(新高考)高考英語二輪專題讀后續(xù)寫精讀精煉（十五）（含答案解析）

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫精讀精煉（十五）一：原文重現(xiàn)AsuddencallcameintoJimmyGilleece’sbarthispastMarch.Anewlymarriedwomanwhohadspenttheafternoonatthedivebeachbarcouldn’tfindherwallet.Shedidn’tcareaboutherID,creditcards,or$150incash,butherweddingringwasjustinside.21·世紀*教育網(wǎng)Gilleece,42,didn’tliketheideathatatheftcouldhavehappenedathisplace,sohespenthourssearching16differentcameras,watchingthewoman’severystepuntilshewenttositonabenchoutsideandleftwhenherridearrived.Withinminutes,ayoungmaninahoodie(連帽衫)approachedthebench,putsomethinginhispocket,andwalkedoff.Gilleecepostedacliponthebar’sFacebookpage.“Ididn’twanttocriticizehim,”hesaid.“Ijustaskedifanybodyknewwhotheguywas.”Withinhours,Gilleecegotatextmessagefrom17-year-oldRiversPrather,whoadmittedtakingthewalletandsaidhe’ddoneitbecausehehadn’teatenintwodays.Thinkingtheringwasfake,hethrewthewalletintotheoceanandtookthemoneytobuyasandwich.【出處：21教育名師】Gilleece,unsurewhetherhebelievedPrather,toldtheteenagertomeethimatthedocks(碼頭).There,theygottotalking,andPrathersaidthathewasn’tgettingalongwithhisfamilyandhadbeenlivinginthewoodsforaweek.Gilleece,afatheroftwo,tookstockof(審視)Prather―hissmallbody,hisflushing(漲得通紅的)cheeks一andsawhimforwhathewas:moreofakidthanacriminal.【版權(quán)所有：21教育】However,thepolicewerealreadyonthecaseandbecauseofthemissingring,Prathercouldbefacingseverecharges.Gilleecedecidedtohelp.HeemployedtwolocaldiverstosearchthewaterswherePratherhadthrownthewallet.Meanwhile,thepolicewantedGilleecetobringtheteendowntothestation.Instead,Gilleececalledthepoliceandtoldthem,“He’sgoingtobeatthedockswithmetomorrow.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150詞左右；2.請按如下格式在相應位置作答。Paragraph1:Acrowdhadgatheredtowatchthetwodiverssearchinthestrongcurrent.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Butitwasn’toverforGilleece._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________二：文本解析題型分析：這篇讀后續(xù)寫屬于人性光芒類的讀后續(xù)寫，故事里詞匯和人物關(guān)系稍有難度，續(xù)寫部分是有關(guān)Gilleece如何雇人將戒指找到并且?guī)瓦@個青春期少年解圍，對尚無多少人生經(jīng)歷的學生來說，難度不小。2-1-c-n-j-y一、準確理解材料，理清人物事件1.淺層信息理解首先審題：體裁是記敘文；人稱是第一、三人稱；主體時態(tài)是一般過去時；記敘文“六要素”who（Gilleece，Anewlymarriedwoman,17-year-oldRiversPrather，thepolice）、when（tomorrow）、where（atthebeach）、what（Gilleecetriedtohelpthewomanfindherweddingringwhichwasstolenandthrownintotheocean.）、why（Gilleecedidn’tliketheideathatatheftcouldhavehappenedathisplace.）2.整合本篇的情節(jié)和情感線索：海灘酒吧的老板Gilleece接到顧客的投訴，一位女士的錢包被偷，急于尋回放在錢包里的訂婚戒指。Gilleece查了酒吧的監(jiān)控，找到了線索，并將視頻片段傳到網(wǎng)上，想通過網(wǎng)絡的力量找到拿走錢包的人。幾小時后，一個叫RiversPrather的17歲少年主動聯(lián)系了他。兩人見面后，Prather講述了拿走錢包的緣由，作為兩個孩子的父親，Gilleece決定不追究其責任。但警察正在跟蹤此案，Prather有可能面臨嚴重的指控。Gilleece決定幫助這個少年，他請了兩個潛水員去Prather扔錢包的地方搜尋。同時，警察要求Gilleece將Prather帶去警察局。但是，Gilleece卻告訴他們Gilleece第二天會和他一起去碼頭。二、分析續(xù)寫段首，確定續(xù)寫方向①由第一段首句內(nèi)容Acrowdhadgatheredtowatchthetwodiverssearchinthestrongcurrent（人們早已聚集過來看著兩個潛水員在大浪中搜尋。）可知，第一段可描寫潛水員搜尋錢包的過程。設問如下：21教育名師原創(chuàng)作品1.Howdidthediverssearchforthewallet?2.WhatdidGilleece,Pratherandthepolicedo?3.Howdideachofthemfeel?4.Didtheyfoundthewallet?根據(jù)第二段首句Butitwasn’toverforGilleece.（但是這件事情對Gilleece來說還沒有結(jié)束。）雖然提示語簡短，但是Gilleece在前文中所表現(xiàn)出的商量和想要幫助這個少年的決心，讓學生不難猜出，他想要繼續(xù)幫助Prather。因為Gilleece和Prather是這個故事的主角，不能突然消失。設問如下：21·cn·jy·com5.Whatdidhewanttodo?6.WhathappenedtoPrather?7.Whatdoesthestoryintendtotellreaders?三、借助文本資源，創(chuàng)設續(xù)寫情節(jié)根據(jù)六要素和自己的想象，借助文本資源，創(chuàng)設續(xù)寫兩段故事的情節(jié)。[開端]人們圍觀潛水員找錢包。[故事發(fā)展]找的過程——Gilleece焦急——警察開始盤問。[高潮]錢包被找到——Gilleece想要繼續(xù)幫助Prather——Prather不再流離失所。[結(jié)局]Prather痛改前非——感悟。三：續(xù)寫單句訓練一群人聚集在一起，觀看這兩名潛水員在湍急的水流中搜尋。一個多小時過去了，沒有任何戒指的跡象。Gilleece開始擔心，尤其是當警察開始審問Prather，并試圖讓他承認保留了戒指時。