高考英語(yǔ)復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)練習(xí)：獸醫(yī)醫(yī)院的暖心回饋+課件

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)：獸醫(yī)醫(yī)院的暖心回饋1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫(xiě)原文Iwaswanderingalongthestreetonapleasantday,headingtowardsourlocaldrugstore.AsIwalked,IsuddenlyrememberedthatIneededtobuyaspecialtypeofcannedcatfoodfromthevet(獸醫(yī)).Infact,thecatbelongstomydaughter,andshe’scurrentlyinafinancialdilemmaandcan’taffordtopayfortheexpensivefood.Justthedaybefore,IhadhadaconversationwithheraboutitandexpressedmyconcernthatIcan’taffordtokeepspending$300amonthforthevetfood.WhenIenteredthevethospital,theplacewasbusywithactivity.Thevetassistantwasoccupiedhelpinganothercustomer.Fortunately,sherecognizedmeandknewexactlywhatkindoffoodIneededtobuy.SheaskedmeifIwantedhalfacaseorawholecase.Afteramoment’sthought,Idecidedonthefullcase.Justthen,anothercustomerwalkedinandmadehiswaytothecounter.SinceIwasn’tinaparticularhurry,Ipolitelysaid,“Goaheadandservethisgentleman.Meanwhile,I’llgotothedrugstore.ThatwillgiveyoutimetodoyourpaperworkwhileI’mgone.”4續(xù)寫(xiě)原文Shelookedrelievedandsaid,“Thanks,thatwouldbegreat!”Thegentleman,akind-lookingmanwithafriendlysmile,immediatelyprotested,“Youshouldgofirst,youwereherebeforeme.”Iwavedmyhandandreplied,“Noworries,yougorightahead.Mypleasure,”Hejokinglyreplied,“Wow,howcanIthankyou?”Withoutreallythinking,inamomentofcheerfulness,Isaid,“Youcouldbuymeacaseofcatfood.Haha.”Ilaughedandthenturnedtoleave.5續(xù)寫(xiě)原文AsIwalkedoutofthevethospital,Icouldn’thelpbutsmileattheunexpectedinteraction.Itwasjustasmallmoment,butitaddedatouchofwarmthtomyday.LittledidIknowwhatsurprisesthefuturemighthold.6段首句Paragraph1:Ireturned10minuteslater.Paragraph2:Withthecaseofcatfood,Igothome.7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫(xiě)原文分析9文章講述了作者在去藥店途中想起要給女兒的貓買(mǎi)昂貴的獸醫(yī)店貓糧。在獸醫(yī)醫(yī)院，因不趕時(shí)間，作者讓后來(lái)的顧客先接受服務(wù)，還開(kāi)玩笑讓對(duì)方給自己買(mǎi)貓糧，這次互動(dòng)給作者的一天增添了溫暖。續(xù)寫(xiě)需圍繞作者返回獸醫(yī)醫(yī)院后的經(jīng)歷，以及帶著貓糧回家后的故事展開(kāi)，突出人與人之間的善意和溫暖。點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段段首，續(xù)寫(xiě)銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)10續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析Paragraph1：Ireturned10minuteslater.分析：此段應(yīng)承接上文，描述作者回到獸醫(yī)醫(yī)院后的場(chǎng)景。重點(diǎn)在于展現(xiàn)那位男士是否兌現(xiàn)“承諾”，可詳細(xì)描寫(xiě)男士拿著貓糧等待的畫(huà)面，以及作者看到這一幕時(shí)的驚訝與感動(dòng)。通過(guò)對(duì)話(huà)和細(xì)節(jié)，體現(xiàn)男士的善良和作者的感激，讓故事發(fā)展自然流暢，進(jìn)一步凸顯人與人之間的美好情感。11續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析Paragraph2：Withthecaseofcatfood,Igothome.分析：該段從作者帶著貓糧回家展開(kāi)，重點(diǎn)描寫(xiě)作者與女兒分享這段奇妙經(jīng)歷時(shí)女兒的反應(yīng)，以及她們看到貓咪吃糧時(shí)的溫馨場(chǎng)景。最后升華主題，表達(dá)此次善舉對(duì)作者和女兒的影響，讓她們感受到溫暖與希望，也促使作者決定傳遞這份愛(ài)，使故事的情感得到深化。12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Ireturned10minuteslater.WhenIwalkedbackintothevethospital,Iwasgreetedbythevetassistantwithabigsmile.Shesaid,“Youhaveaverykindgentlemanwaitingforyou.”IwasabitpuzzleduntilIsawthemanwhoIhadletgoaheadofme.Hewasstandingtherewithacaseofcatfoodinhishands.Hesmiledatme,saying“IthinkIshouldkeepmypromise.Here’syourcaseofcatfoodasathankyouforyourkindness.”Iwascompletelysurprised.Ineverthoughthewouldactuallytakemyjokeseriously.Ithankedhimgenerously,andhejustshruggedandsaid,“It