如何潤色英語作文

作文的核心任務(wù)：在15秒內(nèi)取悅閱卷老師優(yōu)秀作文應(yīng)具備的六個基本特征：1、層次不亂2、句式多變3、亮點若干4、巧妙串聯(lián)5、蠢錯不犯6、整潔卷面作文上光第一招：肅清愚蠢語言錯誤13種常見的語言錯誤（1）主謂不一致

FatherandIamgoingtovisither.Myuncleoftengotothecinemahimself.(2)時態(tài)、語態(tài)混用

Themovieissogoodthatweallenjoyeditverymuch.Theoldmanknockeddownbythecarandinjuredbadly.

(3)句子成分殘缺

Butthecarwhichpaintedreddidn’tstop.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreetfast.

(4)習(xí)慣搭配亂用

IverylikethenovelThenwesetoffdigging,plantingandwatering.

(5)漢式英語

Thecarisyellowcolor.Nextmonthhaveasportsmeeting.

(6)名詞單、復(fù)數(shù)不分

HewillgiveusatalkonAmericanfilm.Heisoneofthebestplayerinourschool.

(7)贅詞現(xiàn)象嚴重

Atlast,thelostboyreturnedback.Ononeday,hewenttothecinema.

(8)用詞不當

Hedoesn’twanttosaysomethingaboutthismatter.Ihopeyoutohelpthegirlwithherhomework.

(9)拼寫和詞形變化錯誤

Thecarhittedtheoldmananddrivedaway.Onhiswaytoschool,hesewalittlegirl.

(10)前后人稱不一致

Swimmingandfootballarehisfavoritesports,andhelikesitallhislife.Thelittlegirlusuallygoestoschoolat7inthemorning,buttodayhewaslateforschool.(11)分詞作狀語、邏輯主語不一致Havingheardthenews,herheartbeatfasterandfaster.Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.(12)動詞原形作主語Walkisgoodforyouhealth.Drinkwinesisharmful.(13)一個簡單句出現(xiàn)兩個謂語Therewasnobus,wehadtowalkhome.Therearealotofstudentslikethismovie.LastsummerIgotoAmericaandstudiedatalanguageschool.Ihadmanywonderfulexperience,butIalsohadasadone.Oneday,theschoolheldparty,whereIinvitedtotalkaboutTianjin.AfterthattheyaskedmealotofthingsaboutChina.ButIcouldn’texplainthemwithEnglishclearly.Ifeltsadly.Ilearntalessonfromthisexperience.IhavealreadystudiedEnglishforeightyears,Ican’tuseitverygood.ImustworkhardtoimprovemyspokenEnglishsothatIwillnotbeabletocommunicatefreelywithforeigners.IhopeIcanbeabridgebetweenChinaandotherscountriesinthefuture.∧∧∧TheStoryaboutGrowthismyfavoriteAmericanTVplaybecauseitisveryinterested.Theplay76.

tellshumorousstoriesthathappenintheGreen’s77.

family.Withsuchstoriesitmakepeoplethink78.

aboutlife,butthereforeattractstheaudience.Itis79.

alsoawindowwhichwecanlearnaboutAmerican80.

society.Andthereweremanymeaningfulthingsthat81.

areworththinkof,suchastherelationshipbetween82.

parentsandchildreninalotofAmericanfamily.It83.

isquitedifferentfromthoseinChina.Theplayis84.

verypopular.We’dbetternottomissthechance85.

toenjoyit.s∧作文上光第二招：讓句式多變起來1.長短句的變化Ifyouworkhard,you’llmakegreatprogress.Workhardandyou’llmakegreatprogress.Thathehadwonthegamedelightedhisparents.Hiswinningthegamedelightedhisparents.Afterhehaddonehishomework,hebegantoplaycomputergames.Havingdonehishomework,hebegantoplay…BecauseIdidn’tknowwhattodonext,Iwanttoaskyouforadvice.Notknowingwhattodonext,…ThoughhehaslivedinCanadaforthreeyears,hestillcannotspeakEnglishwell.HavinglivedinCanadaforthreeyears,he…2.主動式被動式的交替使用Peoplebelievethatitwillbepossibleformantoliveonanotherplanetinthefuture.Itisbelievedthatitwon’tbeimpossibleformanto…3.肯定式與否定式的交替使用Ishallgothereifitdoesn’train.Ishallgothereunlessitrains.Iwilltrymybestnottoletthemdown.Iwilltrymybesttoliveuptotheirexpectations.Hedidn’tpasstheexam.Hefailedtheexam.4.插入行成分的靈活位置利用However,theyrefusedit.Theyrefusedit,though.They,however,didn’tacceptit.5.正常語序與倒裝語序的交替使用Wecanachieveourgoalinthisway.Onlyinthiswaycanweachieveourgoal.

