2020北京市海淀區(qū)高三英語(yǔ)一模一模應(yīng)用文講評(píng)-final課件

1、命題依據(jù) 英語(yǔ)學(xué)科核心素養(yǎng) 思維品質(zhì)指思維在邏輯性、批判性、創(chuàng)新性等方面所表現(xiàn)的能力和水平。思維品質(zhì)體現(xiàn)英語(yǔ)學(xué)科核心素養(yǎng)的心智特征。思維品質(zhì)的發(fā)展有助于提升學(xué)生分析和解決問(wèn)題的能力，使他們能夠從跨文化視角觀察和認(rèn)識(shí)世界，對(duì)事物做出正確的價(jià)值判斷。命題依據(jù) 必修課程主要內(nèi)容與要求-文化知識(shí) 學(xué)習(xí)并初步運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)介紹中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日和中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化及其內(nèi)涵，具有傳播中國(guó)文化的意識(shí)。 選修一課程主要內(nèi)容與要求-文化知識(shí) 使用英語(yǔ)簡(jiǎn)述中國(guó)文化基本知識(shí)，包括中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)節(jié)日、中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化的表現(xiàn)形式，主動(dòng)傳播和弘揚(yáng)中華優(yōu)秀文化。 選修二課程主要內(nèi)容與要求-文化知識(shí) 運(yùn)用中外典故和有代表性的文化標(biāo)志表達(dá)意義和態(tài)度，有效

2、進(jìn)行文化溝通。審題解題02 假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。你的美國(guó)朋友Jim得知你對(duì)探月感興趣，發(fā)來(lái)郵件和你討論該話題。請(qǐng)你給他回復(fù)郵件，內(nèi)容包括： 1. 月亮在中國(guó)文化中的寓意； 2. 你對(duì)人類(lèi)探月活動(dòng)的看法。 寫(xiě)信人：高三學(xué)生收信人：朋友Jim寫(xiě)作背景：對(duì)方得知你對(duì)探月感興趣，所以想與你探討首尾段交際性表達(dá)：承上啟下、（寫(xiě)信目的 ）+ 總結(jié)上文 、（反問(wèn)對(duì)方） 1. 月亮在中國(guó)文化中的寓意； 月亮代表女性； 月亮代表對(duì)故鄉(xiāng)、家人、朋友的思念； 圓月代表和家人團(tuán)圓；圓滿(mǎn)； 月圓月缺代表人生中的圓滿(mǎn)與缺憾 月亮代表愛(ài)情； 月光代表純潔；寧?kù)o 推薦結(jié)構(gòu)：先總后分，寓意+支撐細(xì)節(jié) 2. 你對(duì)人類(lèi)探

3、月活動(dòng)的看法。 為探索宇宙打下基礎(chǔ)； 推動(dòng)科技發(fā)展，進(jìn)而影響每個(gè)人的日常生活； 探月者有勇氣，有犧牲精神； 體現(xiàn)大國(guó)實(shí)力； 改變?nèi)祟?lèi)對(duì)于地球的看法； 滿(mǎn)足好奇心這一人類(lèi)的本性； （有意義；不容易；好前景） 推薦結(jié)構(gòu)：先總后分；具體看法+支撐細(xì)節(jié)Possible version: I am glad to share with you more details about my passion for moon exploration. It started with what I had been told about the moon as a kid and grew stronger w

4、ith time. As you can guess, there is rich cultural meaning behind the faithful companion of the earth. In Chinese culture, as opposed to the masculinity of the sun, the moon is often compared to a quiet and elegant lady. Also, it reminds people of their family and friends far away. People feel reass

5、ured knowing that they are watching the same moon as if the moon could serve as their messenger. Human beings have never stopped exploring our closest neighbor. I believe it is of great significance. The development of relevant technology facilitates the progress of science in general, which benefit

6、s our everyday life. Whats more, I think moon exploration shows an important human trait, that is, curiosity about the unknown, which is the driving force that has brought our species this far. I hope you find what Ive mentioned above interesting and reasonable. By the way, what do you think of when

