聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)指導(dǎo)：5R解讀、4句框架和3大原則(五四三法)

1、聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)指導(dǎo)：5R解讀、4句框架和3大原則（五 四三法）在教學(xué)中，讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)初步摸索出：5R解讀故事；4句框架和3大原則（即：五四 三法）目前看，這種方法還是比較有效的，當(dāng)然有個(gè)前提，需要積累若干細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)的語(yǔ) 句才能發(fā)揮更大的效果。后面應(yīng)該會(huì)不斷完善。題目：讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩端，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 Mike licked the last of the mint chocolate chip ice cream. It was almost time to leave. He jumped into the car with his parents and h

2、eaded off to the Olympic-sized pool for the big swim meet.When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift. Mike climbed out the pool, smiling. He had just won first place, making him the fastest boy in his age group.Congratulations, son/1 his father said. His mom gave him a hug, e

3、ven though he was soaking wet.A week later, it was time for another swim meet. Like before, Mike decided to enjoy his favorite ice cream flavor. Mike remembered that the last time he had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first. Maybe he*d win again.Hes taken first place again in

4、his race. Mike was feeling pretty good. As it turned out, Mike decided to have some mint chocolate chip Ice cream before every one of the next few swim meets. He began to think of it as his lucky chann. After several months of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbe

5、atable. And he wouldnt admit it, but all that ice cream was adding a few pounds to his athletic swimmers build.It didnt take long after that for Mike to start coming in second place-and then third-and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic.On the day

6、 of his next swim meet, his mother sat down at the table with him. Mike, we all love ice cream, but it*s not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Maybe its time to quit the sweet treats for a while, especially before you go swimming.Mike unwillingly agreed. He went to the swim meet, and didnt

7、 perform well. His father offered to go running with him a few days a week to help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breathing easier at swim practices.It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasnt sure what to expect.He felt h

8、ealthy again, but he didnt know if he still had any speed in the pool.注意：1. 所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的字?jǐn)?shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2. 至少使用五個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)：3. 續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4. 續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)Paragraph 1 :As he drove into the water,he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.Paragraph 2:His jaw dropped as he r

9、ealized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else too.如何快速寫(xiě)：第一步：Analyze the story： 5Rs1. Read for characters:Mike, his parents, Ice cream, teammates2. Read for conflict / problems：Ice cream and Mikes performance: Whether is it a Lucky charm3. Read for plot:First placeFirstNotmeetk：third-las

10、tplaf - /perform wen./Top positions Second- SeveralmonthsAnother swim meetthe 1st swim meetNot long of every after that swimOne day of a swimSoon meet4. Read for emotional changes:When his race came up, Mike was confidentMike was feeling pretty good.After several months of placing in the top positio

11、ns of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable.Mike unwillingly agreed.5. Read for themeWhat contributes to Mikes success m swimming?第二步：四句定框架：寫(xiě)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)不同于寫(xiě)其它作文，有可能需要先倒著寫(xiě)的Step 1:先把最后一句寫(xiě)好，即：主題句Mike realized that ones lucky charm was nothing but his diligence.Step 2:再把銜接句寫(xiě)好，即第一段的最后一句：He dashed to t

12、he finish line.Step 3:緊接著每段的提示語(yǔ)句寫(xiě)角色的情感：As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.It struck endless energy and motivation into his body.Mikes jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else、too.The flowers in his heart were a

13、lready in bloom.接下來(lái)就是把每段的中間補(bǔ)充完整，記住三大原則：LActionResponse原則：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想會(huì)引起其它角色的 一系列反應(yīng)的。每段對(duì)話1-2句，不一定兩個(gè)人都要說(shuō)話，無(wú)聲的動(dòng)作也是一種 responseo2 .ConflictSolution原則：一般而言第二段會(huì)有問(wèn)題的solution,但本文和高考的 讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)文章出題不一樣，因?yàn)閟olution在所給文章中就已經(jīng)有了。同時(shí)思考：能否在第一段出現(xiàn)一個(gè)問(wèn)題，然后把它解決了或者沒(méi)有解決。一方面 是增加看點(diǎn)，另一方面也是給第二段鋪墊。3 .Negative-Positive原則：寫(xiě)作中一定要體現(xiàn)情感

14、的變化，無(wú)論前面是這樣的變 化，最終都是積極的。最終：As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could.1. It struck endless energy and motivation into his body. （ 情）2. This is where I belong. I can win the race J thought he, his teeth clenched and his eyes fixed on the finish line forwar

15、d.（內(nèi)心獨(dú)白）3. Suddenly, two figures whizzed past, which startled him.（心情變化）4. Fearing to fall behind, he felt his heart pounded frantically and his mind went blank.（解釋心情變化和問(wèn)題）5. Just then, he thought of his sweat and his fathers encouraging smile.（問(wèn)題的解決 方法）6. Gradually, his worry gave way to his confid

16、ence and the last 5 minutes saw him dash to the finish line, followed by the end of the race.（銜接句）Mikes jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone Rises too.7. The flowers in his heart were already in bloom.（心情變化）8. However, he knew he deserved the honor of championship.（拓展）9. His parents came up and gave him a high five, grinning from ear to ear.（次要角色的回應(yīng)）10. Hey, why not try your favorite ice cream and celebratesaid his father