02記敘文(記事篇)-備戰(zhàn)2023年中考英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)(寫(xiě)作步驟+滿(mǎn)分范文+詞句積累)

備戰(zhàn)2023年中考英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)（寫(xiě)作步驟+滿(mǎn)分范文+詞句積累）第一章記敘文記敘文是一種以記人敘事為主要內(nèi)容的文章,通常包括六個(gè)要素：時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物、事件、原因及結(jié)果,寫(xiě)作時(shí)各要素要交代清楚,但并不要求全部具備。寫(xiě)記敘類(lèi)文章時(shí)除了六個(gè)要素外,還要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1.記敘方式通常有順敘、倒敘和插敘三種。順敘是英語(yǔ)記敘文最常用的一種記敘方式,即按照事件發(fā)展的時(shí)間先后順序來(lái)敘述。2.人稱(chēng)一般用第一人稱(chēng)和第三人稱(chēng)進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作。第一人稱(chēng)是從“參與者”親眼所見(jiàn)、親耳所聞的經(jīng)歷開(kāi)始敘述；第三人稱(chēng)是以“觀察者”的身份進(jìn)行記敘,通過(guò)作者與讀者之外的第三者,直接把故事呈現(xiàn)在讀者面前。3.時(shí)態(tài)記敘文用于記敘過(guò)去發(fā)生的事件或經(jīng)歷,因此常用一般過(guò)去時(shí),還可根據(jù)上下文輔以其他時(shí)態(tài)。Part2記事寫(xiě)法點(diǎn)撥在寫(xiě)記事文章的時(shí)候,我們可以分成以下三部分來(lái)寫(xiě)：1.事情的開(kāi)端交代時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物和事情的起因等。在這部分的寫(xiě)作中,不用詳細(xì)地展開(kāi),只需簡(jiǎn)單交代,并可使用“設(shè)置懸念”等寫(xiě)作手法。2.事情的經(jīng)過(guò)和高潮詳細(xì)描寫(xiě)事情是怎么開(kāi)始、發(fā)展、并達(dá)到高潮的。這部分是文章的中心,所以一定要具體、詳細(xì)地描寫(xiě)出事情發(fā)展全過(guò)程的細(xì)節(jié),要盡量地真實(shí)、引人入勝。3.事情的結(jié)尾這部分簡(jiǎn)單地進(jìn)行描寫(xiě)就行,還可在這部分加上一些自己獲得的啟發(fā)和教訓(xùn),但無(wú)須詳細(xì)展開(kāi),用一兩句話帶過(guò)就行。必備詞匯1敘事順序first,tobeginwith,firstofall,firstly首先secondly,then,besides,what’smore,inaddition,moreover然后atlast,lastbutnotleast,aboveall,allinall,tosumup,onthewhole,finally最后2時(shí)間描寫(xiě)after在······之后afterashort/longtime/period在一段很短／很長(zhǎng)的時(shí)間后afterwards后來(lái)；然后assoonas······就······fromthattimeon從那時(shí)起immediately立刻；立即lately最近；近來(lái)；不久前nowadays現(xiàn)在；如今recently最近shortly馬上；立刻sincethen從那時(shí)起when,while當(dāng)······的時(shí)候3地點(diǎn)詞匯church教堂tower塔bridge橋station車(chē)站dormitory宿舍supermarket超市shop商店hospital醫(yī)院theater劇院playground操場(chǎng)cinema電影院museum博物館4動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)gooutforapicnic去野餐haveaparty舉行聚會(huì)gocamping去露營(yíng)rideahorse騎馬flykites放風(fēng)箏haveawalk散步hurryto…匆忙趕到······takephotos拍照setoff出發(fā)seeadoctor看醫(yī)生watchthematch看比賽climbmountains爬山4結(jié)尾詞匯thanksto多虧asaresult結(jié)果luckily幸運(yùn)地because/becauseof因?yàn)閍tlast/intheend最后必備句型1介紹事情的開(kāi)端(1)Oneday/Theotherday/Acoupleofdaysagowhilehewas...,he...