讀后續(xù)寫：常見的情緒+動作描寫 學案-2024屆高考英語作文復習專項

讀后續(xù)寫常見的情緒+動作描寫匯總

一、描寫情緒的句型

?人做主語

(1)臉上寫著…with情緒writtenonsb'sface,sb.+動作.

(2)被…壓垮/充滿著/被…控制Overwhelmedwith/Consumedwith/Seized

by情緒,sb.+動作.

⑶某人幾乎控制不住..之情/難sbcouldhardlycontain/concealsb's情緒.

掩…之情

?情緒做主語

(4)一股…涌上心頭，貫穿全身Aflush/sense/rippleof情緒(welledupin

sb'sheartand)surged/flooded/ranthrough

sb

(5)…得說不出話來(剝奪某人說情緒deprivedsbofallpowerofutterance

話的能力)

(6)爬上心頭，并將某人吞噬(壞)情緒slowlycreptuponsband

swallowedsb.

⑺…被…取代了情緒1wasreplaceby/gavewayto情緒2

(8)既…又amixtureof...and...

例：

(1)她難過地跑回了房間。Overwhelmedwithasenseofsorrow，sheranbacktoher

roomintears.

（2）當媽媽表揚她的時候，她北常開心。Whenmompraisedher,arippleofpleasure

ranthroughher.

⑶我激動得什么話也說不出來，淚水模糊了我的雙眼。Excitementdeprivedmeof

allpowerofutterance,tearsmistingmyeyes.

（4）他的興奮耗盡了，取而代之的是絕望和焦慮。Hisexcitementfadedawayand

wasreplacedwithdespairandworry.

（5）當爸爸看到混亂的廚房,他非常生氣。Whendadcaughtsightofthemessy

kitchen,hecouldhardlycoctain/concealhisfury.

情景練習：

I.當媽媽醒來，看見雙胞胎給她準備好的早餐時…

Sodelightedwasshethatshehuggedthetwinstightly,tearsofjoywellingupin

hereyes.（快樂+淚水）

2.當喬丹看見小貓因為自己的錯誤而在花園里凍僵了時…

Withanexpressionofremorseandanxietywrittenonhisface,Jordanhesitatedto

approachthepoorcreature,hisfeetrootedtothespot.（悔恨、擔心+呆?。?/p>

3.當米亞看見清理完雜苴后干凈美麗的花園時…

Exhaustedasshewasaftertidyingupthegarden,shefeltaflushofcontentment

andpridesurgingthroughher.（累去帶足）

4.當我打開禮物盒子，看到的是襯衫，而不是我期待的自行車鑰匙時…

Atthesightoftheshirt,asenseofdisappointmentwelledupandsurgedthrough

me.Imanagedtoforceasmile,endeavoringtoconcealmygloom.（失望+強顏歡笑）

5.當Tom得知媽媽是為了救他而燒傷破相時…

Regretfultearswellingupinhiseyes,Tompulledhismotherintohisarmsand

embracedhertightly,murmuringouthisapologiesoverandoveragain.（后悔+哭、

擁抱）

6.當Brendan聽說，我準備給他錢買機票時…

Withdisbeliefandgratitudewrittenonhisface/Disbeliefandgratitudedepriving

himofallpowerofutterance,heheldmyhandstightly,tearsmistinghiseyes.（驚訝,

感動+握手，哭泣）

二、與情緒有關(guān)的動作描寫

滿臉喜色。Herfacelitup./Herfacebeamedandher

lightupbrightsmilelituptheroom.

1.愉

grin咧嘴笑。Hegrinnedfromeartoear./Hecurvedhis

快/喜

linger/echmouthintoabroadgrin.

悅

0笑聲在房間里縈繞。Laughterlingocd/echoedaround

theroom.

心怦怦跳。Herheartthumpedwiththrilland

anticipation.

他情緒激動，難以成聲。Hisvoicewaschokedwith

thump

emotion.

choke

2.激眼睛濕潤Tearsmistedhereyes/Hereyes

mist,brim

動brirnrned(brim)withtears

well,hug

他們喜極而泣，緊緊擁抱。Tearsofjoywelledupin

tremble

theireyesastheyhuggedtightlytogether.

她拆信時急切得手都發(fā)抖了。Herhandstrembled

witheagernessassheopenedtheletter.

他的心幾乎要跳出來了。Hisheartalmostleapedinto

3.緊leaphismouth.

張beat心雷鳴般跳動。Hecouldfeelthethunderousbeatof

hisheart.