7、 you gaze at the moon? Write back and tell me about it!評(píng)分細(xì)則03評(píng)分原則 1本題總分為15分，按4個(gè)檔次給分。 2評(píng)分時(shí)，先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言質(zhì)量初步確定其檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來(lái)衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。 3評(píng)分時(shí)應(yīng)考慮：內(nèi)容是否完整，條理是否清楚，交際是否得體，語(yǔ)言是否準(zhǔn)確。 4拼寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)或書(shū)寫(xiě)影響內(nèi)容表達(dá)時(shí)，應(yīng)視其影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫(xiě)及詞匯用法均可接受。 5詞數(shù)少于50，從總分中減去1分。第一檔（13分15分）完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。 內(nèi)容完整，條理清楚； 交際得體，表達(dá)時(shí)充分考慮到了交際的需求；體現(xiàn)出較強(qiáng)

8、的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫(xiě)作目的。第二檔（9分12分）基本完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。 內(nèi)容、條理和交際等方面基本符合要求； 所用語(yǔ)法和詞匯滿(mǎn)足了任務(wù)的要求； 語(yǔ)法或用詞方面有一些錯(cuò)誤，但不影響理解。基本達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫(xiě)作目的。第三檔（4分8分）未恰當(dāng)完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。 內(nèi)容不完整； 所用詞匯有限，語(yǔ)法或用詞方面的錯(cuò)誤影響了對(duì)所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容的理解。未能清楚地傳達(dá)信息。第四檔（1分3分）未完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。 寫(xiě)了少量相關(guān)信息； 語(yǔ)法或用詞方面錯(cuò)誤較多，嚴(yán)重影響了對(duì)所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容的理解。0分未傳達(dá)任何信息；所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容與要求無(wú)關(guān)。高考應(yīng)用文閱卷標(biāo)準(zhǔn)釋疑 殘篇怎么處理？ 要具體看缺的是什么。缺要點(diǎn)，不及格。缺結(jié)

9、尾交際，不能上一檔。理論上說(shuō)，如果只是最后一句無(wú)關(guān)緊要的話，但是沒(méi)有寫(xiě)完，依然可以上一檔。 但是，不要留下一句沒(méi)寫(xiě)完的話！沒(méi)有寫(xiě)完不如不寫(xiě)！高考應(yīng)用文閱卷標(biāo)準(zhǔn)釋疑 交際性占多少分？ 不要小看交際性！交際不得體，不能上一檔。高考應(yīng)用文閱卷標(biāo)準(zhǔn)釋疑 不符合事實(shí)的等于沒(méi)有寫(xiě)，不倒扣分。（涉及價(jià)值觀等重大問(wèn)題的情況除外）其他評(píng)分中須注意的問(wèn)題要點(diǎn)一中，如只寫(xiě)月亮上有嫦娥，這是傳說(shuō)，不算寓意，但是確實(shí)和中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化，和月亮相關(guān)。最高10分（即最高二檔下）。要點(diǎn)一中，如只提到月亮在中國(guó)的詩(shī)中多次出現(xiàn)，并未說(shuō)具體含義，等于沒(méi)有寫(xiě)出要點(diǎn)一，不及格。要點(diǎn)二中的“看法”，寫(xiě)負(fù)面的等于沒(méi)有寫(xiě)。如果只有負(fù)面看法，或者

10、是負(fù)面看法為主，不及格。負(fù)面占的篇幅基本等于正面看法篇幅的，不能上一檔。要點(diǎn)二中對(duì)探月的“看法”，如果僅僅是對(duì)古代觀察月亮（觀察和遐想）的看法，沒(méi)有提到現(xiàn)代人類(lèi)的探月（科技方面），不能上一檔。注意要點(diǎn)二的“看法”指主要指對(duì)某一個(gè)人或某一件事的想法意見(jiàn)。要注意區(qū)分看法和“事實(shí)”。事實(shí)不是看法，只能作為看法的支撐細(xì)節(jié)。1.means-meaning2.make us dont miss home3.First is the meaning of gathering4.symbolsymbolize5.Hoping to your reply6.I am looking for your reply

