高考英語(yǔ)復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)：母親節(jié)的溫暖：從自私到無私的轉(zhuǎn)變+課件

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)母親節(jié)的溫暖：從自私到無私的轉(zhuǎn)變1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Ithasbeen26yearssincemyarmyfriendDanandIpackedpicnicfoodandT-shirtsinsidehisbluecar,anddrovepastthemilitarypoliceatMcClellan’smaingate.Armedwithweekendpassesandnewdollarsfromourfirstweek’spayatourArmyReservesummercamp,wewereonourwaytoFlorida.Wehadthoughtaweekendatthebeachwouldbejustwhatweneededtorecoverfromdaysofhardtasks.TheMayweatherwasdelightful.Andwiththemusicbeingplayed,wedroveintoBirminghamanddecidedtostoptophoneourmothersandwishthemhappyMother’sDaybeforecontinuingourjourneysouthtoFlorida.Pickingupmyphoneandreachingmymotherathome,Ilearnedshehadjustreturnedfromgroceryshopping.IcouldtellbythetoneinhervoicethatshewasdisappointedIwouldn’tbespendingherspecialdaywiththefamily.“Haveanicetripandbecareful.We’llmissyou,”shesaid.4續(xù)寫原文WhenIhungup,IcouldtellbyDan’sfacethathewassufferingfromthesameguiltthatwastroublingme.Todealwithourguilt,wediscussedandthendecidedtobuyourmomsflowersandaskdeliverymentosendtheflowerstothem.Pullingintotheparkinglotataflowershop,weeachscribbled(匆匆書寫)anotetogowiththeflowersthatwouldremoveourguiltofspendingouronlyfreeweekendonthebeachratherthanwithdearoldMom.Wewaitedwhiletheclerkassistedalittleboywhowasselectingflowers,obviouslyforhismother.Wewereanxioustopayforourflowersandbeonourway.Finally,thislittleboypickedupmanybeautifulcarnations(康乃馨)forhismother.Atthattime,wedidn’tknowhisdearmomhadalreadypassedaway.Thelittleboysmiledwithprideasheturnedtomeandhelduphisselectionwhiletheclerkranguphisorder5段首句Paragraph1:“I’msuremymamawouldlovetheseflowers,”hesaid.Paragraph2:Then,wepaidforourflowersanddroppedournotesinthedustbin.6Part2題目分析7續(xù)寫原文分析826年前，“我”和軍中好友丹帶著野餐食物和T恤，開著丹的藍(lán)色汽車，經(jīng)過麥克萊倫軍營(yíng)大門的憲兵檢查后出發(fā)。我們拿著周末通行證，帶著在陸軍預(yù)備役夏令營(yíng)第一周掙的新錢，準(zhǔn)備前往佛羅里達(dá)。我們覺得在海灘度過一個(gè)周末能讓我們從多日的艱苦任務(wù)中恢復(fù)過來。五月的天氣宜人，我們一路聽著音樂，開到伯明翰時(shí)決定停下來給媽媽們打電話，祝她們母親節(jié)快樂，然后再繼續(xù)南行去佛羅里達(dá)。“我”給媽媽打電話，從她的語(yǔ)氣中聽出她因“我”不能陪她過這個(gè)特別的日子而失望。掛了電話后，“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)丹也因同樣的愧疚而苦惱。為了減輕這種愧疚，我們商量后決定給媽媽們買花，并讓快遞員送去。我們把車停在一家花店的停車場(chǎng)，各自匆匆寫了一張紙條，希望這些花能消除我們?nèi)ズ┒皇桥銒寢屵^母親節(jié)的愧疚感。我們?cè)诘却陠T接待一個(gè)為媽媽挑選花的小男孩，急切地想付完錢就上路。最后，小男孩挑了很多漂亮的康乃馨，那時(shí)我們還不知道他親愛的媽媽已經(jīng)去世了。小男孩自豪地笑著轉(zhuǎn)向“我”，舉起他選的花，店員開始為他結(jié)賬。點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)9續(xù)寫思路分析Paragraph1:“I’msuremymamawouldlovetheseflowers,”hesaid.“我相信我媽媽會(huì)喜歡這些花的。”他說。他的眼神中充滿了對(duì)母親深深的思念和愛，那純真的笑容讓“我”和丹都為之動(dòng)容?！拔摇比滩蛔査骸澳銒寢屢欢ê荛_心收到這些漂亮的花。她在家等你嗎？”小男孩的眼神瞬間黯淡了下來，他低下頭，輕聲說：“我媽媽去了很遠(yuǎn)的地方，她再也回不來了。但我知道她在天上看著我，我想在母親節(jié)給她送花，讓她知道我很想她?！甭牭叫∧泻⒌脑挘拔摇焙偷ざ笺蹲×?，心中充滿了對(duì)他的心疼和敬佩。我們之前只想著自己的快樂，卻忽略了媽媽們對(duì)我們的思念。而這個(gè)小男孩，即使媽媽已經(jīng)不在身邊，依然如此用心地為媽媽準(zhǔn)備母親節(jié)禮物?！拔摇焙偷?duì)視了一眼，都從對(duì)方的眼中看到了改變心意的決心。10續(xù)寫思路分析Paragraph2:Then,wepaidforourflowersanddroppedournotesinthedustbin.然后，我們付了花的錢，把紙條扔進(jìn)了垃圾桶。我們走到小男孩身邊，對(duì)他說：“小朋友，我們和你一起去給你媽媽送花吧?！毙∧泻⒌难劬σ幌伦恿亮似饋恚_心地點(diǎn)點(diǎn)頭。我們跟著小男孩來到了墓地，他輕輕地把花放在媽媽的墓前，閉上眼睛，默默地說著心里話?？粗∧泻Ⅱ\(chéng)的樣子，“我”和丹也深受觸動(dòng)。之后，我們決定改變計(jì)劃，不再去佛羅里達(dá)的海灘，而是回家陪媽媽過母親節(jié)。我們知道，比起在海灘上玩耍，媽媽更需要我們的陪伴。當(dāng)我們回到家，看到媽媽驚喜又感動(dòng)的表情，我們知道這個(gè)決定是正確的。這個(gè)母親節(jié)，因?yàn)樾∧泻?，變得格外有意義。