高三英語二輪復(fù)習讀后續(xù)寫：個人成長類來自爸爸的磨礪學案

【原題重現(xiàn)】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

OncetherewasagirlnamedVivianwhowastheonlychildofherfather.Herfatherwasabigandsuccessfulbusinessmanwhoownedsevenstarrestaurants.Hedideverythingonlyforhisdaughter.Vivianwassenttothebestuniversityabroad.Althoughshehadeverything,

theonlythingsheneverownedwasrespectofotherpeople.WhenViviancamebackafterhergraduationandherfatheraskedhertojoinhiscompanyasanaccountant,shewasnaturallynothappywiththat.Shewantedtoworkinahigherpostbutherfatherwantedhertostartasanordinarygirl.“Dad,Istudiedinthemostoutstandinguniversityabroadandgotabettereducationthananyoftheemployeeswhoworkunderyou.Still,youwantmetoworkunderthem?"saidVivianunhappily.Vivian'sfatherlookedatherwithasmileonhisface.Vivianwasannoyedbyherfather'sreactionbutsheagreedtoworkasanaccountantintheend.Aftersomemonths,therewasanemergencysituationinthecompany.Oneoftherestaurantswasshortofemployeesbecauseofasuddenresignation(辭職），sotheywereshortonpeopletodootherchoresaroundtheplaceandcookfoodfast.Vivian'sfatheraskedhertohelpthatrestaurantwithhimandtheotheremployees.Whensheenteredtherestaurant,shewashitbytheairoftensionaroundtheemployees.Everybodywasbusydoingsomethingorotherandtherewasamessaroundtherestaurant.Whenshewentinthebackofthekitchen,shesawatowerofunwasheddishes.Herfathernearedherinahurryandaskedher,“Vivian,thankgoodness,youarehere.Darling,willyoupleasehelpusanddothedishes?"Hepattedheronhershoulderandlefthertodothedishes.Shelookedatthedirtyplatesandspoonsthatwerepiledupbeforeher.Para1“Ididn'tstudymywholelifeandcomefirstineverythingtodothis!”Vivianthought.Para2Vivian'sfatherpickedupthegloves,putthemonandstarteddoingthedisheshimself.【菲常視角】好詞好句積累：1.

shewashitbytheairoftensionaroundtheemployees.員工們緊張的氣氛朝她襲來2.patherontheshoulder拍拍她的肩膀

