2024屆高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)：讀后續(xù)寫美好品質(zhì)類-誠(chéng)實(shí)（歸還多找的一張鈔票）講義素材

【試題回顧】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)段續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ToactwithintegritywasahabitwithSusan

whoalwaysfollow

theGoldenRule:“Donotdotootherswhatyoudonotwantotherstodotoyou.”

But

whenshethoughtoverherpastconduct,ablushofshamecrepttohercheeks,asmanylittleactsofselfishnessandunkindnesscamebacktohermemory.Sheresolvedthatforthefuture,bothingreatthingsandsmall,shewouldrememberandfollowtheGoldenRule.ItwasnotlongafterthisthatanopportunityoccurredoftryingSusan’sprinciples.OneSaturdayeveningwhenshewent,asusual,to

Mr.

Thompson’sinn,toreceivethepriceofhermother’swashingfortheboarders,whichamountedtofivedollars,shefound

Mr.Thompson

apparentlyinaterribleragewithsomehorsedealerswithwhomhehadbeenbargaining.Heheldinhishandanopenpocketbook,fullofbillsandscarcelynoticingthechildasshemadeherrequest,excepttoswearather,asusual,fortroublinghimwhenhewasbusy,hehandedherabanknote.Gladtoescapesoeasily,Susanhurriedoutofthegate,andthen,pausingtoput

themoneysafelyin

herpurse,shediscoveredthathehadgivenhertwobillsinsteadofone.Shelookedaround;nobodywasneartoshareherdiscovery;andherfirstimpulsewasjoyattheunexpectedprize.“Itismine,allmine,”saidshetoherself;“Iwillbuymotheranewcoat

withit,andshecangiveheroldonetosisterMary,andthenMarycangototheSundayschoolwithmenextwinter.IwonderifitwillnotbuyapairofshoesforbrotherTom,too.”Atthatmomentsherememberedthathemusthavegivenittoherbymistake;andthereforeshehadnorighttoit.Butagainthevoiceofthetempterwhispered,“Hegaveit,andhowdoyouknowthathedidnotintendtomakeyouapresentofit?Keepit;hewillneverknowit,evenifitshouldbeamistake;forhehadtoomanysuchbillsinthatgreatpocketbooktomissone.”Para.1.Thisconflictwasgoingoninhermindbetweengoodandevil.Para.2.

“Sir,youpaidmetwobills,insteadofone,”

shehandedhimtheextranote.

文本解析：

一個(gè)周六的晚上，蘇珊像往常樣去湯普森農(nóng)場(chǎng)旅店，收取媽媽給旅店客人洗衣服應(yīng)得的報(bào)酬，共是

5美元，她在馬圈里看到了湯普森。很顯然，農(nóng)場(chǎng)主正在對(duì)那些和他討價(jià)還價(jià)的馬販子大發(fā)雷霆。他手上拿著一人錢包，里面有好多錢。當(dāng)蘇珊找他要錢的時(shí)候，他都幾乎沒(méi)注意到，只是像以往一樣罵她幾句，嫌她在忙的時(shí)候打攪他，然后隨手遞給她一張紙幣。蘇珊很慶幸這么快就拿到了錢，快速跑出門;然后，她停下來(lái)，把錢放到折好的圍巾里。這時(shí)，她發(fā)現(xiàn)農(nóng)場(chǎng)主給了她兩張鈔票，而不是一張。蘇珊環(huán)顧一下四周、發(fā)現(xiàn)沒(méi)有人看到這一幕，她的第一反應(yīng)就是對(duì)這個(gè)天上掉下的餡餅喜出望外?！笆俏业模际俏业牧?”她對(duì)自己說(shuō)，“我要給媽媽買一件新斗篷，這樣就能把那件舊斗篷送給妹妹瑪麗，明年冬天瑪麗就能和我起去主日學(xué)校了。不知道還夠不夠再給弟弟湯姆買雙鞋。