一天／前幾天當(dāng)他正在······,他······(2)Itwassnowing/rainingheavilyonMonday/Sundaymorning,when...星期一／星期天早上,正在下著大雪／雨,當(dāng)······(3)Allthroughmyjuniorhighschool,Icouldn’tforget...在我整個(gè)的初中生涯中,我不能忘記······(4)Lastweek,whenIwasonmywayhome,somethingterriblehappened.上個(gè)星期,當(dāng)我在回家路上的時(shí)候,一些糟糕的事情發(fā)生了。(5)Theeventtookplace/happened/occurredintheearlymorning.那件事情發(fā)生在一大早。2描寫(xiě)事情的過(guò)程(1)Withouthesitation,Idecidedtogivehimahand.毫不猶豫,我決定幫助他。(2)ItwasmyfirsttimetoMountTai.那是我第一次去泰山。(3)Wespentmanyhourstalkinghappily.我們愉快地交談了幾個(gè)小時(shí)。(4)Thelineofpeoplewasendless.人們排成的隊(duì)伍看不到盡頭。3交代事情的結(jié)尾(1)I’llneverforgetthedaywhenwevisitedthefarm.我將永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記我們參觀農(nóng)場(chǎng)的那一天。(2)Whatapleasanttrip!多么愉快的一次旅行??！(3)Thiswillbeanunforgettableexperience.這將會(huì)是一次難忘的經(jīng)歷。(4)Ihaveneverseenacomedylikethat.我從未看過(guò)那樣的喜劇。(5)Ihadfunatthepartytonight.今晚我在聚會(huì)上玩得很愉快。拋磚引玉題目：家是我們溫暖的港灣。你的家庭幸福嗎?請(qǐng)講述一個(gè)發(fā)生在你和家庭成員之間的難忘故事。請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示要求寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)小短文,詞數(shù)不得少于80。提示：1.簡(jiǎn)單介紹一下你的家庭；2.講述一個(gè)發(fā)生在你和家庭成員之間難忘的故事。注意：不要出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和地名。思路導(dǎo)航第1步：例文審題主體人稱(chēng)題目要求講述一個(gè)發(fā)生在“我”的家庭中的難忘故事,故主體人稱(chēng)應(yīng)為第一人稱(chēng)“I”。主體時(shí)態(tài)由于題目里要求講述的故事是已經(jīng)發(fā)生了的,故主體時(shí)態(tài)用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。寫(xiě)作貼士題目只給出了一個(gè)寫(xiě)作大綱,沒(méi)有具體細(xì)節(jié),作者在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充.注意文章中不要出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和地名。第2步：列提綱(1)簡(jiǎn)要介紹“我”的家庭的基本情況；(2)具體詳細(xì)地描述發(fā)生在家庭中的難忘往事。第3步：參考詞句(1)warm;askforreturn;carefor;family...(2)hurryhome;preparefortheexam;unhappy;angry;filledwithtears...(3)turnablindeye;begratefulfor...第4步：連句成篇LovefromMyFamilyIhaveahappyandwarmfamily.Myparentsoftengivemelovewithouteveraskingforreturn.Theyalwayscareforme.Istillrememberthatday.Onthatday,assoonastheclasswasover,Ihurriedhomeforlunch.Therewouldbeanexamintheafternoon,soIwantedtogobacktoschoolearlytopreparefortheexam.ButwhenIgothome,thelunchwasnotreadyyet.Ifeltunhappyandkindofangry,soIranoutofthehouse.Onthewaybacktoschool,Iwasveryhungry.WhenIgotintotheclassroom,Isawalunchboxonmydesk.Oneclassmatetoldmethatitwasmymotherwhotookittome.Afteropeningthebox,Ifoundmyfavoritefoodinside.Myeyeswerefilledwithtears.Weoftenturnablindeyetothelovefromourparents.Weshouldnotdothisanymoreandshouldbegratefultothem.