讀后續(xù)寫萬(wàn)能情感升華句

讀后續(xù)寫：情感升華萬(wàn)能句（解析版）目錄TOC\o"13"\h\uPart1情感升華萬(wàn)能句 2第一個(gè)例子 2第二個(gè)例子 2第三個(gè)例子 3第四個(gè)例子 3第五個(gè)例子 4Part2素材積累： 5一、詞匯變身:替換常用簡(jiǎn)單詞 5二、心理描寫的素材 7三、寫作素材各主題升華句 10四、相關(guān)表達(dá)：詞/句 12Part3綜合模擬演練 141．（2023·湖南永州·統(tǒng)考二模） 142．（2023春·河北邯鄲·高三校聯(lián)考一模） 183．（2023·福建·統(tǒng)考一模） 204．（2022·湖北·荊州中學(xué)三模） 235．（2022·廣東廣州·三模） 26今天要分享的主題是：情感升華萬(wàn)能句。情感的升華主要用續(xù)寫的第二段，特別是結(jié)尾處。我們先看這個(gè)萬(wàn)能句的結(jié)構(gòu)：Seeingsth,Ifeltasifithadbeendoingandsaying,””看到某物，感覺某物好像在做某動(dòng)作，并且說“（突出主題的話）”。這個(gè)句子的亮點(diǎn)在于：首先該句是虛擬語(yǔ)氣句型結(jié)構(gòu)，需要注意，動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)需要用hadbeendoing，其次seeingsth是非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨狀語(yǔ)，另外句型中加入對(duì)話；最后，從修辭的角度，使用了“擬人”的手法。需要明確的是seeingsth.中的sth.到底是什么呢？我們知道，在故事發(fā)展中，一般都會(huì)有一兩個(gè)線索詞。這些線索詞要么貫穿始終，要么是在推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展過程中，起到非常重要的作用。比如2020年新高考卷中，描述的是萬(wàn)圣節(jié)尷尬事：主人公的頭卡在了南瓜中。于是南瓜就是整個(gè)故事的線索詞。八省聯(lián)考中，主人公的車在路上壞了，遇一家人的熱心幫助。在主人公即將開車離開時(shí)，熱心的小女孩還遞給他一個(gè)紙袋，紙袋里有食物。那么“紙袋paperbag”在推動(dòng)劇情發(fā)展中，就起到了的重要作用。所以，“南瓜”和“紙袋”可以用在seeingsth中。Part1情感升華萬(wàn)能句第一個(gè)例子主人公“我”是老年人，想回到學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)識(shí)字，但是連字母表都不會(huì)讀。最終戰(zhàn)勝了自我懷疑，成功能識(shí)字看報(bào)紙。升華主題的時(shí)候，我們?cè)趺从眠@個(gè)萬(wàn)能句型來表達(dá)呢？請(qǐng)看這句：Seeingthealphabetagain,Ifeltasifithadbeenencouragingmeandsaying,”it’snevertoolatetolearn”.再次看到字母表，我覺得它好像在鼓勵(lì)我并說，“學(xué)習(xí)永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)太晚”。第二個(gè)例子主人公“我”是個(gè)頹廢少年，無意中通過自己的專長(zhǎng)“扔標(biāo)槍”，找到了自信，并成功逆襲。我們?cè)趺赐ㄟ^萬(wàn)能句型來升華呢？Seeingthejavelin,Ifeltasifithadbeenencouragingmeandsaying,“You’vefoundyourtalentandI’vefoundyou”看到標(biāo)槍，我覺得它好像在鼓勵(lì)我，并說，“你找到了你的天賦，我找到了你”。這句話中，javelin是“標(biāo)槍”，talent是“天賦”第三個(gè)例子2016年高考真題，講述了夫妻倆野外露營(yíng)，因小事發(fā)生爭(zhēng)執(zhí)，女主人獨(dú)自走進(jìn)森林迷路的故事。最后如何用萬(wàn)能句升華呢？Seeingthehelicopter,Janefeltasifithadbeenfortingherwithitsthunderousvoice,“Yourwaitingpaysoff.”看到那架直升機(jī)，簡(jiǎn)覺得它好像在用雷鳴般的聲音安慰她，“你的等待是有回報(bào)的。”第四個(gè)例子2016年高考樣題，講述了主人公亞瑟遇到了銀行搶劫，他巧妙把可能藏有贓款的行李箱suitcase運(yùn)到了警察局的故事。最后的升華句，能不能借用我們今天用到的句型呢？我們一起來看看Seeingthesuitcase,Arthurfeltasifithadbeenpraisinghim,“Yourdidgreatjob!”看到手提箱，亞瑟覺得好像在稱贊他，“干得好！”這個(gè)句型，我們主要講解的是它能起到情感升級(jí)的作用，主要用在故事結(jié)尾處，如果在故事發(fā)展中，你感覺用上這個(gè)句型也比較合適，完全也是可以的。比如2017年高考真題，講的是主人公“我”與健忘媽媽一塊去旅游的故事。途中媽媽忘記了帳篷tent，媽媽執(zhí)意要返程尋找?？吹綆づ竦哪且豢?，你就可以用上這一句Seeingthetent,Ifeltasithadbeensighingandsaying,“Iwanttoexperiencetheoutsideworld.看到帳篷，我感覺它一直在嘆息著說，“我想體驗(yàn)外面的世界?！钡谖鍌€(gè)例子情感升華的結(jié)尾要求，要有較高的立意，它是故事的靈魂所在，這樣的結(jié)尾能夠產(chǎn)生強(qiáng)烈的藝術(shù)感染力，通常我們可以通過表現(xiàn)人生感悟、生活真諦、生活哲理、人生觀或價(jià)值觀來達(dá)到結(jié)尾部分的情感升華。 主人公在故事的結(jié)尾處，表達(dá)自己對(duì)價(jià)值觀：“幸?！钡睦斫?。來看看下面的表達(dá)：Iamextremelyunhappyaboutit.Ithinkmoneydoesn’tequalhappiness.