2022年高考真題深度解析六 新高考1卷完形填空語法填空書面表達(dá)詞匯精講（解析版）

1、專題06新高考1卷 完形填空+語法填空+改錯(cuò)+書面表達(dá)詞匯精講+長難句分析+全篇譯文第三局部語言運(yùn)用（共兩節(jié)，總分值30分）第一節(jié)（共15小題；每題1分,總分值15分）閱讀下面短文，從每題所給的A、B、C、D四個(gè)選項(xiàng)中選出可以填入空白處的最正確選項(xiàng)。My husband, our children and I have had wonderful camping experiences over the past ten years.Some of our 41 are funny, especially from the early years when our children were

2、little. Once, we 42 along Chalk Creek. I was 43 that our 15-month-old boy would fall into the creek （1、溪）.I tied a rope around his waist to keep him near to our spot. That lasted about ten minutes. He was 44, and his crying letthe whole campground know it. So 45 tying him up, I just kept a close eye

3、 on him. It 46- he didntend up in the creek. My three-year-old, however, did.Another time, we rented a boat in Vallecito Lake. The sky was clear when we 47 , but storms move in fast in the mountains, and this one quickly 48 our peaceful morning trip. The 49 picked up and thunder rolled. My husband s

4、topped fishing to 50 the motor. Nothing. He tried again. No 51 We were stuck in the middle of the lake with a dead motor. As we all sat there 52 , a fisherman pulled up, threw us a rope and towed （拖）us back. We were 53 .Now, every year when my husband pulls our camper out of the garage, we are fille

5、d with a sense of 54 ,wondering what camping fun and 55wondering what camping fun and 55A. ideasA. campedA. annoyedA. unhurtA. due toA. workedA. signed upA. arrangedA. windA. findA. luckA. patientlyA. sorryA. reliefA. failureB. jokesC. memoriesD. discoveriesB. droveC. walkedD. cycledB. surprisedC. d

6、isappointedD. worriedB. unfortunateC. uncomfortableD. unafraidB. instead ofC. apart fromD. as forB. happenedC. matteredD. changedB. calmed downC. checked outD. headed offB. interruptedC. completedD. recordedB. noiseC. temperatureD.speedB. hideC. startD. fixB. answerC. wonderD. signalB. tirelesslyC.

7、doubtfullyD. helplesslyB. braveC. safeD. rightB. dutyC. prideD. excitementB. adventureC. performanceD. conflictwe will experience next.主題語境 主題語境 人與自我-生活與學(xué)習(xí)（家庭生活）體裁：記敘文長度230詞【語篇導(dǎo)讀】文章主要講述了作者和家人在旅行過程中經(jīng)歷過的趣事與冒險(xiǎn)，并且期待即將經(jīng)歷的冒險(xiǎn)。【段意梳理】ecological buffer zones 生態(tài)緩沖區(qū)心詞匯significant /sig mfikant/ adj. 有重大思義的；顯者的au

8、thority /o/Oorati/ n,權(quán)力；威權(quán)；當(dāng)權(quán)（地位）reflect /riflekt/ v.顯示,說明,表達(dá)principle/prmsapl/ n.法那么;原貝/；原理ecosystem/i:kausistam/ n. 生態(tài)系統(tǒng)preserve /prizBv/ v.保護(hù)；維護(hù)；保存precious/preJas/ adj.珍奇的；珍稀的generation /enareijn/ n.（統(tǒng)稱）一代人，同代人，同輩人separate /seprat/ adj.單獨(dú)的；獨(dú)立的；分開的population /opjuleijn/ n.（地區(qū)、國家等的）人口，人口數(shù)量3.課標(biāo)派生詞fi

9、nalize/fanalaz/ v.把（計(jì)劃、旅行、工程等）最后定下來，定案 *final/-rd/ adj.最終的;最后的unprotected /.Anpratektid/ adj.未受保護(hù)的*protect /pratekt/ v.保護(hù)；防護(hù) previously/pri:viesh/adi/.先前地 *previous/pri:vias/ adj. 先前的 effectiveness /rfektivnas/n.有效性，效力effective /Ifektiv/ad/.產(chǎn)生預(yù)期結(jié)果的；有效的 inconsistencies /jnkansistansi/ n. 不一致， 不 協(xié)調(diào) *c