4.驚raise驚訝地揚起眉毛raisehereyebrowsinastonishment

訝drop驚訝地目瞪口呆Myjawdropped.

freeze,roo呆住了動彈不得1wasfrozenasifrootedtothespot.

t倒吸一口氣Everyonegaspedinastonishment.

gasp

滿腔憤怒，Jim一句話也說不出來。Filledwithfury,

utter

Jimwasunabletoutterasingleword.

flame氣得面紅耳赤。Hisfaceflamedwithanger.

5.憤tremble他的聲音因憤怒而顫抖。Hisvoicetrembledwith

rage.

怒stamp

憤怒地跺腳stamp(ed)one'sfootinanger

bang,stor

她砰地關(guān)上門，怒氣沖?沖地出了房間Shebangedthe

m

doorandstormedoutoftheroom.

他緊咬嘴唇，忍住淚水Hebjt(bite)sb'slip,tryingto

holdbackhistears.

bite這消息使他臉上蒙上一層陰云。Thenewscasta

castcloudofgloomoverhisface.

6.悲拖著沉重的步伐drag(ged)one'sfeet/legs

drag

傷/難

她掩面哭泣。Shesobbed/wept,hidingherfaceinher

sob/weep

過

hands.

brim

她眼里盈滿淚水Hereyesbrimmedwithtears.

float

我感到好像漂浮在悲傷的海洋里。Ifeltlikefloating

inanoceanofsadness.

7.恐freeze嚇呆了，不敢動。Ifrozewithterror,toofrightenedto

懼squeeze/gmoveaninch.

rab恐懼控制住了他，他幾乎說不出一整句話來。Fear

squeezed/grabbedhisheartandheandhecouldhardly

sayawholesentence.

紅著臉Heblushedwithshame.

blush他從臉到脖子全紅了。Ablushspreadfromhisfaceto

8.羞

hang/lowehisneck.

愧/害

羞愧地低下了頭。

rTomhung/loweredhisheadin

羞shame.

burn

臉上滾燙。Shecouldfeelherfaceburning.

臉上掠過失望的神情。Alookofdisappointment

passedoverhisface.

9.失disappoint

聽到他沒獲獎的消息，他心都沉下來了Hisheart

望sink

sankwhenheheardthenewsthathefailedtowina

prize.

被投入了?個黑喑的世界，陷入了絕望。Tonywas

thrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankinto

throw,sinkhopelessness.

10.絕

tear她感到絕望，心都要碎了。Herheartwastornwith

望

bulletdespair.

像子彈一樣射穿我的心臟。Thelastwordwentlikea

bullettomyheart.

11.困scratch撓頭Hescratchedhishead,notunderstandinga

惑shrugword.

聳肩I,heothersshruggedtheirshoulderswith

puzzlement/confusion.

與情緒有關(guān)的動作描寫練習：

1.滿臉喜色。Herface./Herfacebeamedandherbright

smiletheroom.

2.咧嘴笑。Hefromto.

3.笑聲在房間里縈繞。Laughteraroundtheroom.

4.心怦怦跳。Herheartwiththrillandanticipation.

5.他情緒激動，哽咽。Hisvoicewaswithemotion.

6.他們喜極而泣，緊緊擁抱。Tearsofjoyintheireyesasthey

huggedtightlytogether.

7.她拆信時急切得手都發(fā)抖了。Herhandswitheagernessassheopened

theletter.

8.他的心幾乎要跳出來了。Hisheartalmostintohis.

9.他能感到心臟雷鳴般的跳動。Hecouldfeeltheofhis

heart.

10.驚訝地揚起眉毛。sheherinastonishment.

11.驚訝得目瞪口呆。Myjawinastonishment.

12.呆住了動彈不得Iwasasiftothe.

13.震驚得倒吸一口氣。Everyoneinastonishment.

14.滿腔憤怒，Jim一句話也說不出來。Filledwithfury,Jimwasunableto

asingleword.

15.氣得面紅耳赤。Hisfacewithanger.

16.他的聲音因憤怒而顫抖。Hisvoicewithrage.

17.憤怒地跺腳。Janeherfootinanger.

18.她砰地關(guān)上門，怒氣沖沖地出了房間。Shethedoorandoutof

theroom.

19.忍住抑郁的心情。Shecouldhardlyhergloom.

20.這消息使他臉上蒙上一層陰云。Thenewsacloudofoverhis

face.

21.拖著沉重的步伐。Imyfeet/legs.

22.她掩面哭泣。She,herfaceinherhands.

23.她眼里盈滿淚水。Hereyeswithtears.

24.我感到好像漂浮在悲傷的海洋里。Ifeltlikeinanof

sadness.

25.嚇呆了，不敢動。Iwithterror,toofrightenedtomoveaninch.