’stheleastIcoulddo.”Wechattedforawhile,andIfoundoutthathewasalsoananimallover.Paragraph2:Withthecaseofcatfood,Igothome.Icouldn’twaittotellmydaughterwhathadhappened.WhenIsharedthestorywithher,shewasamazedatit.Shesaid,“Mom,thisissuchawonderfulstory.Itjustshowsthattherearestillkindpeopleintheworld.”Wethenopenedthecaseofcatfoodandwatchedthecateatinghappily.AsIsattherewithmydaughter,Ifeltadeepsenseofcontentment.Thisunexpectedactofkindnessnotonlylightenedourfinancialburdenbutalsofilledourheartswithwarmthandhope.Fromthenon,Imadeupmymindtopasson“l(fā)ove”toothers.Justasasayinggoes:“Rosegivenandfragranceinhands.”14范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Ireturned10minuteslater.AsIsteppedbackintothevethospital,thevetassistantgavemeabiggrinandpointedtowardsaman.ItwastheoneI'dletgoahead.Hestoodthere,holdingacaseofcatfood.Whenhesawme,hewalkedoverwithasmile.“Hereyouare.IsaidI'dgetyouacaseofcatfood,andImeantit,”hesaid.Iwasshocked.Istammeredoutmythanks,stillnotbelievinghe'ddoneit.Hetoldmehelovedanimalstooandwasgladtohelp.Wetalkedforashorttime,andIfoundhimreallyfriendly.Paragraph2:Withthecaseofcatfood,Igothome.AssoonasIentered,Icalledmydaughter.Itoldherallaboutwhathappenedatthevethospital.Shelistenedwithwideeyes,andthenexclaimed,“That'ssocool,Mom!It'slikeafairytale.”Weopenedthecatfoodandwatchedthecatpounceonit.Lookingatmydaughter'shappyfaceandthecontentedcat,Ifeltsowarminside.Thiskindactmadeourday.Idecidedrightthentobemorekindtoothersandspreadthislove.15升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Ireturned10minuteslater.AsIreenteredthebustlingvethospital,thevetassistantgreetedmewithanenthusiasticsmileandinformedmethatakindgentlemanwaswaitingforme.Mycuriositypiqued,IscannedtheroomuntilmyeyeslandedonthemanIhad禮讓earlier.Hewasstandingthere,proudlyholdingacaseofcatfoodinhishands.Hisfacelitupwhenhesawmeapproaching.“Ibelieveapromiseisapromise,”hesaid,extendingthecatfoodtowardsme.“Thisismywayofshowinggratitudeforyourkindness.”Iwasutterlyastounded,mymouthagapeindisbelief.Istammeredoutmyheartfeltthanks,stillunabletofathomthathehadtakenmyjestseriously.Weengagedinabriefbutpleasantconversation,duringwhichIdiscoveredthathesharedmypassionforanimals.Paragraph2:Withthecaseofcatfoodinhand,Imademywayhomewithaspringinmystep.ThemomentIwalkedthroughthedoor,Icouldn'twaittosharetheextraordinarystorywithmydaughter.Icalledherover,andasIrecountedtheeventsatthevethospital,hereyeswidenedinwonder.“Mom,that'samazing!It'sabeautifulreminderthatthere'ssomuchgoodnessintheworld,”sheexclaimed.Weeagerlyopenedthecaseofcatfoodandwatchedwithdelightasthecatdevouredit.Sittingsidebyside,wesavoredthewarmthandcontentmentthatfilledtheroom.Thisunexpectedactofkindnessnotonlyalleviatedourfinancialstrainbutalsokindledafireofhopewithinus.Fromthatmomenton,Iresolvedtopayitforward,spreadingloveandkindnesswhereverIwent,forItrulybelievedthat“Asmallactofkindnesscanmakeabigdifference.”16升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Ireturned10minuteslater.Steppingbackintothevethospital,Iwasmetwiththevetassistant'sbeamingface.“There'sakindmanwaitingforyou,”shesaid.IlookedaroundandsawthegentlemanI'dletgofirst.Hewasholdingacaseofcatfood.AsIwalkedtowardshim,hesmiledandsaid,“Icouldn'tforgetmypromise.Yourkindnessinspiredme.”Iwasstunned,touchedbyhisthoughtfulness.Ithank