10、onsistent /kan *sstant/.一致的；始終如一的 management/maenidjmant/ n. 經(jīng)營； 管理 *manage/maenid3/v.完成（困難的事）；勉力完成 authenticity/（3：0entisati/ n.真實(shí)性；確實(shí)性 *authentic/3：10entik/ adj.真正的;真品的；真跡的 connectivity /onektiviti/n.連接（度）；聯(lián)結(jié)（度） *connect /kanekt/ v.（使）連接；聯(lián)結(jié) eventually/Iventjuali/adv.最后；終于eventual /iventjual/ M/.最后

11、的；最終 significantly/sigmfikantli/ adv.重大意義地;顯著地;明顯地 *significant/sigmfikant/adj.有重大意義的；顯著的4.課標(biāo)外詞匯integrity /n egrati/ n.完整性 asset / aeset/ n. 資產(chǎn) species /spi：Ji：z/ n.物種5.核心詞塊set up建立；豎立be designed to do為做而設(shè)計(jì)in the wild在野外，野生的；在自然環(huán)境下a host of許多,大量 serve as擔(dān)任,充當(dāng)；起的作用be intended to do sth 打算做某事【長難句分析】Th

12、e plan will extend protection to a significant number of areas that were previously unprotected bringing many of the existing protected areas for giant pandas under one authority to increase effectiveness and reduce inconsistencies in management, (para. 1)分析： 本句是主從復(fù)合句 o 主句是 The plan will extend prot

13、ection to a significant number of areas; that were previously unprotected 是定語從句，修飾 areas; bringing many of the existing protected areas for giant pandas under one authority to increase effectiveness and reduce inconsistencies in management 在句中作犬語。譯文：該計(jì)劃將把保護(hù)范圍擴(kuò)大到大量以前未受保護(hù)的地區(qū)，將許多現(xiàn)有的大熊貓保護(hù)區(qū)納入一個(gè)管理機(jī) 構(gòu)，以提高效

14、率，減少管理上的不一致性?！救g文】中國政府最近敲定了一項(xiàng)建立大熊貓國家公園的計(jì)劃。大熊貓國家公園的面積約為黃石國家公園的三倍, 將成為中國首批國家公園之一。該計(jì)劃將把保護(hù)范圍擴(kuò)大到大量以前未受保護(hù)的地區(qū)，將許多現(xiàn)有的大熊 貓保護(hù)區(qū)納入一個(gè)管理機(jī)構(gòu)，以提高效率，減少管理上的不一致性。經(jīng)過三年的試點(diǎn)期，GPNP將于明年正式成立。大熊貓保護(hù)區(qū)(GPNP)的設(shè)計(jì)表達(dá)了 “保護(hù)自然生態(tài)系統(tǒng)的 真實(shí)性和完整性，維護(hù)生物多樣性，保護(hù)生態(tài)緩沖區(qū)，為子孫后代留下珍貴的自然財(cái)富”的指導(dǎo)原那么。GPNP 的主要目標(biāo)是改善大熊貓獨(dú)立種群和家園之間的聯(lián)系，并最終到達(dá)野外種群的理想水平。大熊貓還扮演著保護(hù)傘的角色，為

15、中國西南和西北地區(qū)的許多動(dòng)植物帶來保護(hù)。大熊貓國家公園旨在為生 活在大熊貓范圍內(nèi)的所有物種提供更有力的保護(hù)，并大大改善該地區(qū)的生態(tài)系統(tǒng)健康。第四局部寫作(共兩節(jié)，總分值40分)第一節(jié)(總分值15分)假定你是校廣播站英語節(jié)目Talk and Talk”的負(fù)責(zé)人李華，請給外教Caroline寫郵件邀請她做一次訪談。內(nèi) 容包括：.節(jié)目介紹；.訪談的時(shí)間和話題。注意：.寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右；.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Dear Caroline,Yours sincerely,Li Hua【試題解讀】語篇類型情景提供形式語體寫作詞數(shù)郵件提綱型正式體80詞【思路點(diǎn)撥】本寫作任務(wù)是寫一封郵件，邀

