高中英語寫作的華麗變身(經(jīng)典中的經(jīng)典)

1、英語書面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)beautify your composition 高考作文的華麗變身念難心不慌，遇易心更細(xì)命題特點(diǎn)1所選題材及體裁都非常貼近考生生活，實(shí)際具有時(shí)代特點(diǎn)，緊扣與學(xué)生相關(guān)的社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)及學(xué)生的生活 與學(xué)習(xí)。2. 詞數(shù)要求100,既要求表達(dá)事實(shí)信息，又要陳述個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，對(duì)考生思維和表達(dá)能力的要求提高了。3. 開頭或/和結(jié)尾都已經(jīng)給出，無文體要求，主要考查考生的表達(dá)能力。 參考答案特點(diǎn)1. 詞數(shù)都符合試題要求。2. 都覆蓋了所有要點(diǎn)，并進(jìn)行了分段表達(dá)，基本上是3段；3. 所用句型以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，但是使用了一定量的高級(jí)詞匯，大量的短語和句型，豐富的句式結(jié)構(gòu)增強(qiáng)了 表達(dá)的效果。4. 都有效地使用

2、了語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。高考閱卷特點(diǎn)：1. 閱卷時(shí)間短；2.閱卷的速度快；3.閱卷老師的心理狀態(tài)：給分小庸平均分154. 高考卷其余部分是標(biāo)準(zhǔn)化計(jì)分結(jié)論一一書面表達(dá)是提高分?jǐn)?shù)最大的潛力股15分和20多分的作文到底差在哪？15分的作文中規(guī)中矩，該對(duì)的都對(duì)，包括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)的完整，語法與詞形的正確，但句式簡(jiǎn)單，沒有多 少亮點(diǎn)。而20多分的作文句型詞匯方面就做了很好的包裝，它的句子如人穿的衣服，它已經(jīng)不是普通校 服，而是李寧、耐克等名牌，所以讓人覺得很“拽”，而高考英語寫作要的就是這種很“拽”的感覺. 高考作文評(píng)分原則1 .形式上勝人一籌，也就是文章結(jié)構(gòu)，譴詞造句2. 內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，發(fā)揮想象，適

3、當(dāng)拓展書面表達(dá)在評(píng)閱時(shí)遵循三原則語言第一位（語言高級(jí)）內(nèi)容第二位（要點(diǎn)齊全）結(jié)構(gòu)第三位（文章分段）（漂亮、地道）語言第一位（語言高級(jí)）一、高級(jí)詞匯和句式二、修辭手法三、有效的連詞 四、名人名言或諺語1 高級(jí)詞匯短語詞匯反映你知識(shí)貯存量的多少，也是衡量英語水平的一個(gè)重要標(biāo)志。詞匯使用的原則（人靠衣裝，文靠詞裝）1、詞組優(yōu)先原則2、地道原則。3、避免重復(fù)原則4、后、高、長原則一后學(xué)到、佼高級(jí)、較長詞匯。1、詞組優(yōu)先原則原文 a new railway is being built in my hometown.修正 a new railway is under construction in my

4、 hometown.2、地道原則原文through traveling, i learned a lot of knowledge.修正through traveling, i gained / obtained a lot of knowledge.3、避免重復(fù)原則原文1 like reading while my brother likes watching television.0參1e i like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.4、后高長原則一后學(xué)到、較討級(jí)、較長詞匯。原詞替換詞harddiligentlyve

5、ryrather extremelypay attention toattach importance tohappydelighted enjoyablemore and morethe increasing number ofintelligentadj.聰明的、腦筋好的 clever smart wise bright 電腦在我們生活中的作用是十分重要的。1 .computers are very important in our life.2. computers play a very important role in our life.3. computers are of gr

6、eat importance in our life.exl、運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯：as a result, the plan failed.（一般）the plan turned out to be a failure.（高級(jí)）she went to austria in order to study music （一般）she went to austria for the purpose of studying music. （高級(jí)）suddenly i thought out a good idea.（一般）a good idea occuited to me./ a good idea su

