第09講 讀后續(xù)寫之自然環(huán)境描寫（講義）-2024年高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)講練測（新教材新高考）含答案及解析

?第09講自然環(huán)境描寫（講義）目錄目標(biāo)1景、物環(huán)境的描寫目標(biāo)2地點(diǎn)方位的描寫目標(biāo)3天氣的描寫目標(biāo)4氣氛的描寫目標(biāo)5經(jīng)典賞析目標(biāo)6真題感悟一景、物環(huán)境的描寫對景、物等的描寫通常會直接使用物作主語，或者用擬人化的修辭手法。（2023年浙江卷1月）Itseemedthatthebirdwaswaitingforme,itsbeadyeyeslockedonmineasiftryingtoconveysomedeep,unspokengratitude.那只鳥似乎在等著我，它那明亮的眼睛盯著我，仿佛在試圖表達(dá)某種深深的、不言而喻的感激之情。（2024屆廣東省四校高三第一次聯(lián)考試題）Afewhoursintothetrek,hesaweyesinthedistance,sohegrabbedhisbatbeforerealizingitwasjustastraydog.長途跋涉幾個小時后，他看到了遠(yuǎn)處的眼睛，所以他抓起了球棒，才意識到那只是一只流浪狗。Themoonwashedthewoodsinagentlelight.Thestarstwinkledlikeachild’scuriouseyesblinkingwithanticipation.月亮用柔和的光洗刷著樹林星星閃爍著，像孩子好奇的眼睛閃爍著期待。Thesoundcameswiftlynearer,andbecameawildroar,fillingthewholevalley.這聲音很快就走近了，變成了狂吼，響徹整個山谷。5.Duringautumn,thesesamemountainsaregold,andinwintertheyarecoveredinsheetsofwhitefrost.在秋天，這些山是金色的，而在冬天，它們身披白露。6.Theroaroftheoceanwavesandcriesoftheseabirdsmakeupthemusicofthecoast.海浪的咆哮和海鳥的鳴叫組成了海岸的音樂。7.Theleaveshadalmostallfallenoff,creatingaseaoffierycolorsthatcrunchedbeneathourfeet.幾乎所有的葉子都掉下來了，在我們的腳下形成一片火紅色的海洋。我們踩上去發(fā)出嘎吱嘎吱的聲響。8.TheleavescrunchedbeneathmyfeetasIstrolleddownthestreet.Occasionally,onewouldfallpastme,lightlyswayingastheairgentlycarriedittotheground.漫步街頭，樹葉在我腳下嘎吱作響。偶爾，有葉子會從我身邊掉落，在微風(fēng)中輕輕搖擺，飄然落地。9.Bathedinthegoldensunlight,thesearippledandsparkledcharmingly.大海沐浴在金色的陽光下,蕩漾著迷人的波光。10.Inaninstant,everythinghadsuddenlygonequiet.Birdsdidn'tchirp,leavesdidn'trustleandinsectsdidn'tsing.Afeelingofstillnesscreptuponme剎那間,萬物突然安靜。鳥兒不再鳴叫,樹葉不再沙沙作響,昆蟲停止歌唱。一種寂靜的感覺悄然向我襲來。11.Birdswerechattering/twitteringsomewhere.鳥兒在某處唧唧喳喳地叫著。12.Onaquitemorninginthemountains,feelthesunonyourskinandbreatheinthesweetscentoffreshflowerswhilebirdsgreetthenewdaywiththeirmorningsong.山中寧靜的清晨，感受陽光灑在你的身上，呼吸鮮花的芳香，聆聽鳥兒們用它們的歌聲迎接新的一天。二地點(diǎn)方位的直接描寫1.Thepeacefullandscapeisatruefeastfortheeyes,withitsrollinggreenhillsdottedwithsheepandcattle.綿延起伏的青山上散落著牛羊，這幅祥和寧靜的景象真讓人賞心悅目。2.Mist-coveredmountainsweredottedwithsmallfarmsandvillages.霧蒙蒙的山上星星點(diǎn)點(diǎn)地散落著小農(nóng)場和村落。3.Thepathiswindingandwesawmountainstoweringoverthegreenvalleysandcliffsthatseemedendless.小路蜿蜒曲折,我們看到高山聳立在綠色的山谷和懸崖上，似乎沒有盡頭。4.Atthatmoment,Inoticedmyfathermadeaturnoffthehighwayanddrovepastasignthatread“AirportParking”.就在那一刻，我注意到我的父親在高速公路上轉(zhuǎn)彎，開車經(jīng)過了一個寫著“機(jī)場停車”的標(biāo)志。5.