26.恐懼控制住了他，他幾乎說不出一整句話來。Fearhisheartandhe

andhecouldhardlysayawholesentence.

27.紅著臉。Hewithshame.

28.他從臉到脖子全紅了。Aspreadfromhisfacetohisneck.

29.羞愧地低下了頭。Tomhisheadin.

30.臉上滾燙。Shecouldfeelherface.

31.他的臉上掠過失望的神情。Alookofpassedoverhisface.

32.聽到他沒獲獎的消息，他心都沉下來了。Hisheartwhenheheard

thenewsthathefailedtowinaprize.

33.被投入了一個黑暗的世界，陷入了絕望。Tonywasintoaworldof

darknessandintohopelessness.

34.她感到絕望，心都要碎了。Herheartwaswithdespair.

35.最后一句話像子彈一樣射穿我的心臟。Thelastwordwentlikeato

myheart.

36.撓頭，不理解。Hehishead,notunderstandingaword.

37.聳肩。Theotherstheirshoulderswithpuzzlement/confusion.

三、身體部位和動作的語料：

1、【腿和腳】

小步跑trot(ted)downthesteps從上方跳過去leapoverthestream.

大步流星stride(strode)alongto飛快移動Thecatshotacrossthe

meetmegarden.

躡手躡腳creep(crept)outofbed漫游wanderaimlessly

偷偷溜出sneak/slide(slid)outtothe后退一步takeastepbackinhorror

party站起來rise(rose)toone'sfeet

踮腳走tiptoe(d)tothewindow掙扎著站起來struggletoone'sfeet

氣沖沖stormoutoftheroom跳起來spring(sprang)toone's

踱來踱去paceupanddownfeet

一寸寸挪inchone'sway蹲下crouchdown

拖著沉重的腳步drag(ged)one'sheavy加快腳步quickenone^pace(to)

legs悄悄離開edgeaway

蹦跚，搖晃stagger朝...走去makeone'swayto/headfbr

快跑dash/rush/dartinto一動不動stoodrootedtothe

跳蹦跳跳bouncealongtheroadground

2.【眼睛（看）】

看到...sbcatchsightofsth/眼睛睜大one'seyeswiden(ed)

sthcameintoone'ssight.偷看peepat

垂下眼睛sbdroop(ed)one'seyes投射目光sbcasta(...)glanceat...

直視looksbstraightintheeye目光相遇sb'sglancesmetsb.

掃視Hiseyesscannedthe掃一眼glanceat

room.盯著看gaze/stareat

眼神躲閃著我avoidthegazeofme怒視glareat

從窗戶往里仔細看peerinsidethroughthe瞇眼narrowone'seyes

window從頭到腳打量Sheeyedmefromtopto

目光落在…one'sglances/eyesrested/felltoe.

on...

3,【嘴（說）】

松了一口氣breatheasighofrelief大喊yell/screamoutloud

說一句話utteraword咆哮roar

齊聲說sayinchorus咕噥，喃喃murmur/mumbleanapology

發(fā)出呼喊l(fā)etoutashout和盤托出pourout

驚叫，呼喊exclaim

4、【手】

緊抓grab/graspone'sarms推開某人pushsbaway

手里拿著withsthinone'shands推fJpushthedooropen

抱著holdthebabyinhisarms握拳clenchone'sfists

輕撫strokehisheadgently伸出雙臂抱某人throwone'sarms

拍pataroundsb

把某人摟緊懷里pullsbintoone'sarm捂住嘴coverone'smouth

伸出手reachoutone'shand/拿起…咬了一口pickupsthandtakea

extendone'shand(forsth)bite

手心'Hispalmsweresweaty塞進手中pressanoteintomy

鼓掌clapone'shandshand

5.【頭，臉，心等其他】

低頭lower/drop/bcndone'shead氣喘吁吁gaspforbreath

點頭贊同nodinagreement輾轉(zhuǎn)難眠Hetossedandturnedin

頭靠在某人肩膀restone'sheadonsb'sbed,unabletofall

shoulder

眉開眼笑sb'sfacebeamedwith

happiness

容光煥發(fā)Herfacelitup.

哄堂大笑explodewithlaughter

強顏歡笑force/squeezeasmile

嗅聞sniff

臉紅flush/burnwith

embarrassment

咬著嘴唇bit(bite)hislips

揭鼻子blow(blew)one'snose

心砰砰跳Myheartbegantopound.

