高中英語瓶中求救Rescue in a Bottle讀后續(xù)寫公開課課件

RescueinaBottle讀后續(xù)寫

RescueinaBottle①CurtisWhitsonhadrafteddowntheArroyoSeco,ariverincentralCalifornia,severaltimesbefore.②Thisyear,CurtisWhitsonknewthewater-fallwascoming.Hefiguredhewouldgetoutofhisraftintotheshallowwater,getdowntherocksalongropesoneithersideofthefalls,andcontinueonhisway,ashehadonaprevioustrip.③Butthisyearwasdifferent.Heavysnowandspringrainshadturnedtheusuallymanageablefallsintosomethingfierce.Andthisyear,insteadofhisfriends,Whitson’scompanionswerehisgirlfriend,KrystalRamirez,andhis13-year-oldson,Hunter.Asthethreeofthemapproachedthefallslateintheafternoonofthethirddayoftheircampingtrip,Whitsoncouldtellfromtheincreasingroarofwaterinthenarrowingcanyon(峽谷)thattheywereinserioustrouble.Therewasnowaythey’dbeabletogetdowntherocksasplanned.④“Thewaterwasjustroaringthroughtherewithtremendousforce,”recallsWhitson,45.

⑤Theyhadnosmartphoneservice,andtheyhadn’tseenasinglepersoninthepastthreedays.AndWhitsonknewthatthey’dbesharingthegroundtherewithrattlesnakesandmountainlions.

⑥Ashewasthinkingwhattodo,Whitsonhitonabitofluck---heheardvoicescomingfromtheothersideofthefalls.Heyelled,butthesoundoftherushingwaterdrownedhimout.

⑦“Wehavetogetthesepeopleamessage,”Whitsonthought.

⑧Hegrabbedastickandpulledouthispocketknifetocarve“Help”init.Thenhetiedaropetoitsothepeoplewouldknowitwasn’tjustanystick.Hetriedthrowingitoverthefalls,butitfloatedawayinthewrongdirection.⑨“We’vegottodosomething!”Whitsonyelledtohisson.“Havewegotanythingelse?”⑩Thenhespottedhiswaterbottle.Whitsongrabbeditandcarved“Help!”onit.Ramirezalsoremindedhimthathehadapenandpaperinhisbackpack.?Whitsonknewitwasaslimhope.Buthewrote“6-1519:00Wearestuckhere@thewaterfall.Gethelpplease”andpushedthenoteintothebottle.Thistime,histhrowoverthewaterfallwasperfect.?“Allright,that’sallwecando,”WhitsontoldHunter.讀原文1：時間when,地點(diǎn)where,人物who,事件what讀原文2：plotmountainsettingrisingactionclimaxfallingactionconclusion

Whitson‘soriginalplanforthisyear'sraftingnowaytogetdowntherockscompanionsinneedofcarenosmartphoneservicenotasinglepersoninsightPara3-5:Para1-2:Para6-12:yelled---butdrownedgrabbedastick-carved”help”-tiedarope-triedthrowing-butfloatedawayinthewrongdirectiongrabbedabottle-carved“help”-wrote&pushedanote-perfectthrow(willitwork?)Continuationpara.1Continuationpara.2fierceconditionthreeattemptswaitingforrescueasuccessfulrescue點(diǎn)題：It'sthemessageinthebottlethathelpedrescuethem.(failed)(failed)Thebottleworked.Paragraph1:

Ittook30minutestogetbackupstreamtothebeachwherethey'dhadlunch.

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Thenextmorning,thehelicopterreturned.

讀首句1：Whathappenedthenightbefore?夜幕降臨Asthenightfell,Thenightfell.Thenightfalling,Tips:如何表達(dá)時間夜深了Asthenightworeon,半夜atmidnight,午夜過后aftermidnight形容時間快：inaflash一剎那intheblinkofaneye轉(zhuǎn)眼間形容時間慢：afterwhatseemedlikehours,afterwhatseemedlikeaneternity,Timefeelingsbeforethehelicoptercame

whenthehelicoptercameafterthehelicopterleftwhatdidtheydo?madeafire;spelledoutSOSinrocks;

(waitedforrescue;fellasleep)waved;yelled;flashedheadlamp;fellasleephopeful...excited...disappointed...relievedThehelicoptercame.Theyweren'tfound.whydidthehelicopterleave?Theywerefoundbutitwashardforthehelicoptertoland.思考：1.夜晚野外怎么求救？

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Thenextmorning,thehelicopterreturned.

讀首句2：rescuers怎么救出他們?(動作描寫)

點(diǎn)題：是messageinthebottle救了他們Timehelicopterrescuersthetriowhenthehelicopterreturned/whenthehelicopterspottedthemwhilechatting可能的情節(jié):(wavedtheyellowsweater;smoke...)announced;

loweredarescuer;

liftedthetrioonebyone;...gotsaved點(diǎn)題：It'sthemessageinthebottlethathelpedrescuethem.Ittook30minutestogetbackupstreamtothebeachwherethey’dhadlunch.Thenightfalling,theyputupatentandwolfeddownasimplifieddinner.Suddenly,alow,buzzingsoundappearing,Whistonraisedhishead,glancedaroundandspottedahelicopterinthedistance.Bloodrushingtohisfaceandheartpalpitatingfiercely,heleapttohisfeetandyelledatthetopofhisvoice.However,thesoundofthehelicopterdrownedhimout.Thehelicopterhoveredforawhileandfadedinthesuffocatingdarkness.Atideofexhaustionanddespairwashedoverhim.SensingthedesperategleaminHunter’seyes,Whistonbentovertogivehimatightembrace,comfortingthattheywouldbesafe.

Thenextmorning,thehelicopterreturned.Atthesightoftheblackdotonthehorizon,Whistonmadeasmokyfire.Theheavysmokecurlingupwardslowlyintothesky,heclaspedhishandstightly,prayinginthedepthofhisheartthatitwouldwork.Theblackdotgrewlargerandlargeragainsttheorangesky,sowastheirhopeofbeingrescued.Afterwhatseemedlikecenturies,thehelicopterfinallycametoahaltoverthemandloweredarescuer.Bubblingwithoverwhelmingectasy,Huntercouldn'thelpbouncingupsanddowns.Theyeventuallymadeittoescapefromthenightmare.Duringtheirpleasantchat,theylearneditwasexactlythemessageinthebottlethatsavedthem.鑒賞：_________________________________________________________不足：___________________________________________________________習(xí)作賞析：范文：Ittook30minutestogetbackupstreamtothebeachwherethey'dhadlunch.Withnoreasonableexpectationthattheirmessageinthebottlewouldfinditswaytoanyone,theypreparedtospendasafenightthere.Astheeveningworeon,theydecidedtheyprobablyweren'tgoingtogetrescuedthatnight,sotheypulledouttheirsleepingbags.Beforeturningin,Ramkrezaddedwoodtothefiretokeepthemountainlionsaway.However,justaftermidnight,theyheardahelicopterhoveringabovethem.Wildwithjoy,Whitson,Ramirez,andHunterwavedandyelledlikecrazy.Unfortunately,