浙江高考2023年讀后續(xù)寫題說(shuō)課

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫教學(xué)設(shè)計(jì)案例說(shuō)課人：方肖娟2016年10月浙江省高考真題OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalake

intheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”and

walked

away.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbed

toahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoa

stream.

Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janehearda

helicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffher

yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.教學(xué)目標(biāo)：準(zhǔn)確解讀文本，明確記敘文的主題和基本要素（背景，人稱，情節(jié)，敘事順序）。根據(jù)閱讀文本，劃線詞，續(xù)寫段落的段首句，通過設(shè)問，合理構(gòu)建情節(jié)。模仿文本語(yǔ)言，提高續(xù)寫語(yǔ)言的準(zhǔn)確度和豐富性。WhenoneweekendinJulyWherebythelakeinaforestWhoacouple:JaneandTomThepointofview第三人稱Task1:Readpara.1andfindthebackgroundinformation.Tasktwo:Analysetheplot.whathappenedJane'sfeelingsBeginningpara.1Unfortunately,JaneandTomstartedtoquarrel.Janewalkedaway.soangry.Developmentpara.2¶.3Janegotlost.JanecalledTomforhelp,butnoreply.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanemissedTomandherfamilyverymuch.surprisedregretfulconfusedtiredlonelyawareoftheimportanceofTomandherfamilyTask2:Analysetheplot.whathappenedJane'sfeelingsDevelopmentpara.4Janefoundastreamandbegantowalkalongthestream,hopingthatitwouldleadhertothelake.hungrythirstyjoyfulhopefulClimaxpara.5Twohelicoptersflewover.“Isthatforme?”Janewantedtobeseenbythehelicopter.morejoyfulmorehopefulpara.6Endingpara.7Task3:根據(jù)文本,劃線詞，段首句，構(gòu)建情節(jié)劃線詞Jane,Tom,lake,walked,climbed,atadistance,stream,tohergreatjoy,helicopter,yellowblouseClimaxpara.6Butnohelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.構(gòu)建情節(jié)When:atnight(getdark---daybreak)Where:alongthestreamintheforestWho:JaneWhatdidJanedoduringthecold,dark,lonelynight?HowdidJanefeel?Why?合理運(yùn)用描述（背景描述，細(xì)節(jié)描述）Task4:根據(jù)文本,劃線詞，段首句，構(gòu)建情節(jié)劃線詞Jane,Tom,lake,walked,climbed,atadistance,stream,tohergreatjoy,helicopter,yellowblouseEndingpara.7ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.構(gòu)建情節(jié)When:daybreak,anewdaycameWhere:alongthestreamintheforestWho:JaneandTomWhatdidTomdotorescueJaneandwhatdidJanedotomakeherselfbespotted?Howdidthecouplefeelatthesightofseeingeachother?Why?合理運(yùn)用描述（背景描述，細(xì)節(jié)描述）樹立主題意識(shí)，升華主題。beginningclimaxendingThequarrelGettinglostAstreamandberrieshelicoptersNomorehelicoptersWakingupFeelings?angryfrightenedjoyfulhopefuljoyful&gratefulTask5:理清情節(jié)線、情感線；明確主題，文末升華主題quarrel;angry;walkawaygetlost;frightened,lonely,regretful,hopeful,haveaprofoundself-reflectionberescued;joyful,asinceresenseofsorryandgratitude;awareoftheimportanceofmaintainingthepreciousrelationshipTask6:模仿文本語(yǔ)言1IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.2Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.3Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.4Janetookoffher

yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.5“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”6Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.7Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Task7:DraftingandrevisingCompleteyourfirstdraft.Whendrafting,bearthefollowingquestionsinmind:1.DoIincludedthebasicelements(when,where,who,what,whyhow)ofanarration?2.HaveIincludedenoughsesorydetailstosupportthestory?3.DoIarrangethedetailslogically?4.DoIusevariedsentencepatterns?5.Domysentencesflowsmoothly?Task8:Readtheexcellentsamplestopolishyourwriting.Paragraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.

Jane,exhaustedandscared,laydownnearastone,missingherfamily

atadistance.Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn'thelpcrying,"Hadn'tIquarreledwith

Tom,

walked

awayand

climbed

tothehighplace,Iwouldn'tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”Sheregrettedwithendlessanxiety,andthenbecameasleepwithshiningtearsinhereyes.Task8:Readtheexcellentsamplestopolishyourwriting.Paragraph2:

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.

Tohergreatjoy,a

helicopter

wasflyingoverheadagaina