Ididn’trealizethefactuntilIgotback.NotuntilIgotbackdidIrealizethefact.

作文上光第三招：適當使用復(fù)雜句主從復(fù)合句虛擬語氣倒裝句強調(diào)句非謂語動詞結(jié)構(gòu)并列句作文上光第四招：巧妙使用連接成分1.表示時間順序的：

atthesametime,afterward,allofasudden,atlast,finallythen.2.表示空間順序的：

above,around,beyond,ontheleft,oppositeto,inthedistance,nextto3.表示分析：

asaresult,atlast,finally,furthermore,therefore,moreover,forinstance,Onthecontrary,inaddition,insummary,inanutshell,ontheotherhand,inthiscase.4.表示比較的：

Besides,inthesameway,infactequally,similarly,inadditionto5.表示對比的：

Differentfrom,onthecontrary,inspiteof,some…others,nevertheless.Notonly…butalso,theformer….thelatter,ontheonehand…ontheotherhand.6.表示選擇的：

either…or,neither…nor,ratherthan,insteadof,not…but.7.表示因果的：

therefore,asaresultof,nowthat,aslongas,since,sothat,dueto/owingto,thanksto,onaccountof.8.表示總結(jié)的：

tosumup,onthewhole,inall,briefly,inconclusion,insummary,inshort/brief,inaword,toconclude.---聽說你中彩票了。---恰恰相反，我被罰了。幸虧你的及時幫助，我才順利地通過了駕駛考試。一方面，我們需要工業(yè)，而另一方面，我又痛恨它帶來的污染?？偠灾覀兊膰疫€不富裕。這件衣服樣子太老了，另外，顏色也不適合我。作文上光第五招：有選擇地背誦經(jīng)典句型一、開頭句型Asfaras…isconcerned,Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…Itcanbesaidwithcertaintythat…Astheproverbgoes….It’slikelythat….I’mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IhatetosayitthatIcan’tmakeitto….Whataninspiringpictureitis!二、銜接句型Asisoftenthecase,…Buttheproblemisnotsosimple.…Butitisapitythat….Inspiteofthefactthat….,they….However,….Inaddition,….Similarly,….Ashasbeenmentionedabove,…Onthecontrary,….Ontheotherhand,….三、舉例句型：Let’stake…asanexample.Hereisonemoreexample.Thisoffersatypicalexampleof….Justthinkof….四、結(jié)尾句型Iwillconcludebysaying…Therefore,webelievethat…Witheverythingtakenintoconsideration,weItmaybesafelysaidthat….Inshort,….Tosumup,…Inmyopinion,….Allinall,….Briefly,….五、常用諺語：Speechissilver,silenceisgold.Easiersaidthandone.Everymanhashisweakside.Honestyisthebestpolicy.Everycoinhastwosides.Oneman’smeatisanotherman’spoison.Loveme,lovemydog.Seeingisbelieving.Wellbeganishalfdone.WheninRome,doasRomansdo.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.Nopains,nogains.Strikewhiletheironishot.Thereisnosmokewithoutfire.It’snevertoolatetomend.Knowledgeispower.Practicemakesperfect.AllroadsleadtoRome.Manyhandsmakelightwork.Morehaste,lessspeed.六：as句型Asisknowntoall,….Sheissuchafoolastobelievewhathesaid.

Asitwasgettinglate,wehadtoquit.Youngashewas,hemadegreatcontributionstohismotherland.七、seem句型Itseemsthateveryonewassatisfied.

Itseemstomethatsheisright.

Thereseemstobeaheavyrain.