3.bepiledup被堆滿的梳理原文Q1HowdidVivian’sfathertreather?andhowdidVivian’sfathertreatVivianafterhergraduation?Q2WhatwasVivian’sattitude’stowardsthenewpost?why?Q3WhathappenedtooneoftherestaurantsandwhatdidVivian’sfatherandViviando?Q4What’sVivian’sandhisfather’spersonality?Q5WhatdidVivianreallyneed?基于原文梳理故事發(fā)生背景，人物關(guān)系和人物性格，從而幫助續(xù)寫中合理設(shè)計情節(jié)。原文中Vivian家境優(yōu)越，名牌大學畢業(yè)，父親事業(yè)有成，對她愛護有加，本故事在畢業(yè)后到爸爸經(jīng)營的餐館工作這個決定上產(chǎn)生了沖突，女兒想回來大有作為，父親卻決定讓女兒從會計做起。一次餐廳危機事件使得故事到了一個矛盾沖突的高潮，讓女兒意識到職業(yè)無貴賤，把自己手頭的事情做好才能獲得他人真正的尊重。分析續(xù)寫Para1Q1Whatwouldshedoandhowdidshefeel?Q2Howwaseverythinggoingaroundher?Whatwasherfeelingaboutit?Q3Wouldshewashthedishesatfirstinpara1?Whatwouldshedo?Q4Whydidherfathercometohelp?Para2Q1Howdidshefeelwhenfathercametoheraid?Q2Whatdidherfathersaytoher?Q3Howdidshefeelandwhatshewoulddonext?Q4Howdidshefeelaftermanagingtowashdishes?Q5Whatdidherfatherorotherstaffthinkofher?Q6Didtheincidentmakeachangeonher?How?續(xù)寫部分的情節(jié)設(shè)計必須要把Vivian優(yōu)秀但驕傲自負的性格，父親睿智慈愛的形象展現(xiàn)出來，另外根據(jù)銜接句故事的走向一定是第一段Vivian沒能成功，銜接句應(yīng)為父親看到這些進來了，因為第二段父親已經(jīng)進來幫忙了；第二段應(yīng)重點刻畫Vivian對于爸爸行為從不解困惑到理解并且模仿行動，這里不建議寫父親有負面情緒，責怪呵斥等，最后主題升華領(lǐng)悟到活到老學到老，不積硅步無以至千里或者把自己手頭的事情做好才能獲得他人真正的尊重等這樣的生活哲理。梳理原文（參考答案）Para1“Ididn'tstudymywholelifeandcomefirstineverythingtodothis!”Vivianthought.Notknowinghowtobeginherworkandseeingthechaos.Para2Vivian'sfatherpickedupthegloves,putthemonandstarteddoingthedisheshimself.Q1HowdidVivian’sfathertreather?andhowdidVivian’sfathertreatVivianafterhergraduation?Herfathertreatedherverywell.HeaskedhertojoinhiscompanyasanaccountantQ2WhatwasVivian’sattitude’stowardsthenewpost?why?Shewasdissatisfiedwiththenewpostbecausegraduatingfromthemostoutstandinguniversity,shethoughtsheoughttotakeupahigherpost.Q3WhathappenedtooneoftherestaurantsandwhatdidVivian’sfatherandViviando?Theywereshortonpeopletodootherchoresaroundtheplaceandcookfoodfast.Q4WhatwasVivian’sandhisfather’spersonality?Vivianwasexcellentbutvain,arrogantgirlwhileherfatherwasanaffectionate,capableandwisefatherQ5WhatdidVivianreallyneed?Therespectfromothers分析續(xù)寫（參考答案）Para1Q1Whatwouldshedoandhowdidshefeel?Shefeltatalosswhattodonext（themessinthekitchenleftheratalossbutforcedherselftotakeaction)Shefeltunhappy,complainedabouthisfather’sdecisionandhesitatedtotakeactionQ2Howwaseverythinggoingaroundher?Whatwasherfeelingaboutit?Allthestaffswereonthegoandurgedhertowashthedishesquickly,whichmadeherannoyedandanxious.Q3Wouldshewashthedishesatfirstinpara1?Whatwouldshedoandhowdidshefeel?No,shequitanddecidedtoleavewithgrowingdisappointmentandalittleannoyanceQ4Whydidherfathercometohelp?BecauseVivianfailedtowashdishesuntilhisfathercameinPara2Q1Howdidshefeelwhenfathercametoheraid?shefeltdisbeliefandconfusionbecauseshethoughtherfathershouldnothavedealtwiththosetrivailsasaboss.Q2Whatdidherfathersaytoher?Itwasagoodchancetoproveyourself,mygirlQ3Howdidshefeelandwhatshewoulddonext?Shefeltencouragedandfollowedherfather’sinstructiontocleanthedishesandwipeddownthemcautiously.What’smore,shekeptthewholerestaurantinordercalmlyandtechnically.Q4Howdidshefeelaftermanagingtowashdishes?Shefeltgreatsenseofachievementrisinginherchest.Q5Whatdidherfatherorotherstaffsthinkofher?Whatmaytheysaytoher?Theyspokehighlyofherforhercapabilityandencouraged“Eaglesdonotbreeddoves”Q6Didtheincidentmakeachangeonher?How?Yes,shefoundhisfather’sdecisionwiseandlearnttobemorehumbleandbegantounderstandtheessenceofthesaying“l(fā)iveandlearn.”（knowingthebestwaytoearnrespectisnotowningyourtitleoryourdegreebutholdingyourgoodattitudetowardseveryresponsibilityyoushoulder)【菲寫不可】(MissTang下水文）來自爸爸的磨礪Para1“Ididn'tstudymywholelifeandcomefirstineverythingtodothis!”Vivianthought.However,

shefeltatalosswhattodonextwhenseeingthemessinthekitchen.Allthestaffswereonthegoandurgedhertowashthedishesquicklyinimpatientanddespisedvoice,whichmadehermoreannoyedandanxious.Withgreatfaithinherselfgraduallyfading,sheforcedherselftotakeactionbutstillfoundherselfwonderingwheresheshouldstartoff.Thelongershestayedinthekitchen,themoreirritatedanddiscouragedshebecame.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Vivianwasgoingoutofthekitchen,tossingthedishclothandlettingoutofagroan“Iquit!Thejobdidn’tfitme!”,whenhisfathercamein.(115)Para2Vivian'sfatherpickedupthegloves,putthemonandstarteddoingthedisheshimself.Rootedtothegroundincompletedisbelief,shestaredathisfatherandcouldn’tresistquestioningwhyasabosshedidsuchtrivial.Hisfatherlookedathisdaughteraffectionatelyandencouragedherinasoftvoicewithhishandsstillworkingonthewash,“