我對(duì)此非常不高興。我覺得金錢不等于幸福。Andfreelifestylealsodoesn’tequalhappiness.自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。Therealhappinessisthateveryoneloveseachother,anddoeseverythingusefulforoursociety.Mostofmyclassmatessupportme.真正的幸福是每個(gè)人都有“愛”，為我們的社會(huì)做一切有益的事情。大多數(shù)同學(xué)都支持我。Butsomeofthemthinkmoneyiseverything.Inmyopinion,moneycan’ttaketheplaceofeverything,suchasyourlife,yourtimeandyourhappiness.但有些人認(rèn)為錢就是一切。在我看來，金錢不能代替一切，比如你的生活，你的時(shí)間和你的幸福。相信同學(xué)們對(duì)這個(gè)萬(wàn)能句型的用法或多或少有感悟，你可以把這個(gè)句型多默寫幾遍，直到百分百能用出來。需要強(qiáng)調(diào)的是，我們學(xué)的“萬(wàn)能句”其實(shí)是把雙刃劍。可以讓起到化繁為簡(jiǎn)的作用，但是如果長(zhǎng)期依賴，也可能讓你的表達(dá)過于單一。所以說，對(duì)于基礎(chǔ)暫時(shí)不太好的同學(xué)而言，學(xué)會(huì)后，可以救急用。從長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)看，我們還是需要積累不同的素材，豐富我們的表達(dá)。此外，需要強(qiáng)調(diào)另外一點(diǎn)是，當(dāng)你你在寫作中，覺得某個(gè)故事的立意和這個(gè)句型有不太一致時(shí)，也不要強(qiáng)行使用該句型。其實(shí)，在這個(gè)系列課程中，我講了很多出彩的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，你都可以進(jìn)行仿寫。Part2素材積累：一、詞匯變身:替換常用簡(jiǎn)單詞動(dòng)詞變身簡(jiǎn)單詞匯高級(jí)詞匯say, believe,thinkfigure, holdtheviewthat, assumethat, Iamconvincedthatimprovepromote, enhance, strengthennevergiveupsticktoit, insistondoing, persistin, adheretoshouldbesupposedtodo, Itiswise/sensible/makessensetodo, nothingcouldbebetterthan..., It’sworthwhiletodo, deservedoing, finditrewardingandenjoyabledo...likehaveapassionfor, befondof, fallinlovewith, haveanaffectionforeapproach, aroundthecorner, upingmakeenable, allowthankappreciate, begratefulto, conveymyheartfelthelpdosb. afavor, go/etoone’said, withtheassistanceof, givesb. ahandusegainaccessto, beaccessibleto形容詞、副詞、介詞變身簡(jiǎn)單詞匯高級(jí)詞匯moreandmorepopularincreasinglypopularbigenormous, tremendousveryextremely, remarkably, overwhelmingly, pretty, perfectlyfamousacplished, haveahighreputation, distinguishedgoodamazing, unbelievable, incrediblebaddisgusting, awful, terribleimportantsignificant, vital, essential, fundamental, crucialallkindsofavarietyof, various, diverseaboutconcerning, relevant, related二、心理描寫的素材1.與“喜悅和滿意”相關(guān)的詞塊abright/shiningsmile燦爛的微笑amixtureofexcitementandhappiness既興奮又開心burstintolaughter/burstoutlaughing突然大笑起來bewildwithjoy/delight欣喜若狂bejoyfulabout/at/over對(duì)……很高興beinhighspirits情緒高漲bepleasedbeyonddescription快樂難以言表lightup喜逐顏開becontent/satisfiedwith對(duì)……滿意bedelightedat對(duì)……很高興withpleasure非常樂意2.與“悲傷和煩惱”相關(guān)的詞塊besadatheart心里悲傷bedowninspirits情緒低落anoceanofsadness悲傷的海洋burstintotears/burstoutcrying大哭起來sob啜泣becloudedwithgrief陰沉的悲傷beinlowspirits情緒低落fallintodespair陷入絕望feeldepressed/discouraged感到沮喪/泄氣haveaworriedlook愁眉苦臉3.與“生氣和怨怒”相關(guān)的詞塊beveryangryat對(duì)……很生氣feelangry/annoyed感到惱怒/生氣beseizedbyanger充滿憤怒befumingwithrage大發(fā)雷霆tremblewithanger憤怒得顫抖alookofburninganger憤怒的一眼flareup勃然大怒beinarage一怒之下bemadat對(duì)……生氣三、寫作素材各主題升華句1、真善美

