陜西省 2016年高考英語命題作文寫作技巧

WritingSkills,Teachinggoals-教學(xué)目標(biāo),HowtomakeanoutlineHowtopickoutimportantpointsHowtowritebeautifulsentencesHowtoorganizethesentenceslogically,假設(shè)你是李華,你購買了一部某外國公司生產(chǎn)的手機.因有質(zhì)量問題,要求該公司更換.請根據(jù)下列要點,用英文寫一封電子郵件.1.問題:手機不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信;該產(chǎn)品已售完,無法更換;型號新,無配件,無法維修.2.要求:公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換.注意:1.詞數(shù)為120左右;2.參考詞匯:配件(sparepart),Thestyle:exposition（說明文）Themainidea:PresenttheproblemswiththephoneandaskforachangePerson:thefirstperson第一人稱Tense:thepresenttense現(xiàn)在式andthepasttense過去式,Task1Examinethecontentcarefully,Task2提煉要點,確定重點詞匯,劃分段落,Importantpoints：threeproblemsplusonedemand要點：三個問題加一個要求Point1:notring;notsendmessagesPoint2：soldout;notchangefor或notexchangefor或notreplacewithPoint3：newmodel;nospareparts;repair/fix/maintainPoint4：require/requestsb.todosth或demandofsb.todosth.,Task3連詞成句,1.手機不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信Itdoesntring.Itdoesntsendshortmessages.2.該產(chǎn)品已售完,無法更換Themodelhasbeensoldout.Theycantchangeanewoneforme.3.型號新,無配件,無法維修ItisanewmodelinChina.Itisimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.4.要求公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換Idemandof/require/requestyourcompanytochangeanewoneformeassoonaspossible.,Task4提升句子，組句成篇,注意：靈活運用好句式一.使用非謂語動詞(nonfiniteverb)使句子簡潔高檔二.巧用倒裝(inversion)結(jié)構(gòu)增強句子的表現(xiàn)力三.嘗試多樣化表達方式,如：1.感嘆句(theexclamatory)2.with短語3.定語從句(theattributiveclause)4.各種名詞性從句5.各種狀語從句(theadverbialclause),1.手機不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信整合前：Itdoesntring.Itdoesntsendshortmessages.整合后：可以造至少兩個并列句(or,meanwhile,either)a.Itcantringorsendshortmessages.b.Itdoesntringatallandmeanwhileitdoesntsendshortmessages.（Neither.nor句式）c.Itcanneitherringnorsendshortmessages.可造至少兩個倒裝句式（notonlybutalso,nor,neither）d.Notonlydoesitfailtoring,butalsoitcantsendamessage.e.Themobilephonecantring,norcanitsendmessages.,2.該產(chǎn)品已售完,無法更換整合前：Themodelhasbeensoldout.Theycantchangeanewoneforme.整合后：a.Thenewmodelhasbeensoldoutsothattheycantchangeanewoneforme.b.Themodelhasbeensoldout,asaconsequence,itsimpossibleforthemtochangeanewoneforme.(非限制性定語從句nonfiniteattributiveclause)c.Themodelhasbeensoldout,whichmakesitimpossibleformetohaveanewone.（主語從句）d.Thefactthatthemodelhasbeensoldoutmakesmeunabletochangeit.,（結(jié)果狀語從句至少兩個sothat，asaconsequence/result）,3.型號新,無配件,無法維修整合前：ItisanewmodelinChina.Itisimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.整合后：a.Sinceitsanewmodelandthererenospareparts,Icantgetitrepaired.b.SonewisitstypewithoutanysparepartsthatIcantgetitrepaired.c.Withitsnewtypeandnosparepartsleft,Ifindithardtohaveitrepaired.,原因狀語從句because，since，as和倒裝句各一個sothat,with結(jié)構(gòu)一個,4.要求公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換整合前：Irequire/requestyourcompanytochangeanewoneformeassoonaspossible.整合后：賓語從句Toconclude,Idemand/require/requestthatyourcompanyshouldhavemyphonechangedassoonaspossible.用appreciateitifB.Idreallyappreciateitifyoucouldreplaceitsoon.包含賓語從句、同位語從句、虛擬語氣及被動語態(tài)的句子C.Ihopethatmyrequirementthatyoushouldchangeanewphoneofthesamemodelformecanbesatisfiedassoonaspossible.,5.檢查謄寫,仔細謄寫，保證字跡工整，卷面整潔。,Whichoneispreferred?,DearSir,Tendaysafterthat,itdidntringorsendshortmessages.ThenItookittotheseller,butwastoldthatthemodelhadbeensoldoutandIhadtowaitatleastthreemonthsforanewone.LaterIwenttotherepairman.Hesaidsinceitwasanew-modelinChina,itwasimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.Iwassodesperateonhearingthat.HowcanIwaitthatlong?Therefore,Irequirethatyousendmeanewoneofthesamemodelwith