16、請外教Caroline做訪談。寫作要點(diǎn)包含兩點(diǎn)，因此可以將作文主要分兩局部 寫作。時(shí)態(tài)Tenses一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主人稱 Persons第一、二人稱為主段落安排Paragraph ArrangementParal自我介紹+節(jié)目介紹Para 2訪談的時(shí)間和話題+發(fā)出邀請并說明原因Para 3表示感激+希望早日收到回復(fù)注意.節(jié)目一定要引起中學(xué)生的興趣。.訪談的時(shí)間和話題一定要具體。.邀請函一定要注意語言的得體性?！究偡种捣段馁p析】Dear Caroline,表達(dá)寫信目的I am writing to invite you to attend our program “Talk and Talk“ in

17、 our school broadcasting station at 7:00 pm next Friday.節(jié)目話題介紹The program with the theme Culture differences is intended to arouse students interest in different cultures especially western culture about American cuisine.邀請參力口的 目 的As our distinguished foreign language teacher, your opinion will be o

18、f importance. 參力口活動(dòng)的意義In the program, you can communicate with our school students, which not 0111y provides a platform for students to relieve their pressure and add spice to their dull routine, but also inspires their interest in western culture再次邀請Id appreciate it if you could spare your time to

19、join us. An early reply about your 行nal decision will be highly appreciated.Yours,Li Hua 【總分值范文欣賞一】Dear Caroline,On behalf of the school radio station, it is my greatest pleasure that Im writing to invite you to share your ideas on our program “ Talk and Talk”.The Talk and Talk“ radio program is ver

20、y popular among our students, which carries a wide range of topics varying from study, festivals, tourism and so on. More importantly, it provides a wonderful platform to promote exchanges between Chinese and foreign friends. As we have just enjoyed the traditional Chinese festival-Dragon Boat Festi

21、val, I wonder if you could share with us festival experience or your favourite Chinese festival on the school radio at 6pm next Monday. Half an hour would be fine.Your taking my invitation into consideration is What I expect. Looking forward to your early reply!Yours Sincerely,Li Hua Dear Caroline,【

22、總分值范文欣賞二】Dear Caroline,Im Li Hua, one of your students and also the director of the radio station in our school. Im writing to invite you to participate in our talk show “Talk and talk to be broadcast this Friday evening.While our program was initiated last year, it has been gaining increasing popul

23、arity among the students as well as teachers. Not only are some famous experts invited to our program, but also distinguished teachers and students ,offering valuable suggestions and tips on learning English. Our talk features a wide variety of topics, ranging from Reading English Classics, Current

24、affairs both at home and abroad, to a glimpse of western cultures, which definitely contributes to broadening students9 visions and fueling students5 enthusiasm for learning English. Should you be available this Friday Evening, V m wondering if you can share your opinions about great changes in Chin

25、a you have witnessed since you arrived. WeUl be waiting fbr you in the studio of the radio station.Looking forward to your participation!Yours sincerely,Li Hua 【總分值范文欣賞三】Yours sincere Lihua 【總分值范文欣賞四】Dear Caroline,Im Li Hua, a radio announcer in charge of the English Talk Show Talk and Talk”, an Eng

26、lish program broadcast live every Friday evening in our school broadcasting station.Talk and Talkis a popular program for native English speakers to talk about the issues that most teenagers on our campus are interested in.Next Friday evening from 5:30 to 6:00, we will talk about “Double Reduction P

27、olicy”, a hot topic in China nowadays, which means effectively reducing the heavy homework burden and after-school training burden of students in the stage of compulsory education. As we all know, you are not only an outstanding English teacher in our school, but also a fantastic educator who has ex

28、traordinary insight into education policy, so Id like to invite you to talk about the new*Double Reduction Policy in our “Talk and Talk1* program.I would appreciate it if you could spare time to join us and share your opinions onDouble Reduction Policy. Im looking forward to your reply at your earli