助人為樂:

Rosesgiven,fragranceinhand.

Rosesgiven,fragranceinhand.(贈(zèng)人玫瑰，手留余香)Youreapwhatyousow.(種瓜得瓜；善有善報(bào))Sowthewindandreapthewhirlwind.Smallkindnesscanbringrichreward.(小小的善意可以帶來豐厚的回報(bào))Smallactcanbring/contributeto/giverisetoabigdifference.Asmallact/gestureofkindnesswillperhapsmelt/cureone’sloneliness."Thesmallestactofkindnessisworthmorethanthegrandestintention."(王爾德)Neverunderestimatethepower/valueofouractions(toliftpeopleup).Noactofkindness,nomatterhowsmall,iseverwasted.Themiracleisthis:themorewesharethemorewehave.2、真善美

積極向上:

Whenlifegivesyoulemons,makelemonade.

Whenlifegivesyoulemons,makelemonade.Tochangetheworstsituationintobest,oneshouldtakeactions.“Neverlose.Ieitherwinorlearn”NelsonMandelaAdversity/Setbacksinlifeiseitherablessingindisguiseorafruitfullesson.Yourcurrentsituationisnotyourfinaldestination.Bepatient,trustthetimingandenjoythejourney.Itisbettertolightacandlethantocursethedarkness.Lifewithoutdreamsislikeabirdwithabrokenwing.3、真善美

個(gè)人成長(zhǎng):

It’snevertoolatetolearn.

Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.(有志者事竟成)It’snevertoolatetolearn.Everyindividualissupposedtoacceptmorechallengesandmakemoreattempts.Actually,eachindividualpossessestalent.Bebrave,risetosetbacks/obstacles,andmakeefforts.Youwillendupcreatingmiracles.(直面困難/努力/終將制造奇跡)Seizetheday,andchaseyourdreams.Aslongasyougraspeveryopportunityandtakefulladvantageofit,youwillstandachancetorealizeyourdreams.Thejourneytosuccessisnotsmooth.Itisfullofchallengesanddifficulties.Ifyougetdisheartenedordiscouragedbythesehurdles,youcannotattainsuccess.4、親情主題:Familyandfriendsarehiddentreasures.

Familyandfriendsarehiddentreasures.Family,awonderfulshelteranda24hourharbor,isalwaysthereforus.Familyloveisthegreatestgiftinlife.Familyistouswhatharboristoships.(家庭之于我們就像港口之于船只)“Familyisalifejacketinthestormyseaoflife.”–J.K.RowlingFamiliesarethepassthatguidesus.Family:wherelifebeginsandloveneverends.四、相關(guān)表達(dá)：詞/句活到老學(xué)到老

