讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)寫作指導(dǎo) 講義-2023屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項

--A*b*Hdi哄后敵耳際題閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。TheTurningPointIusedtobeacold-heartedindividualwholivedinnothingbutaworldofmyown.Unexpectedly,therewasatimeinmylifewheneverythingchanged.Sunshinesuddenlyarosefrommyheart,openingitsdoortoanewworldwhereIwasthekeyinhelpingthoseinneedofahand.IwasafreshmaninhighschoolwhenIsteppedinourlocalnursinghome,complainingabouthavingtovolunteerthereonweekendsbecausemymomhadaskedmeto.Anyway,whenIpulledintotheparkinglot,Irealizedhowdifferenttheplacewas.Itwasniceandcleanwithelderseverywhere.AsIcheckedinatthefrontdeskformyfirstservicehours,Ireceivedastreamofgreetingsfromthesurroundingpeople.Itfeltasgoodasbreathinginlove,whichfilledmewithsuddenwarmth.Shelby,theladyinchargeofcommunityservice,assignedmetowatchfortheelderinroom111.Myjobwastohelpwithanythingsheneeded.AtfirstIthoughtthiswasthebeginningofanightmare,butitturnedouttobesomethingcompletelydifferent.AfterlisteningtoShelby'sinstructions,Iwalkedtowardmydestinationandknockedsoftlyatthedoor,askingifIcouldcomein.Avoicecamefrominsideansweringyes.Isteppedinsideandintroducedmyself,withanexplanationofwhyIwasthere.Meanwhile,Itookalookaround.Thewhitewallswerealmostcoveredinpictureframes.Icouldtellfromthepicturesshemusthavebeenateacherbefore.WhileIwaslookingaround,sheintroducedherselfasMarieBrown,goingtobe80intwomonths.Herfacemarkedbywrinklesofwisdomcouldreallytellmeherlifestory.“Soyou'vebeenhereforawhile?”Iasked.Foraminuteitwasallsilent,andthensheansweredyeswithaverysadvoice,addingthatshehadnofamily.RealizingIhadaskedthewrongquestion,Ifeltbad,forthefirsttime,forhurtingsomeone'sfeelings,especiallythislonelyelder's.注意：.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Seeingmyembarrassment,Mariesmiledatmeandsignedtometositbyher.Paragraph2:Touchedbyherstories,IdeterminedtogiveMariecare,companyandevensurprises.寫作思路分析本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者曾經(jīng)是一個冷血的人，只活在自己的世界里。有一次作者在媽媽的要求下周末去當(dāng)?shù)仞B(yǎng)老院做志愿者，認(rèn)識了一個名叫MarieBrown的老人，她沒有家人。作者在和Marie相處的過程中，和她建立了友誼，改變了自己。由第一段首句內(nèi)容“看到我的尷尬，Marie對我笑了笑，示意我坐在她旁邊?！ㄒ约坝傻诙问拙鋬?nèi)容“被她的故事感動了，我決定照顧Marie,陪伴她，甚至給她驚喜?！芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡吆蚆arie相處的經(jīng)過，以及Marie講述自己的過去。第二段可描寫作者怎樣陪伴Marie,怎樣給Marie驚喜。Marie的心情，我的感悟。Para1:SeeinqmyMariesmiledatmeandsignedt。