29、est convenience.Yours sincerely,Li Hua 【總分值范文欣賞五】Dear Caroline,I am Li Hua, head of the English programme Talk and Talk of our School Broadcasting Station. I would like to invite you to attend an interview for our talk show.First, our programme starts at 4:30 pm every weekday and lasts 20 minutes.lt

30、 mainly features on campus life and latest domestic and international news. Therefore, I would like to invite you to share your excellent teaching experiences with us and your suggestions for English study on next Fridaylam wondering whether it is convenient for you.If not. please let me know so tha

31、t we can make adjustment to suit your schedule.I sincerely hope you can accept my invitation and share your experience. Looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Hua 第二節(jié)（總分值25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different pr

32、imary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route （路線）through thick evergreen forest.I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked

33、 over and asked him why he wasn*t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!I quickly searched the crowd for the schoofs coach and asked him what had happened. nI was afraid that kids from other schools would la

34、ugh at him J he explained uncomfortably. HI gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide/I bit back my frustration （懊/惱）.I knew the coach meant well he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his smal

35、l body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That w

36、as why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer - thats all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teach

37、er at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意：.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答.We sat down next to each other, but David wouldnt look at me.I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.【試題分析】這篇文章是一篇記敘文講述了學(xué)生Dav

38、id因?yàn)槟X部疾病不能像正常孩子一樣走路和跑步。但 是每次校內(nèi)的每一次活動(dòng)，他都盡他的最大努力參與并完成，因此同學(xué)們從來都沒有覺得David和他們有 什么不同。但是在跨地區(qū)的校際比賽中，教練拍心David會(huì)被嘲笑，讓David本人決定是否參賽，David 決定放棄。當(dāng)我得知只要愿意，David是可以參賽的時(shí)候，我做了一個(gè)決定.原文故事情節(jié)簡單清晰, 學(xué)生是有話可說的。一、準(zhǔn)確理解材料，理清人物事件L淺層信息理解首先要審題:(1)體裁:記敘文；(2)人稱：第三人稱(3)主體時(shí)態(tài):一般過去時(shí)；主題語境：人與自我之做人做事the body of the storyWhen： before the bi

39、g cross-country runwhere： thick evergreen forestWho:主要人物：I, David,;次要人物:the coach;other studentsWhat: David decided to give up a running competition at first but stood on the starting line finally Why: The coach was afraid that others would laugh at him. But I didnt think so.How： ?2 .深層信息理解挖掘文章細(xì)節(jié)描寫類

40、型：心理活動(dòng)；動(dòng)作，環(huán)境，外貌性格;對話。表達(dá)詞匯：.主次人物分析根據(jù)原文和續(xù)寫兩段段首語可知，David和“我”是故事的主要人物，二人是師生關(guān)系;教練和其他同學(xué)是次 要人物。根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段段首語可知，在續(xù)寫第一段中，會(huì)出現(xiàn)主要人物David和“我”。在續(xù)寫第二段中，David和“我” 仍然是主要人物，次要人物(教練和其他同學(xué))可能會(huì)出現(xiàn)。.人物情感和性格分析根據(jù)插敘內(nèi)容(David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children.)和 David 的夕卜貌(He was sm

41、all for ten years old.) 動(dòng)作(his small bod rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward)和神態(tài)(His usual big toothy smile was absent today),可以總結(jié)出 David “身殘志堅(jiān)的人物形象。在 續(xù)寫中可以從這一人物特點(diǎn)出發(fā)設(shè)計(jì)David比賽過程中的自信、堅(jiān)持的具體表現(xiàn)。根據(jù)原文中關(guān)于“我”(walked over and asked quickly searched for the coach bit back my frustration, was

42、 proud of his strong determination)和次要人物(the coach meant well, his classmates thought of him as a regular kid)的 描寫，可以總結(jié)出大家對David的關(guān)愛。因此，在根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段應(yīng)該也要出現(xiàn)對David的關(guān)愛場景描寫， 以保證續(xù)寫與文本材料的語調(diào)一致性。.環(huán)境分析根據(jù)原文和續(xù)寫段首語 the day of the big cross-country run, were warming up and walking the route, join the cross-country team