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtothespotthatthebearhadfinallytoredownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.當(dāng)我們安全地坐在空中的直升機(jī)上時，我驚訝地發(fā)現(xiàn)，熊終于撕毀了柵欄，向我們留下的食物跑去。6.Nomorethan30pacesawayinthebogwasahugeAlaskantimberwolf-caughtinoneofTrapperGeorge’straps.不到30步遠(yuǎn)的沼澤地里，一只巨大的阿拉斯加大灰狼被捕獵者TrapperGeorge的陷阱困住了。三天氣的描寫天氣的描寫屬于情節(jié)的一部分，但不建議大篇幅進(jìn)行描寫。為了渲染氣氛，烘托情節(jié)，可以細(xì)化到風(fēng)、雪、雨、雷、陰、晴等。No.1.風(fēng)Theicywindstartedhowling,stingingmyface.寒風(fēng)開始咆哮，刺痛了我的臉。Thewindwassobone-chillingthatIcouldn'tstopshiveringfromthecod.寒風(fēng)刺骨，我冷得不停打哆嗦。Outside,thewindsblewthetreesandbeatagainstthehouse,whichmadepeopleunabletoonetheireyes.外面，風(fēng)吹著樹，拍打著房子，使人們無法睜開眼睛。Asthewindblows,wecanheartheleavesrustlinginthetrees.隨著風(fēng)的吹拂,我們可以聽到樹沙沙作響。Itwasgettingdarkandthewinddiedaway.天漸漸黑了，風(fēng)漸漸小了。Thebreezegentlykissedhischecks.微風(fēng)輕柔地親吻著他的臉龐。No.2.雨Iwasdisturbedbytheannoyingsoundoftherain.淅淅瀝瀝的雨聲擾亂了我的思緒。Immediately,sheetsofbitterlycoldrainfilledtheair.頃刻間，空中下起了陣陣刺骨的冷雨。Theraincamepouringdown,thestreamsrose,andthewindsblewandbeatagainstthehouse.大雨傾盆，溪水上漲，狂風(fēng)咆哮這撞擊房屋。Thoughtherainstopped,thewindrushedbyandwhistledandmadestrangesounds.雨雖停了，風(fēng)卻呼嘯而過，發(fā)出奇怪的聲音。Theraindrummedonthewindow,biddingfarewelltothelastbeamofsunlight.雨滴敲打著窗戶，向最后一縷陽光告別。6.Itwasrainingcatsanddogsyesterdayafterschool,andIwasallwetwhenIgothome.昨天放學(xué)的時候下著傾盆大雨，我到家時全身都濕了。7.Therewasaheavydownpour.Unfortunately,Tomwascaughtintheheavyrain.下了一場大暴雨。不幸的是，Tom在暴雨中被淋成了落湯雞。No.3.雪1.Thefrozensnowcrunchedunderourfeet.凍結(jié)的雪在我們的腳下嘎吱作響。2.Snowblanketedeveryrooftopandweighedonthebranchesofoldtrees.雪覆蓋了每一個屋頂,壓在老樹的枝丫上。3.Thecountrysidewastransformedintoahugewhiteplainbythesnow.It'sdarknowandthesnowisfalling,clumpsofwetflakesdriftingdown.鄉(xiāng)村被雪變成了一片巨大的白色平原?，F(xiàn)在天黑了，雪還在下，一片片濕漉漉的雪花飄落下來。4.Thefeatherysnowflakesdancedinthenightair,makingabeautifulpicture.鵝毛般的雪花在夜空中飛舞，像一幅美麗的畫。No.4.霧Theviewwasobscuredbyfog.霧中景色朦朧。2.Thehillswereenvelopedindensefog.群山被濃霧籠罩著。3.Themorningfogblockedourview.清晨的霧擋住了我們的視線。4.Thefogsoonencompassedthewholevalley.霧很快籠罩了整個山谷。5.Thetownwascoveredinathickblanketoffog.大霧籠罩著這個城鎮(zhèn)。6.Theheavyfogseemedtobecastinganetoverme.濃霧似乎在我身上撒下了一張網(wǎng)。No.5.太陽Thisweatheristerrible.Iamsweatinglikeapig,althoughI'mnotdoinganything.天熱得嚇人，雖然我什么都沒做，但還是汗流浹背。Inthisheat,eventhetreesappeareddefeated,withleavesdroopinglifelessly.在這種炎熱的天氣里、連樹木都顯得萎靡不振,樹葉都毫無生氣地垂落著。Thesunwasatitshighest.TheheatbeatdownonmyheadasifIwasbaconunderthegrill.太陽處于最高點(diǎn),熱浪擊打在頭上，我好像烤架下的培根一樣。