蘇珊當(dāng)時(shí)心想，農(nóng)場(chǎng)主一定是多給她錢了，因此她沒(méi)有權(quán)利花這筆錢，媽媽總是告訴她黃金法則：屬于你的永遠(yuǎn)是你的，永遠(yuǎn)不能把別人的據(jù)為己有。不過(guò)誘惑的聲音在她耳邊輕訴道:“這是他給你的，你怎么知道這不是他送給你買禮物呢？他不會(huì)知道的;即使是他的失誤，但是他的錢包里有那么多錢，丟一張也不會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)的?！痹谔K珊的腦子里，善與惡在不停地斗爭(zhēng)，她用最快的速度向家跑?！厩楣?jié)分析】本語(yǔ)篇節(jié)選并改編自美國(guó)小學(xué)語(yǔ)文教材第四冊(cè)TheGoldenRule一文。文章筆觸細(xì)膩，細(xì)節(jié)刻畫生動(dòng)。語(yǔ)言優(yōu)美，遣詞造句精煉。Susan天真活潑，秉性善良。Mr.Thompson脾氣火爆，喜歡討價(jià)還價(jià)。Susan看到Mr.Thompson大發(fā)脾氣，但是只記得要取回媽媽洗衣的工資，可見(jiàn)小女孩還不深諳世事，并且，認(rèn)定的目標(biāo)或者安排的任務(wù)是一定會(huì)完成的，也為下文秉持并貫徹theGoldenRule的原則，成功通過(guò)試煉，抵制住了“不義之財(cái)”的誘惑（tempter）打下伏筆。反觀Mr.Thompson，在和馬販子討價(jià)還價(jià)過(guò)程中，遷怒于無(wú)辜的Susan，從另一個(gè)角度更加凸顯出theGoldenRule的價(jià)值。在故事中Susan自我成長(zhǎng)，Mr.Thompson或許在聽(tīng)了Susan的一番解釋后也會(huì)有所感觸。中國(guó)文化當(dāng)中也有同樣的表達(dá)：“己所不欲勿施于人”。因此，從學(xué)科育人的角度而言，該語(yǔ)篇無(wú)疑是上上之作！【思路點(diǎn)撥】語(yǔ)篇中提及的theGoldenRule出自《圣經(jīng)》。圣人之言，大智大慧，啟迪（enlighten）眾生。此外，故事發(fā)生在oneSaturdayevening，周圍環(huán)境混沌，襯托出theGoldenRule似一盞明燈（light），光芒四射（glister/glitter）。續(xù)寫所給的第一個(gè)段落首句提到goodandevil，就好似光明和黑暗的交織。Thompson因發(fā)怒而黑著臉（darken），聽(tīng)到Susan的話后可能有所觸動(dòng)而面露喜色（lightup）。因此，我們不妨圍繞“光”的情境來(lái)描述，提升續(xù)寫段落的畫面感。下水文：Thisconflictwasgoingoninhermindbetweengoodandevil.Shehurriedhomeandasshereachedthecrossingroad,theglowofstreetlightsreflectedonthepavement,creatinginterplayoflightanddarkness.Itseemedasiftheessenceofherbeingwasdivided,oneyearningtokeeptheextrabill,andtheothersteadilyupholdingtheGoldenRule.

【用同位語(yǔ)補(bǔ)充詳細(xì)說(shuō)明，同時(shí)引出theGoldenRule】Eachfootstepechoedtheconflictcloudingher.Suddenly,abreezegentlyblewawaythecloud,settlinghermind.

【cloud一語(yǔ)雙關(guān)】

NoticingSusancomingbackagain,Mr.Thompsonsnapped,

“Whatdoyouwantthistime?”

“Sir,youpaidmetwobillsinsteadofone,”

shehandedhimtheextranote.Afterabitofabargain,theatmospherewaschargedwithtensionandragedarkenedMr.Thompson’sface.Susan’svoice,however,likeashootingstar,slicedthroughthedarkness.Susancontinuedtoexplainwhathadhappened.Mr.Thompson’semotionlessfacecrackedasmileandhisgazelingeredonSusaninamixtureofastonishmentandrespect.【crackasmile是情緒表征的變化，respect則是內(nèi)心的感觸和轉(zhuǎn)變】“Keepit!Theotherbillisforyouract.”

saidMr.Thompson.Thatsaid,theirheartsbothlightened.TheGoldenRulenotonlyglisters,butalsoenlightenedaonceselfishman.【兩位人物都有成長(zhǎng)，突出theGoldenRule的價(jià)值】Thisconflictwasgoingoninhermindbetweengoodandevil.SherepeatedlybalancedthecomfortsthemoneywouldbuyagainsttheharmofwrongingMr.Thompson.SuddenlytheGoldenRule“Donotdotootherswhatyoudonotwantotherstodotoyou.”soundedinherearslikeatrumpet.Turningroundasifflyingfromsomeunseendanger,thechildrushedalongtheroaduntilshefoundherselfonceagaininfrontoftheinn.“Whatdoyouwantnow?”askedthegruffoldman,doubtfully.Hestaredatthechildashesawthetearsrollingdownhercheeks.“Sir,youpaidmetwobillsinsteadofone,”shehandedhimtheextranote.“Twobills?DidI?Letmesee;well,soIdid.Youwantedtokeepit,Isuppose.”

Susanblushedandhungherhead.Heseemedtouchedbyherdistress.Puttinghishandinhispocket,hedrewoutashilling(先令)andofferedittoher.

“No,sir,thankyou,”sobbedshe.“Idonotwanttobepaidfordoingright.”Susanreturnedtoherhumblehomewithalightenedheart,andthroughthecourseofalongandusefullifesheneverforgotherfirsttryingoftheGoldenRule.默寫版：Thisconflictwasgoingoninhermindbetweengoodandevil.___________________________她反復(fù)權(quán)衡金錢所能買到的安慰與冤枉湯普森先生的傷害.SuddenlytheGoldenRule“Donotdotootherswhatyoudonotwantotherstodotoyou.”_____________________在她耳邊像吹喇叭一樣回響.Turningroundasifflyingfromsomeunseendanger,thechildrushedalongtheroaduntilshefoundherselfonceagaininfrontoftheinn.“Whatdo