It'snevertoolatetolearn.克服困難

overeallthedifficulties完成目標(biāo)acplishyourgoal實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想realizeyourdreams追逐夢(mèng)想

pursueone’sdream創(chuàng)造奇跡createmiracles充分利用takefulladvantageof做出努力makeeveryeffort只要aslongas克服恐懼conquerfear學(xué)習(xí)永遠(yuǎn)為時(shí)不晚。每個(gè)人都應(yīng)該并且有權(quán)利去接受更多的挑戰(zhàn)，做更多的嘗試。It'snevertoolatetolearn.Eachindividualhastherighttoacceptmorechallengesandmakemoreattempts.只要我們敢于夢(mèng)想，不被困難所阻擋，一切皆有可能一夢(mèng)想永無止境。Aslongaswedaretodreamanddon'tletdifficultiesgetinourway,anythingispossiblethere'snoendtowhereourdreamscantakeus.苦難是磨煉人的好機(jī)會(huì)。Adversityisagooddiscipline.戰(zhàn)勝恐懼和實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)需要決心和樂觀。Determinationandoptimismarewhatittakestoconqueryourfearandacplishyourgoal.世界總會(huì)給有夢(mèng)想的人開路。Theworldmakeswayforthedreamer.事實(shí)上，每個(gè)人都有天賦。發(fā)現(xiàn)它的時(shí)候要勇敢，也要付出努力。最終，你會(huì)創(chuàng)造奇跡。Actually,everyindividualpossessestalent.Bebravewhenyoufinditandalsomakeefforts.Youcancreatemiraclesintheend.有時(shí)候一些小小的善行可能足以帶來巨大的改變。Sometimes,asmallactofkindnessmaybepowerfulenoughtomakeahugedifference.有時(shí)候表達(dá)一些小小的關(guān)愛也可能融化人們內(nèi)心的孤單。Sometimes,asmallgestureofcarewillpossiblymeltpeople'sloneliness.一個(gè)小小的善行，無論是對(duì)施予者還是接受者，都是一份祝福。Onesimpleactofkindnessisablessingforboththegiverandthereceiveralike.當(dāng)別人遭遇尷尬的情況時(shí)，我們應(yīng)該設(shè)身處地地為他們著想。Whenawkwardsituationshappentoothers,weshouldputourselvesintotheirshoes.我恍然大悟，那一刻的善良對(duì)另一個(gè)人來說意義重大，而一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的行為可以使世界變得如此美好。Itdawnedonmethatamomentofkindnesscouldmeansomuchtoanother,andthatasimpleactcouldmaketheworldsomuchbetter.我緊緊地握著紙袋，眼淚毫無控制地流了下來。