Itseemsasifnothinghadhappenedtohim.八、wouldrather句型Shewouldratherdiethanbemarriedtothatoldman.2.Iwouldratherhavetakenhisadvice.3.IwouldratherIhadworkedharder.4.Iwouldratheryoudidityourself.九、before句型TheboyhadrunoutbeforeIcouldstophim.Itwillbetenyearsbeforeeverythingreturnstonormal.3.Itwasn’ttwoyearsbeforeheleftthecountry.4.LetmetellyoutherulesbeforeIforget.5.IwouldshootmyselfbeforeIapologizetohim.十、強調(diào)句型ItwashowIsaiditthatmadehimangry.WasithowIsaiditthatmadehimangry?Whatwasitthatmadehimangry?Canyoutellmewhatitwasthatmadehimangry?十一、感嘆句型Whatatiringday!Howtiringaday!HowIwanttoseeyouinNewYork!十二、Not…until句型Hedidn’trealizethetruthuntilhecameback.Notuntilhecamebackdidherealizethetruth.Itwasnotuntilhecamebackthatherealizedthetruth.十三、since句型Hehaslivedheresincehisfathermovedhere.Hemovedherein1988andhaslivedhereeversince.3.ItistenyearssinceIgotmarried.4.ItistenyearssinceIwasmarried.十四、ifonly句型IfonlyMr.Johnsonwerehere!IfonlyIhadtakendownhisaddress!IfonlyIcouldbe18again.十五、Therebe句型Thereisnodoubtthat….Thereisnopointdoing….ThereisamancalledJerrywaitingforyou.Thereisnowaythatonecouldsucceedwithouthardwork.5.Thereisnoneedtobeworriedabouthim.6.Thereisnohurryinreturningthebook.十六、倒裝句型Onlythroughhardworkcanyouexpecttoachieveyourgoals.2.Socuriousarethestudentsaboutwildlivesthattheycan’twaittogointotheforest.3.Nevershouldwelie.4.Herecomesthebus.5.Infrontofthehousesatanoldlady.6.Onlyinthiswaycanyouachieveyourgoal.十七、with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)Hestaredattheshowwithhismouthopen.Theboystoodthere,withhisheaddown.Hestoodwithhishandsinhispockets.Withnothingtodo,hewentbackhome.Withthenoisegoingon,hecouldn’tconcentrateonhiswork.6.Helayontheground,withhiseyesfixedontheceiling.作文上光第六招：盡量使用高中詞匯

about---approximatelycareful---cautiousso---thereforehappily---enthusiasticallyclearly---apparentlythrowaway---abandonlotsof---abundant/adequateMoreandmorepeople–anincreasingnumberof…attractive–appealing/inviting/fascinatingmoreimportant–increasinglysignificantwanttodo–intendtodo/desireto/beeager/lookforwardto../becrazyaboutdoing..cause–resultin/leadto/bringaboutyou’dbetter–Youmayjustaswellunderstand–figureoutbegintorealize–cometobeawareof…refusetolisten–turnadeafearto…

SuddenlyIhadagoodidea.SuddenlyIcameupwithagoodidea.Agoodideacameuponme.Allofasudden,agoodideaoccurtome.作文上光第七招：要害部位使用名言、諺語Speechissilver,silenceisgold.Easiersaidthandone.Everymanhashisweakside.Honestyisthebestpolicy.Everycoinhastwosides.Oneman’smeatisanotherman’spoison.Loveme,lovemydog.Seeingisbelieving.Wellbeganishalfdone.WheninRome,doasRomansdo.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.Nopains,nogains.Strikewhiletheironishot.Thereisnosmokewithoutfire.It’snevertoolatetomend.Knowledgeispower.Practicemakesperfect.AllroadsleadtoRome.Manyhandsmakelightwork.Morehaste,lessspeed.Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.Nothingisimpossibleforawillingheart.Romewasnotbuiltinaday.AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.Lookbeforeyouleap.Itishardtopleaseall.Asthetree,sothefruit.作文上光第八招：無招勝有招20%40%80%60%小學(xué)初中高中下圖是對某地學(xué)生近視率的調(diào)查表山東卷高考英語寫作的三個特征：1.創(chuàng)設(shè)使用英語寫作的需要；2.話題與學(xué)生認知水平相符；3.有一定的開放性。假設(shè)你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，你和在上海上學(xué)的英國朋友Tom約好下