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1、分值分值 評評 分分 標標 準準 5按照要求概括了按照要求概括了全部主要全部主要信息，信息，沒有增加沒有增加與原文與原文無關(guān)無關(guān)的信息，的信息，沒有照抄沒有照抄原子的句子。語言結(jié)構(gòu)正確，行文原子的句子。語言結(jié)構(gòu)正確，行文規(guī)范。規(guī)范。 4基本基本按照要求概括了主要信息，沒有增加與原文無關(guān)按照要求概括了主要信息，沒有增加與原文無關(guān)的信息，沒有照抄原文的句子。語言結(jié)構(gòu)正確，行文的信息，沒有照抄原文的句子。語言結(jié)構(gòu)正確，行文規(guī)范。規(guī)范。 3基本按照要求概括了主要信息，但包含基本按照要求概括了主要信息，但包含一些不相關(guān)一些不相關(guān)的的信息，有個別句子信息，有個別句子抄抄自原文。語言結(jié)構(gòu)自原文。語言結(jié)構(gòu)基本

2、正確基本正確，行，行文比較規(guī)范。文比較規(guī)范。 2不能按照要求概括主要信息，包含不能按照要求概括主要信息，包含較多不相關(guān)較多不相關(guān)的信息，的信息，有有較多的抄襲較多的抄襲。語言結(jié)構(gòu)。語言結(jié)構(gòu)不夠準確不夠準確，行文不夠規(guī)范。，行文不夠規(guī)范。 0-1沒有按照要求概括主要信息，基本是不相關(guān)的信息，沒有按照要求概括主要信息，基本是不相關(guān)的信息，大多數(shù)的句子都抄自原文。語言結(jié)構(gòu)不準確，行文不大多數(shù)的句子都抄自原文。語言結(jié)構(gòu)不準確，行文不規(guī)范。規(guī)范。 A Good Summary Content1. cover all the main information2. not too brief, not to

3、o many details3. no comments of your own Language1. proper words, accurate sentence building2. dont copy the original sentences v熟悉各種文體的寫作特點和框架。熟悉各種文體的寫作特點和框架。v記敘文：記敘文：v5W (what / who / when / where / how)v議論文：議論文：vopinion + argument / reasonsv說明文：說明文：v phenomenon +reason +solution2. 針對某個問題提出解決方法或措施

4、。針對某個問題提出解決方法或措施。即即“問題問題+解決方法解決方法”The passage tells us.(問題問題), including.(方法方法1), .(方法方法2)and.(方法方法3). 3.描寫某事物的性質(zhì)功用。描寫某事物的性質(zhì)功用。即即“對象對象+功能功能+好處好處”：The writer introduces. (對象對象)to us, especially its.(性質(zhì)或功用性質(zhì)或功用), from which we know.(對象對象帶來的利好帶來的利好). (A) Oct 3, 1999, Sunday Rainy It was raining outside

5、 when I got up early in the morning. Its too bad, I had to go to school by bus. I said to myself. It was almost seven oclock before I left home. I put on my raincoat and ran to the bus stop in a hurry, for I thought a lot of people might be waiting there. Hardly had I got there when a bus was coming

6、. I got on the bus immediately, hoping it was possible for me to take a seat. I saw an empty seat and took it. But I found an old lady standing behind me. I stood up at once and was about to ask her to take the seat when a young girl in a modern skirt made a dive for it. I could hardly believe it. I

7、 glared at her, thinking, “What bad manners!” She cares for nobody but herself. Wont she grow old in the future?”1、以約、以約30個詞概括短文的要點；個詞概括短文的要點；narration Find out five factorsWhen/Where/Who/What/HowWhen:Where:Who:What:Combine the five factors in your own wordsone rainy morningon a busthe author, an ol

8、d lady, a young ladygo to school, offer the seat, make a dive for Give a general idea(When) , (Who) . (Where) (What) to (Who) standing behind him, but (Who) (What) .1. One rainy morning, the author on a bus to school offered his seat to an old lady standing behind him. However, the moment he stood u

9、p, a young girl . (32字)2. The passage mainly tells us a story about of young people on a bus. The author was about to offer his seat to an old lady beside him when a young girl_. (37字) the authorThe Refined Version rushed to take itGive a general ideabad mannersrushed to take it (B) Smoking As is al