正是愛讓世界轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng)，在我心里里深深地感受到了這一點(diǎn)。Iheldthepaperbagtightly,tearsrollingdownwithoutcontrol.Itislovethatmakestheworldgoaround,whichIfeltdeepinmyheart.直到那時(shí)，我才意識(shí)到，正是勇敢才能克服一切困難。OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasbraverythatcanconquerwhateverdifficultycameintheway.最后，我們走出了困住我們的森林。多么難忘的經(jīng)歷?。∈聦?shí)證明，只要我們保持冷靜，就總有辦法擺脫困境。Finally,wewentoutoftheforestthattrappedus.Whatanunforgettableexperience!Itturnsoutthatthere’salwaysawayoutofanyplightaslongaswestaycalm.Part3綜合模擬演練（2023·湖南永州·統(tǒng)考二模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。“JAMIEEVANS.”O(jiān)hno.PleasetellmethatCoachCaffertydidNOTjustsaymyname.Notfortheonehundredmeterbreaststroke(蛙泳).Exceptalleyeswereturnedtomewhensheannouncedit,andhereyesmetmineovertheclipboard(剪貼板)thatheldthelistofeventsandswimmersforthePlainTownshipAquaticCentermeet.ThePTACmeetwasthefirstoftheseason,andIwasnotready.“Remember,themeetisonWednesdaynight.Behereatfourthirtyforandtheracekicksoffatsix.I’llseeyouatpracticetomorrow.”CoachCaffertyadded.ThecrowdclearedquicklyandIheadedbackhome,feelingdesperate.“DidyoufindoutyoureventsforWednesday?”Momaskedassheslidthepizzaboxacrossthetabletome.“Yeah.Onehundredbreaststroke,”Ifinallysaid,notmeetinghereyes.“Idon’tknowwhyCoachdidn’tgivemebackstroke(仰泳).Sheknowsit’smybest.Ican’tswimbreaststroke!”“Maybesheseessomethingyoudon’t.”Momsaid.“OrmaybeIshouldjustquittheswimteam.”Momfrowned.“Isthatwhatyouwant?”Isighed.“No.”Itookabiteofmypizza.“I’mterribleatbreaststroke.WhathappenswhenIshowuponWednesdayandrace,andIsinktothebottomofthepool?Orevenworse，einlast?”“Someonehastobelast.”Mompointedout.“ButIdon’tevenknowifIcanswimbreaststrokeforonehundredmeters!”Isetmypizzadown.“Shehadsubmittedthenames,butthere’snowayIcandothis.”“Youcould.Buthowwillyouknowunlessyoutry?”Mompersuaded.“Yeah,butifItry,Icouldfail.Infrontofeveryone.”IpicturedtheentirecrowdwatchingasIfinishedlast,pointingandlaughing.Mybellysqueezed.MomsetherpizzadownandgavemeherI’msayingsomethingimportantsolistenface.“Don’tworryaboutotherpeople.Justraceagainstyourself.Forgetaboutanythingelseexceptdoingyourbestandswimmingyourownrace.Provetoyourselfthatyoucandoit.”Somehow,thereseemedamysteriouspowerinherwordsfortingmyunsettlingheartandIdecidedtohaveatry.Thenextday,Iwasatpracticeasrequired.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Thefirstpracticewasadisaster.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Theneverythingcrashedinthelast5metersoftherace.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考答案】Paragraph1:Thefirstpracticewasadisaster.Ididn’tswimbreaststrokeforonehundredmetersandsanktothebottomofthepool.Icouldfeelpeoplesurroundingwereallpointingandlaughing.Whatashame!Faceblushing,Iwasabouttogiveupagainwhenmom’swordsresoundedinmymind,“Don’tworryaboutotherpeople.Justraceagainstyourself.”Calmnessgraduallyseizingme,Icontinuedtopractiseandgraduallymadeprogressinthefollowingpractices.Finally,WednesdaycameandIarrivedatthepoolhallnervously.Soonitwasmyturnandtomysurprise,Ihadagoodbeginning.Paragraph2:Theneverythingcrashedinthelast5metersoftherace.Mylegswerepillarsoflead.Ikicked,butitfeltlikeIwasmovingthroughcement.Myarmswereonfire,andmylungswerebursting.IslappeditwithwhatlittleenergyIhadleft.Therewasnooneelseleftinthepool.Ihadfinishedlast.Afterthemeet,Momfoundme,exhausted,collapsinginachair.“I’msoproudofyou,”shesaid.“Ilost.”“Yeah.”Shenodded.“Butyoudidit,right?”Ibitmylip.“Yeah.IguessIdid.”Ididn’teclosetoplacing,butIhadgiveneverythingIhadtofinish.“Iswammyrace.AndIthinkIwon.”Raceisnotonlytobeatyourpetitorsbutalsotoraceagainstyourself.【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者被選為參加一百米蛙泳比賽，但是作者并不擅長(zhǎng)，擔(dān)心自己會(huì)輸?shù)舯荣悾髞碓谀赣H的開導(dǎo)下，作者認(rèn)真訓(xùn)練，并參加了比賽，盡管最后并未得到冠軍，但是戰(zhàn)勝了自己?