參考譯文家人的愛(ài)我有一個(gè)開(kāi)心、溫暖的家庭。我的父母給予我很多愛(ài),并且從未要求過(guò)回報(bào)。他們總是關(guān)心著我。我仍記得那天(的情景)。那天,剛一下課,我就趕回家吃午飯。下午有一場(chǎng)考試,所以我想早點(diǎn)回到學(xué)校復(fù)習(xí)準(zhǔn)備考試。但當(dāng)我回到家的時(shí)候,午飯還沒(méi)準(zhǔn)備好。我感到不高興,并有點(diǎn)生氣,所以我跑出了家。在回學(xué)校的路上,我感覺(jué)很餓。當(dāng)我進(jìn)到教室的時(shí)候,我看見(jiàn)我桌上有一個(gè)午餐盒。一個(gè)同學(xué)告訴我,這是我媽媽拿給我的。打開(kāi)盒子后,我看到里面有我最喜歡的菜。我的眼里充滿(mǎn)了淚水。我們經(jīng)常無(wú)視父母對(duì)我們的愛(ài)。我們不應(yīng)該再這樣做了,我們應(yīng)該對(duì)他們心懷感激。成長(zhǎng)記憶范文1MountainClimbingLastsummer,Iwentmountainclimbingtogetherwithmyfather.Istillrememberthedayuntilnow.Westartedclimbingthemountainearlyinthemorning.Butwhenthesuncameup,itbecameveryhot.Igotallsweaty,feelingdizzyandtired,soIcouldn’thelpcomplainingandwantedtoquit.Hearingmycomplaint,myfatherencouragedmenottogiveupandhelpedmewipeawaythesweatontheface.Hesaid,“Wewon’tseethefantasticsceneryunlesswereachthetop.”Isuddenlycheeredupandcontinuedtoclimbwithfullstrength.WegottothetopatlastandenjoyedthebeautyofthenaturethatIhadneverseen.Icouldneverforgetthatexperienceandthelessonfromthatday.Thebeautycanonlybeseenafteryoumakeyourefforts.參考譯文爬山去年暑假,我和爸爸一起去爬了山。直到現(xiàn)在我還記得那天。一大早,我們就開(kāi)始爬山。但是當(dāng)太陽(yáng)出來(lái)的時(shí)候,天氣變得很熱。我全身都是汗,又暈又累,所以我禁不住抱怨起來(lái),并想要放棄。聽(tīng)到了我的抱怨,爸爸鼓勵(lì)我不要放棄,并幫我擦掉了臉上的汗。他說(shuō)：“除非我們到達(dá)山頂,否則無(wú)法看到美麗的景色?！蔽彝蝗皇艿搅斯奈?繼續(xù)全力往上爬。我們最終到達(dá)了山頂,并欣賞到了我從未看過(guò)的大自然的美麗。我永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記那次經(jīng)歷,也不會(huì)忘記那天得到的啟示。只有在你努力過(guò)后才能看到美麗的景色。亮點(diǎn)詞匯1togetherwith...和······一起2comeup出來(lái)；出現(xiàn)3sweaty/adj.出汗的4dizzy/adj.眩暈的5complaint/n.抱怨；怨言6wipeaway擦掉；抹掉出彩句型1Icouldn’thelpdoing...我禁不住做······2Hearing...,myfather...聽(tīng)到了······,我爸爸······3Wewon’t...unless...我們不會(huì)······,除非······4Icontinuedtodo...withfullstrength.我繼續(xù)全力做······5Thebeautycanonlybeseenafteryoumakeyourefforts.美麗只有在你努力過(guò)后才能看到。高分點(diǎn)評(píng)本文描述了作者和爸爸的一次爬山經(jīng)歷,豐富的細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě),使人有身臨其境的感覺(jué)。作者在文中運(yùn)用了豐富的句型,如when引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句和unless引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句,為文章增色不少。