每過一分鐘，他都增加了他逮捕那個年輕人的機會。然后，一個潛水員跳了出來。他手里拿著錢包，里面是戒指。人群中爆發(fā)出了歡呼聲。就連偵探也很高興。但吉里斯的一切還沒有結(jié)束。他一直為Prather睡在寒冷的樹林里而感到煩惱。Gilleece知道他的家足夠大，可以給Prather一個地方住一段時間。他告訴這個少年，他可以和家人呆在一起，直到那個男孩再次站起來。他還給了這個孩子一份在這個酒吧工作的工作?！按蠖鄶?shù)人都會把這段錄像（監(jiān)控錄像）交給警方，但他選擇相信我并幫助我。我會像他預期的那樣，努力努力成為一個好人，”Prather在一次采訪中說。四：佳作展現(xiàn)Acrowdhadgatheredtowatchthetwodiverssearchinthestrongcurrent.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Butitwasn’toverforGilleece._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________五：課后練筆IwasstillathiefwhenImetAnil.Andthoughonly15,Iwasanexperiencedandfairlysuccessfulhand.21教育網(wǎng)Anilwasabout25atall,thinfellowandhelookedeasy-going,kindandsimpleenoughformypurpose.ImightbeabletogetintohisIgavehimmymostappealingsmile.“Iwanttoworkforyou.”Isaid.“ButIcan’tpayyou."PerhapsIhadmisjudgedtheman.Iasked,“Canyoufeedme?www-2-1-cnjy-com“Canyoucook?"“Icancook.”Ilied.“Ifyoucancook,thenIcanfeedyou.”ThemealIcookedthatnightmusthavebeenterriblebecauseAnilgaveittoastraydogandtoldmetobeoff.ButIjusthungaroundsmilinginmymostappealingway,andhecouldn’thelplaughing.2·1·c·n·j·yLaterhepattedmeontheheadandsaidnevermind,he’dteachmetocook.Healsotaughtmetowritemynameandsaidhewouldsoonteachmetowritewholesentencesandtoaddnumbers.Iwasgrateful.IknewthatonceIcouldwritelikeaneducatedmantherewouldbenolimittowhatIcouldachieve.21*cnjy*comOneeveninghecamehomewithasmallbundleofnotes,sayinghehadjustsoldabooktoapublisher.Atnight,Isawhimputthemoneyunderthemattress(床墊).【來源：21cnj*y.co*m】It’stimeIdidsomerealwork,Itoldmyself.Afterall,hedoesn’tevenpayme.Anilwasasleep.Icreptuptothebed.Anilwassleepingpeacefully.Myhandslidunderthemattress,searchingforthenotes.WhenIfoundthem,Idrewthemoutwithoutasound.Anilsighedinhissleepandturnedonhisside,towardsme.Iwasfrightenedandquicklycrawledoutoftheroom.21*cnjy*comIbegantorun,holdingthenotesbythestringofmypajamas(睡衣).ButIsloweddownandsatdownintheshelteroftheclocktower.IshouldgobacktoAnil,Itoldmyself,ifonlytolearntoreadandwrite.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150詞左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Ihurriedbacktotheroomfeelingverynervous.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IawokelatenextmorningtofindthatAnilhadalreadymadethetea.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案三：單句訓練Acrowdhadgatheredtowatchthetwodiverssearchinthestrongcurrent.Morethananhourpassed,withnosignofthering.21世紀教育網(wǎng)版權(quán)所有Gilleecegrewworried,especiallywhenthepolicebeganquestioningPratherandtryingtogethimtoadmittokeepingthering.【來源：21·世紀·教育·網(wǎng)】Eachpassingminuteincreasedthechancesthathewouldarresttheyoungman.Thenadiverpoppedup.Inhishandwasthewallet,andinsidewasthering.Cheerseruptedfromthecrowd.Eventhedetectivewashappy.Butitwasn’toverforGilleece.He’dbeentroubledaboutPrathersleepinginthecoldwoods.GilleeceknewhishomewasbigenoughtogivePratheraplacetoliveforawhile.Hetoldtheteenhecouldstaywithhisfamilyuntiltheboygotonhisfeetagain.Healsogavethekidajobathisbar.“Mostpeoplewouldhavegiventhefootage(監(jiān)控錄像)topolice,buthechosetobelievemeandhelpme.I’llworkhardtobecomeagoodguy,justasheexpected,”Prathersaidinaninterview.四：佳作展現(xiàn)（一）Acrowdhadgatheredtowatchthetwodiverssearchinthestrongcurrent.Morethananhourpassed,withnosignofthering.Gilleecegrewworried,especiallywhenthepolicebeganquestioningPratherandtryingtogethimtoadmittokeepingthering.Eachpassingminuteincreasedthechancesthathewouldarresttheyoungman.Thenadiverpoppedup.Inhishandwasthewallet,andinsidewasthering.Cheerseruptedfromthecrowd.Eventhedetectivewashappy.Butitwasn’toverforGilleece.He’dbeentroubledaboutPrathersleepinginthecoldwoods.Gilleeceknewhishomewasbigenough