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“第一次練習(xí)是一場(chǎng)災(zāi)難?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者第一次訓(xùn)練，情況很糟糕，但是想到母親的話，最后作者堅(jiān)持了下來。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“然后在比賽的最后5米，一切都崩潰了?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懽髡咦詈筮€是輸?shù)袅吮荣?，母親來安慰作者，雖然沒有贏競(jìng)爭(zhēng)對(duì)手，但是贏了自己。2.續(xù)寫線索：被選為參加一百米蛙泳比賽——感到擔(dān)心——向母親抱怨——母親安慰——參加訓(xùn)練——堅(jiān)持完成比賽——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①回響：resound/reverberate②練習(xí)：practise/train/discipline③我認(rèn)為：Ithink/Iconsider/inmyopinion④完成：finish/acplish/plete情緒類①緊張的：nervously/anxiously/restlessly②驚訝：surprise/amaze/astonish【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Faceblushing,Iwasabouttogiveupagainwhenmom’swordsresoundedinmymind,“Don’tworryaboutotherpeople.(運(yùn)用了獨(dú)立主格作狀語(yǔ)和when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句)[高分句型2]Ikicked,butitfeltlikeIwasmovingthroughcement.(運(yùn)用了省略that的賓語(yǔ)從句)（2023春·河北邯鄲·高三校聯(lián)考一模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Whenmyfatherdoesn’tanswerthephone,Idon’tthinkanythingofit.He’s75yearsoldanddoesn’talwayswanttotalk.ThiswaswhatItoldmyselfwhenIcalledhimandhedidn’tansweroneWednesdayafternooninJanuaryearlierthisyear.IwasinThailandforatrip.It’ssunnytherebutinOhio,wheremydadlives,it’scoldandsnowy.Itriedcallingmydadtwodayslater.Again,noanswer.Iwasstartingtofeeluneasy.Thankfully,Ididn’thaveenoughtimetoworrybecauseheimmediatelycalledback.Buthisvoicewasdryandweak.Hesaidhehadfallendownandhadbeenonthefloorfordays.Hewascallingfromthefloor.IimmediatelyusedanotherphonetocallmysisterKristel.Whenshe’salreadyinthecar,Ihungupwithherandcontinuedtalkingwithmydad.Ididn’twanttohangup,becauseIdidn’tknowifhehadaheartattackorastroke.WhatIdidknowwasthatIwishedIwasn’tsofaraway.Mydadspentthenextthreedaysinthehospital.Thedoctorsdidn’tknowwhathadhappened.Theteststheyrandidn’ttellthemanythingbecausehewasonthefloorfortoolong.Besidesherworktime,mysisterwastheonesittingnexttomydadforhoursinthehospitaltakingcareofhim.Shehadalwaysbeentheoneonthefrontlineofhiscarebutit’sbeingapparentthatshe’sburningout.Formostofmylife,I’venottakenonanykindoffamilyresponsibility.I’mtheyoungest.Istudiedabroad.IvacationedinfarawaylandsandIwasalwaystoobusytoehome.ButmysisterKristel,whois10yearsolderthanme,hasalwaysbeenresponsible.Asshegrewup,shehelpedourparentsonthefarm.Eversinceshewasinhighschool,Kristelhasalwayshadmultiplejobs.Butwhenmydadfellandwasrushedtothehospital,Idecidedtospendmoretimewithhim.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。WhenIeventuallyarrivedatthehospital,mydadwasstilllyingonbed._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Atthemoment,IpromisedtomyselfthatIwouldn’tleavehimuntilherecovered._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】WhenIeventuallyarrivedatthehospital,mydadwasstilllyingonbed.Theceilingwastall.Lightwasstreamingin.It’sbeautiful.Butmydadwasalmostunrecognizable.Hewasthinandhadreallylongbeard.Ididn’tletmyconcernshowonmyface.Instead,Igavehimakissandimmediatelystartedtocuthisbeard.HisfacelitupandletmetakecareofhiminawayIneverhaddonebefore.Atthemoment,IpromisedtomyselfthatIwouldn’tleavehimuntilherecovered.Forthenexttwoweeks,Ibecamehisfulltimecaretaker.Everymorningafterwewokeup,wehadcoffeetogether.Iwalkedhimupanddownthehallwayofhisapartment,andacpaniedhimtoseedoctors.Whenhe’sdeeplyunmotivated,Iwouldtrymybesttocheerhimup.Duetothewaveofmyenergyandconfidence,myfathersoonrecovered.【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了在泰國(guó)旅行的作者打回家，發(fā)現(xiàn)75歲的父親摔倒在地板上好幾天了，父親被送往醫(yī)院后，醫(yī)生也沒查出什么結(jié)果，而一直在照顧父親的姐姐還要兼顧自己的工作，也已筋疲力盡，作者決定回去多陪陪父親，在作者的陪伴看護(hù)下，父親很快就恢復(fù)了健康。