最后得出的啟發(fā),更是點(diǎn)出了文章的主旨,將文章提升了一個(gè)高度。范文2GoBackHomeAloneTherewasanunforgettableexperienceinmychildhood.WhenIwassevenyearsold,mymotherwouldpickmeupfromtheschooleveryday.Butoneday,mymothertoldmethatshewouldn’tdothisanymore.Iwasafraidofgoingbackhomealone,soItriedtopersuadeher.AlthoughItoldhermyfear,shestillinsistedonheridea.Shethoughtitwasgoodformetolearntobeindependent.Thenextdayafterschool,Itookabustogobackhome.IforgottoseethebusroutewhenIgoton.Therefore,whenthebuswasmoreandmorefarawayfrommyhome,Ifeltveryterrified.Finally,Igottothelaststop,andthentookthesamebusbackhome.Afterthat,Ilearnedtogobackhomealone.Andthisexperiencemademeknowmoreaboutindependence.參考譯文獨(dú)自回家我的童年有過(guò)一次難以忘懷的經(jīng)歷。在我7歲的時(shí)候,我的媽媽每天會(huì)接我放學(xué)。但是有一天,媽媽說(shuō),她不會(huì)再接我放學(xué)了。我害怕一個(gè)人回家,所以我試圖說(shuō)服她。盡管我告訴了她我的恐懼,她仍堅(jiān)持她的想法。她認(rèn)為學(xué)會(huì)獨(dú)立對(duì)我來(lái)說(shuō)是件好事。第二天下課后,我就獨(dú)自坐了一輛公共汽車(chē)回家。當(dāng)我上車(chē)時(shí),忘記看路線了。因此,當(dāng)車(chē)離家越來(lái)越遠(yuǎn)時(shí),我感到非常害怕。最后,我到達(dá)了終點(diǎn)站,然后坐了同樣的公交車(chē)回家。從那以后,我學(xué)會(huì)了獨(dú)自回家。這次經(jīng)歷讓我更了解了獨(dú)立的含義。亮點(diǎn)詞匯1gobackhome回家2persuade/v.勸說(shuō)；說(shuō)服3farawayfrom...遠(yuǎn)離······4alone/adv.獨(dú)自地5independence/n.獨(dú)立出彩句型1Therewasa(n)...experienceinmychildhood.在我的童年,有一次······的經(jīng)歷。2Although...,shestillinsistedonheridea.即使······,她仍堅(jiān)持她的想法。3Shethoughtitwasgoodformeto...她認(rèn)為······對(duì)我好。4Iforgotto...whenIgoton.當(dāng)我上車(chē)的時(shí)候我忘記······高分點(diǎn)評(píng)本文以頗具戲劇性的經(jīng)歷展現(xiàn)了作者學(xué)會(huì)獨(dú)立的過(guò)程－學(xué)會(huì)自己放學(xué)回家,文章細(xì)節(jié)生動(dòng),真實(shí)具體,并在其中呈現(xiàn)了“我”和“媽媽”兩個(gè)人物鮮明的性格特點(diǎn)。作者對(duì)賓語(yǔ)從句的運(yùn)用非常嫻熟,如“mymothertoldmethat...”和“Shethought...”,增加句式變化的同時(shí),使文章的表達(dá)更為流利、順暢。家庭記事范文1AFunnyThingTherearethreepersonsinmyfamily,mymother,myfatherandI.Welivetogetherhappilyandtherearemanyinterestingstoriesaboutmyfamily.NowIwilltellyouoneofthem.Myfatherisahard-workingman.Butsometimesheworkssohardthathecan’trememberthedate.Oneday,hewantedtogetupearlyasusual,buthewasn’tabletodothat,becauseheforgottosetthealarmclockthenightbefore.Whenhegotup,hedideverythinginahurryandlefthomequickly.Buthecamebackhomesoonwithanangryface.Heshoutedatmymotherandme,“Whydon’tyoutellmeitisSundaytoday?”Wefirststoodthere,confused,andthenburstintolaughter.WhataninterestingfamilyIhave!Whataboutyourfamily?