2023學年完整公開課版建議信寫作

Howtowritealetterofadvice寫作要點：1.建議信：作者就有關問題進行分析并針對這些問題提出自己的看法和建議。2.對象：1）寫給個人，就其遇到的某個問題提出自己的看法和觀點；2）寫給某個組織和機構，就改進其服務提出建議或忠告。3.建議信的常用結構如下(三段式)：首段：表明寫作意圖，陳述事由。中段：圍繞問題，結構清晰、科學婉轉地提

出有針對性的建議。注意充分考慮對

方的實際情況。尾段：簡單予以希望。希望自己的建議能對

對方有所幫助。4.注意事項：1）建議信要寫出寫信的原因，建議的內容，提出建議的理由，提出的理由要入情入理，語氣一定要禮貌當先。因此建議信要寫得簡明扼要、目的明確、具有合理性和說服力2）建議的角度要多樣化，避免重復?？蓮恼?、經濟、文化、倫理、法律以及個人等多角度給出建議。3）符合英文信件的基本格式A．建議信開頭常用句式

(照應材料,表明寫作意圖)I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceon______(引出主題).Hereareafewsuggestionsforyour...2.Youhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregard

to_______(引出主題).and

I’lltrytomake

someconstructivesuggestions.B.表達建議（body）Itisofgreatimportancetodosth.,as…Itisagoodideatodosth.3.Youhadbetterdosth.4.Whynotdosth.?5.Ithinkitwouldbemorebeneficialifyou

could…7.Iwouldliketosuggest/recommendthat…Tobeginwith,Besides,What’smore,Furthermore,Moreover,Inaddition,Also,LastbutnotleastC.建議信結尾常用句式

1.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucouldtakemysuggestionsintoconsideration.2.Ihopeyouwillfindthesesuggestions

practical

/

useful

/

helpful.

假定你是李華，你的英國朋友Peter來信向你咨詢如何才能學好中文。請你根據下列要點寫回信。要點：⑴參加中文培訓班； ⑵看中文書刊、電視； ⑶學唱中文歌曲； ⑷交中國朋友，網上用中文聊天。2.層次三段式3.要點學中文的幾條建議1)…2)…3)…4)...4.時態(tài)一般現在時5.人稱第一人稱&第二人稱1.體裁一封信Step2:譯問題建議howtolearnChinesewell⑴參加中文培訓班；⑵看中文書刊、電視；⑶學唱中文歌曲；⑷交中國朋友，網上用中文聊天。1.takeaChinesecourse2.watchTVandreadbooks,newspapersandmagazinesinChinese3.learnandsingChinesesongs4.makefriendswithmoreChineseandhavechatswiththemontheInternetinChineseDear________，①I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceon______

(引出主題).Hereareafewsuggestionsforyourreference.③Tobeginwith，itisofgreatimportanceto______,④as

you'll________.⑤What’smore，Ithinkitwouldbemorebeneficialifyoucould________.⑥Besides，itshouldbeagoodideato_____,⑦because________.⑧Lastbutnotleast,youmayaswell________.⑨I'msurethat________.

(預測可能的結果，給對方以行動的信心和決心).

⑩I'mlookingforwardto______(表達愿望).Sincerelyyours，Signature1.你可以參加一個中文培訓班來學習中文。2.你可以看中文書刊、電視來學習中文。3.你可以學唱中文歌曲來學習中文。4.你可以交中國朋友，網上用中文聊天來學

習中文。適當運用模板

假定你是李華，你的英國朋友Peter來信向你咨詢如何才能學好中文。請你根據下列要點寫回信。要點：⑴參加中文培訓班； ⑵看中文書刊、電視； ⑶學唱中文歌曲； ⑷交中國朋友，網上用中文聊天。模板二：Dear_____,

Iamwritingtoexpressmyviewsconcerning___(問題).

Inmyopinion,

itwouldbemorebeneficialtotakethefollowingactions.Firstofall,Iwouldliketosuggest/recommendthat…_______(建議一);in

addition,itshouldbeagoodideato_____(建議二);

Lastbutnotleast,

itishightimethat

sbshoulddosth_____(建議三).

Ihopeyou’llfindtheseproposalsuseful./Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucouldtakemysuggestionsintoconsideration.

