytakenintosurgerythemomenttheyreachedthe

hospital,

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Savannah'sfathermadeitthroughsurgerysuccessfully.

Herexampledemonstratedthatevenachildasyoungasfivecouldmakea

difference.

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的短文。

At11:15a.m,IsetoutonahighaltitudetrainingruninCalifornia's

SequoiaNationalParkinsunny,70°Ftemperatures.Iwaspreparingfora

marathonandcametotheparkforascenicworkout,andtoseehowcloseI

couldgettothe10,500footpassesonthetopoftheGreatWesternDivided

climbedfivemilesand1,000feetbeforethetrail*ssurfacebecame

snowcoveredanddangerousenoughthatIhadtoturnaround.

Onmyrun,Inotedthepotentialinstabilityofthefivefootdeepsnow

bridgeoverFranklinCreek,andIknelttoexamineit.Therewerenovisible

signsofweakness,andthesurfacewasrockhard-Iguesseditcouldsupport

atruck.Icrossedwithoutincident.