喉頭發(fā)緊one'sthroattighten(ed)

四.如何寫好續(xù)寫:

1.情節(jié)和主題（人與自我+人與他人+人與自然）

人與自我一青少年的認知提升，改正錯誤認知或做法，變得獨立、細心、沉穩(wěn)、合

作，包容

人與他人一與家人、朋友、陌生人之間的關(guān)愛，不求回報的付出，善意之鏈的傳遞

2.敘事和寫作技巧

3.語料庫

>敘事和寫作技巧

1.無靈主語

fathercaughtsightofthemessykitchen

—?Themessykitchencameintohissight

Fatherfeltworried.

—Thousandsofthoughtsfloodedintotheworriedfathers'

mind.

Iwasshockedbythenews

一Thenewsshotmelikeabomb,leavingmybrainblankandlimbs

frozen.

2.巧用形、副做狀語

Hesmiled—>_Heforcedanunwillingsmile不情愿地笑了

Shecameback一+hunqryandexhausted又餓又

累地

3.人物AB切換，多角度寫事

david哭了，我同情他.

—david的眼淚...david'stearstriggeredasenseofsympathyfromthebottomof

myheart.

―我對丁david的哭泣感到.Jfeltsympathetictodavid'ssadnessandsorryfor

myignorance.

4.動作鏈擴句。在關(guān)鍵動作之前，加上鋪墊動作或這么做的原因。

Shepattedmeontheshoulder

—>Shefeltmysorrowandpatted..../

—Feelinqmvsorrow,shepattedmeontheshoulderandsaidinagentle

voice...

5.名詞和形容詞也可以獷句

asenseofpride(andcontentment)

6.寫人物，可以動作+情緒/適當?shù)男睦砘顒?語言結(jié)合

jack向媽媽道歉

一悔恨的淚水從jack臉頰落下，jack拉住媽媽的手，低聲一遍又一遍地說對不

起

Regretfultearsrollingdownhischeeks,Jackheldmother'shands

tightlyandmumbledhisapologiesrepeatedly.

7.盡量不寫直接的對話

“Thankyou.Thankyouverymuch”theoldmansaid

->Theoldmanexpressedhisthanksrepeatedly.

“whydidn'tyoutellmeearlier?”、justdidn'twantyou

toworry^^

—>Figuringoutwhathadhappened,hefelthimselftheluckiestonein

theworldtopossesssuchunderstanding

children/parents/friends.

8.結(jié)尾升華可以哲理感悟或溫馨畫面，如果能呼應(yīng)原材料則更好

哲理感悟：

【永恒之花】這個難忘的經(jīng)歷/友誼/關(guān)愛就像一朵永恒的花朵，盛放在某人記憶

的長河里。

Theunforgettableexperience/friendship/loveandcarewaslikeaneverlasting

flower,bloomingintheriverofmymemory.

【大愛無疆】雖然我沒和我愛的人一起過節(jié)，但我把溫暖送給了這個無家可歸

的家庭。

WhileIdidn'tcelebratethefestivalwithmylovedones,Iextendedwarmthto

thehomelessfamily.

【人性光輝】正是一個完全陌生的家庭，幫助我重新獲得了對光輝人性的信任

一幫助其他需要幫助的人。

Ifsacompletestrangerfamilythatassistedmeinregainingthetrustinthe

glowinghumannature-helpingothersinneed.

【玫瑰花床/一帆風順】人生并非由玫瑰花床。有時你走過荊棘叢生的生活之路，

發(fā)現(xiàn)它會把你帶到一個玫瑰園，有時你必須學會如何忍受荊棘。

Lifeisnotalwaysabedofroses.Sometimesyouwalkthroughthethornypath

oflifetofindthatitleadsyoutoarosegarden,andothertimesyouhaveto

learnhowtoendurethroughthethorns.

【贈人玫瑰】俗話說：“贈人玫瑰，手有余香?！?/p>

Justasasayinggoes,4tRosesgiven,fragranceinhand.”

【強調(diào)句型】正是我的鼓勵和他的堅持幫助他完成了這項艱巨的任務(wù)。

Itwasmyencouragementandhispersistencethathelpedhimachievethe

toughtask.

溫馨畫面：

【金色陽光】溫暖的金色陽光從窗戶涌進來，加上家人之間的愛，溫暖了我們。

Thewarmgoldensunlight,floodinginthroughthewindow,togetherwithlove

betweenmyfamily,warmedusup.

【溫暖如春】潮濕的窗外，雪花在寒風中飛舞，而在溫暖的等候室里，愛驅(qū)走

了寒冬，人們開心地說著笑著。

Outofthesteamywindow,snowflakesdancedinthech川ywind,whileinside

thewarmwaitingroom,lovedroveoutthecoldwinter,withpeopletalkingand

laughingcheerfully.

?敘事和寫作技巧

1.無靈主語whenfathercaughtsightofthe

messykitchen

—>

Fatherfeltworried.

―>

Iwasshocked