Yourssincerely,

LiMing如何算是一篇好文章？－覆蓋了所有的要點－應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯－有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊，行文連貫，條理清楚。要點全詞匯,句型（高級）和語法多樣化（較復雜）語言地道連接詞第一步：審題養(yǎng)成重視審題的習慣。雖然基礎寫作題是半封閉性的，但審題仍然十分重要。現以樣題為例，談談如何審題：思考的問題樣題分析第幾人稱？（person）文章的題材是什么？要寫的文章主題是什么(topic)怎樣安排信息點的順序？

(order)動作是什么時候發(fā)生的？(時態(tài))(when)第一人稱一封信學好中文的幾條建議說理邏輯性一般現在時第二步：搜索相關詞組或句型

問題建議howtolearnChinesewell

takeaChinesecoursewatchTVandreadbookslearnandsingChinesesongsmakefriendswithmoreChinese第三步.連句成文注意：篇章的連貫性

連詞的使用：1.表示次序和時間:

first(ly),firstofall,inthefirstplace,首先

second(ly),what’more,inaddition,besides其次

finally,eventually,lastbutnottheleast最后

ontheonehand(一方面)…ontheotherhand（另一方面）高一學生目前能夠嘗試使用已學句型：it作形式主語，定語從句，虛擬語氣…DearPeter, I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowtolearnChinesewell.

Hereareafewsuggestions.

Tobeginwith,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse,asyou‘llbeabletolearnfromtheteachersandpracticewithyourfellowstudents.Then,italsohelpstowatchTVandreadbooks,newspapers,andmagazinesinChinesewheneverpossible.Besides,itshouldbeagoodideatolearnandsingChinesesongs,becausebydoingsoyou’lllearnandrememberChinesewordsmoreeasily.Inaddition,YoucanalsomakemoreChinesefriends，whowilltellyoualotaboutChinaandhelpyoulearnChinese. TrywritingtomeinChinesenexttime.Bestwishes,LiHua假如你叫孫軍，是恩施高中的學生，要給市長寫一封信，反映學校門前交通擁擠現象，包括以下要點：參考詞匯:穿行threadone’sway天橋overpass問題建議學校和一所小學毗鄰，對著大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家長接送。交通更擁擠；學生過街在車輛中穿行危險。政府應采取措施,如修天橋等。第一步:Whatmustwepayattentiontowhenwritinganarticle?題材：人稱

Person(Thefirst/thirdperson…)時態(tài)：Tense

(thesimplepresenttense)要點：…

aletter第一步：審題養(yǎng)成重視審題的習慣。雖然基礎寫作題是半封閉性的，但審題仍然十分重要?，F以樣題為例，談談如何審題：思考的問題樣題分析第幾人稱？（person）文章的題材是什么？要寫的文章主題是什么(topic)怎樣安排信息點的順序？

(order)動作是什么時候發(fā)生的？(時態(tài))(when)第一人稱一封信建議政府采取措施舒緩交通擁擠的狀況說理邏輯性一般現在時第二步：搜索相關詞組或句型

問題建議學校和一所小學毗鄰，對著大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家長接送。交通更擁擠；學生過街在車輛中穿行危險。政府應采取措施,如修天橋等。

學校與一所小學毗鄰,對著大街standnextto…primary…face/befacedwith…themainstreet…There’saprimaryschoolnearourschool,andbothschoolsfacethemainstreet.Ourschoolstandsnexttoaprimaryschool,facedwith/facingthemainstreet.推薦句型：Therebe+并列句非謂語結構Standingnexttoaprimaryschool,ourschoolisfacedwith/facesthemainstreet.潤色小建議Nexttoaprimaryschool將介詞短語提前（全倒裝）stands/lies/isourschool,facedwith/facingamainstreet.可將standnextto替換為高級詞匯/短語belocatednextto(near/beside/by)border/adjoinvt.beadjacentto與…毗鄰在…對面beoppositetoThetrafficisbusyduringtherushhours.高峰期交通繁忙…..traffic….duringtherushhoursDuringtherushhours,therearesomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroadthat…Duringtherushhours,thereisalotoftraffic.so….that…with結構Withsomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroad,…潤色小建議“高峰期”可意譯:atpeaktime，alargecurrentofcarsandpeople“交通繁忙”可譯為:trafficjamcongestion交通堵塞bechokeupwithbecrammedwith被…堵塞/塞滿