參考譯文一件有趣的事情我家有三口人：我媽媽、爸爸還有我。我們?cè)谝黄鹦腋５厣?我們家有許多有趣的故事。現(xiàn)在我給你講講其中一個(gè)。我爸爸是一個(gè)努力工作的人。但有的時(shí)候,他工作太勤奮以至于忘了日期。一天,爸爸想像平常一樣早起,但是他沒(méi)能做到,因?yàn)樗耙惶焱砩贤浽O(shè)置鬧鐘了。當(dāng)他起床時(shí),他匆匆忙忙地做完一切事情,就離開(kāi)家了。但是他很快就回來(lái)了,臉上滿(mǎn)是憤怒。他向我媽媽和我大喊,“為什么你們沒(méi)有告訴我今天是星期天?”我們一開(kāi)始在那里非常困惑,接著放聲大笑。多么有趣的家庭！你的家庭怎么樣呢?亮點(diǎn)詞匯1hard-working/adj.努力的；勤勉的2remember/v.記得；記住3asusual像往常一樣4inahurry匆忙地5angry/adj.生氣的6burstintolaughter放聲大笑出彩句型1Therearemanyinterestingstoriesaboutmyfamily.我們家有許多有趣的故事。2Heworkssohardthat...他工作如此努力,以至于······3Heforgotto...他忘記了······4He...withanangryface.他面帶怒氣······5Wefirststoodthere,confused,andthenburstintolaughter.我們一開(kāi)始站在那里,非常困惑,然后放聲大笑。6WhataninterestingfamilyIhave!多么有趣的家庭！高分點(diǎn)評(píng)本文記敘了“我”家中的一件趣事—爸爸忘記日期,星期天仍趕去上班。文章極具趣味性,體現(xiàn)了作者家庭中和睦幸福的一面.作者運(yùn)用的句式頗為豐富,如“so...that...”句型和文章最后一段中的感嘆句,是這篇佳作出色的重要原因。范文2TheFirstTimetoMakeDumplingsDuringtheSpringFestival,thereareoftenmanycelebrationsinmyfamily.Lastyear,mymotherdecidedtomakedumplingsathome,andsheaskedmetogiveherahand.Atthebeginning,Ithoughtitwouldbeaneasytask.Mymothershowedmehowtomakethemandthenletmefollowher.Ididassheshowedme,butlfoundmydumplingscouldnotcoverwell.AndItriedanotherone,stillthesame.Iwasveryconfused.Iseemedtofullyfollowmymother’ssteps,butIfailedintheend.Mymothersaidtomewithasmile,“Practicemakesperfect”.Iwasencouraged,andcontinuedtomakedumplings.Aftermakingseveralones,Ifinallymadeabeautifuldumpling.Iwasveryhappy,notonlyformakingadumpling,butforhavingtheexperienceofdoingsomethingwiththefamilytogether.參考譯文第一次做餃子春節(jié)期間,我的家里經(jīng)常有很多慶?；顒?dòng)。去年,我的媽媽決定在家包餃子,她還要求我給她幫忙。一開(kāi)始,我以為這會(huì)是個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的任務(wù)。媽媽先向我展示如何包餃子,然后讓我跟著她做。我照著她示范的做,但我發(fā)現(xiàn)我的餃子包得不好。我嘗試再包一個(gè),但結(jié)果仍一樣。我很困惑。我明明完全按著媽媽的步驟,但是我包出來(lái)的效果不好。我的媽媽笑著對(duì)我說(shuō)：“熟能生巧?！蔽冶还奈枇?然后繼續(xù)包餃子。在包了幾個(gè)之后,我終于包了一個(gè)漂亮的餃子。我非常高興,不僅因?yàn)榘艘粋€(gè)好看的餃子,還因?yàn)閾碛泻图胰艘黄鹱鰱|西的經(jīng)歷。亮點(diǎn)詞匯1celebration/n.慶祝活動(dòng)2giveherahand幫她一個(gè)忙3cover/v.蓋?。桓采w4follow...steps跟隨······步驟5havetheexperienceof...有······的經(jīng)歷出彩句型1Mymotherdecidedto...,andsheaskedmeto...我的媽媽決定······,她要求我······2Atthebeginning,...一開(kāi)始,······3Ididassheshowedme.我照著她示范的做。4Itriedanotherone,stillthesame.我嘗試再包一個(gè),但結(jié)果仍一樣。