2022年新高考1、2卷真題讀后續(xù)寫David's run課件 高考英語作文備考

讀后續(xù)寫身殘志堅(jiān)的男孩題型解讀01

讀后續(xù)寫:

提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的材料，要求考生依據(jù)材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語及所標(biāo)關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。（滿分25分）(Read＋Write)寫作思路&試題分析02①Reading （讀取信息）②Predicting（預(yù)測發(fā)展）③Writing(續(xù)寫故事）④Polishing（潤色定稿）

寫作思路與步驟Step①Reading （讀取信息）Basicinformation（基本信息）:when;where;what;why;how;whosetting(when,where)plot（what,how,why)characters(who)mainidea&

writingpurpose1.Readforbasicinformation（5w+1h）whowhenwhereMainideaI----aspecialeducationteacherofDavid’sschoolDavid----aten-year-oldboywithabraindiseasethedayofthebigcross-countryruntheracespot(aplacewiththickevergreenforest)Onthedayofthebigcross-countryrun,IsawDavidstanding

attheracespotandfoundoutthereasonswhyhe

totakepartintherace.alonehesitatedClues&details1.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.2.Aftermakingsure...,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.3.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.4.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.比賽結(jié)束時(shí)，受到在場師生的鼓勵(lì)和欽佩甚至尊敬，David很可能有這個(gè)表情。

可以用來描述David賽跑時(shí)的樣子----動作描述

兩個(gè)always的部分可以用來描述David在比賽時(shí)的結(jié)果：他不可能跑贏別人，但仍堅(jiān)持跑完全程。這可能是有些同學(xué)容易忽視的地方。這是David最令人敬佩的品質(zhì)，也應(yīng)該是“我”說服他參賽的關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)。②Predicting（預(yù)測發(fā)展）第一段（逆向思維）：結(jié)合原文，由第一段首句和第二段首句推出故事情節(jié)（動作、情感、對話等細(xì)節(jié)）第二段:結(jié)合上文，根據(jù)第二段首句展開內(nèi)容，列出要點(diǎn)(動作、情感、對話等細(xì)節(jié)）,最后想好一個(gè)升華句：體現(xiàn)故事圓滿結(jié)局的句子或故事給我們啟示的句子首句線索Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Why?Whatwashedoingthen?Howwashefeelingthen?WhatdidIdecidetodo?WhatandhowdidIsaytohimthen,makinghimdeterminedtorun?----ImanagedtopersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.----ThoughDavidfinishedtherunlongaftertheotherchildren,hewasadmiredandrespectedbyotherkids.Howdidheperformintherace?WhatdidIfeelwhenseeinghimperformthatway?Whatwastheotherkids’responsetohisperformance?③Writing(續(xù)寫故事）細(xì)節(jié):動作，情感（感受），對話，表情，獨(dú)白，外貌，環(huán)境…過渡:then,but,therefore,however,unfortunately,obviously,infact,tohisjoy,nextday,…豐富的句子結(jié)構(gòu):with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu),非謂語動詞“V-ing/-ed/todo”做狀語，never,so等引導(dǎo)的倒裝句,三大從句，It形式主語句，虛擬語氣….

with+賓語+名詞形容詞副詞介詞短語v-ingv-edtodo主動、進(jìn)行被動、完成將要發(fā)生注：With結(jié)構(gòu)不是句子，而是在句中作定語或狀語，因此也不會有動詞的謂語形式。狀態(tài)讀后續(xù)寫中的with結(jié)構(gòu)用法with+賓語+賓語補(bǔ)足語with+sth+doing/done/todo

他靜靜地站著，眼淚流下他的臉頰

讀后續(xù)寫中的常用with結(jié)構(gòu)用法withone’seyesfullof+tearsor情感名詞Withhiseyesfullofterror，hestoppedandturnedtome.他停下來轉(zhuǎn)向我，眼里滿是恐懼。Hestoodsilentlywithtearsrolling/sliding/streamingdownhischeeks.4.她臉上露出笑容，雙眸閃爍著喜悅的光芒。(shine/spark)_______________________________________________Asmilelituphisfacewithhiseyesshining/sparkingwithgreatjoy.2.她聲音顫抖tremble，哽咽著。_______________________________________Shechockedwithhervoicetrembling.Hesighedwithdisappointment.1.他失望的嘆了嘆氣。_______________________________________3.他眼中滿是感激的淚水，不停地說：“非常感謝！”________________________________________________Withtearsofgratitudewellingupinhiseyes,hekeptsaying,“Thankyousomuch!”④Polishing（潤色定稿）無語法拼寫錯(cuò)誤,詞匯、句型的打磨升級。情感連貫,符合邏輯,銜接自然,與原文融洽度高logical+vivid+coherent+correct范文賞析03Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxiety,Ifeltsad,decidingtotalksomethingwithhim.TurningtoDavid,Ismiled,“David,Look,whatawonderfulevent!”“Yeah!”Davidsmiledweakly,bowinghishead低頭.Pattingonhisshoulder,Isaidinasoftvoice,“Iheardyouhadworkedsohardforthisevent.HowIadmireyourstrongdetermination.Whynotgiveitatry?”“Iamafraidkidsfromotherschoolswilllaughatme.Ithinkwhatthecoachsaidisright.”murmured

David,withglum憂郁的looksonhisface.“ButDavid,whatcountsmostistoparticipatetothebestofyourabilityinwhateverwe’redoing.Doyouagree?”Afteratemporaryhesitation,Davidnoddedinagreement,finallydecidingtojoininthecross-countryteam.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Withablast響聲ofthegun,Davidtriedhisbesttoshootfromthestartline,buthefailed.Painfulandabitembarrassedashewas,hestilldragged拖，拽hisfeettokeepmovingforward.Thesunwasbeatingdown太陽暴曬.Afterwhatseemedyears,David,rockinghissmallbody,eventuallyfinishedhisrunasthelastone.Whenapproachingthefinishline,heburstintoabigtoothysmileandwavedtomewithexcitement,crying“Imadeit!Imadeit!”Allthekidsinc