Thewaterwasdeepblueandthesunlightglitteredonitsglass-clearsurface.湖水深藍(lán)，陽光在風(fēng)平浪靜的湖面上熠熠生輝。No.6.霧Thecloudshadspreadandnearlycoveredtheentiresky.云層散開，幾乎遮住了整個天空。Theskywasfullofdarkmassesofclouds.天空中烏云密布。Byafternoon,thecloudshaveclearedaway.到了下午，云已經(jīng)散去。4.Theskywasovercast,darkenedwithgloomyclouds,andthewholeworldseemedtobeenvelopedinahugegrayquilt.天陰沉沉的，烏云密布，整個世界仿佛都被籠罩在一張巨大的灰色被子里。No.7.雷電1.Anashoflightningflashedacrossthesky.一道閃電劃過天空。2.Outside,thunderboomedandcrashed.外面雷聲隆降，發(fā)出巨響。3.Thunderboomedintheskyoverhead,雷聲在頭頂上的天空中隆隆作響。4.Theweatherinsummerisunpredictable.Justnowitwassunny.Inaflash,lightningandthunderbrokeout,andthestormbegantorain.夏天的天氣真是變幻莫測。剛才還是晴空萬里，一霎時就電閃雷鳴，開始了狂風(fēng)暴雨。5.Thethunderwasrumblinginthedistance.遠(yuǎn)處雷聲隆降。6.Thunderrumbledinthemountainsallaroundandrainbegantofallinheavydrops.山里雷聲隆隆雨點(diǎn)開始大顆大顆地往下落。7.IwasstudyingaBarbieanddoingsomesimplemathinmyheadwhensuddenlyanearthshakingclapofthunderroaredfromthestormoutside.Ijumpedatthenoise,droppingthedolltothefloor.Thelightsflickeredonceanddied,coveringeverythinginablanketofblackness.Thundercontinuedtoshaketheskyandlightningilluminatedthestoreforseconds,castingfrighteningshadowsonmymind.我正在研究一個芭比娃娃，在腦子里做一些簡單的計(jì)算，，突然一陣驚天動地的雷聲從外面的暴風(fēng)雨中呼嘯而出。我聽到噪音嚇了一跳，把娃娃扔在地上。燈光閃爍了一次，然后熄滅了，一片漆黑地籠罩了一切。雷聲繼續(xù)震動著天空，閃電照亮了商店好幾秒鐘，在我的腦海中投下了可怕的陰影。No.8.星空Theskywasdottedwithsparklingstars.天上繁星點(diǎn)點(diǎn)。Starswinkedatmeinadarkeningsky.夜空中星星向我眨眼睛。Blueskiesstoodtallandfar.藍(lán)藍(lán)的天空高高聳立。4.Thesky,midnightblue,gavethesceneafairytalequality.深藍(lán)色的夜空給這一場景增添了童話般的色彩。5.Atmidnight,thestormquieted,thecloudspartedandthestarsshonethroughthedarksky.午夜時分,暴風(fēng)雨停了，烏云散開,星星在黑暗的天空中閃罐。6.hestarsshinelikediamonds.星星如鉆石般閃耀。四氣氛的描寫（2023年浙江卷1月）Ifeltasurgeofreliefandaweatthesightofthissoundandgratefulcreature,andIknewthatIwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedasIclimbedintomycaranddroveaway.看到這個健康的和感激的生物，我感到一陣欣慰和敬畏，我知道，當(dāng)我爬上我的車，開車離開時，我會永遠(yuǎn)珍惜我們分享的回憶。（2023年浙江卷1月）Aflashofmovementcaughtmyattention.Iturnedaroundtoseethesamehummingbirdhoveringintheair.一陣短暫的動作引起了我的注意。我轉(zhuǎn)過身，看到那只蜂鳥在空中盤旋。(2024屆廣東省四校高三第一次聯(lián)考試題)Withthesunpeekingoverthehorizon,John’sfaceglowedwithgratitude.Feelingenergetic,hecouldn’twaittogetstarted.太陽在地平線上掠過，約翰的臉上洋溢著感激之光。他感到精力充沛，就迫不及待地想開始工作。Anairofsadnesssettledoverthegroup.人群中籠罩著一種悲傷的氣氛.Itwasawfullyquietexceptforourfootstepshittingtheroad,andmyheavybreathing.除了我們走在路上的腳步聲和我沉重的呼吸聲外，這里非常安靜。6.Itsuddenlyseemedfrighteninglyquiet.Theairwaschargedwithtension.