43、, sat down next to each other, the starting line 等詞句可知，故事的沖突和動(dòng)作發(fā)生在孩子 們?nèi)⒓釉揭芭芙?jīng)過的常綠林(thick evergreen forest)中，續(xù)寫故事的“解決”局部也應(yīng)發(fā)生在越野跑線路上。.動(dòng)作分析根據(jù)I looked around and finally spotted David可知作者在人群鐘尋找David,期待看到David的心情；I walked over and asked him why he wasnt with the other children 表達(dá)我關(guān)愛細(xì)心的一面。I quickly search

44、ed the crowd for the schoofs coach and asked him what had happened 表現(xiàn)當(dāng)我知道 David 放棄比賽時(shí)我急切地 想要知道原因的心情。He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run表現(xiàn)出教練在回答我的問題的糾結(jié)、 難受等復(fù)雜的情緒;He had worked so hard for this說明David從來沒有想過要放棄比賽的堅(jiān)忍不拔的性 格;his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet fo

45、rward 通過動(dòng)作描寫說明的 David 走路的姿 勢和困雅，為后文續(xù)寫局部跑步的困難做好鋪墊。.心理活動(dòng)分析根據(jù)What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event說明“我相信David沒有想要放棄比賽的心情his classmates thought of him as a regular kid他的同學(xué)認(rèn)為他是一個(gè)普通的孩子，說明大衛(wèi)可能最終會(huì)堅(jiān)持比賽； That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cro

46、ss-countryteam 通過 孩子們的看法故事想告訴我們續(xù)寫主題-只要你相信自己并盡力去做，沒有人會(huì)認(rèn)為你不尋常。洪亮英語.外貌性格分析根據(jù) He was small for ten years old 和 His usual big toothy smile was absent today 通過外貌描寫展現(xiàn)了 David 身體上比別人弱別小的特點(diǎn)，但是他的笑容說明他一直是一個(gè)樂觀開朗的孩子，為故事續(xù)寫作了鋪墊，同 時(shí)也表示故事出現(xiàn)一個(gè)“沖突”轉(zhuǎn)折。.對話分析I可接弓I 語 I walked over and asked him why he wasnt with the other

47、children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run 講述我詢問和他回答，直接引語“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him； he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”說明 David 放棄比賽的原 因，通過教練的話直接表述，說明連教練自己都不確定他做的是否正確，故事更具說服力，同時(shí)表達(dá)周圍 人對David擔(dān)憂和關(guān)

48、心。 文章的基調(diào):續(xù)寫兩段的內(nèi)容需圍繞越野跑和David如何表達(dá)，由不敢做某事到成功做成某事自我成長 過程，凸顯真善美，積極向上的主題，而這也是我們文章最后的升華。寫作除了要關(guān)注故事情節(jié)的邏輯合 理、突出主題之外，寫作還力求將寫的語言風(fēng)格與所給文本一致。在寫用時(shí)可以通過動(dòng)作，語言，心理等 描寫展示David的堅(jiān)特與樂觀，作者的關(guān)心與鼓勵(lì)等態(tài)度。4文中感悟:克服恐懼，突破自己。跑步馬上就開始了，同學(xué)們或在熱身，或在熟悉路線。但是我卻發(fā)現(xiàn)一向樂觀的David落寞地站在一邊。 詢問以后得知，教練害怕David被別的學(xué)校孩子們嘲笑，讓David(因?yàn)榇竽X疾病，不能像正常孩子一樣走 路、跑步)自己選擇跑

49、或者不跑，最終David選擇了放棄。得知為了這一天David付出了很多心血，我給予 他應(yīng)有的引導(dǎo)和鼓勵(lì)none of.the childrenB thought David unusual Climax A proud of his strongdeterminationRising actionstanding by himself, hesitated and saidFalling action3depressed and not sureBeginningBackground)1 wanning up and walking the routej Inciting accident m

50、ade his decision before the racehard but determined ?“ervous, self-doubted and upsetPara. 1: We sat down next to each other, but D5id、voH/dn；Ending Para. 2:1 matched asDavid movedthe starting line 7Tt嬤Ihe other runners. 二、分析續(xù)寫段首，確定續(xù)寫方向由第一段首句內(nèi)容 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldnt look a