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)我最終到達(dá)醫(yī)院時(shí)，父親還躺在床上?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者與父親相見時(shí)的情景，因此令作者覺得一定要好好看護(hù)年邁的父親。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“那一刻，我向自己保證，在他康復(fù)之前，我不會(huì)離開他?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懽髡呒?xì)心照料父親，父親最終恢復(fù)健康。2.續(xù)寫線索：到達(dá)醫(yī)院——與父親相見——陪伴看護(hù)——父親康復(fù)3.詞匯激活行為類①.到達(dá)：arriveat/reach②.陪伴：acpanysb/keepsbpany③.照顧：takecareof/attendto情緒類①.沒讓我的關(guān)心表現(xiàn)在我的臉上：notletmyconcernshowonmyface/hidemyconcern②.使……振作起來：cheersbup/makesbmorecheerful【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].HisfacelitupandletmetakecareofhiminawayIneverhaddonebefore.（由省略to的不定式作賓補(bǔ)，省略關(guān)系詞that/inwhich的定語(yǔ)從句修飾先行詞way）[高分句型2].Everymorningafterwewokeup,wehadcoffeetogether.（由after引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）（2023·福建·統(tǒng)考一模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Rick,atenyearoldboy,wasconstantlyangryateverythingaroundhim.Healwaysfoughtinschoolwiththeotherkids.Oncehehadanoutburstinschool.Upsetbysomethingaclassmatesaidtohim,hepushedtheboy,andafighthappened.Whentheteachersteppedintobreakitup,Rickwentcrazy,throwingpapersandbooksaroundtheclassroomandrushingout.Histeacherscouldn’tsayanythingthatwouldfortthekid.Andtheparentsofhisschoolmatesweregettingconcerned.Rickwasearningquitethereputation.Aftertalkingwithschoolofficials,Rick’smomtriedeverythingshecouldtocalmRickdown.Shetrieddifferentmethodsuntilonedayshecamehomewithacanvas(畫布)andpaint.“What’sthis?”,Rickasked.Rick’smomhandedoverthepaintingequipmentandsaid,“Wheneveryoufeelangry,paintwhateveryou’reangryaboutinsteadofburstingout.”Rickwasn’tthathappyaboutitbuthegaveitatryanyway.Overthenextfewweeks,theyoungboycreatedseveralartworks.Theymostlyshoweddisturbingimagesthough.SohismomtookallofthepaintingsandcalledRickoversothattheycouldtalkaboutthem.“Tellme,Rick.Whatarethesepaintingsabout?”“Well,thefirstpaintingisabouthowsomeofthekidsshowofftheirnewclothesandpencilcases.ThenextpaintingisaboutmyteacherwhokeepstellingmeabouthowI’mdoingthingswrong.Andthelastpaintingisabouthowoneofmyschoolmate’sfathersuggestedthatIchangemyattitude.Allofthemmakemesoangry.”Rick’smom,inacalmvoice,tookRickbyhersideandtoldhim:“Don’tyouseeit,Rick?”“Seewhat?”Rickasked.“You’resoangryatallofthesethingsbutnotoncedidyoutrytounderstandwhyyou’regettingsoangry.Whathaveallthesepeopledonetoyou,really?”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Rickwaslostinthought._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Rickknewitwastimetochange._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】OnepossibleversionRickwaslostinthought.Itslowlydawnedonhimthatpeoplehewasangryathaddonenothingwrong.Hisclassmateswhoshowedtheirnewclothesandpencilcasestoothersmightjustwanttosharetheirhappinesswithfriends.Histeacherdidblamehimbecausehewasbeingaproblem.Andhisschoolmate’sfatherwasjusttryingtohelphimcorrecthismistakes.Theyhadnointentiontohurthimbuthejustlethisunreasonableangerconsumehimandhurtthem.Howridiculoushehadbeen!Rickknewitwastimetochange.Fromthenon,Ricktriedhisbesttocontrolhistemper.Everytimehefelthewastoexplode,hewouldwalkawayandaskhimselfwhyhewasangryandwhetheritwasreasonabletobeangry.Thenhewouldfindhispeaceandlaughedhisangeraway.Gradually,everyonesawadifferentRick.Henolongershoutedatothersorthrewthingsaway.Hechattedwithclassmatesafterclassandplimentedtheirnewclothesandpencilcases.Heevenhelpedteacherscarrybooksbeforeclasssometimes.Rick’schangesurprisedeveryoneandtheyallfelthappyforhim.【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了一個(gè)十歲的男孩Rick總是因?yàn)橹車母鞣N事情發(fā)脾氣，經(jīng)常和同學(xué)打架。他的媽媽在嘗試過各種方法無效后，終于有一天，他對(duì)媽媽帶來的一塊畫布和顏料有了一點(diǎn)興趣，于是在媽媽的建議下，他開始嘗試創(chuàng)作繪畫以轉(zhuǎn)移自己的壞脾氣，并且描述了自己所畫的各種讓他生氣的人物和場(chǎng)景。