11、7. moon 8. A symbol of luckyPossible version:Dear Jim, I am glad to share with you more details about my passion for moon exploration. It started with what I had been told about the moon as a kid and grew stronger with time. As you can guess, there is rich cultural meaning behind the faithful compan

12、ion of the earth. In Chinese culture, as opposed to the masculinity of the sun, the moon is often compared to a quiet and elegant lady. Also, it reminds people of their family and friends far away. People feel reassured knowing that they are watching the same moon as if the moon could serve as their

13、 messenger. Human beings have never stopped exploring our closest neighbor. I believe it is of great significance. The developmentof relevant technology facilitates the progress of science in general, which benefits our everyday life. Whats more, I think moon exploration shows an important human tra

14、it, that is, curiosity about the unknown, which is the driving force that has brought our species this far. I hope you find what Ive mentioned above interesting and reasonable. By the way, what do you think of when you gaze at the moon? Write back and tell me about it!Yours, Li Hua考場(chǎng)作文考場(chǎng)作文 15分分 Im m

15、ore than pleased to discuss about moon exploration with you. And I would love to share my personal perspective. The moon has always been a symbol with many meanings in Chinese culture. As the moon is bright and round in special days every month, the round shape implies the whole family staying toget

16、her . Also, because of the ancient tale that a beauty flew to the moon, the moon is regarded as a tranquil , lonely but mysterious paradise by people. In modern era, the moon becomes more significant for the benefits from its exploration . The knowledge we gain from the process facilitates further i

17、nto universe and eventually make space exploration possible. Whats more, the exploration could impel the science and technology development. The ability to discover the moon has been a reference to a countrys power. Have you seen a photo taken by Chinas satellite, unfolding the veil of the back side

18、 of the moon? I think its really beautiful and meaningful ,so I enclose it below to share with you. I would love to hear your opinions about the moon exploration as well.Please write me soon.9分。基本完成寫(xiě)作任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)單，細(xì)節(jié)有添加字?jǐn)?shù)之嫌，條理性有待提高。語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤較多但不影響理解。9分?；就瓿蓪?xiě)作任務(wù)，但語(yǔ)言質(zhì)量差，有效細(xì)節(jié)不多。10分。要點(diǎn)齊全，有部分語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。要點(diǎn)2看法細(xì)節(jié)過(guò)于抽象，措辭過(guò)于絕對(duì)

19、，欠缺邏輯性，無(wú)觀點(diǎn)內(nèi)涵。11分。要點(diǎn)1重點(diǎn)不突出，無(wú)關(guān)細(xì)節(jié)過(guò)多。有部分語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。11分?；就瓿稍囶}規(guī)定任務(wù)，要點(diǎn)齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，邏輯清晰，細(xì)節(jié)支撐稍顯不足，有個(gè)別語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。12分?；就瓿稍囶}規(guī)定任務(wù)。邏輯完整，要點(diǎn)齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。有部分語(yǔ)法和拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，但不影響理解。內(nèi)容層次性稍欠缺。13分。較好地完成了試卷規(guī)定的寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。要點(diǎn)1的第2個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)欠妥當(dāng)，未明確指出月亮的免征意義。15分 語(yǔ)言流暢地道，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確、豐富，體現(xiàn)出較好的語(yǔ)言功底。邏輯清晰，內(nèi)容詳實(shí)，細(xì)節(jié)豐富，立意高遠(yuǎn)，完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫(xiě)作目的。15分。完全完成了試題規(guī)定的寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。內(nèi)容完整，條理清晰，交際得體，體現(xiàn)了較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言應(yīng)用能力和較高的人文素養(yǎng)，有一定的時(shí)事性。7分。未恰當(dāng)完成試題寫(xiě)作任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤較多，影響理