7、ddenly struck me（高級(jí)）when he heard she had died, he went pale with sorrow.（一般）at the news of her death, he went-.（高級(jí)）she can' t correctly pronounce the word（一般）she has trouble in pronouncing the word.（高級(jí)）ex2、句式多樣，文章增“靚”使用較豐富的句式：運(yùn)用得當(dāng)?shù)木渥咏Y(jié)構(gòu)可以給文章增色不少，從而使整篇文章因此而生輝 他昨天下午來的。1. he came here yesterday aft

8、ernoon2. he didn't come here until yesterday afternoon.3. not until yesterday afternoon did he come here. 4.1t was yesterday afternoon that he came here思考：什么樣的作文會(huì)成為一篇好作文無遺漏信息點(diǎn)（審題）句式多樣思考：你能想到的好句式有哪些?篇章條理清晰：分段和過渡詞 地道的高級(jí)詞匯和恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~組advanced sentences：with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)定語從句倒裝句強(qiáng)調(diào)句化腐朽為神奇十式一.將兩個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句合并為并列句。名詞性從句 非謂語動(dòng)詞

9、 常用諺語 被動(dòng)句.操作難度*寫作效果*1 you can do it. i can do it. one of us must do it.either you or i must do it.if you go through the gate, you，11 find the entrance to bear country.（一般）go through the gate, and you' 11 find-.（高級(jí)）i got up late this morning. i didn，t catch the early bus. （一般）i got up late this m

10、orning, otherwise i could have caught the early bus.（高級(jí)）when he spoke, he felt more and more excited （一般）the more he spoke, the more excited he felt.（高級(jí)）二、主動(dòng)句與被動(dòng)句的互換。操作難度寫作效果the govern me nt should take immediate measures to deal with the prese nt fin ancial crisis. people suggest that the conferenc

11、e be put off.（一般）it is suggested that the conference be put off.（髙級(jí)）immediate measures should be taken to deal with the present financial crisis.三、將陳述句改為感嘆句。操作難度 寫作效果1 to prevent the pollution is very important. how important it is to prevent the pollution!2. she is a clever girl.what a clever girl

12、she is!四、將陳述句改為倒裝句。操作難度*六寫作效果*六l i could hardly understand the importance of english at that time.hardly could i understand the importance of english at that time.2. we did not realize our mistakes until at that time.not until at that time did we realize our mistakes3. though i" m weak, i will

13、make the effort.（一般）weak as i am, t 11 make the effort.（高級(jí)）五、將簡(jiǎn)單句改為強(qiáng)調(diào)句。操作難度寫作效果*六1 smoking did great harm to his health.it was smoking that did great harm to his health.2. our money is earned through hard work by our parents.it is through hard work that our money is earned by our parents.六、將兩個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句合并為

14、復(fù)合句。操作難度寫作效果1. 同位語和同位語從句（常用于描述人物、地點(diǎn)等介紹性文段）1）liu xiang is an excellent athlete. he won the first prize in men" s 11（） hurdle race in the 2004 olympic games.（用同位語改寫）, won the first prize in men's 110 hurdle race in the 2004 olympic games.2）the word is true the president will give our school a

15、 speechis truethe president will give our school a speech.2. 定語從句（限制性/非限制性）1）the 2008 olympic games will be held in beijing, and its slogan is one world, one dream,the 2008 olympic games._2）in my opinion, the great wall and the summer palace are well worth visiting.in my opinion, the great wall and

16、the summer palace.3）yesterday, we went to the east gate, and we bought a lot of clothesyesterday, we went to the east gate,.3. 主語從句1）his wonderful performance on the stage impressed me. most was his wonderful performance on the stage.2）it satisfied me. our school dining hall provides us with a large

17、 variety of kinds of dishes. our school dining hall provides us with a large variety of kinds of dishes3）i learned from the story that as long as we have patience, confidence and perseverance, we can realize our dreams. as long as we have patience, confidence and perseveranee, we can realize our dre

18、ams.【推薦句型lwhat surprisesastonishedsatisfiedimpressed me is thatwhat i would like to suggest' advise put forward is thatwhat matters most is that.what i learnconclude from the story is that.4. 表語從句【推薦句型】：.is no longer what it used to be.我的家鄉(xiāng)不再像以前那樣了。my hometown is no longer what it used to be.5.