逐漸地，在媽媽平和的引導(dǎo)下，他開始反思自己的行為，最終作出了改變?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Rick陷入了沉思?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Rick開始重新思考并逐漸理解了以前令他生氣的那些同學(xué)、家長(zhǎng)和老師的行為。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Rick知道是時(shí)候作出改變了?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫Rick是如何改變的，描述具體的行為，最終讓自己和周圍的人都感到了快樂。2.續(xù)寫線索：沉思豁然開朗具體描述他的理解決定改變?nèi)绾胃淖儯ň唧w行為）獲得快樂行為類①傷害：hurt/harm②讓某人做某事：letsbdosth/makesbdosth③盡最大努力做某事、不遺余力做某事：tryone’sbesttodosth/sparenoefforttodosth④爆發(fā)：explode/burst⑤稱贊：pliment/praise情緒類①生氣的：angry/annoyed②高興的：happy/joyful【點(diǎn)睛】【高分句型1】Itslowlydawnedonhimthatpeoplehewasangryathaddonenothingwrong.（運(yùn)用了以it為形式主語(yǔ)，連詞that引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句以及省略了關(guān)系代詞who/whom/that的定語(yǔ)從句。）【高分句型2】Everytimehefelthewastoexplode,hewouldwalkawayandaskhimselfwhyhewasangryandwhetheritwasreasonabletobeangry.（運(yùn)用了以everytime為連詞引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句和以連接詞why和whether引導(dǎo)的兩個(gè)并列的賓語(yǔ)從句。）（2022·湖北·荊州中學(xué)三模）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)和給定段落開頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。WhenIwassixyearsold,Ivisitedmygrandfather’sfarminKansasandhesentmeintothewoodstogatherpecans(胡桃)forustoenjoylater.Thepecanswereaboutthesizeofaman’sthumbnailandjustaboutthetastiestsnackI’deverhad.However,pecanpickingwasreallytiringandmylittlebucketwasonlyhalffullafterworkinghardforalongtime.IthoughtIwouldn’tletGrandpadown.Justthensomethingcaughtmyeye.Alargebrownsquirrelwasafewfeetaway.Iwatchedashepickedupapecan,hurriedtoatree,jumpeduptothetrunkanddisappearedinalargehole.Amomentlaterthesquirrelpoppedbackoutandclimbeddowntothegroundtopickupanothernut.Onceagain,hetookthepecanbacktohishidingplaceinsidethehollowofthetree.Notsosecretanymore,Ithought.Idashedovertothetreeandlookedintothehole.Itwasfilledwithpecans!Goldenpecanswererighttherefortaking.Thiswasmychance.Handfulbyhandful,Iscoopedallofthosepecansintomybucket.Nowitwasalmostfull!IwassoproudofmyselfthatIcouldn’twaittoshowGrandpaallthepecans.Iranbackandshouted,“Lookatallthepecans!”Helookedintothebucketandasked,“Well,well,howdidyoufindsomany?”ItoldhimhowI’dfollowedthesquirrelandtakenthepecansfromhishidingplace.GrandpacongratulatedmeonhowsmartI’dbeeninobservingthesquirrelandhishabits.Thenhedidsomethingthatsurprisedme.Hehandedthebucketbacktomeandputhisarmgentlyaroundmyshoulders.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:“Thatsquirrelworkedveryhardtogatherhiswintersupplyoffood,”hesaid.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Ipickedupthatlittlebucketfullofpecansandcarrieditbacktothetree._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案：“Thatsquirrelworkedveryhardtogatherhiswintersupplyoffood,”hesaid.“Nowthatallofhispecansareone,don’tyouthinkthatlittlesquirrelwillbehungrywhenitgetscold?”Grandpaaskedme.“Ididn’tthinkaboutthat,”Imurmuredwithshame,bloodrushingtomyface.Grandpatoldmeseriouslythatagoodmanshouldnevertakeadvantageofsomeoneelse’shardwork,eventhesquirrels.Idroopedmyhead,feelingashollowasthatoldtree.Theimageofthatstarvingsquirrelwouldn'tleavemymind.TherewasonlyonethingIcoulddo.Ipickedupthatlittlebucketfullofpecansandcarrieditbacktothetree.Liftingthebucketup,Ipouredallofthenutsbackintothehole,refillingitwithnotonlyallofthesquirrel’specansbutalsotheonesIhadcollectedonmyown.Ibreathedasighofreliefandreturnedhomewiththeemptybucket.Ididn’teatanyofthesweetpecansthatnight,butIhadsomethingmuchmorefilling,whichwasthesatisfactionofknowingIhaddonejusttherightthing.【解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者六歲那年去爺爺農(nóng)場(chǎng)采摘胡桃發(fā)生的事情。在采摘的過程中，作者發(fā)現(xiàn)了一只松鼠，它的窩內(nèi)儲(chǔ)存了很多胡桃。當(dāng)作者把松鼠的胡桃全部拿走展示給爺爺?shù)臅r(shí)候，爺爺?shù)脑捵屪髡呙靼椎剑阂粋€(gè)好人永遠(yuǎn)不應(yīng)