突然安靜得可怕,空氣中彌漫著緊張的氣氛。五經(jīng)典賞析【模擬速遞】【2023年江蘇省鎮(zhèn)江第一中學(xué)模擬預(yù)測】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。PamBaleslefthercarandsteppedontothesnow-coveredJewellTrail.Sheplannedasix-hourhikethroughNewHampshire’sMountWashingtonStatePark.ThehikeupthelowerpartofJewellwaspleasant.At8:30am,stillbelowthetreeline,shetookthefirstinaseriesofon-the-trailselfies.Lessthananhourlater,shetookanotherphoto,aftershe’dclimbedintocolderairanddeepersnows.Shemadeherwayacrossthesnow-coveredridgetowardMountWashington.Thenshenoticedsomething:asinglesetoffootprintsinthesnowaheadofher.She’dbeenfollowingfainttracksalldayandhadn’tgiventhemmuchthought,becausesomanypeopleclimbJewellTrail.Butthese,sherealized,hadbeenmadebyapairoftrainers,notsuitableforhikingonsnow.By11am,Baleswasgettingcoldanddecidedtoabandonherplan.TheonlythingkeepingBalesonGulfsideTrailwasthetrainertracksinthesonw.Asshefoughtthewindandheavysleet(雨夾雪),thetracksmadeahardleft-handturnoffthetrail.Nowshealarmed.ShewassurethehikercouldgetthroughintheowvisibilityandwasheadingstraighttowardthechallengingtrailsoftheGreatGulfWilderness.Balesstoodthere,stunned.Thetemperatureandcloudswereinaracetofindtheirlowestpoint,anddarknesswasmerehoursaway.Sheturnedtotheleftandcalledout,“Hello!”intothefrozenfog.Nothing.Shecalledoutagain:“Isanybodyoutthere?Doyouneedhelp?”Thestrongwesterlywindscarriedhervoiceaway.Sheblewintoherrescuewhistle.Forafleetingmomentshethoughtsheheardsomeonereply,butitwasjustthewindplayinggameswithhermind.Shestoodlistening,thenturnedandwalkedcautiouslyinthedirectionofthesinglesetoftracks.Balesfollowedthetrackscautiouslyfor20to30meters.Sheroundedaslightcornerandsawamansittingmotionless.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Whensheapproachedhimandsaidhello,hedidnotreact.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Afterwakingthemanup,Balesrecognizedthattheyhadtogetoutoftheresoon.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Whensheapproachedhimandsaidhello,hedidnotreact.Takingadeepbreath,Balesgotcloser,checkedhispulseandsuddenlyrealizedthatthemanmusthavepassedout.Sheknewshehadtowakehimupimmediatelyorthedreadfulweathercouldputhimingreaterdanger.Outofherbag,Balestookacarpettowraptheman,gavesomehotwatertohim,calledoutrepeatedlyandshookhimhard.Fortunately,itdidn’ttakelongbeforethemancametohimself.Afterwakingthemanup,Balesrecognizedthattheyhadtogetoutoftheresoon.Thewindkepthowlingwiththeheavysleetdrivingfiercely,andevenworse,darknessbegantofall.Anxious,Balesstruggledtohelpthemanup,supportinghisweightandinchingalongthetrail,followingthetracksleftbyherhikingboots.