19、狀語從句【推薦句型】結(jié)果、程度sothat ; suchthat讓步 no matter how what when where- .=whatever, however, whenever, wherever時(shí)間 was doingwhen 1）不管前面有多少困難，我們都要學(xué)會(huì)獨(dú)立的克服他們。,we should learn to overcome them independently2）我正沿著馬路走，突然我聽到有人叫我。ialong the roadsuddenly i heard my name called七、將兩個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句合并為一個(gè)由which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句操作難度寫作效果1

20、. recently many middle school students spend their money on unnecessary things. different people have different opinions about it.recently many middle school students spend their money on unnecessary things,2. many boys learn to smoke it does harm to their healthmany boys learn to smoke,.八、it作形式主語或形

21、式賓語句型操作難度*寫作效果1. you pretend to know what you don5t know it，s no good2. it is easy to get on with pam. i find.九、分詞結(jié)構(gòu)代替狀語/定語從句操作難度寫作效果1 if you work harder, you will do better in the exam next time, you will do better in the exam next time.2 because my friend was frightened of losing his job, he said

22、nothing to the police, my friend said nothing to the police.2.the moon travels round the earth once every month. the moon is a natural satellite of the earth.與信件和公用電話相比，手機(jī)和網(wǎng)絡(luò)更快也更方便。compared with letters and public phones, mobile phones and the internet are faster iind much more convenient. 十、with引導(dǎo)的

23、短語或者復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)操作難度*六寫作效果*with + 賓語 + adj./ adv./介詞短語/to dodoingdone常用句型with a population of.with a total area of.with a long history of. years1）這個(gè)地區(qū)占地2000平方千米，人口 10萬。this area covers an area of 2000 square kilometers,.2）我們學(xué)校周圍種了很多花和樹，吸引了大量的學(xué)生來參觀。, it attracts a large number of people.3）沒有做完作業(yè)，這個(gè)小孩不敢去上學(xué)。,

24、the boy dared not go to school.4）這兩個(gè)男人早早就睡了，蠟燭燒了一個(gè)晚上。the two men went to bed early,.高級(jí)句式使用的原則：抓住'高考閱卷老師的心理的秘訣：眷寫規(guī)范不要少四“不如”： 一、肯定不如雙否好二、陳述不如倒裝妙三、主動(dòng)不如被動(dòng)巧四、從句不如分詞傲一、肯定不如雙否好修辭的使用在書面表達(dá)中算作很大的亮點(diǎn)，在高中階段很少有學(xué)生會(huì)注重修辭的應(yīng)用。雙重否定也是種 修辭，而且對(duì)于考生來說，只要稍加注意，可以在文章中設(shè)計(jì)雙重否定的句子。就變成了亮點(diǎn)句，起到強(qiáng) 調(diào)作用。i have made great progress in

25、english with his help.i couldn't have made so much progress in english without his help.the postman comes on time every day.the postman never fails to come on time二、陳述不如倒裝妙倒裝是一種最簡(jiǎn)單易行的使句子呈現(xiàn)亮點(diǎn)的方法。在高中階段只需學(xué)握倒裝的四種形式，足以應(yīng)對(duì)書面 表達(dá)，如何應(yīng)用倒裝，有很多方法和技巧。l.only when we realize the importance of environmental prot

26、ection can we solve the problem of pollution.2. so precious is time that we can5t afford to waste it.3. diligent as he was, he failed in passing the exam.4. by no means should teenagers get into the habit of smoking1否定詞開頭：1. he didn't come here until 5 pm. yesterday.2. not until/till 5 pm. did h

27、e come here yesterday.3 it was not until/till 5 pm that he came here yesterday.2 地點(diǎn)狀語開頭把地點(diǎn)狀語放在句首后面主謂倒裝。這樣做的好處z是倒裝本身就是高級(jí)結(jié)構(gòu)，第二是倒裝后把真 正的主語放到了句子的末尾，后面還可以繼續(xù)加從句，使整個(gè)句子再呈現(xiàn)更多的亮點(diǎn)。our library lies in the center of our school. it is between the garden and the teaching building.in the center of our school lies o

28、ur library, which is between the garden and the teaching building.3.only的倒裝句：only in this way can i improve my englishonly by taking exercises can we keep healthyonly in this way can we achieve our goal.4.as或though的倒裝：1. young as i am, i can manage it2. rich as our country is, we have a lot of probl