Itwasagoodchancetoproveyourself,mygirl!Istartedfmycareerromthekitchen!”Feelingencouragedandsorryforherbadattitude,shefollowedherfather’sinstructiontocleanthedishesandwipeddownthemcautiously.Shefeltgreatsenseofachievementrisinginherchestwhentheyspokehighlyofherandcommented“Eaglesdonotbreeddoves”.Shefoundhisfather’sdecisionwiseandlearnedtobemorehumbleandbegantounderstandtheessenceofthesaying“l(fā)iveandlearn.”(145)（Itwasnotuntilthenshebegantorealizethebestwaytoearnrespectisnotowningyourtitleoryourdegreebutholdingyourgoodattitudetowardseveryresponsibilityyoushoulder)第一段；Vivian想：“我并不要一直學習，但我做什么事情都是第一位的。”。然而，當看到廚房里亂七八糟的時候，她感到不知所措。所有的工作人員都在忙著，用不耐煩和鄙視的聲音催促她趕快洗碗，這讓她更加惱火和焦慮。盡管對自己的信心逐漸消退，她強迫自己采取行動，但仍不知道該從哪里開始。她在廚房待的時間越長，就越惱火和氣餒。似乎過了一個世紀，Vivian走出廚房，扔著抹布，呻吟著說：“我不干了！這份工作不適合我！”這時，他的父親進來了。(115)第二段：Vivian的父親拿起手套，戴上，自己動手洗碗。她毫不相信地站在地上，盯著他的父親，忍不住要問，作為一個老板，他為什么要做這樣瑣碎的事。他的父親深情地看著他的女兒，用溫柔的聲音鼓勵她，他的手還在忙著，“這是一個證明自己的好機會，我的女兒！我從廚房開始了我的職業(yè)生涯！”感到鼓舞，也對自己之前差的態(tài)度表示對不起，她按照父親的指示洗盤子，小心地擦干凈。當他們高度贊揚她并評論道“虎父無犬子”時，巨大的成就感油然而生。她發(fā)現(xiàn)父親的決定是明智的，她學會了更加謙虛，并開始理解“生活和學習”這句話的精髓。（直到那時，她才開始意識到贏得尊重的最佳方式不是擁有頭銜或?qū)W位，而是對你承擔的每一項責任保持良好的態(tài)度）（145）【官方范文】

“Ididn'tstudymywholelifeandcomefirstineverythingtodothis!”Vivianthought.

Shewasdowninthedumpsandleftthekitchen.Butafterawhilesheheardherfathersaying,“Vivian,sweetheart,youdidn’tdothedishes?Goon,doit.”ButVivianignoredhimdeliberately.Herfatherlookedatherinconfusionbutthenherealizedwhyhisdaughterwasbehavinglikethis.Obviouslyhewasawareofhisdaughter’sthinking.So,hestartedmakinghiswaytowardsthebackofthekitchen.Vivian’sfatherpickedupthegloves,putthemonandstarteddoingthedisheshimself.

“Dad,whatareyoudoing?Youarenotanordinaryemployee!”saidVivian.“Darling,Ihavealwaysbeenanordinaryman.Iworkedhardforyoujustastheseemployees’parentsmusthavedone,”herfatherreplied.Vivianwasovercomewithregretandtooktheglovesoffhishandsimmediately.“YouarenotseriouslythinkingthatIamgoingtoletyoudothesewithoutofferingmyhelp?”Viviansaidandthentheybothlaughed.第一段Vivian心想：“我并不是一輩子都在學習，做每件事上都是第一”。

在做這件事的每件事上都是第一位的。”。她情緒低落，離開了廚房。但是過了一會兒，她聽到她父親說，“Vivian，親愛的，你沒有洗碗？繼續(xù)，洗碗?！钡荲ivian故意不理他。她父親困惑地看著她，但隨后他意識到女兒為什么會這樣。顯然他知道他女兒的想法。于是，他開始朝廚房后面走去。第二段

Vivian的父親拿起手套，戴上，開始自己洗碗?！鞍职?，你在干什么？你不是一個普通員工！”維維安說?！坝H愛的，我一直都是一個普通人。我為你努力工作，就像這些員工的父母所做的一樣?！彼母赣H回答。Vivian后悔萬分，立即脫下手套?！澳悴皇钦J真地認為我會讓你做這些事而不提供我的幫助嗎？”vivian說，然后他們都笑了?！緦W生優(yōu)秀作品-趙思涵】“Ididn’tstudymywholelifeandcomefirstineverythingtodothis!”Vivianthought.“HowcanIdothisfoolishjob!”

Shemumbled,glaringattheglovesanddirtydisheswithherfacedarkening.Vivianstoodbeforethesinkstubbornlywithoutasingleword.Otherpeoplesurroundingherwereallbusyintheirjobs,butthesceneoftheirworkingevenmadehermoreannoyed.“Hey!Don’tsticktherelikewood!Hurryup!Okay?”oneoftheemployeesshoutedatVivian.“Howdareyouaskme!”Vivianwasflamingwithanger,stampingherfoot.Hardlyhadshetakenofftheglovesandbeenabouttostormoutofthekitchenwhenherfarthernoticedandstoppedhisdaughter,“Waitforawhile,Vivian.”Vivian’sfatherpickedupthegloves,putthemonandstarteddoingthedisheshimself.Seizedbyatotalconfusion,