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,theyfinallymadeittothefootofthemountain.Themanwasrushedtohospitalimmediately.Exhaustedasshewas,Balesfeltawaveofhappinesswelledupinside.【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了帕姆·巴勒斯計(jì)劃在新罕布什爾州的華盛頓山州立公園徒步六小時，不到一小時后，她已經(jīng)爬進(jìn)了更冷的空氣和更深的雪中。她穿過白雪覆蓋的山脊，向華盛頓山進(jìn)發(fā)。然后她注意到了一件事：她前面的雪上有一組腳印。她一整天都在跟蹤微弱的軌跡，并沒有給它們太多的思考，因?yàn)橛刑嗳伺乐闋栃〉馈５庾R到，這些鞋是由一雙運(yùn)動鞋制成的，不適合在雪地上徒步旅行。后來，她在一個小角落，看見一個人一動不動地坐著?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)她走近他打招呼時，他沒有反應(yīng)。”可知，第一段可描寫巴勒斯救助這名已經(jīng)失去意識的男子的過程。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在叫醒那個人后，巴勒斯意識到他們必須盡快離開那里?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫巴勒斯和那名男子一起下山，脫離險(xiǎn)境的過程。續(xù)寫線索：檢查——拿出物品給男子取暖——喚醒男子——扶起那名男子——一起下山——脫離險(xiǎn)境——感受[高分句型1]Takingadeepbreath,Balesgotcloser,checkedhispulseandsuddenlyrealizedthatthemanmusthavepassedout.(運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語和that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)[高分句型2]Anxious,Balesstruggledtohelpthemanup,supportinghisweightandinchingalongthetrail,followingthetracksleftbyherhikingboots.(運(yùn)用了形容詞和現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)[高分句型3]Exhaustedasshewas,Balesfeltawaveofhappinesswelledupinside.(運(yùn)用了讓步狀語從句的倒裝結(jié)構(gòu))【2020年浙江卷】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。“I'mgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy,"saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions(情緒)getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile.”Iguessthisisit,“hesaid.”I'llseeyoubackhomeinamonth,okay？"Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy'smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedinherdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovisit.Poppydidn't.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirljustwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried."WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup？"askedDad.“We'vetriedeverything.”“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy,“smiledMom.”Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy."Itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging(擺動)eversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Para1.Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________