5Mymothersaidtomewithasmile.我的媽媽笑著對(duì)我說(shuō)。6Iwasveryhappy,notonlyfor...,butfor...我非常高興,不僅因?yàn)椤ぁぁぁぁぁ?還因?yàn)椤ぁぁぁぁぁじ叻贮c(diǎn)評(píng)本文記敘了作者與媽媽一起包餃子的經(jīng)歷,既蘊(yùn)含著滿(mǎn)滿(mǎn)的家庭溫情,又充滿(mǎn)哲理。本文句式雖看似簡(jiǎn)單,但句句之間均有細(xì)微差別,文章中還運(yùn)用了大量的短語(yǔ)、詞組,如“giveherahand”“havetheexperienceof”,大大增加了文章的特色。校園生活范文1GettingonwithClassmatesThereisalotoffuninmyschoollife,becauseIhavemanylovelyandfriendlyclassmatesthere.Wegetonwellwitheachother.Ioftenstudyintheclassroomwithmyclassmates.Whilemeetingwithdifficultproblemsinourhomework,wediscussthemtogether.Whenclassmatesareintrouble,wetryourbesttohelpthem.Afterschool,weplaysportsontheplayground.Weplaybasketball,football,badmintonandsoon.Sometimeswehavesomeclassactivities,suchassingingsongstogether.Weareinaharmoniousclass.Iamverygladtomeetmyclassmates,whobringmesomuchfun.Ihopethatwecouldallgetintoagoodseniorhighschool.參考譯文和同學(xué)相處我的校園生活充滿(mǎn)樂(lè)趣,因?yàn)樵谀抢镂矣泻芏嗫蓯?ài)又友好的同學(xué)。我們相處得很好。我經(jīng)常和我的同學(xué)在教室里學(xué)習(xí)。當(dāng)做作業(yè)遇到難題時(shí),我們會(huì)一起討論。當(dāng)同學(xué)有困難的時(shí)候,我們會(huì)盡最大的努力來(lái)幫助他們。課后,我們?cè)诓賵?chǎng)上運(yùn)動(dòng)。我們打籃球、踢足球、打羽毛球,等等。有時(shí)候我們有一些班級(jí)活動(dòng),比如一起唱歌。我們(生活)在一個(gè)和諧的班級(jí)里。我非常高興遇到我的同學(xué)們,他們帶給我很多的快樂(lè)。我希望我們都能進(jìn)入一個(gè)好的高中。亮點(diǎn)詞匯1friendly/adj.友好的2difficult/adj.困難的3discuss/v.討論4introuble在困難中5classactivities班級(jí)活動(dòng)出彩句型1Thereisalotoffuninmyschoollife.我的校園生活充滿(mǎn)樂(lè)趣。2Wegetonwellwitheachother.我們相處得很好。3Wetryourbesttodo...我們盡最大的努力來(lái)······4Weareinaharmoniousclass.我們(生活)在一個(gè)和諧的班級(jí)里。5Iamverygladto...我非常高興······高分點(diǎn)評(píng)本文的主題明確,邏輯清晰,主要敘述了和同學(xué)相處的時(shí)光,表達(dá)了濃濃的同學(xué)之情。文章采取了三段式的寫(xiě)法,開(kāi)篇點(diǎn)題,中間詳細(xì)展開(kāi),最后再進(jìn)行回應(yīng),并表達(dá)自己的期望,脈絡(luò)清楚。文章的句式簡(jiǎn)潔而又富有變化,短語(yǔ)、詞組的運(yùn)用也恰到好處,如“alotoffun”“getonwellwith”等。范文2ARelayRaceThesportsmeetinginourschoolisveryinteresting,andmanystudentsparticipateiniteveryyear.Thisyear,Itookpartintherelayrace,inwhichIranthelastlap.Itwasthefinaleventatthesportsmeeting.Everyonepaidgreatattentiontoit.Alltherunnersgotreadyatthestartingline.Assoonastheracebegan,everyonewastoonervoustocheer.Whenitwasmyturn,Icouldfeelthatarunnerwascatchingupwithme,soItriedmybesttorunfaster.Finally,ourclasswonthefirstprizeinthismostexcitingevent.IwasveryhappythatIwontheprizeformyclass.ThiswasthemostunforgettablesportsmeetingthatIhadhad.