11Part3范文呈現(xiàn)12范文呈現(xiàn)“I’msuremymamawouldlovetheseflowers,”hesaid.Hiseyeswerefilledwithdeeplongingandloveforhismother.ThatinnocentsmiletouchedbothDanandme.Icouldn'thelpaskinghim,"Yourmommustbeveryhappytoreceivethesebeautifulflowers.Isshewaitingforyouathome?"Thelittleboy'seyesinstantlydimmed.Heloweredhisheadandsaidsoftly,"Mymomhasgonetoafar-awayplace.Shewon'tcomebackanymore.ButIknowshe'swatchingmefromthesky.IwanttogiveherflowersonMother'sDaytoletherknowImissherverymuch."Hearingthelittleboy'swords,DanandIwerestunned.Ourheartswerefilledwithpityandadmirationforhim.Wehadonlythoughtaboutourownhappinessbefore,ignoringourmothers'longingforus.Andthislittleboy,eventhoughhismotherwasnolongerwithhim,stillpreparedaMother'sDaygiftforhersocarefully.DanandIlookedateachotherandsawthedeterminationtochangeourmindsineachother'seyes.13范文呈現(xiàn)Then,wepaidforourflowersanddroppedournotesinthedustbin.Wewalkeduptothelittleboyandsaidtohim,"Littlefriend,let'sgoandgivetheflowerstoyourmomtogether."Thelittleboy'seyeslitupimmediately,andhenoddedhappily.Wefollowedthelittleboytothecemetery.Hegentlyplacedtheflowersinfrontofhismother'sgrave,closedhiseyes,andsilentlysaidsomethinginhisheart.Lookingatthelittleboy'spiousappearance,DanandIwerealsodeeplytouched.Afterthat,wedecidedtochangeourplan.Wewouldn'tgotothebeachinFloridaanymore.Instead,wewouldgohometospendMother'sDaywithourmothers.Weknewthatourmothersneededourcompanymorethanweneededtoplayonthebeach.Whenwegothomeandsawthesurprisedandtouchedexpressionsonourmothers'faces,weknewwehadmadetherightdecision.ThisMother'sDaybecameextremelymeaningfulbecauseofthelittleboy.14升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)“I’msuremymamawouldlovetheseflowers,”hesaid,hiseyesshiningwithapure,unadulteratedlovethatseemedtoradiatefromhisverybeing.Thatinnocent,proudsmileonhisfacewaslikearayofsunshinebreakingthroughtheclouds,instantlycapturingbothDan'sandmyattention.Icouldn'tresisttheurgetoengagewithhim,soIleaneddownslightlyandasked,"Yourmommustbeoverthemoontoreceivesuchbeautifulflowers.Isshewaitingforyoueagerlyathome?"Inaninstant,thelightinhiseyesdimmed,andhisshouldersslumpedeversoslightly.Heloweredhishead,hisvoicebarelyaboveawhisperashereplied,"Mymomhasgonetoaplacefar,faraway.She'snotcomingback.ButIknowshe'swatchingovermefromupthereinthesky.IjustwanttogivehertheseflowersonMother'sDaysosheknowshowmuchImisshereverysingleday."DanandIstoodthere,frozeninplace,ourheartsachingwithaprofoundsenseofpityandadmirationforthislittleboy.Wehadbeensowrappedupinourownselfishdesires,thinkingonlyaboutthefunwecouldhaveatthebeach,completelyoblivioustothefactthatourmotherswereyearningforourcompany.Andherewasthislittleboy,despitethetragiclossofhismother,stillgoingtogreatlengthstoshowhisloveandrespectforheronthisspecialday.DanandIexchangedaknowinglook,andinthatmoment,webothknewthatsomethinghadtochange.15升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Then,withoutamoment'shesitation,wepaidforourflowersandunceremoniouslydroppedourhastilyscribblednotesintothedustbin.Wewalkedovertothelittleboy,ourheartsfilledwithanewfoundsenseofpurpose."Hey,littleguy,"Isaidwithawarmsmile,"howaboutwegoandgivetheseflowerstoyourmomtogether?"Hiseyes,whichhadbeensofilledwithsadnessjustmomentsago,nowsparkledwithjoyandexcitement.Henoddedvigorously,hissmilereturninginfullforce.Wefollowedhimquietlytothecemetery,theweightofthemomentheavyonourhearts.Whenwearrivedathismother'sgrave,hegentlyplacedtheflowersinfrontoftheheadstone,histinyhandstremblingslightly.Heclosedhiseyes