51、t me.（我們緊挨著坐下來，但是 David不敢看我的眼睛。）可知，David知道我對他的期待。設(shè)問如下：Which words or phrases should be focused on in the given sentence? sat down next to, not look at What did T say to encourage David to join the cross- country run? What would Davids reaction to my encouragement? What was David*s decision after the

52、 talk?由第二段首句 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.（我看著 David 和其他孩 子們一起向起跑線走去。）可知，最終David決定參賽。設(shè)問如下：Which words or phrases should be focused on in the given sentence?moved up to the starting line, the other runners What did I see? Did he meet with any difficulty? How

53、 did he deal with what had happened? What was the result of the cross-country run?三、借助文本資源，創(chuàng)設(shè)續(xù)寫情節(jié)根據(jù)六要素和自己的想象，借助文本資源創(chuàng)設(shè)續(xù)寫兩段故事的情節(jié)，創(chuàng)設(shè)畫面要有動(dòng)作、情緒、心理、環(huán) 境、語言、外貌等描寫。Paragraph 1:即由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架：開端我引起David注意（情緒描寫）。故事開展“我”通過分析David很想?yún)⒓釉揭芭軈s害怕被嘲笑的心理,鼓勵(lì)他勇敢面對挑戰(zhàn)、超越自我（使 用動(dòng)作、語言描寫）-David在“我”的鼓勵(lì)下由消極變得積極（情緒描寫）-Da

54、vid下定決心參加越野跑（堅(jiān)定 情緒）。Paragraph 2:由第二段首句構(gòu)思續(xù)寫，注意結(jié)尾要結(jié)合正能量呼應(yīng)文本首尾段主題：高潮David在越野跑中落后或出現(xiàn)意外情況（緊張、擔(dān)憂、心疼）一他人對David的鼓勵(lì)和關(guān)愛。結(jié)局David成功完成越野跑（興奮/自豪）一感司情感升華:David感受到挑戰(zhàn)自我的成就感?！痉段馁p析一】We sat down together on some steps, but David wouldnt look at me.I turned him around and looked him in the eye sincerely. I quietly said,

55、 “David, if youre not running because youre afraid someone is going to laugh, thats not a good enough reason. Are you going to let them get in your way? If you really want to run, David, run! I held my breath as David took this in. Then he looked at the field and said with a fierce but quiet determi

56、nation, Fm gonna run.”I watched as David moved up to the starting line.The starter gun sounded. But he had only gone a few metres before he tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart sank. As I started to shout encouragement, other voices around me took up the call. Come on David, you can do it!”

57、 David picked himself up and started again until he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause. 最后幾句結(jié)尾有三種：第一種：（首選結(jié)尾）That day, David got a special award for his courage. He also got respect of all students. To him, that was worth a whole lot more than an award. （169 words） 第二種：（原文結(jié)尾）Then, wh

58、en Davids coach slapped him on the back and said proudly, “Good job, David!” he caught my eye, flashed me a toothy grin and said, “That was easy!” （169 words） 第三種：That day, David got a special award for his courage. He was shining on the winners podium. David, with so many birth problems, was a hero

59、 to all of us and most importantly, to himself! （175 words）【范文賞析二】【第一段】We sat down next to each other, but David wouldnt look at me.根據(jù)第二段所給提示 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners 推斷第一段結(jié)尾落筆在 David 決心參加比賽。而第 一段提示句孩子還處在原文的“His usual big toothy smile was absent today.”

60、失落中。該段應(yīng)圍繞寫孩子的轉(zhuǎn) 變?？梢灾攸c(diǎn)寫情緒心理的變化導(dǎo)致行為的轉(zhuǎn)變。從失落委屈到堅(jiān)定信心決定比賽，也可以重點(diǎn)寫我對他 的開導(dǎo)勸慰，加上對話。我在本段用的是第一種方法，沒有直接引語的出現(xiàn)。主要細(xì)致描寫了的David動(dòng) 作心理 Instead his head was jerked sideways, his eyes brimming with tears and his lips were tight, 同時(shí)也有作 者我的心理動(dòng)作 A ripple of sympathy surged through me.I forwarded my upper part, gathered him