metositbyher.Sayingsoftly,"Nevermind,I'vebeenusedtoit,“shepattedmeonthearm,attemptingtocheermeup.LearningIwasinhighschool,Mariewaslostinthoughtandstartedtotalkaboutherolddaysasateacher,fromwhichIcouldsenseherdeeploveforherstudents.Thensheshowedthepictureshangingonthewalls,excitedlysharingherstoriesconcerningherstudentsandproudlyintroducingwhateachofthemwasupto.Para2:Touchedbyherstories,Ideterminedt。qiveMariecare,compoayandever?surprises.I'dcallonMarie,chattingwithheranddoingeverythingIcouldforher.Onher80thbirthday,withthehelpofShelbyandotherelders,Iheldagrandpartyandmanagedtoinvitesomeofherstudentstocome.WhenIaccompaniedMarieintotheparty,allpresentrose,clappingsmilinglyandwishingherhappybirthday.Thebigsurprisebroughtexcitedtearstohereyes,herwrinkledfaceglowingwithhappiness.Bathedintheheart-warmingatmosphere,Ifeltsodelightedtohavelitupanoldteacher/slifeandmadeadifferencetoher.讀后續(xù)寫素材積累與拓展一一極限運(yùn)動Skiing通過課程中所學(xué)的續(xù)寫技能請用4?5句話續(xù)寫一個微場景描寫“我〃在高山滑雪時意外摔倒的場面。①Ablastofadrenaline（N.腎上腺素）charged（V.充電）throughoutmybodyasIexperiencedtheinitialdrop,（as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句）翻譯：在我經(jīng)歷第一個下落時，我的腎上腺素瞬間貫穿了我身體每一個角落.（整體句式結(jié)構(gòu)由as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句，這里用到了一個醫(yī)學(xué)類詞匯，一般Ph川是很少在課堂上讓學(xué)生使用醫(yī)學(xué)類詞匯的，因?yàn)橐愿呖嫉那闆r而言，第一必要性不大，其二，醫(yī)學(xué)類詞匯基本出現(xiàn)都是標(biāo)注詞.但這個詞真的很好用，可以說背一個它，省了很多事.因?yàn)槔m(xù)寫中基本情感都是起伏較大的，興奮激動、驚嚇恐慌等，都可以用到："Ablastofadrenalinechargedthroughoutmybody"；所以推薦給你）②Afterovercompensating（V.過度補(bǔ)償）fromanearlydisastrous（Adj.糟糕的）slip（N.滑倒），1lostmybalance,mykneesbucklinghelplessly.（獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）翻譯：在差點(diǎn)摔倒之后，我失去了平衡感，我的膝蓋開始不由自主地發(fā)軟.③Mylefthandplowed（V.耕地；犁地----深深扎進(jìn)）forcefullyintoice,cracking（V.僻啪作響）painfullyatthewrist.（分詞做狀語）翻譯：我的左手狠狠地扎進(jìn)了雪地里，手腕因?yàn)閯×覜_撞發(fā)出了響亮的摩擦聲.（進(jìn)一步對于動作進(jìn)行刻畫，通過“plow”一詞，形象生動地體現(xiàn)出手與雪之間的摩擦和狀態(tài)、疊加副詞"forcefully”的修飾體現(xiàn)摔倒的不可控和嚴(yán)重、而動詞“cracked”是一個擬聲詞，該詞的使用讓人物在整體動作刻畫上，擁有了視覺和聲感的雙重沖擊，更好體現(xiàn)出了〃摔倒〃的程度和人物狀態(tài).）④Foraneternityof30seconds,mybodysomersaulteddownward,mogulsoficetoyingwithmyheadandfurtheragonizing（V折磨）mybrokenwrist.（獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)一一構(gòu)建自身狀態(tài)、疊加擬人修辭）（MForaneternityof30seconds*'是一種夸張的體現(xiàn)，通過"eternity無窮無盡的〃一詞，體現(xiàn)出30秒過程的痛苦與煎熬.將片刻瞬時，通過自身內(nèi)心感受放大至永恒的程度.而在續(xù)寫中，適當(dāng)?shù)胤懦鰰r間狀語，也能更好地體現(xiàn)故事清晰結(jié)構(gòu)性；此外本句中通過""somersault翻筋斗”"toywith玩弄〃“agonize掙扎;折磨〃一系列得當(dāng)?shù)膭釉~選取，進(jìn)一步體現(xiàn)當(dāng)下的險境及情況的糟糕例如toy