全國(guó)卷-書面表達(dá)-加細(xì)節(jié)13例子-(大熊)課件1

書面表達(dá)增加細(xì)節(jié)的技巧13例作文復(fù)習(xí)（1）by雙老師技巧一：列舉具體的實(shí)例進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明例1.我們青少年應(yīng)盡我們所能保護(hù)環(huán)境、拯救地球。（添加forexample）改造前：Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.改造后：We

teenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,refusetousesingle-useproductsandsaveenergy.例2：我要花一些時(shí)間和父母在一起。（添加-ing表伴隨）改造前：I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents.改造后：I'llspendsometimestayingwithmyparents,chattingwiththemanddoingsomehousework.例3：我想找一個(gè)像我一樣喜歡旅行的筆友。（Ifpossible,...）改造前：I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.改造后：I'dliketoseekapenpalwhoisinterestedintravelingjustlikeme.

Ifpossible,wecantraveltogetherorsharetravelingexperiences.例4：互聯(lián)網(wǎng)在我們的日常生活當(dāng)中變得越來(lái)越重要。（notonly...butalso...）改造前：TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourdailylife.改造后：TheInternetisplayingamoreandmoreimportantpartinourdailylife.Notonlycanwereadnewsfromhomeandabroad,butalsosendemailsandattendon-linecourses.技巧二：增添背景信息，如：原因、結(jié)果、目的等例1：我們打算設(shè)計(jì)一件屬于我們班的服裝。（considering）改造前：Weintendtodesignauniformsuitedtoourownclass.改造后：Consideringthatthisactivityismeaningful,weintendtodesignauniformsuitedtoourownclass.例2：我計(jì)劃在一家外貿(mào)公司做兼職。（inorderto）改造前：Iamplanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigntradecompany.改造后：Inordertogetsomepracticalexperience,Iamplanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigntradecompany.例3：我不知道我的申請(qǐng)書和簡(jiǎn)歷上有沒(méi)有語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤或者不當(dāng)?shù)母袷?。（thisis....that)改造前：Idon'tknowif

theremightbesomegrammarmistakesorinappropriateformatinmyapplicationandthepersonalresume.改造后：ButthisisthefirsttimethatIhavewrittenanapplicationandthepersonalresume,soIdon'tknowif

theremightbesomegrammarmistakesorinappropriateformatinthem.例4：首先，參加中文課程很重要。（because）改造前：First,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse.改造后：First,itisimportanttotakeaChinesecourse,becauseyou'llbeabletolearnfromtheteacherandpracticewithyourfellowstudents.例5：我需要一個(gè)好好休息，我也會(huì)讀點(diǎn)書。（for表目的）改造前：IneedagoodrestandI'lldosomereadingaswell.改造后：IneedagoodrestbecauseIfeeltiredbecauseofthehardwork.Also,I'lldosomereadingforfunandforknowledgeaswell.例6：如果可能的話，我會(huì)參加一些社會(huì)活動(dòng)。（sothat引導(dǎo)目的狀語(yǔ)）改造前：Ifpossible,I'lltakepartinsomesocialactivities.改造后：Ifpossible,I'lltakepartinsomesocialactivities

sotahtIcanknowmoreaboutthesociety.例7：我們的地球正在面臨巨大的威脅。（with+賓語(yǔ)+賓補(bǔ)）改造前：Ourearthisfacedwithgreatthreat.改造后：Withtheglobalclimatebecomingwarmerandwarmer,ourearthisfacedwithgreatthreat.例8：我們也會(huì)與他們一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戲。（which）改造前：We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames.改造后：We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames,

whichwehopewillmakethemhappy.例9：這個(gè)活動(dòng)是一個(gè)讓我們學(xué)生向父母和老師致謝的好機(jī)會(huì)。（who）改造前：Thiseventis

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gratitudetoourparentsandteachers.改造后：Thiseventis

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