加之孩子小,家長接送,交通更擁擠send…to…,fetch….,

非謂語結構….Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,makingthetrafficheavier.,which….加之孩子小，家長接送，交通更擁擠What’smore,…pickup….make….Tomakethings

worse/what’sworse,manyparentscomingtopickuptheirchildrenmakethestreetmorecrowded.Inaddition/Additionally,manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.What’smore,parentsoftenattendtheirkidstoschool,resultinginmoreserioustrafficjams.Whatmakesthingsworseisthatchildrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.makingthesituationmoreserious.makingthetrafficheavier可意譯為：so….that….=too…toThechildrenaresoyoungthatparentshavetosendthemtoschoolandfetchthemhome,which

makes/makingthetrafficheavier.making可替換為：causing,leadingto,resultingin“send…fetch…”可替換為短語：pickup潤色小建議

學生過街在車輛中穿行危險threadone’sway，whendoingItisdangerousforthestudentstothreadtheirwayamongbusesandcarswhencrossingtheroad.固定句型Itis+adj.for…todo….Studentsarerisking

theirlives

tothreadtheirwayamongcars.潤色小建議2.Someareexposedtodangerwhencrossingtheocean/seaofcars.

靈活運用其它的短語進行意譯：

適當增加形容詞和副詞：itisextremelydangerous，itisofgreat/tremendousdanger政府應采取措施,如修天橋等。suggest/suggestion,

takesteps/measures/actiontodo…suchasMysuggestionisthatthegovernmentshould…表語從句固定句型Itishightimethat…(虛擬語氣)Itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuilding…Isuggestthatthegovernmentshouldtakestepssuchasbuildinganoverpass.簡單句1.Inordertoreleasethestressoftrafficproblems,…潤色小建議2.Aimedatsolvingtheseproblems,thegovernmentshould…A.適當添加一些意思（過渡句）Thegovernment

shouldpaymoreattentiontoitandtrytosolveit.B.語義的意譯3.Seeingthesematters,neverwillIstopurgingourgovernmenttotakesomemeasures.Forthesakeofimprovingthequalityoftraffic,itissignificanttobuild…C.添加形容詞和副詞Istronglysuggest…,active/effectivemeasures第三步.連句成文但要注意：篇章的連貫性Nexttoaprimaryschoolstandsourschool,facingamainstreet.___________,it’scrammedwithcarsduringtherushhour._______________childrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.___________,it’sofgreatdangerforthestudentstogothroughthetraffic._________________,itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuildinganoverpass.A.AsaconsequenceB.AccordingtothephenomenonstatedaboveC.WhenitcomestotrafficjamsD.WhatmakesthingsworseisthatA.C.D.B.反面范例反面范例反面范例反面范例不推薦字體優(yōu)秀作文范例1優(yōu)點：考生能靈活地處理各個信息點，大量運用非謂語，介詞短語，從句，連詞等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯個性和語言功底。優(yōu)秀作文范例2優(yōu)點：考生的書面整潔，字體美觀，運用therebe句型，介詞短語，從句，非謂語，套用句式等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯內涵和語言功底。優(yōu)秀作文范例3優(yōu)點：考生運用倒裝句，so…that句式，精彩的表達以及虛擬語氣等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯內涵和語言功底。優(yōu)秀作文范例4優(yōu)點：該考生最大的特色是運用了大量的高級詞匯等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯深厚的語言底蘊。優(yōu)秀作文范例5優(yōu)秀作文范例6Congestionn.阻塞,擁擠,充血CompositionsfromStudentTimes假如你是李華，你的筆友黎明來信說他的父母工作變動剛轉入一所學校，由于性格內向，生活經歷與同學差異很大等原因，在新學校沒有知心朋友，很苦惱。請根據以上提示，給他寫封回信，談談你對如何交友的看法。注意：詞數100左右翻譯下列句子：我很高興了解到你現在一所新學校就讀。（learn）Iamgladtolearnthatyouarestudyinginanewschool.如果你現在沒有知心朋友，不用著急。(if)Donotworryifyouhavenorealfriendsrightnow.雖然你是一個性格內向的男孩，而且生活經歷與你目前同學差異很大，只要你遵循下列提示不是沒有可能交上好朋友的。（although，aslongas)Althoughyouarenotanoutgoingboyandhavedifferentlifeexperiencesfromyourpresentclassmates,itisnotimpossibletomakegoodfriendsaslongasyoutakethefollowingtips.首先，如果你能與同學同甘共苦，就會交上朋友。（firstofall)Firstofall,youcanmakefriendswithothersifyousharetheirjoysandsorrows.第二，你應該向同學敞開你的心扉。Secondly,youshouldopenyourhearttoyourfriends,holdingbacknothing.最后，一旦有了朋友，你必須不斷用善舉來保持你們的友誼。Lastbutnotleast,onceyouhaveafriend,youmustconstantlymaintainyourfriendshipwithactsofkindness.希望你很快找到真誠的友誼。Ihopeyouwillfindtruefriendshipsoon.連句成篇DearLiMing,Iamgladtolearnthatyouarestudyinginanewschool,whichisagoodchanceforyoutoturnoveranewleaf.（適當增加的細節(jié)，高級表達）Donotworryifyouhavenorealfriendsrightnow.Althoughyouarenotanoutgoingboyandhavedifferentlifeexperiencesfromyourpresentclassmates,itisnotimpossibletomakegoodfriendsaslongasyoutakethefollowingtips.首先，如果你能與同學同甘共苦，就會交上朋友。（firstofall)Firstofall,youcanmakefriendswithothersifyousharetheirjoysandsorrows.第二，你應該向同學敞開你的心扉。Secondly,youshouldopenyourhearttoyourfriends,holdingbacknothing.(增加細節(jié)，閃光句子）最后，一旦有了朋友，你必須不斷用善舉來保持你們的友誼。（Lastbutnotleast;once)Lastbutnotleast,onceyouhaveafriend,youmustconstantlymaintainyourfriendshipwithactsofkindness.希望你很快找到真誠的友誼。Ihopeyouwillfindtruefriendshipsoon.=Hopefully,youwillfindtruefriendshipsoon.=Itishopedthatyouwillfindtruefriendship.DearLiMing,Iamgladtolearnthatyouarestudyinginanewschool,whichisagoodchanceforyoutoturnoveranewleaf.Donotworryifyouhavenorealfriendsrightnow.Althoughyouarenotanoutgoingboyandhavedifferentlifeexperiencesfromyourpresentclassmates,itisnotimpossibletomakegoodfriendsaslongasyoutakethefollowingtips.Firstofall,youcanmakefriendswithothersifyousharetheirjoysandsorrows.

