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提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，原文多是情節(jié)豐富的記敘文，偶有少量的議論文，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語和所標示關(guān)鍵詞進行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。讀后續(xù)寫：

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