參考譯文一次接力賽我們學(xué)校的運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)很有趣,每年很多學(xué)生都會(huì)參與其中。今年,我參加了接力賽,在比賽中我跑最后一棒。這是運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)的最后一個(gè)項(xiàng)目。每個(gè)人都很關(guān)注這個(gè)項(xiàng)目。運(yùn)動(dòng)員們?cè)谄鹋芫€上做準(zhǔn)備。比賽一開(kāi)始,所有人都緊張得停止了呼喊。輪到我時(shí),我能感到有一名運(yùn)動(dòng)員正在追上我,所以我盡最大的努力讓自己跑得更快一些。最后,我們班在這項(xiàng)最激動(dòng)人心的項(xiàng)目中贏得了第一名。我非常高興自己為班級(jí)贏得了獎(jiǎng)項(xiàng)。這是我最難忘的一次運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)。亮點(diǎn)詞匯1participatein...參加······;參與······2relayrace接力賽3startingline起跑線4nervous/adj.不安的；緊張的5winthefirstprize贏得一等獎(jiǎng)出彩句型1Everyonepaidgreatattentionto...每個(gè)人都很關(guān)注······2Assoonas...一······就······3Everyonewastoo...to...每個(gè)人都太······,以至于······4Itwasone’sturn.輪到某人.5Thisisthemostunforgettable...thatIhad.這是我最難忘的······高分點(diǎn)評(píng)本文將接力賽的“interesting”描寫(xiě)得淋漓盡致,使讀者產(chǎn)生身臨其境的感覺(jué),感受著運(yùn)動(dòng)場(chǎng)上的緊張與激動(dòng)。本文的開(kāi)頭、過(guò)程、結(jié)尾交代得清清楚楚,讓讀者一覽便明。作者在文中還運(yùn)用了大量的精彩句式,如“too...to...”“Itwasone’sturn…”等。社會(huì)聚焦范文1HelpingOthersMakesMeHappyOneday,whenIwasonmywayhome,therewasanoldmanwalkingslowlyinfrontofme.Thensomethingunexpectedhappened.Theoldmanwalkedmoreandmoreslowly.Whilehewalkedaroundthecorner,hefelldown.Irantohim,andlwastheonlyonetheretohelphim.Icouldn’tmovehimbymyself.Ilookedaround,butnoonepassedby.Justatthattime,Ifoundthatmyphonewasinmypocket.Iquicklytookitoutandcalledthedoctorsat120inaminute.Theambulancecamesoon.Theythankedmeforhelpingtheoldman.IwassohappythatIhelpedtheoldmanandsavedhislife.Weallshoulddothiswhenothersareintrouble.參考譯文幫助別人讓我開(kāi)心一天,我走在回家的路上,有一位老人慢慢地在我前面走著。然后意想不到的事情發(fā)生了。老人越走越慢。走過(guò)轉(zhuǎn)角的時(shí)候,他摔倒了。我跑向他,我是那里唯一能幫助他的人。我自己無(wú)法搬動(dòng)他。我向四周看了看,但是沒(méi)有人經(jīng)過(guò)。就在那時(shí),我發(fā)現(xiàn)手機(jī)在我的口袋中,我迅速拿出手機(jī),馬上撥打120。救護(hù)車(chē)很快就來(lái)了。他們感謝我?guī)椭诉@個(gè)老人。我非常高興自己幫助了這個(gè)老人,挽救了他的生命。當(dāng)他人陷入困難的時(shí)候,我們都應(yīng)該這樣做。亮點(diǎn)詞匯1unexpected/adj.出人意料的2aroundthecorner在拐角處3passby經(jīng)過(guò)4ambulance/n.救護(hù)車(chē)5saveone’slife挽救某人的生命出彩句型1Thereissb.doingsth.有某人正在做某事。2Iwastheonlyonethereto...我是那里唯一一個(gè)······3Ifoundthat...我發(fā)現(xiàn)······4...thanked...for...······為了······感謝······5Iwassoha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