29、ems3 badly injured as he was, he managed to take down the car's number.try as you will, you won't manage it三、主動(dòng)不如被動(dòng)巧英語中經(jīng)常用被動(dòng)語態(tài)，漢語經(jīng)常用主動(dòng)語態(tài)；英語中經(jīng)常用是事物或形式主語開頭，強(qiáng)調(diào)一件事發(fā)生 在什么人身上，而漢語經(jīng)常用人稱開頭強(qiáng)調(diào)一個(gè)人發(fā)生了什么事。所以使用被動(dòng)語態(tài)符合英語的習(xí)慣，如 果能將整個(gè)文章屮兩個(gè)句子變成被動(dòng)語態(tài)，就會(huì)呈現(xiàn)句型的變化，使整篇文章句型豐富。每次可以借五本書最多借十天（2006nmet）we can borrow five bo

30、oks at most, and we can keep them for ten daysat most five books can be borrowed at a time and they can be kept for ten days（哪種表達(dá)法分?jǐn)?shù)會(huì)更高？）四、從句不如分詞傲兒乎所有的狀語從句都可以變成獨(dú)立主格或分詞結(jié)構(gòu)，時(shí)間狀語從句，原因狀語，條件狀語等。例如條 件狀語從句：if such is the case, you should apologize to her.如何變成獨(dú)立主格或分詞結(jié)構(gòu)呢？學(xué)會(huì)下面的 口訣，如果你的作文中有狀語從句，馬上可改成獨(dú)立主格或分詞結(jié)構(gòu)這個(gè)

31、最大的亮點(diǎn)。口訣：一去，二看，三改。 一去：去連詞；二看：看主語；三改：改分詞。第一步，去掉連詞if；if such is the case, you should apologize to her.第二步，看前后兩句話的主語，前后主語不一致，所以要改成獨(dú)立主格；原文 if everything is taken into consideration, we ought to have another chance.r參止 everything taken into consideration, we ought to have another chance第三步，改分詞，is變成分詞是bei

32、ng最后變成 such being the case, you should apologize to her如果前后兩句話主ii一致，就變成分詞結(jié)構(gòu)。原文the young man couldn' t help crying when he heard the bad news.修正hearing the bad news, the young man couldn' t help crying.practice改寫句子1 when he arrives, please give me an e-mail（使用 v-ing 形式）2. to his surprise, the

33、 little girl knows so many things.（使用名詞性從句）3. he did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.（使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句型）4.1 passed the physics exam because of your help.（用虛擬語氣）5. they sang and laughed as they went back to school.（ 使用 v-ing 形式）6.1f you study hard, you will make rapid prog

34、ress（用并歹u句）7. he had no sooner come back from beijing than he was sent abroad（使用倒裝句）熟能生巧 translate the sentences1. 通過使用網(wǎng)絡(luò)與家人聯(lián)系是很方便的2. 我們所需要做的是冷靜下來，反思我們的學(xué)習(xí)方法。3. 只有以這種方式，我們才能進(jìn)步。4. 我們對(duì)口己的態(tài)度才是最關(guān)鍵的。5. 坐在一盤子粽子前，這個(gè)男孩不知道如何打開他們。（unwrap）6. 正如圖中所示，愛就像黑暗中的一盞燈。但是值得提醒的是，同學(xué)們?cè)谑褂脧?fù)雜的句型和結(jié)構(gòu)時(shí)，要有把握能正確地表達(dá)；也要注意分寸，應(yīng)根 據(jù)書面表達(dá)的

35、內(nèi)容和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)而定，做到地道得體，千萬不能生搬硬套，畫蛇添足。* （多看多背多模仿多翻譯）practice怎樣使用較豐富的句式和高級(jí)詞匯1. to his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名詞性從句）2. he did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.（使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句型）3.1 passed the physics exam because of your help（用虛扌以語氣）4. she walked out of

36、the lab and many students followed her.（使用過去分詞）5. they sang and laughed as they went back to school.（ 使用 v-ing 形式）6.1 won' t believe what he says（no matter what 狀語從句）7.if you study hard, you will make rapid progress（祈使句+and）8. he had no sooner come back from beijing than he was sent abroad.（使用倒裝

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