10、most known to all, smoking is bad for peoples health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart disease, cancer and other problems. The World Health Organization says diseases linked to smoking kill at least two million five hundred thousand persons each year. Still, many people find

11、 it difficult to stop smoking. One reason is that smoking usually becomes a habitual behavior, and habits, whether good or bad, are not easy to give up. Another reason is the effect of nicotine, the substance found in cigarettes works on people somewhat as drugs do. Measures have been taken to help

12、people keep away from the harm of smoking. In many cities, smoking is forbidden in public places. The danger of smoking is warned of everywhere. And newspapers are asked not to publish advertisements for cigarettes. World “No Tobacco Day” is observed every year as the biggest campaign against smokin

13、g. Steps to followargumentation Smoking As is almost known to all, smoking is bad for peoples health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart disease, cancer and other problems. The World Health Organization says diseases linked to smoking kill at least two million five hundred tho

14、usand persons each year. Still, many people find it difficult to stop smoking. One reason is that smoking usually becomes a habitual behavior, and habits, whether good or bad, are not easy to give up. Another reason is the effect of nicotine, the substance found in cigarettes works on people somewha

15、t as drugs do._ Measures have been taken to help people keep away from the harm of smoking. In many cities, smoking is forbidden in public places. The danger of smoking is warned of everywhere. And newspapers are asked not to publish advertisements for cigarettes. World “No Tobacco Day” is observed

16、every year as the biggest campaign against smoking._ SUMMARyStructure Main content Topic sentence supporting sentences concludingsentence Paraphrase sentences1.Smoking is bad for peoples health.Smoking peoples health.does harm tois harmful to/has a bad effect on/is bad for Smoking many diseases.2.So

17、mking leads to many diseases. causes/contributes toA lot of diseases by smoking.results inare caused smoking.result from換詞：換詞：換語態(tài)：換語態(tài)：3.Smoking is difficult to stop.4. Many measures have been taken to forbid smoking in public places.Smoking is to .hard/not easygive up/quitIt is to smoking.hardgive u

18、p/quitSmokers find it to smoking.We have to forbid smoking in public places.taken many measuresSmoking has in public places by the government.been forbidden/banned換詞：換詞：換語態(tài)換語態(tài)：換句式換句式：hardgive up/quit Smoking peoples health. It many diseases. And its to . Measures have to keep people from being harme

19、d .does harm tohardgive up been takenresults in Smoking peoples health. Not only does it many diseases,but the smokers also feel to smoking. However, many measures have to keep people from being harmed .does harm tolead toit difficult give up been taken (c) Eye care is an important factor in all of

20、our lives. Without eyes, we seem to be able to do nothing. But, what can we do to take care of eyes? Firstly, we should eat healthy food. Secondly, dont sit before a computer screen or TV for too long time and take regular rest at intervals so as to relax the eye muscles. Thirdly, having enough slee

21、p is the best rest for eyes. Besides those notices, you should be aware of some threats to eyes in daily lives. Excessive exposure to bright sunlight is harmful to eyes, therefore, when going out, especially in summer time, put on a pair of qualified sunglasses. Stay away from smoking. Last but not

22、least, take regular medical examinations to check out the potential eye disease and prevent its deterioration(退化退化). Eyes are the most important sense organs and one should use proper eye care products to avoid further irritations (刺激刺激)and ensure longevity at ease.問問題題解解決決方方式式解題過程解題過程 本文在指出眼睛重要后本文在

23、指出眼睛重要后, 緊接著提出問題緊接著提出問題“為保護眼睛為保護眼睛, 我我們可以做些什么呢們可以做些什么呢”, 然后分三點說明應(yīng)該做些什么。因此然后分三點說明應(yīng)該做些什么。因此, 我我們可以套用們可以套用“問題問題+解決方法解決方法”模式：模式：Eye care is an important and what can we do to take care of eyes?(1)we should eat healthy food(2) take regular rest(3) having enough sleep(4) be aware of some threats to eyes(5) take regular medical examinations Our eyes are important for us, so the author tells us how to take care of our eyes, including eating heal