Secondly,youshouldopenyourhearttoyourfriends,holdingbacknothing.Lastbutnotleast,onceyouhaveafriend,youmustconstantlymaintainyourfriendshipwithactsofkindness.Ihopeyouwillfindtruefriendshipsoon.仿寫下面是一個中學生給某報編輯部寫的一封信，仔細閱讀并就信的內容以編輯的名義給此中學生回一封信。DearEditor，Iamanactivegirl，andIspeakandlaughloudlyintheclassroom，likeaboy.Idon'tcareaboutsmallmatters.Onthecontrary，myneighbor，thegirlwhositsnexttome，speaksquietlyanddarenotdothethingsIoftendo.Icanunderstandthis.WhatIcan'tstandisthatsheoftengetsangrywithmeaboutsmallthings.HowcanIgetalongwithher?Sunny，Shandong注意：1.書信格式要規(guī)范；2．回信就原信內容給出至少三條建議(如談心，相互理解，參加他們的生日等活動，談論共同話題，分享快樂等等)。[思路分析]

寫作時應注意下面幾點：1．確定文體：這是一篇應用文，寫作中應注意書信的常規(guī)格式。2．主體時態(tài)：文章應以一般現在時為主。3．主體人稱：由于是給別人提出建議，所以人稱應該以第二人稱為主。[詞匯熱身]

1．與某人交朋友________________2．依我看________________3．與某人談心________________4．參加某人……活動________________5．分享快樂________________6．出去散步________________【答案】

1.makefriendswithsb.

2.inmyopinion3．haveatalkwithsb.

4.joinsb.in...

[句式溫習]

1．相互理解對你們兩人都很重要。____________________________________foryoutwo.2．我認為邀請她參加你和你的同學們的各種活動也很好。Ithinkit'sbetterforyoutoaskher________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________.3．與她分享你的喜怒哀樂。________________________________________________________________________.4．真心希望這些建議能對你有幫助。________________________________________________________________________toyou.【答案】

1.Understandingeachotherisveryimportant

2.tojoinyouandyourclassmatesinallkindsofactivities3．Shareyourhappinessandsadnesswithher

4.Itrulyhopetheadvicecanbeofhelp